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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: nishamna

Aditi it's wonderful story. I read all parts and I am just loving it. You portrayed all character amazingly. Four of them were wrong but somewhere they were helpless to do so. Maneet spend one night with each other for forgetting the problems in their respective married life. Dev ditched geet with her best friend and asking sorry from geet. But geet wants divorce. N here same era abort the baby without telling maan and it's not bearable for maan. I will not defend maneet as they were also wrong. Dev was right when geet took that big step for forgetting her pain then what is the problem when dev did the same. Maan was awared about sameera priorities then why suddenly he wanted to see changed sameera who would choose their baby instead of her career. They all are in pain and feeling guilty for each other. Waiting for next dear


Thanks dear!! I have tried to portray each of them and their mistakes as much as possible...I am sure you will get some of the answer as the story progresses. I am very new to this genre as not only I haven't written on married couples but also I myself am unmarried and have no personal experience. so I am not sure if my portrayal would be right but I hope I would do justice to the story.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Thank you for all the likes and lovely comments. They mean so much to me. For pm please sent me a buddy request. Here's next part. 😊 Do press like and comment as they inspire me to write better.

PART 4

New beginnings...old ties...

Mumbai was totally different from the peace and quiet environment of Darjeeling... Dareeling had always been the favourite of Geet right from her childhood days... Thinking about childhood was really painful at this juncture. Dev and Meera had been two pillars of support throughout the turbulent childhood that Geet had. Yet right now their betrayal was too fresh in her mind.

Mumbai airport's baggage belt was one of the most annoying and frustrating thing for Geet. The airport was always over crowded with too many flights landing at the same time. And to add to this they give away the luggage for two or three flights from the same baggage belt simultaneously making it over crowded and ensuring utter chaos.

By the time Geet got hold of her trolley and a side bag she had brought she had reached the end of her patience level. Taking a deep breath she reached the pick-up point only to find that Pari was nowhere to be found.

Cursing Pari under her breath Geet called her up to find a sleepy Pari pick up her call.

"Hello Geetu!! What's up?"

"Really Pari, that's all you would say? And why the hell are you sleeping at 11.30 pm? "

"I am having migraine so was sleeping after having medicines. But why are you being such sarcastic queen? You are even in worse mood than your usual nasty self."

Geet took a deep breath and calmed herself down just not to shout at Pari when she was already suffering from one of her bad migraine spells.

"Pari, please don't try my patience. You were supposed to pick me up from the airport."

"Weren't you supposed to come tomorrow?"

"PARI ! I am here and I was scheduled to come today itself. Anyway...leave that all. There's no point of shouting when you are ill. I am coming there by myself."

"Geetu are you sure? I mean it is already midnight."

"This is Mumbai Pari. 11.30 is nothing. Don't worry, I would do just fine. "

" Any issues and you call me fine?"

"Okay bhabiji!"

"Geetu!"

"Pari, I have to take a cab. Bye..."

Geet sighed as she walked back towards the auto stand. Due to some unusual reason number of Autos was quite less and Geet's level of frustration was increasing but then she could not have been angry over Pari even if she tried. After she lost her brother Yash to a bike accident she had grown even closer to her widowed bhabi... And right now at this juncture of her own life she seemed the only solace left.

Andheri wasn't that far and Pari leaves at a two BHK apartment that Yash had bought few years before his untimely death. It was in the posh area of Oshiwara and Geet was heading there finally after being able to grab an auto.

Geet rung the calling bell and soon a smiling Pari opened the door. They hugged each other dearly and no words were required between the in-laws cum friends. They were both joined by a common thread of that of Yash and the pain of losing him.

Pari was the first to regain her composure and said," Geetu, we will talk later but you look completely worn out. We will talk tomorrow but right now please take rest."

"Hmm."

"I want to know everything."

"I don't know Pari. But I would try."

"Good enough for me Geetu! Goodnight."

*****

Sameera was sitting in Maan's study. It was so easy to act. She had always been a good actress. That was the reason behind her success...that was the reason why she had always been able to portray different characters with ace...Yet the irony of fate. Never had she imagined she would have to use it with her husband...But was Maan truly her anymore? When Maan had suddenly started talking about giving chances and trying for the marriage she had been elated. But then she had known that something must have been bothering Maan or he wouldn't have done that...

She had expected something...anything...but not this. Maan confessing about his one night stand was like a hot iron rod being shoved right inside her throat. She loves Maan. Knowing Maan Sameera knew that even if it was a one night stand it couldn't have been just physical. Maan was simply not that kind of a man to just give in to the temptations simply because it exists.

