Akdha New FF *ll**Tamana...wishes come true..ch 4 up pg21 salim

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Hi parijat Fans😳


I have started a new ff again.😆😆
I know you all will be surprise that how can i handle so many ffs but coz i tell u i'm thinking of writng two more and soon i'll post them also😆😆
lets come to the ff


It is based on mother's love and wsihes😳
...Please share your views on it...If you don't like it anywhere...Please tell me...I will stop it...And...you can give me suggestions on the story... so please read it and post comment😉😉😉
hope you like it...😳







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Jalaluddin Mohammad Akbar:Very professional nd introvert.. MD of Mohammad fabrics pvt. Ltd., top garment manufacturing house.. father of a 1.5 yr. old baby boy,Salim..


Jodha Rajawat :done fashion designing.. Introvert nd innocent by nature.. an orphan.. her parents Rajeev nd Mainai's death is till a mystery for her.. all she knows is that her father commited suicide.. lives with her uncle.. Completely ignored by her uncle nd aunty since childhood.. her only friend is Rukaiya, her elder, cousin sister..





Salim Jalaluddin Mohammad Akbar:: a sweet cute baby...of Jalal and Aaliya.



Nasir ud-din Muhammad Humayun: (Jalal's father..)Owner of Mohammad fabrics pvt. Ltd. .. a very juvenile nd soft hearted man personally.. but professionally he is really a man with a plan.. he wants his son to happy in his life.. Lokendra's fast friend..

Hamida Nasir ud-din Muhammad Humayun :Jalal's mother.. a housewife.. a perfect mother.. takes care of her grandson Salim nd loves him like anything..wants her son to re-marry for Salimnd his own sake..



Aaliya Jalaluddin Mohammad Akbar::Jalal's wife and Salim's mother but died in an accident.






Lokendra Rajawat: Jodha's uncle.. owner of Rajawat pvt. Ltd. .. has brought her up just as an obligation.. loves his daughter Rukaiya.. is a fast friend of Nasir ud-din Muhammad Humayun even though they are biggest business rivals..



Ashwini Rajawat :shrewd lady.. always neglects Jodha nd favours her own daughter Rukaiya even in her wrong deeds.. wants Jodha to get married nd go away as soon as possible..



Rukaiya Rajawat :she is a doctor by profession.. met Jalal before in her father's business get togethers.. has a secret crush on Jalal but doesn't know about his son or marriage..






Ankit Mehra :He is a doctor..Jalal's best friend..n has a crush on Rukaiya but didnt told her about this...





Abdul Sharma:He is working with Jalal..Jalal's best buddy and want him to get marry again for the sake of Salim..he is having a very great married life with his wife Salima..





Salima Sharma:She is a fashion designer..is a very bubbly n sweet and always fight wid Abdul on small small things..sometimes there is a cat war b/w both of them Abdul ,Salima and Jalal are school friends and know each other very well and she also want Jalal to re marry...





Moti Rajawat:she is a doctor married to Kunal and is the best friend of Rukaiya n Jodha..n always pray for Jodha to get out of this hell and get her prince charming..she always supports Jodha alot..take her as her younger sis..



Kunal Rajawat :A doctor by profession..happily married...and is a big bro to Jodha...



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Chapter 1

Rajawats nd Mohammads together at the same hotel for dinner.. well that was NO coincidence the biggest business rivals ie the owners of rajawats pvt. Ltd. nd Mohammads fabrics pvt. Ltd. were great family friends.. they meet up for dinners nd discuss about other companies.. well that was their strength.. they work together to rule out any rising company from taking their positions at the top..

Mr. Nasir ud-din Muhammad Humayun has involved his son, Jalal in his business but he was very reserved by nature.. he doesn't like talking to strangers or acquaintances about anything apart from work.. he has his bunch of friends -Abdul, his wife ie. Salima, Ankit nd someone special too.. about whom no one knows apart from his own heart nd his Late Wife, Aaliya..

Mr. lokendra rajawat he lives on his Ego nd his never ending urge to earn more nd more money.. he loves his daughter rukaiya to core.. he can do anything for her.. the only thing he doesn't like is when she favours her cousin ie. his elder brother, Rajeev's daughter, jodha.. rukaiya is a doctor herself nd works in Sanjeevni.. while due to rukaiya's determined convincing he has admitted Jodha into a fashion designing institute too.. now he nd his wife were just looking for a groom for her so that she gets married nd go away from them nd rukaiya too..

