AsYa SS: ROTB Part 4 Updated and NOTE 2/5 PG.16

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I know there are a lot of stories with this title, but this story is totally different😃

Tanveer pregnant with Asad child or is she?

Asad and Zoya love each other and dated each other for couple of months, but Tanveer's news to Asad makes them seperate.

Zoya, Humeria and Najma take revenge on Tanveer for separating Asad and Zoya. They do silly things to her and later find out that...?

You guys have to read to know more!!!😃


I started writing this and don't know where this is going hope it turns out good😊

Please check it out and comment so i can decide to continue or not?

I will probably update this if i get good response😊

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Index:
part 1- pg 1
part 2- pg 5
part 3- pg 11
Edited by -hotsauce- - 10 years ago
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Part 1

*Cell door slams*

*Camera shutter clicking*

Present

The Cell

Humiera was wearing a pink anarkali that was all messed up and torn, her hair was messy like she just wrestled a wrestler. A female officer told her to turn so she can take another pose of her with her tag that had her name on it.

Humeria:" Geez, look at me and I thought my yearbook photo sucked."

Najma was also their getting her mug shot

Najma: "And that's me, man this dress does not look good on me (they were wearing the same dress)

The female officer told Najma to turn but she talked back to the officer

Najma: "Turn, What if I don't want to turn, Who's gonna turn me you? Why don't you turn this?"

she showed her middle finger to the officer.

Najma: "Something you should know about me, I have a little problem with authority."

The officer told her to turn again so she can take a side picture While she was turning she spoke something about her past.

Najma: "In second grade, I told our music teacher, Mrs. Florentine, that if she wanted us to sing like birds, she should get herself some freakin' birds."

Humeria was in the same class as Najma and she said

"I laughed so hard I peed, and then we had to sit facing the corner during recess" and this was the start to a new friendship.

Humeria: "And that's Zoya."

The officer told Zoya to turn

Humeria: "Our sweet innocent Zoya."

Najma: "The only nice one of the bunch of us."

Humeria: "I feel so bad we dragged her into this, But the thing is we did it all for her really we did"

Najma: "That was the idea, anyway."

Humeria: "You know what, maybe I better explain."

Najma: "we are bridesmaids, not the good kind who loves the bride like a sister and want to make her wedding the most special day ever. NO.

Humeria: "We're more like the "Avenging angles who are gonna give you what's coming to you" type of bridesmaid

Humeria: "You know what, You're coming in the middle of things. So maybe I should back up a bit. Say 20 years."

Najma: So you can meet the fourth member of our little sisterhood."

Flashback- 20 years ago. (Najma Narrating- Lousiana)

The gates were open by the 3 young girls.

Najma: "This is where she lived, still lives"

It was a huge house, it probably had it own Zip code.

Najma: "It's such an amazing house, it has it own name, Malikvilla. "

3 girls are running to the house, and Tanveer come running from inside.

Najma: "Tanveer Malik lives here with her mother Razia, and step father, oh and servants, of course you need servants when your house has it own Zip code."

Zoya, Humeria, Najma and Tanveer are paying ring around the rosy and having fun.

Najma" "It's a good thing Tanveer was an only child, she didn't do sharing very well, she was much better at taking, but we didn't we were just kids back then blinded by the magic of MalikVilla"

"Could you blame us? There were tea parties on the lawn with homemade biscuits, and there was a secret staircase that led to the backyard. "

The girls went through the secret staircase, which was through a wardrobe. They got to the backyard and saw if anyone was looking.

Najma: "We were so lucky to be there, Oh and when we didn't Tanveer would remind us how lucky we were to be there."

Girls running around, playing hide seek.

Young Tanveer: "eight, nine, ten here I come."

Zoya and Humeria and Najma would run off and play on their own.

Najma: "So, then we play are own little version of hide and seek."

The 3 of them hiding behind the big bushes giggling while Tanveer is running around looking for them screaming their names.

Najma: "And we called it "I know a place where Tanveer can't find us." It was a pretty spot under the cherry tree."

The three of them laying on the ground, having pink flowers coming down at them from the tree.

Najma: "But then Zoya would feel guilty and we'd all go back"

All 4 of them sitting on the tree and Tanveer talking.

Najma: "and listen to Tanveer talk bout her self, and make up stories about herself, Her house, her rules, her ego."

They would dress up really fancy and play wedding. Tanveer would always be the bride and she wouldn't let anybody be her husband from the girls because she thought the 3 girls weren't pretty to be standing next to her as a pretend husband. She told them to be her bridesmaid and help her through out the wedding if she needed anything. But Najma was already dressed like a groom, she was wearing a black coat that was big for her, when tanveer asked her why is she wearing the coat, she said that she was the groom. She yelled for her mom, and there came a woman named Razia. She came out on the porch and said "What is wrong honey, what are these girls doing to you" She was always nice to her daughter but to her friends she was mean. "They are not listening" Humeria spoke with attitude "It's a wedding Tanveer there has to be a groom." Razia bend down to Humeira size and said "My, don't you think a lot." "Well, doesn't there." Razia spoke "Well yes, but right now its not much important, and technically dear having a husband is not that great." Razia grabbed a chair and said "Here lets use this chair make him the husband, Najma take off your coat and put it on this chair." "Now there isn't he handsome, and from a wealthy family, I understand."

The 4 girls grew up together went to the same high school and Tanveer would call the shot and they would play the parts. They all turned out to be pretty, and they were all in the cheerleading squad. They were together until college.

Najma: "After college, my folks moved out west and me and Humeria headed for New york, I got a book published, it sold okay, you know, for a first novel. The second one is coming along slowly, very slowly and Humeria took the acting route. She did a bunch of plays off broadway. Well, off, off, off Broadway, I mean she was good. We always kept in touch with Zoya who never left lambert a town in Lousiana. She was going out with this guy Asad and she was crazy about him, and that seemed to be enough for her."

Hello guys I have started another SS and seriously don't know where this is going haha should I continue or no? still debating maybe after posting will make up my mind


leave feedbacks pleaseee?

Edited by -hotsauce- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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sounds interesting
waiting to know how will they take revenge
excited for next chapter
thanks for the pm
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Posted: 10 years ago
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D stryline sounds intresting
wud love to knw hw ds stry moves
thnks fr d pm
cntinue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: suganti

sounds interesting

waiting to know how will they take revenge
excited for next chapter
thanks for the pm


thanks!
your welcomeee😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: asadzoyaqubool

D stryline sounds intresting

wud love to knw hw ds stry moves
thnks fr d pm
cntinue soon


thanks!!!
your welcome
will do😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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interesting story!
amazing start
Najma is feisty like it
Humeira najma zoya and tanveer are friends
Asad and Zoya were dating but tanveer came in the way
thanks for the PM
lets see if you continue
please for the people that want to read your story
thanks
updte soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: isha123asya

interesting..
cont soon



thanks!!!
will see 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Very nice start
Thanks for pm
Plz pm me for next part

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