He had always been loyal to every relationship. May be the abortion had caused it but there was something else in his eyes too. That had made Sameera act like it didn't matter to her that he had sex with another woman.

Once she left the room agreeing for the divorce however the enormity of the betrayal hit her. Maan was not supposed to go and bed another woman. Maan was supposed to be her.

Once inside the sanctity of Maan's study she gave up on all pretences. She was done pretending to be strong. As the tears broke down from deep within her she felt a presence. Without even turning back she could feel her husband approaching her. She slowly felt Maan keeping his hand on her shoulders. She stiffened but then gave up and shook into uncontrollable sobs. Maan turned her in a jiffy and hugged her tight.

The hug was soothing and Sameera gave in and she broke down. Once she sobered up a bit Maan placed a soft kiss on her forehead and said..

"Sam, I might be an idiot disloyal husband but I know when you act like it doesn't bother you and when it really doesn't bother you. I knew how much it would have hurt you to know about my infidelity. I am sorry Sam. I wish I could undo some things Sam."

"You Knew?"

"Of course I knew Sam. I have known you for years Sam. "

"So why are you here Maan?"

"I am here so you can react Sam. I want you to react like a wife should have reacted...the way I know you want to react."

"Am I really your wife? Do I really have the right?"

"Sam..."

"Maan please leave me alone for some time. I need some time to sort things out."

"Fine Sam...I am truly sorry for what I did to you."

"We both had done our own shares of mistakes we can never undo Maan... it hurts really badly. When you told me about that night...I was hurt. You were supposed to be mine, Maan..."

"I am still yours."

"No you are not. If you were, you wouldn't have slept with her no matter what. I know you Maan. You are not that kind of a man. "

Maan didn't answer. May be some questions don't really have answers. He shook his head and left the study to provide some solace to the woman who was his wife.

*****

The next morning was a comparatively peaceful one for Geet. Yash had been the only one in the family of five that Geet had been close to. Brij her eldest brother had always been the one prim and proper brother who had to be the perfect one in every aspect of life may it be behavioural or career wise. Now he was one of the top advocates of Mumbai and a partner to one of the leading law firms. Geet found it ironic that she had to seek help from the one she has no strong emotional bond with to sort out her own divorce.

Her mom and dad had always been so proud of Brij that she had envied him for better part of her childhood. Her middle brother Yash was a different case. In matter of academics he was the perfect brother to Brij yet he was a rebel. May be that was the common link between both of them.

Geet had been the unplanned nasty surprise for her parents they couldn't get rid of. By the time Geet had come to an age where she could understand relationships any semblance of love Rano and Mohinder had was gone and they were bitter staying together always fighting and finding fault in each other. To add to matters Rano had always had a strange apathy towards Geet. She hadn't wanted a third child and that was something Rano never let Geet forget. Geet's tomboy attitude had always been the reason for the clash between both. Her two best friends Dev and Meera had served had a pillar of support especially whenever Rano's inconsiderate statements had hurt Geet.

Geet's choice of going for plain BSc graduate instead of some other line was another cause of total disruption of peace in the family and that was the last straw for Geet. She had moved out of the house in a fit of rage.

Yash had already had moved out a year before to have his own space. Geet had asked Yash if she could stay with him and that was how Geet had left her lavish home of south Mumbai and had come to stay with Yash at Andheri. The bond between the brother and sister had strengthened. Geet had started working in part time jobs over weekends and Yash had supported her choices. Soon Pari demello had stepped in their life.

There was a girl's pg one floor up and during Ganesh chaturthi Geet had met the girls staying there. Geet and Pari had taken instant liking towards each other and that was how she had started coming to their apartment. It hadn't taken long for Yash and Pari to fall in love.

There are some couples in the world who are just plain meant to be no question asked. Yash and Pari had been such but of course the Handa's had issue. Pari was a Christian catholic who works as a junior artist for TV industry. Not the ideal bahu for the high and mighty Handa's at all. Rano had instantly blamed Geet for spoiling the life of her son even when Mohinder had tried to understand the situation. Yash however was adamant. He knew in his heart that Pari had been the one.

That was when both Yash and Geet had broken every tie with their parents. Pari and Yash had a court marriage and strangely Brij had come to wish them luck. It was something unexpected from the perfect son of the family and Brij never really was close to either of them. But they had understood that Brij was tied down by his duties towards their parents. No matter how wrong and unreasonable they are they would always be the parents who had brought them in this world. Strangely that was when Geet and Yash became closer to Brij.

Yash's death in a bike accident had been a blow for both Geet and Pari. Yash had been working for the airport authority of India and had a good savings and had made sure Pari would be financially secure in case anything happened to him. However nothing could make up for losing a loving companion.