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"Dekho jalal.. main tumhare bhale ke liye hi keh rahi hoon.. why don't get married nd if not for yourself then for salim.. he needs a mother beta.." hamida said as she came to put sleeping salim into the crib.. "mom please.. how many times have I told you main salim ke liye kisi ko bhi maa banakar nahi la sakta.. he is my world.. what if she ignores him after marriage..? nd besides the girl I want to.." he stopped mid way when he realised what he was about to blurt out in his anger nd frustration over the marriage topic..

"kya..? who are you talking about..? do you like someone..?" hamida asked in an excited tone.. jalal looked away nd nodded in NO.. hamida knew her son inside out, she knew he was lying to her.. she decided to drop the topic for the time being as it was late..

jalal was sad as he looked at the clock.. "Its her birthday today.. Happy Birthday jodha.." he whispered kissing the tiny pendant of hers he had kept with himself since the childhood.. jodhaa had given it to him on his 16th birthday while she was just 13yrs old.. it was his lucky charm since then.. she had attended his birthday party with Rajeev and maina just a week before Rajeev and maina s death.. nd that was their last meeting.. he sighed nd went to sleep..


On the otherhand in rajawat house rukaiya had asked her parents to behave normal with jodha on her birthday atleast.. but this time they were not in town.. rukaiya crept into her room nd saw her sleeping peacefuly.. she just pounced on the bed nd shouted "Happy Birthday jodhu.." jodha woke up with this screaming nd shouting nd got scared till she switched on the lights nd looked at rukaiya.. "Di.. you scared the hell out of me.." jodha said catching her breath..

Looking at the cakes nd a small gift she realised its her birthday nd hugged rukaiya.. "Thank you di.. mujhe to.." cut in between by rukaiya "haan haan.. I know you forgot your own birthday.. chal ab cake cut kar I can't resist this trouffle cake anymore.." lodha giggled at rukaiya's kidish behaviour nd finally cut the cake nd fed a huge piece to rukaiya .. she loved nd respected rukaiya very much.. rukaiya was her only family nd friend.. though she had her moti Di as well who was hers nd rukaiya 's friend.. she is married nd was settled in Delhi with her husband kunal..

Her uncle nd aunty have raised her as an obligation she knows that.. now a days she was looking for a job to atleast try nd start to pay them back in some way..

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hamida was looking for one of salim's tiny nd noisy toy in jalal's room.. she knows that its jalal's habbit to dump all the things of his or salim's daily use either in his own room's drawer or in salim's room drawer..

She opened the drawer nd closed it.. she turned back nd froze.. she again opened the drawer nd saw Aaliya's picture half coming out of jalal's personal diary.. she was worried thinking still after almost 1.5 yrs of her death jalal hasn't forgotten her.. though she never wants jalal to forget his late wife, Aaliya but she wants him to move on in his life.. following her motherly instinct she flipped through the pages.. she narrowed her eyes when she found jalal's childhood picture there.. he was with a little girl smiling to the camera..
under it was written : "jodha rajawat.. My first ever love.. hope to meet you once again in life.. even a moment would be enough for me to cherish it till my last breath.."

hamida couldn't believe this.. she now realised the reason that took jalal so long to finally accept Aaliya as his wife.. she turned when she heard Jalal..

"Mom.. aap yahan.. kuch doond rahi hain.." jalal frowned when he saw her with his diary in her hand.. his eyes were wide in shock.. "Aap.. aap.. meri..meri diary padh rahi hain mom.." he fumbled.. while Hamida simply avoided his question nd asked "Do you want to marry ' Rajeev and maina s daughter..?.." looking at jalal's silent nd guilty face she again said "jalal I really want you to marry again.. nd if you want we can talk to lokendra and ashwini about it.. even I've not met her since long.. Pata nahin ki jodha, Mumbai mein hai bhi ya nahin.."

"Mom please.. no girl would want to me nd spent her her days taking care of salim nd me.. I don't want to spoil jodha's life.. she deserves much more than this.." jalal said in a determined tone only to get a reply from his father who was standing by the door listening to all this "If you love her you'll keep her happy no matter what.. nd as far salim is concerned then we can tell her about him before marriage.. after that it will be her decision to say yes or no.."

Listening to his father jalal was still not convinced but his heart was craving to meet her once.. It has been almost six months that he has even had a glimpse of her.. but his concern for her won.. "Nahi.. main uske saath aisa nahi kar sakta.. she really deserves to have a better future.."

"Mujhe nahi lagta ki tum mein ya humari family mein koi kami hai jalal.. you'll keep her happy if you love her.." his mother said trying to make him understand but seeing him unaffected she announced "Main kal hi ashwini se baat karungi.. finally humein ek aisi ladki mili hai jisse shaadi karne mein tumhe koi aitraaz nahi hoga.. aur agar aisa hota hai to yeh salim aur tumhare liye bohot achha hoga.."

