Rishbala/Maaneet FF - Yaariyan - Pt.7/Pg38 - [18/01]

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Hey everyone!!
Here i am with a new story even though my other two still are incomplete and i am sooo lazy in by CouponDropDown" in_hover="" in_hdr="1" style="border: none !important; display: inline-block !important; text-indent: 0px !important; float: none !important; font-weight: bold !important; height: auto !important; margin: 0px !important; min-height: 0px !important; min-width: 0px !important; padding: 0px !important; text-transform: uppercase !important; text-decoration: underline !important; vertical-align: baseline !important; width: auto !important; background: transparent !important;">updating!!!! 😆

Anyway for this story i want you all to understand that it will be about two couples...RK and Madhubala and Maan and Geet...but the main focus will stay on Rishbala! Plus Maaneet will come later in the picture...i don't know if all of u even like them or not but please just see them as another couple then...

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[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6YmMnMGclBA[/YOUTUBE]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6YmMnMGclBA


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Part 1: Pg 1
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Please Note that the beginning will move quite slow as i will introduce every character...which will take some time...so please hang on...
Part 1

"Ma'am...Ma'am..please wake up! Sir is waiting for you!" "Hmmm...Go away.." she moaned "Please wake up...you will be late.." she didn't pay any heed..all she wanted to do was keep sleeping. "Priya, I will wake her up, you go and get breakfast ready for them." said an old aged woman who walked into her room with a cup of steaming coffee. "Madhu beta...get up now otherwise you will be late" she said placing the cup on her side desk.. "Madhu am warning you...if you are late today then..." she threatened as she ripped off her blanket. "Daaiii Maaa" she wined, "just 5 more minutes." "No! Up now!" she said in a strict tone. Moaning a bit more she finally got up, rubbed her eyes, took the cup and started drinking it. "Daai Maa your very mean. Priya is so much easier to handle." Madhu said showing her fake anger "Yes! And who would have rushed out of the house without breakfast then?" "That reminds me...please don't say Papa is waiting for me again.." she said in a worried tone. "Madhu what day is it today? Monday right...and what rule does your Dad alway do on Monday.." "..have breakfast with me.."she completed and then quickly ran into her bathroom. Shamsher Malik, a successful renowned businessman, who's most precious possession in his life is his daughter, Madhubala Malik. He had done everything to give his daughter the best, since childhood Madhu was raised with all luxuries and servants around her pampering and loving her all the time yet she just wanted one thing in her life...her mother! Still he tried his level best to not make her feel the absence of her mother therefore no matter what or how busy he was he would spend quality time with his daughter.

"Good Morning Papa!!!" she screamed rushing towards her Father who sat around the coffee table with a newspaper in his hands "Good Morning beta.." he smiled as she planted a kiss on his cheek while hugging him. "Papa how many times have i told you...you don't need to wait for me...just have your breakfast naa?" she said grabbing an apple from the fruit basket as she comfortably sat opposite him. "Now don't get started again Madhu-" "-because there is no point of me saying this again and again is there?" she completed. He chuckled "Papa eat up quick...i have already talked to Balraj Uncle and he said you have a meeting at 9.30am and it's 8.30! I don't want you to be late ok?" she said in a commanding tone. "Okay Boss! And now it's my turn...i have already talked Deepali and Varun and they said that your class starts at 9.15! I don't want you to be late ok?" he said imitating Madhu who had a huge grin across her face. "Papa today is just the first day of the new term, so it doesn't really matter.." she said trying to find an excuse. "No way! Your going on time and that's an order!" Interrupted a voice, "and Mr.Malik don't you dare supporting her!" said Daai Maa in a strict tone as she glared at both Father-Daughter. "But Papa there will be nothing that special today!" "Don't you wanna meet all your friends again?" he asked back. "I meet them anyways..." she replied with a bored voice. "But Papa...the holidays were sooo short..at least give me a day to sleep so that I can survive another term of college!""You had a week Madhu!! And that's enough!" replied the old lady."So you don't want to go?"asked Shamsher."No." She said making a baby face"You sure?""Is that even a question!?!""Well then..I guess I will have to return these keys and the car back.."he said sighting as he held the keys.."Papaaa I LOVE YOU SOOO MUCH!!!!!!" she screamed as she got up and hugged him tight!!!!"Love you too beta"he said planting a kiss on her forehead"So your going to college today??" He asked with a grin"Is that even a question!?!" She repeated what she said a while ago with a cheeky smile."Okay which car is it? Where is it?" She said all excited getting up"Not so fast first breakfast you two then something else" and both father-daughter quietly followed her demand.