Brij and Geet had bonded closer during this rough patch and it was Brij who had helped Pari with a regular job to keep her busy since she no longer wanted to be a part of the glamour world. Strange how certain mishaps renew some old bonds.

Pari plopped beside her and said," Good morning Geetu! Now talk... What is going on?"

Geet knew Pari enough to know that she won't be giving up. She starts talking about everything from Dev's infidelity to her one night stand to their decision of mutual divorce. When she finished she was crying and Pari was too stunned to speak.

Finally getting over her shock Pari shrieked,

"You had unprotected sex with a stranger?"

"I tell you so many things and that's what you are stuck with Pari? I was on pills so no, there's no chance I would be pregnant. "

"But you don't know that guy...what if he has some STDs or God forbid HIV? You are educated Geet! Don't act like a teenager for God's sake."

Geet was silent. Pari was right. After all she doesn't know Maan. But somewhere she trusted Maan. It was just a physical relation to get rid of the pain for one day yet it created a strange bond that cannot be explained by words.

"Geet, are you listening to anything I am saying?"

"HUH?"

"We are going to doctor's place now and we will get you tested for everything."

Geet did not deny and got ready. But strangely she was not worried.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Nice part..Geet move back..I think Maan also move here or he stay here..I think maybe Geet might work for him..I feel that Geet might get preg.
Let see how Geet & Maan come face to face..
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Posted: 10 years ago
hi thanks 4 da pm n lovely update! well written. Geet leaves! She tells Pari wt happened! Sam upset! Maan tells her he knows her! Pari worried tht she may b pregnant! update soon
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: aditi_2010



First of all thank you for such long comment and you pointed out things most readers have missed. In fact you are one of my best critic who always make me realize about the loopholes of my writing. So a big thanks. trust me it always helps me write a better story.
coming to your question about Muskaan. I don't know if you are familiar about the residential schools but most of them ask for a very early admission. My parents tried to get me admission in class three and I was denied in almost every residential school in darjeeling andkurseong because they don't allow admission over class one. And these are some of the best schools in country. Now as to what was the need for Muskaan to be admitted there is a different question and will unfold with the story. It is easier to be biased but when we get to see the other side of the coin we can see that maybe the other person didn't really have a choice. Same here. No parents want to have their child face the problems of a broken family. But sometimes it is the best choice.

About Maan's guilt and giving chance to sameera, it is something complicated. I don't know but have you met a person with a almost perfect character, high principles and ideals not only for show but totally ingrained in them and they follow them religiously. You know what happens when such people make mistakes? they suddenly start forgiving everyone around them giving them second chances simply because they suddenly grasp the reality that everybody can do mistakes and everybody deserves a second chance. it is like they are not able to forgive themselves and suddenly it is easier to forgive others. Maan is such a man of principle and he was not someone to cheat on his wife so suddenly he realizes that sameera can be forgiven to. that doesn't have anything to do with sameera or extent of her misdoings.and that was why sameera didn't agree because once he gets over her guilt he would see things clearly. and about how strong he sounded while on phone... he had loved his wife once, it is not easy to be harsh with her when you are face to face and add a mixture of your own guilt of breaking trust and it is impossible.

about sameera's reaction...more is to come😉

You said you feel for everyone except Dev...but you don't even know his side of story. Maybe you will feel differently once you realize what it is like being in his shoes😆



Of course I dont know anything about how things work in other states n their cities while admitting a child in school. But I asked questions simply cos I felt she is way too young to be sent to hostel away from her parents.

Coming to what you said about Maan, I saw things more clearly now. I really havent met any person who is perfect in life n have high morals n virtues. I was just confused about his sudden change n so couldnt actually get why he felt like forgiving her. But with this explanations things are more clear to me n I now get why the conversation felt so alien to me. I exactly wouldnt understand until I myself face such a situation or go through it or at least see someone in my life facing it. I'm reading such a complicated story for the first time n I really dont know what view to have on any situation. I'm just going with the flow, hence my comments are also having Dev bashed left right center.

I know I dont know his side of story n I'm being harsh but I cant help it. I really wouldnt have been this judgemental had Muskaan not been in the picture. But her presence is for now making me hate him. May be in future n after reading his pov I might really try to understand him. But until it comes out I would be confuse. I'm also curious to know if Dev-Geet's was a love marriage? There are actually so many questions going in my head but I know I will get answers slowly with every updates.

But all this also doesnt meant that I support Maan n Geet for their actions. They both were equally wrong if I find Dev, Meera or Sam wrong. Just cos their names are Geet n Maan, I'm not over looking their faults.

And Thank you so much Aditi for this reply. It will now help me to read the story with more open mind. Also it cleared many doubts of mine.

