angels of love (kriyaansh os)

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hey guyz im panchami .and i here am peresenting you my new os.hope you people like it,do share ur views,and if u like it dont forget to hit the like button.

and if u feel itz a crap ,then im extreamly sorry

Angels of love

He screamed ,aloud, grieving scream that make heart clenchin pain. In grief for the young lady.They all huddle around him as he sank on his knees, tears rolling down his cheeks.

"Why? Why did you leave me? He cried at the unmoving body .he moved away,stood up ,looking dowm the casket.

"you promised me you you will never leave me again, and we will be together forever.

His voice loud but yet weak,tears rolling down his cheeks. He kept on staring at a peaceful face.she looked like she was sleeping.but she wasn't actually sleeping.

Her skin was pale, her lips which were rosy pink! Had a sort of dry blueish look.her beautiful eyes full of life was now closed forever. She was life less.

He sat beside the casket ,and held her life less hands, hoping she would grab his arms and smile at him like she used to.but her hands continued to descent ,they were cold as ice and felt very rubbery "you cant do this to me !take me along or stay back here with me! you here that ?". he whispered as his friend stir him away from the casket and his love.

"Rey... itz time to let her go! They need to bury her . swayam said in a gental voice .trying to pretend that he is okay ,and calming down Rey.he was also shattered on his best friend's death and and was very much worried about Rey he din't knowhow will he handle him when he comes to know about this.

Kriya had requested him not to tell Rey about her.2 years ago REY had gone to newyork to gain special training in dance, on kriya's request.

When she came to know that her heart is going to stop itz work,she decided not to tell about it to the one who has her heart.

Rey never wanted to go away and stay in newyork but when his love requested him to do so he could not deny.he naver failed to call her .he always mentioned that he wants to come back soon ,and is missing her a lot.

Kriya in her last conversation had told Rey "you'll not miss me Rey !you should not... And if you miss me and want to share anything just keep ur right hand on ur heart and say what u wanted to share with me !i'll be able to hear it.and never loose your smile rey... And remember I'll always love you !yes I will till my last breathand the last beat of my heart."she said all this in such a tone which made all it sound romantic for him, and she swallowed all the pain.Rey s mind followed what his eyes saw but his heart wasn't ready to accept it.

Hearing to swayam words "no!she will wake up,im sure!she will!right kriya? Kriya?rey said despratly.few seconds passed and rey stopedmoving,he was blankly staring at the casket

"it's not a joke ! it isn't!she really is gone !"he said looking at swayam.swayam simply shook his head.

"she'll always be inside you rey! In your heart".

"ofcourse she will be in my heart swayam!but that wasn't her promise!she had promised that she'll always be beside me .swayam please tell her !tell your bestie to open her eyes, I want her "he cried sinking to his knees.

Swayam sat next to himand placed a hand on his shoulder.

"rey I know !itz very difficult but please try to move on! Even kriya wanted you to move on.

"No swayam" I can not move on" rey declared.

Rey sat beside the casket and took kriya's cold lifeless hands in his hands.and started talking to her .

"kriya please open your eyes, you know how much I like them please...".

He gentaly lifted her from the casket and brought her out sat down on the grass ,took her head in his lap.and blankly stared at her pale face.

Tears droping from his chin on her forehead.

He slowly descented and everything people present there could see was REY HAS FAINTED.

For the eyes for the people he was unconscious,but that wasn't all.

For rey just for a second every thing darkened and when he opened his eyes all he could see was clouds,white clouds .it was a place filled with fog ,calm and no sound.

At a distant he could see a young girl walking ,she was coming toward him.she wore a white gown ,she appeard to be a angel.infact she was !she was his angel !on her way to heavens.

"kriya "he said. A weak smile on the angel's lips appeared.

He tried to hold her by her arms but his hands went through her.it wasn't her.it was her soul.

"rey please not be a weak soul!please try to move on!i have told u what u are suppose to do when you miss me.

" no kriya!!i'll not".

"then what do you want rey? .what do you want to do?."

"take me along or stay back".itz your choice."

Her eyes shined like they were still alive,those beautiful eyes never lost their shine but he could see some pain in them.

"make your choice kriya!now!". rey said

She just smiled and extended her hand.Rey mirrored her movement with a hope that he'll be able to hold them now.and he was.

Everything just vanished.

The people who were waiting for Rey to get back to his consciousness ,just stood there staring at him ,they had tears in there eyes,and just din't want this lovely couple to end.

Sharon who was till then standing sliently came forward to swayam and asked "swayam itz getting late !shouldn't we proceed with t-the f-fu-funeral.

They both go near rey and Sharon placed her hand on his shoulder.she suddenly withdrew her hands and shout "SW-SWAYAM HE IS CO-COLD.HE IS-ISN'T BREATHING,REY wake up!!!".

He paused for few seconds.walks to rey and sits beside his soulless, stone cold body .he put an arm around Sharon who was sobbing endlessly and said "Sharon please don't cry!kriya was the love of his life and he lost her for a while and now he is back with her ,he'll be happy there,so we should be happy for him.

He just looks up at the sky.he could see both of them standing up there smiling and waving at him.

He gave a weak smile and waved back at them

The end

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Posted: 11 years ago
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beautiful portray of emotions
loved this os

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Posted: 11 years ago
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res
unres
superb panchu
so heart touching...
Beautifully written...
Edited by --megs_arsha-- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Ab me kya kahun
i am speechless 👏
It was really awesome my jaan
It was heartbreaking
the way u described Kriya's demise 😭
The way Rey was trying 2 wake her up made me cry also
but the end was so fabulously written
Rey was united with her angel
It was amazing
thank u sweetu 4 this wonderful heart wrenching os
keep writing more
love u
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Posted: 11 years ago
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A really beautiful work...

You write emotional sequences very well, looking forward to your works :)

P.S Please correct the spelling of 'angels' 😳
Edited by parigyaverma - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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lovely os 😊
it's so beautiful...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Panchi this was so beautiful
The emotions were heart touching
loved it...just beautiful
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it was emotional but fabulous kr os... loved it
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I read this already
loved it it almost made me cry haha
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Superb os...u write really well...
I could connect with every line..
every emotion so perfectly defined...
Very nice keep it up n keep writing..

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