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He was lying on the bed with salim sleeping on his stomatch.. he was miles away from sleep.. his mind nd heart were at war.. once his Mind says to let his parents talk to jodha for marriage but then his heart denies this saying he has no right to destroy someone's dreams.. Every girl has her dreams of making a new family.. many new relationships but none had dreamt of getting married nd live with a father already.. "Agar jodha ko koi aur pasand hua to..? agar usse zabardasti shaadi ke liye haan karvayi gayi ho to..? Nahi.. main mom dad ko baat karne deta hoon.. agar usne mana kiya to meri kismat.. lekin agar usne haan kaha to main usse milunga yeh dekhne ki kahin vo zabardasti haan to nahi keh rahi.." Thinking all this he slept dreaming of jodha..



Next Morning..

This morning had a lot in store for both rajawts and mohammads.. Mr nd Mrs Mohammad got ready early nd left for rajawat house.. they wanted to talk about this marriage as soon as possible..

While at rajawat house things were different.. lokendra had already been told about Mohammad s arrival but the motive was still a mystery.. He asked ashwini to get ready while rukaiya had left for Sanjeevni.. ashwini had strictly instructed jodha to stay in her room as their friends were coming.. nd jodha being calm nd obedient nodded nd stayed back in her room writing her diary as usual.. Writing was her passion.. she loves penning down all the feelings hidden inside her innocent heart in form of very beautiful poems nd couplets..

The mohammads reached the rajawat's Mansion.. they were welcomed warmly.. they sat for a long time chatting nd discussing when finally hamida managed to ask "ashwini.. itne saal ho gaye.. humne Rajeev aur maina ki beti ko nahi dekha.. tumhe pata hai ki vo ab kahan hai..?"

At the suddeness of the jodha's enquiry lokendra and ashwini lost the colour of their faces.. the felt as if the next moment their secret was coming out.. But lokendra took control asking "Umm.. haan jodha.. vo.. vo.. vo bechari aur kahan jaati.. yahin rehti hai humare saath.. bas zara kam bolna pasand karti hai naye logon se isliye kahin aati jaati nahin.." lokendra said covering their neglegence towards jodha with her introvert nature..

Listening to lokendra, hamida was very happy nd instantly asked to meet her.. as ashwini stood up to call her\. hamida insisted on going to her room alone nd meeting her.. Having no other option, ashwini took her to jodhaa's room which was just besides rukaiya's, due to rukaiyai's request, nd left her there..

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jodha heard a knock on the door.. "darwaza khula hai Di.." she said expecting rukaiya as no one else has ever came into her room, knocking the door.. ashwini used to barge in to command her while lokendra had never bothered to even look at her.. her back was towards the door.. as he heard the door being closed she quickly said without turning.. "Ohh.. to aaj apne off liya hai.. achha hai.. maine abhi abhi ek poem complete ki hai.. Suno.."

Nd she started reading her poem, While hamida decided to keep mum nd listen..

Is zindagi main koi pal to aisa ho,
Jis main koi teesra na ho..
Hum dair tak ek dosray say batain karein,
Un baton ko sunnay wala koi na ho..
Aur baton baton main hi raat dhal jayay..
Bas main aur tum hoon..

bethay bethay kisi bhi choti si baat pay hum betahasha hass padein,
aur hastay hastay ankhoon say ansoo nikal ayain..
in ansoon ko saaf karnay wala koi na ho..
bas main aur tum hoon..
kash is zindagi mein koi pal tu aisa ho,
jo sirf aur sirf tera mera ho..


"Kaisi lagi Di..? yeh maine Ma ke liye likhi.." She stopped in midway when she turned nd saw hamida standing there with a smile playing her lips.. jodha tried to think if she knew her.. "Umm.. I'm sorry.. mujhe laga rukaiya Di hain.. ji aap..?" jodha questioned hamida's presence while hamida came forward nd kissed jodha's forehead saying "Main tumheri hamida aunty hoon.. Rajeev aur maina ki dost.. tumhe yaad hai Humayun uncle jo tumhe har roz especially chocolate dene aate thhe.."

hamida tried make her recollect something but jodha pouted nd said "Mujhe yaad nahi aaraha aunty.. sorry.. lekin agar aap Ma-Papa ki dost hain to aapko to pata hoga ki vo ab.." she stopped saying further while hamida could see the lonliness in jodha's eyes.. She is so beautiful nd serene hamida thought..

