||Flaming Souls|| MaNan FF Ch.2 updated

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Prologue:

"My heart is so small
it's almost invisible.
How can You place
such big sorrows in it?
"Look," He answered,
"your eyes are even smaller,
yet they behold the world."
_ Rumi

"You little rat!" The tall broad shouldered man snarled at the 7 year old boy, who was curled into a corner, his body trembling in fear.
"How dare you disobey me like that!" He gritted through his teeth, while the little boy's heart pounded like a drum; as the predator closed in on him and flung his hand forward only to embrace the cold white wall. The little boy scampered towards the opened door taking advantage of the situation.
"Ouch!!!" He heard the man scream his lungs out as he yelped in pain.
He wasn't going to stop; he wasn't going to turn back, even if that heartless man was what people would define as his biological father. He continued to run past the hallways and through the weathered black door that led to the outside world. Tears rolled down his soft baby cheeks, blurring his vision as his weary legs maintained to run along with his half torn sandals.
"Manik my sweet little boy, mama will always be there for you."
The words of his mother flashed through his mind as his tears continued to flow. It has been three days since she had passed away. She had promised him that she would always be there for him, but she didn't maintain her promise. Something they called cancer had snatched her away. He didn't know exactly what that cancer was, but he could swear that he didn't detest anything in this world as much as this so called cancer; not even his ruthless father. There was no one to shield him from the merciless hands of his father anymore, no lap to run to when the nightmares woke him up in the middle of the night; and no hands to wipe those tears that had befriended his eyes. He was all alone; alone in this callous world. But in order for this callous world to welcome him, he needed to share the traits of its members; a cold-blooded monster was what he had decided to be.
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Whaaazap (Manik style) 😎

For those of you who know me hello there buddies :D

And for those of you who don't now you will 😛

As usual I couldn't' stop myself from writing again even though I have so much assignments and tests coming up. (KILL ME)

This time I decided to start an FF and this idea has been haunting my mind for a couple of days now.

Even though I had actually told myself that I wouldn't write an FF again because the last time I wrote one (about a year ago), I never had the time to finish it and I left it incomplete. (I felt so bad for my readers ) I'm hoping it won't happen this time.

I will try to update this whenever I have time, so there is no specific day for updates. It depends on my free time. Also, I'm sorry because I won't be sending out any PMs, because I won't be able to keep track of the people who are following the story, and I don't have time. But hopefully you guys can tell when I update.😳

*Disclaimer: The story along with the characters and events are all a part of my imagination, if there is any similarities with any other fiction then it's purely a coincidence.
P.S. A bone crushing hug to all my readers out there
I love you all 🤗
_Dua
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Character Sketch:

Manik Malhotra: Lost his mother at the age of seven due to cancer and was abused by his father. He ran away from home after three days of his mother's death and grew up in an orphanage. The bitter and cruel circumstances he went through had turned him into a very hard and emotionless person. Yet somewhere deep inside he still hasn't lost that pure heart completely. He is around 25 years old now, a gangster and feared by everyone in his town.

Varad: Manik's best friend. They met each other in the orphanage. Very loyal to Manik and he would even give up his life for him.

Nandini Murthy:
A 22 year old girl with a strong personality and lively character. She recently moved to Mumbai and will end up living in Manik's town. Her dad had abandoned her and her mother when she was three years old. She has one older sister who she left along with her mother and came to Mumbai after her friend found her a job at a business company.

Shilpa: Nandini's friend in Mumbai.

These are the characters for now. I will add more as the story progresses.

Edited by Malika.Dua - 11 years ago
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INDEX:

Chapter 1: pg 2
Chapter 2: pg 3
Edited by Malika.Dua - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice story. Great character sketch. cont soon.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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really excited for this story! 😃
can't wait for your next update!
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loved the character sketch 😊
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waiting for the next part 😊
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Thanks for the likes and comments guys! I really appreicate it 😳

Chapter 1

He clutched his fist, adrenalin rushing through his body as his knuckles turned bloodless white. Without further notice he reeled his arm back and threw a strong punch into the guy's stomach; throwing him a couple of inches away into the ground. The guy held his stomach wincing in pain as his eyes shot daggers back at his opponent. Placing all his weight onto his hand, he managed to stand up once again as he watched his rival Manik Malhotra glancing at him with a smirk seated onto his lips. He limped as he neared him and raised his hand for a punch only to be surprised by Manik who swung around, bringing his long leg around with him into the guy's stomach; sending him back to his previous spot. The people of the town gathered around them all watching in awe. Some looked on with stupefaction while some praised Manik's fighting skills. It wasn't the first time they've seen Manik fight because these fighting scenes were very normal in their town, but it looked like with each fight Manik was getting better. Like they say practice makes perfect. All the spectators knew that nobody can mess with Manik Malhotra and still return back walking on their feet. If you wanted to live in peace or even live at all, then you had to be careful from disturbing the anger of this monster.

"Stop right here bhai saab thank you." Nandini passed the money over to him and pulled her bag in one hand, while her other hand was occupied with the phone.

"Yes mom, I just reached Mumbai. Don't worry about me. Everything will be perfect here." She spoke through the phone and paused when her eyes noticed a crowd gathered into a big circle. Curiosity took over her as she cocked her head and tried to figure out what was the reason for their gathering.

"Nandu!" Her mother bellowed through the phone, which caused her to startle almost dropping the phone from her hand.

"Nandu, I'm talking to you. Why aren't you answering? Are you in trouble? Did something happen?"

"Uffu mom. Nothing happened. I've just settled my foot in this city. I didn't even get a chance to meet trouble or anyone else."

"I will call you in a couple of minutes. I have to find Shilpa first. Okay mom I love you bye." With that she closed the phone, her eyes still scanning over the crowd.

Not being able to detect the mere reason for their gathering, she moved her little feet towards them, when a hand settled onto her shoulder and caused her to stop in her tracks. Before she could see who it was, the hand moved away and she found herself pulled into an embrace instead. "Nandu! You're here!" She identified the voice as Shilpa and wrapped her hands to embrace her back. "I'm so happy that you're here!" Her light brown eyes sparkled in excitement. "Me too!" Nandini squealed as she folded her hands in anticipation.

"Come on let me show you the house first." She held Nandini's hand as she dragged her along.

"Wait I forgot my bag on the ground." Moving her legs back she leaned down and grabbed her bag when her eyes noticed the crowd dispersing now.

"Nandu come on. What's taking you so long?" Shilpa called out to her. "I'm coming." She dragged her bag along with her. "Hey I wanted to ask you why were these people gathered around over there." She lifted her hand to point to where the crowd had been a couple of minutes ago. She noticed a smile appear on Shilpa's lips before she replied. "Nandu, there will be many things you haven't seen before so you're in for lots of surprises." Nandu gave a perplexed expression unable to comprehend what Shilpa really meant by that but quickly brushed it off. "Well I just hope you meant good surprises when you said that." She grinned at her as they continued to walk towards the house.

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Well, this was chapter 1.
I'm not so good in fighting scenes lol but I tried my best. Hopefully it wasn't that bad. 😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Gangster Manik??..Whoa i could never imagine him lyk dis bt i did..😎
Am hopin dat Manik n Nandu meet under good circumstances..jo bhi ho bt am sure der 1st meetin will b full ov sparks..
lukin 4wrd 2 ur nxt update..😃

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Unique concept..
Loved it..
Manik is a gangster interesting..
waiting for MaNan meeting..
Continue Soon

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