-Sanjana!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Oh ho, so Geet herself dint had a good childhood. Its really really strange that Rano-Mohinder were an ideal couple until Geet happened n so she could never witness the love once shared btw her parents. Geet's mother not loving Geet was yeg another painful fact of her life.


This update also cleared that Geet-Dev-Meera were childhood friends. Now that hurt more. So I now guess that Dev n Geet's was a love marriage cos she had broken ties with her parents so no chances of them getting her married or something.

Also Geet's past relations with every person in her life was a much needed one for the story. Brij's relation with Geet n Yash also was very strange. But at least Geet n Yash had each other unlike Brij. So I really felt for him. Him being the perfect son somewhere create a distance btw Geet-Yash n himself. Good thing was that in spite of being the perfect son he came to Yash's wedding going against his parents. Just says how much he loves his sibblings. Glad that his this one step towards them got him his bro n sis back in his life n their bond strengthen.

Whatever I read about Pari, I liked her. She too has faced a lot in her life. My heart went out to her after knowing that she lost her husband so early. Yash was so young. But then life is full of unexpected things. You really never know what would happen next. She seems to be living alone in the flat which made me wonder at what age Yash really died? No children? Cos its obvious he married before Geet. Will wait to know more about it.

Geet finally confided everything in Pari which has left her shocked. She dint seem to judge Geet on her having one night stand with a stranger. May be cos she knows Geet too well. But for a second even I tensed after Pari's first question. Glad to know Geet was on pills. One child is enough, I really cant take Geet's pregnancy in such a complicated situation. I'm anyways too much worried for Muskaan, I dont want to worry over another one.

Sam's pov was again very emotional n hurting. She indeed is an awesome actress to have pretend that Maan's cheating on her dint bother which had confused me like anything. I was left with so so many questions. Her reaction really dint sounded normal to me at all. But now I can say she is very much human.

Just cos she did wrong in aborting the child dint mean she would be cool about Maan's infidelity n will forgive n forget accepting him starting anew. She already being on the wrong side dint helped her, hurting her to know about Maan's one night stand, resulting in her telling him that he will get over his guilt. Cos if her wrong doings couldnt let her overlook his mistake n forgive him then how could he actually forgive her for aborting the baby? They both have done wrongs n made grave mistakes. It might really have made things bitter btw them in future even after giving their marriage a second chance like Sam said or may be it really make them genuinely forgive each other over the time if they both want it.

So again I'm confused regarding Maan-Sam relationship. Its way too complicated n I really dont know whats right n wrong for their marriage or to each individuals. I will choose to go with the story n its flow.

Aditi be ready to give answers to my essays. Cos I'm sure as hell I'll be eating your head with my confusions.

Liked the small insight of Geet's past.

-Sanjana!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Brilliant Update
The last update I was actually bashing Sameera but Sameera is actually hurt by Maan's infidelity and according to her Maan just won't
go and have a one night stand her words is its was not just physical
so does this mean there is more to Maan having a one night stand .
Maan now wants his marriage to work , he now can forgive Sameera
and I do believe if they love is strong than their marriage can hold on
to the storms and if they really want to be together they should fight and go through all the rough storms and will have a strong marriage .

Geet really had a tough childhood and she always sought Dev and Meera as her pillars of support and strength .
so both of them betraying her is wrong , and if by any chance they were in love before Dev married Geet than they should have still told her , so I still feel my opinion on them is same .
Geet bonding with her Yash was indeed good as it seems she never
really had much of her parents love .
after Yash died Geet and Brij bonded well there again at least he
was there helping her through her grief and tough times .
Geet back in Mumbai and tells Pari about her one night stand with
Maan but she is not worried about anything as somewhere she
trusts him but why should she trust him if they don't know each other
even Maan after he had spent the night with Geet he too wanted her
there and not gone .


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Posted: 10 years ago
Wonderful FF... Love the way you bring out the character sketch and their relationship with each oth of each character in your story...Feel bad for both of them - infact even for Sameera - she would have probably worked out wid Maan had it not been for the one night stand...
Both are on their own different ways... wonder how they will meet... Probably Pari and Sameera know each other - rite? and Dev went to Delhi... probably be working with Maan...
i do have a question... in part 2 Geet wished Dev wasnt rich? why is that?
Please do continue...
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Posted: 10 years ago
superb part i really liked pari n their bonding so geets childhood was not good n her friends also betrayed her thats really hurts n sams pov was very emotional very nice part thnx 4 update
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Posted: 10 years ago
emotional update...

loved it very much...

thank u very much fr d lovely update...

eagerly waiting fr d nxt prt...

continue soon plz...

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