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@zanayaforever

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Posted: 11 years ago

#51

😳 anku second part likh do na..

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Ankita

@_SenbonZakura_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: zanayaforever
😳 anku second part likh do na..

First part pe hi dimaag khatm ho gaya! :'(

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The-Diva

@The-Diva

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Posted: 11 years ago

#53

I caught this a little late Anky. Was busy with personal commitments..

This was a heart-wrenching piece and I can't get over it. I've always loved the idea of pairing Aman with Nandini! It breaks my heart to see Aman's role being sidelined, because I feel he is a very able actor and his story can be told in the most creative and interesting manner.

This OS reminded me why I love the way you write. It's like you can paint pictures with your vivid description and use of words.You described Nandini's anguish and self-loathe very wonderfully. She no longer believes in love, thinking that women like her do not deserve it. This pulled my heart-strings. It was also extremely sad to see Aman's heart being broken each time she refused to escape from all the dirt.

I really want a Part 2 , showing how Nandini finally escapes with Aman,and starts with a fresh beginning, eventually parting with all apprehensions and responding to Aman's love. Pretty Please?!

Humi ❤️

Edited by The-Diva - 11 years ago

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SALIAH

@OriginalBarbie

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Posted: 11 years ago

#54

Ankita that was AMAZING...somehow I just felt so connected to both aman and nandani, both of them came across silent yet powerfull...hope that makes sense 😳

You know I was hoping for a happy ending 😉 nandani deserves happiness that was robbed off her at such a young age and in the cruelest way...NOBODY deserves such a fate

Im still praying for aman and nandani pairing...sunheri for me just does not click with aman...and no one should be punished by living with sumer..least of all poor nandani 😊

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Ankita

@_SenbonZakura_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: OriginalBarbie
Ankita that was AMAZING...somehow I just felt so connected to both aman and nandani, both of them came across silent yet powerfull...hope that makes sense 😳

You know I was hoping for a happy ending 😉 nandani deserves happiness that was robbed off her at such a young age and in the cruelest way...NOBODY deserves such a fate

Im still praying for aman and nandani pairing...sunheri for me just does not click with aman...and no one should be punished by living with sumer..least of all poor nandani 😊

Thanks so much love!! And pllease no.. Never Sumer with Nandini..

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: The-Diva
I caught this a little late Anky. Was busy with personal commitments..
This was a heart-wrenching piece and I can't get over it. I've always loved the idea of pairing Aman with Nandini! It breaks my heart to see Aman's role being sidelined, because I feel he is a very able actor and his story can be told in the most creative and interesting manner.
This OS reminded me why I love the way you write. It's like you can paint pictures with your vivid description and use of words.You described Nandini's anguish and self-loathe very wonderfully. She no longer believes in love, thinking that women like her do not deserve it. This pulled my heart-strings. It was also extremely sad to see Aman's heart being broken each time she refused to escape from all the dirt.
I really want a Part 2 , showing how Nandini finally escapes with Aman,and starts with a fresh beginning, eventually parting with all apprehensions and responding to Aman's love. Pretty Please?!
Humi ❤️

Thank you so so so much Humi.. Maybe someday I will find it in me to write a second part of this.. Pakka!

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shutter

@shutter

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#57

I got the PM for this one but it somewhat got lost and I never got around to reading and commenting on this one for the longest time possible...

It's kind of like Devdas, the movie...( Not sure whether or not you know about it), wherein the hero and the heroine never come together despite their love for each other... Okay, just the end somewhat matches, that too because the people in the story never meet in the end...

The only difference is that this is more darker... What with Nandini being a victim of the flesh trade and having no way out of it even if she wanted to escape it at some point of time... The state Aman has found her in is beyond the stage of being broken, destroyed, robbed off of the only,life she knew existed... Her soul, as she feels is,beyond repair, all because she thinks she is no more worthy of a normal life...

Poor Aman... He had to find her and fall in love with her... All his persuasions, pleading, logic, reasoning failed... Failed to reach mind, failed to break and get through the barriers,of her heat... Untill his final action breaks it all, to let go of this pathetic attempt at surviving and trying to keep going with the life she refuses to come out of...

Terrifying twist of fate... but a very well written piece... You could feel the despair and the hopelessness all around you...

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Posted: 11 years ago

#58

I am going to repeat Paro's dialogue here,

while I was reading this piece, I felt like 'mara dil itna bhari ho gaya tha jaise kisi ne do mann gehu ki bori mere dil pe rakh di ho'

Her description fits perfectly to my feelings on this piece.