"Wow papa!! Love you for this!! gotta say your choice is not that bad..."she said impressed at the white shining Audi which was in front of her."So can I drive it?" She asked excited"Well Miss Madhubala have you got your license?""Yes of course Mr.Malik..."she replied proudly, and then grew amazed as her eyes widened "Wait papa does this mean I can drive...like alone.. me on the steering wheel?""Only if you promise to drive carefully not like last time..""Oh come on that was like last year..and it was just a minor accident...""You want to have a driver again for a year??" he asked in a dangerous tone"No...no this is not what I meant...please not that driver.."she said making a face "I'll be care full...paka wala promise"she said pinching a piece of her skin on her neck. He smiled at his daughter. "Thank you Papa!!" she said giving him a hug. "Well you can say thank you and a hug to your bestie too...he was the one actually to have changed my mind.." "Really?" he nodded.

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So hw was it? hw do u like Madhu?? please leave feedback and Like is u did 😊
Edited by Mentally-Insane - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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u said to res after 3 so i'm resing now!!😆

hey! i'm 1st to comment on ur new story!!🥳

unres..

brilliant start!!
i love the dad & daughter duo bond!!
who is madhu's friend? i guess its maan & geet's friend will be RK & rishbala will become friends through their friends!! lol!! i started my guessing!! no! i won't go for any conclusion!! u itself let us know!!

i like maaneet couple but not a big fan like rishbala but eager to read one on both the couple together!!

pls give frequent updates dear!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Great Start Lu 👏👏
Loved Madhu's intro 😳
is she ameer baap ki bigdi hui aulaad or achha baccha 😉
Loved the father daughter duo. Her dad loves her so much. 😃
But what happened to her mother and Who is her bestie who made Shamsheer change his mind ?
When will RK enter? 😎
Sorry too many questions 😆

I never read anything on Maneet, but let me see how u r gonna write 😛
And please don't be lazy in updating that we will have to attack this thread 😈😆
Edited by .Shree. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: madhurish

u said to res after 3 so i'm resing now!!😆

hey! i'll be 1st to comment on ur new story!!🥳


Congratz!!!

I put it up so now tell me how it is...waiting eagerly 😃
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Originally posted by: .Shree.

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Great Start Lu👏👏</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Loved Madhu's intro😳</font>
<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">is she ameer baap ki bigdi hui aulaad or achha baccha😉</font>
<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Loved the father daughter duo. Her dad loves her so much.😃</font>
<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">But what happened to her mother andWho is her bestie who made Shamsheer change his mind ?</font>
<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">When will RK enter?😎</font>
<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Sorry too many questions😆</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I never read anything on Maneet, but let me see how u r gonna write😛</font>
<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And pleasedon'tbe lazy in updating that we will have to attack this thread😈😆</font>



Aww thank u shree!!! 🤗 glad u liked it

Woah!! Sooo many questions? ! U need to wait and read to find out and I would like to say madhu is both...gpod and bigdi hui aulat 😆 her bestie will be introduced soon so Wait! And also for his entry...gosh impatient child...hehe 😆

Dont worry about Maaneet...I will write about them so that u guys get them..and hw they act..

Yes I will update...have I got any other option? U guys will get this thread closed otherwise 😆
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Originally posted by: Mentally-Insane


Aww thank u shree!!! 🤗 glad u liked it

Woah!! Sooo many questions? ! U need to wait and read to find out and I would like to say madhu is both...gpod and bigdi hui aulat 😆 her bestie will be introduced soon so Wait! And also for his entry...gosh impatient child...hehe 😆

Dont worry about Maaneet...I will write about them so that u guys get them..and hw they act..

Yes I will update...have I got any other option? U guys will get this thread closed otherwise 😆


Ya I am bit impatient, 😆 greedy for more updates 😈
You have no other option dear ,otherwise we will make this a chat thread 😉😆

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Great start Choti 👏👏
Now, my comments will be like Shree's. 😆
Loved Madhu's intro, a sleepy head, just like me. 😆 And the father-daughter duo priceless. 😆 How both want to skip breakfast. 😆
But what happened to her mother? Who is Madhu's best friend that made Shamsheer change his mind? Is it RK, Trishna?
When will RK enter the story? 😆 I am waiting for his entry.😆
So many questions and so few answers. 😆 Well you have to update soon or you know what will happen. 😈😆

I never read anything on Maneet. And laugh all you want for this. But is Maneet Geet and Man...something. From DD previous show Geet? 🤣
And please don't be lazy in updating this FF like the others or we will attack this thread 😈😆
#KaNiShLu_SistersRocks😆
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Nice start.
Liked Madhu's intro & her relation with her dad.
Continue soon.

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