"Vo yahin to hain.. mere samne.. tum maina ki tarah khubsoorat aur bholi ho.. aur Rajeev ki tarah tum bohot achha likhti bhi ho.. jaanti ho vo bhi poems likha karte thhe.. tumhe dekhke aisa laga jaise saalon baad unn dono se mulakaat ho gayi.." hamida said caressing jodha's head.. While jodha suddenly realised nd said "Sorry aunty.. maine apko ab tak baithne ko bhi nahi bola.. aayiye na.." She made hamida sit on her bed nd sat besides her..

hamida debated for a minute but then said "jodha.. beta main yahan tumhare liye apne bete, jalal ka rishta lekar aayi hoon.. main bas yeh janna chahti hoon ki kya tum kisi aur ko pasand karti ho..? plz ghabrana nahi.. abhi tak yeh baat ashwini aur lokendra ko nahin pata.. maine pehle tumse baat karna theek samjha.."

jodha was shocked-happy-shy-speechless at her sudden proposal.. She remain silent for several minutes but then in a very low voice said "Main kya keh sakti hoon aunty.. aap Ma-Papa ki dost hain.. aap mera bura kabhi nahin sochengi.. aur phir mujhse zyada yeh faisla lene ka haq Badi Ma aur Bade Papa ka hai.. main kisi aur ko pasand nahin karti.."

hamida was really happy at jalal's choice.. she was happy to see a girl in todays generation to be so respectful nd innocent.. She smiled nd hugged jodha saying "jab bhi apni Ma ki yaad aaye mujhe phone kar lena.. mujhe bhi ek beti mil jayegi.."

jodha saw hamida going out of her room nd was in tears next moment.. she didn't knew what was happening but hamida's sudden entry was making her weak.. though she liked hamida very much.. she had never in her life, after her parents death had talked to anyone about them.. More than anything she was scared of this marriage proposal.. she knew her Uncle nd Aunty would not even think for a minute before saying yes nd getting her out of their house but she was still sad to part from her only Family ie. rukaiya..

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All the fears jodha had in her mind were actually taking a turn to reality.. lokendra and ashwini really said "yes" with in an instant.. they were more than happy with this relationship.. little did they knew that THIS relationship which they thought to be the end of jodha's existance from there life would actually be backfired in future.. They were heartless enough to not even let hamida go back to jodha nd mention about salim to her.. They feared her rejection..

While in all this proposal nd agreement jodha's fears were ignored as usual.. In the evening rukaiya came home nd before ashwini could tell her the groom's name she ran to jodha's room to tease her nd grill her with her questions.. While jodha was busy staring into space..

"Ohoo.. madam abhi se hi apne unn ke khayaalon mein khoyi hain.." Anjali said bringing her back to the World while she just blushed.. "Di.. stop irritating me.. varna main aapse baat nahi karungi.." she said pouting.. Just as rukaiya was about to say something jodha's phone rang.. "Unknown Number.." she said shrugging towards rukaiya nd answered the call..

"Hello.. is this jodha..?"

"Ji.. Aap..?"

"Hi jodha.. main jalal.."

jodha froze for a second listening to him.. she was liking the sincerity in his voice.. she came back to the world when he called her name a few times..

"Ji.. haan.. main yahin hoon.. sorry.." she muttered..

"Its absolutely fine..really.." he said very calmly..

"aapne phone kaise.. kuch kaam thha..?"

"Haan.. actually main shaadi se pehle tumse ek baar milna chahta hoon.. bas thodi der ke liye.. jab aur jahan tum comfortable ho.. please.." he said

She thought for a moment nd gulped saying "Ji theek hai.. kal jab bhi aap yahan aa sakein.." she said implying she would be meeting him at rajawat house while he understood her nervousness nd agreed saying "Okk then.. I'll be there at 12.. don't be so nervous main sirf aapse baat karne aaraha hoon aapka koi test lene nahin.. gudnite.. bye.." nd disconnected the phone leaving jodha confused as to how a stranger very prefectly read her mind..


So howz it do you liked it or not ..

With Love❤️

Mrs. Tokas







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Character Sketch Pg 1
Chapter 1 Pg 1
chapter 2 pg 10
chapter 3 pg 14 the marraige
chapter 4 pg 21 the mischievous salim😆😆
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wow
amazing chappy
beautifully written..😛
jo is so innocent n pretty she is all alone...😭
hamida is so sweet
i hope jalal will tell jo abt his son😕
plz update ASAP😉
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Originally posted by: hely

wow
amazing chappy
beautifully written..😛
jo is so innocent n pretty she is all alone...😭
hamida is so sweet
i hope jalal will tell jo abt his son😕
plz update ASAP😉

thanks hely very much😳😳

asap means ?😕
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welcome dia di😊
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Wow ...concept is different and refreshing
chapter 1 ...Vibrant
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thanks😃
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Originally posted by: rima4ever

nice character sketch


thanks😃

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