Poignancy, powerless, paralysis, vulnerable, incapable , inadequacy and much more.

You brought forth these emotions by creating a visual imagery that is difficult to ignore.

I have always wanted a second chance for Nadhini and hoped Aman would be paired with her.

My naive heart hoped that she had escaped the cruel clutches of what fate wanted to bestow on her and is working her way to come back to her motherland.

Hope is brutish in its showcase of a chimera, a fantasy for nandini and the reality bites for aman.

Star crossed lovers, literally. She wants to share her heart and not just not her body which has been a vessel for many. He wants her body if thats all she is willing to share!!

Please do not write a next part for this OS, because suspended in the air, it gives an illusion of hope, a glimmer of relief that all can be well. While reading napter's disgust I had felt - it is so difficult to image what a woman goes through in such a condition. Its horrific to imagine and your heart quivers while u mind cringes. Yet, the truth is so close home, one stroke of fate and the illusion of security and safety all swept away. Yet, the optimist in me wants to believe everyone will get their happy moments if not a happy ending.

And these lines were fabulous:

"Aapko toote khilaune ikkathe karne ka shauk hai kya, Afsar-Sa?" She questioned, still smiling.

He felt the searing arrows inside his heart at that. How battered would one be, if they didn't even like their own name?

He sighed. If he stood here any longer, he'd lose his sanity.

If she stayed here any longer, he'd lose his sanity.

"Nandini... Chalo yahaan se. Mai haath jodhta hu tumhare."

Her heart crushed at what she saw. He was emptying out his wallet on the table besides the door, his back to her.

And in that moment, she wanted to cease existing. She wanted the earth to engulf her for her soul was so tarnished, that she was polluting the man she loved.

Thank you for posting such a soulful story!

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ICanDoThis

@ICanDoThis

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Posted: 11 years ago

#59

Thanks for pm

I've just read now..

How could you say it's not good?

Actually, your right.

It's not good...

It's not anywhere near just good..

It's INCREDIBLE

I think I've realised you love meaningful songs ( like me) and they inspire you to link to your writing.

I don't watch Hindi films and hadn't heard this song flicking channels soo I got it up on YouTube and listened to it before reading your OS

I'm so glad I did, it does indeed truly suit this Story.

I really loved both.

SUCH Raw deep emotions.

one would have to be dead not to affected by your OS.

It's stunningly powerful and emotive.

It has evoked such imagery and I can feel the soul wrenching pain of both bringing tears to my eyes.

The Damned and the would be Saviour hurting equally for the same reasons.

One determined to keep her debased and violated self from him.

The other just as determined to rescue her from the Hell she believes to be her Destiny till Death.

The fate worse than death.

And you also have given life to two quality characters that the serial failed to portray.

Aman could have been a valuable addition to rr, nandini was only ever a name.

Then a sold unfortunate bride.

Then thrown into the black bottomless abyss of the forced flesh trade.

And forgotten.

You have retrieved her, given her the recognition she so deserves and your aman wants to give her love respect and redemption too.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE THIS

Love

Samina

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luvraj4ever

@luvraj4ever

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Posted: 11 years ago

#60

Lovely lovely OS...this just proves once again the potential show had and what a big f**k up the channel and writers have done...a big applause for u dear...what a fantastic writer you are!!!!! I absolutely loved the OS... Every bit of it...the song choice was perfect and so was the description of emotions...u made full justice to every line of the song...It was painful to read it but still I fell so much in love with the small story that I couldn't help but smile in the end...I smiled for the reason that I finally found a new amazing writer to stalk... Hahaha...I actually found ur writing piece in the Navrasas series and then tracked ur posts and found this...and I am so happy...Coming back to the story...

There were so many painfully beautiful moments throughout... I actually cried when nandani asked Aman that if he likes playing with broken toys??? The impact it made was tremendous...

And what happened in the end made me cry again...I am just feeling the helplessness of a man in love so much so that he is ready to do something which will hurt him yet he is unable to do anything else for his love...

And the plight of a woman who has a chance at life of dreams yet she has faced so many nightmares that have left her blind and crippled. ..

Once again beautiful OS and yes I know you ended it this way to let to let us take over in our imagination but pls do consider giving it a happy end..no matter how much I love different stories I just love happy endings...they give a feeling of contentment and a closure...

So pls continue if possible

Thank u for writing this...

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