Short Story - The Turkey Raaz

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Posted: 18 years ago
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The Raaz:

+++++++ Twenty years ago. +++++++++++

Jeet, as he was known was getting worried about Gita, his wife. She was acting weird these days, what was wrong with her? He knew he wasn't taking care of her for the last few days, with the business just starting to flourish, he needed to pay close attention to his company. He knew Gita was feeling neglected. Pushkar was just 8 years old - the boy brought him good luck, ever since Gita and he had Pushkar, financially they took off.

Jeet looked at his beautiful wife sleeping on his side. He was lucky she agreed to marry him, a no body who pulled himself up with his boot straps and made something of himself. She was a literally a princess, coming from a prominent Bengali family, doted by her parents had fallen in love with him and married him despite protestations from her father.

Her father passed away recently and she was upset that they never made up and she couldn't see him before his death.

So he had brought her on a holiday, to Turkey. It was almost a one month vacation for them, a blissful, romantic vacation, some thing that invigorated him and renewed their love for each other.

Gita had met a couple of Indian men, young kids about 25, almost 5 years younger than him, and Jeet had noticed that one of the men has been paying too much attention to Gita, he didn't like it one bit. Gita had teased him about being jealous about the younger, good looking man who seemed to be obsessed with her.He never met Jai Walia because the man was apparently also on a business trip.

Jeet had laughed nervously and denied that he was jealous. Gita had convinced him, that the men were harmless, Jai and Tarun came from decent families and fellow Indians. So how could they be rogues?

Jeet left on a small business assignment, promising that he would come back to take her to the emperor's tomb. But things didn't go as he liked, he couldn't get back until real late.

When he came back he was told by the bellboy that Pushkar and Gita had left to the tomb with the two Indian men. That was the last he heard from both of them.

Gita was dead at the tomb, police suspected foul play and Pushkar had disappeared. After his grief, he had searched for Pushkar high and low, he didn't even have the full names of Tarun and Jai and he vowed to take revenge on both of them.

+++++++ Present ++++++++++++

Six years ago he had found Jai Walia's photograph on a business week magazine and he recognized it from Gita's many pictures from Turkey.

He had schemed to make Jai pay for his perfidy, he took away his wife, turned her against him and vowed to take his children away just like Pushkar was kidnapped from him. He was ecstatic that he found Pushkar five years ago, alive and trying to make a successful man out of himself.

IT was only by chance he realized Pushkar also had similar betrayal from Jai and they had joined hands to destroy Jai Walia.

AD was falling for the young wife of Jai Walia, he felt strange but his own revenge was put to the background and he wanted to help the strongwilled and straightforward young woman who seemed to have suffered the worst tragedy possible in the hands of her own husband and Pushkar's wife and Bani's own sister.

He was going to make Jai pay for the murder of his wife, for the loss of his son for the last 20 years. He was 50 years old, a huge industrialist with loads of money and lots of time to kill. He had become a son for Gita's mother, changed his name to Aparajeet Deb and adopted a ready made family and came back to India to make Jai's life miserable.

Now they were all in Turkey, the time has come for the events to unfold and to let Jai know that all sinners need to be punished, and the punishment will be meted out by the Anokha, Adbuth, Ajoob Aparajeet Deb.

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Sheena,

THat really seems like a plausible explanation, so you are saying Jai or tarun had something to do with the death of AD?

SO AD is about 50 years old?
Let's see,
Pushkar is 28,
so if AD got married at 22, then he would have been about 30 when his wife died, so it makes him about 50.

And since Jai is younger, he must have been about 25, 26 when they were in Turkey...

My guess is Tarun was the obsessed lover and he had something to do with Gita's death and Jai is protecting his friend.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Shree,

The chronology fits,

And I think it was Tarun who accidentally killed Gita and JW is taking the blame for it.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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If someone was accidentally killed then why was the kid (Pushy) kidnapped?

If AD is 50 and Bani is 29 now, their difference is 21 years...hmmmm

If Pushkar was a kid at the time, how would he know what happened there really and why does he think Sarla is his mother?
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Pushy wasn't kidnapped really, Jai didn't know about his father, he never really met AD. Pushy knows that sarla is not his real mother because

1) he was eight years old at the time.
2) Jai told him that he was unable to locate his dad and his mother was dead!!

Speculations galore!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Sobha,

Yours will be better by leaps and bounds from what the destructives come up with.

meghna
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Posted: 18 years ago
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I'm glad I managed to catch this thread!

Great ideas Shoba Di! 👍🏼

I would not be surprised at all if a similar story unfolds on screen over the next week or two.

Everything seemed to add up and as Ronit Roy once said in an interview, AD has a valid reason for wanting to whup Jai Walia!

I found it interesting that unlike on the screen, you decided to make the adbhut one the older man of the two!

It'll be a while before I'll be able to FINALLY catch up with 'candle in the wind' and FINALLY post a comment... but at least I managed to put one up here! 😆

I say that Ekta ji should fire her current writers and hire Shoba Di instead! 😃

Good work Di 👍🏼

God bless.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Sheena...very interesting. This plot seems believable...JW blamed for the death of AD's wife. Tarun seems like the person responsible...uski toh mein!! 😡 Would explain how he got his OCD!!! 😉 Maybe he was obsessed with AD's wife...Hmmmmm...raaz khul raha hai!! 😆

Though i do wonder what bakwas track destructives have in store for us...i'm expecting it to be stupid!! 😕 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
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(Shoba,

Yours will be better by leaps and bounds from what the destructives come up with.

meghna)

Meg, thanks - so far, i have hated all the raazes they revealed - they are all pretty lame, but I think, this at least makes every one the Jai campers, the AD campers feel good about it, no one is wrong and they come out like they are smelling of roses. JW for taking care of the boy and protecting his friend Tarun because it was an accident and AD trying to take revenge on who ever harmed his wife and took away his child.

This story has it's holes...

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: RaviMalhotra69

I'm glad I managed to catch this thread!

Great ideas Shoba Di! 👍🏼

I would not be surprised at all if a similar story unfolds on screen over the next week or two.

Everything seemed to add up and as Ronit Roy once said in an interview, AD has a valid reason for wanting to whup Jai Walia!

I found it interesting that unlike on the screen, you decided to make the adbhut one the older man of the two!

It'll be a while before I'll be able to FINALLY catch up with 'candle in the wind' and FINALLY post a comment... but at least I managed to put one up here! 😆

I say that Ekta ji should fire her current writers and hire Shoba Di instead! 😃

Good work Di 👍🏼

God bless.

Hey JJ:

How was the birthday/non-birthday event? You cracked me up with that one!

You are very sweet for saying that this is good, I just wrote it in about 10 minutes. I hope it unfolds like this or something better.

DOn't worry about CITW, it's turning out to be an epic, and I was never that good, reading the Upanishads and Mahabharats...😆

I thought he was older than Jai in the story, but I could be wrong.😕 ALthough, he looks much younger and I like his style of dressing, much younger and more tycoonish.

Love,

- Di

Originally posted by: Taz234

Sheena...very interesting. This plot seems believable...JW blamed for the death of AD's wife. Tarun seems like the person responsible...uski toh mein!! 😡 Would explain how he got his OCD!!! 😉 Maybe he was obsessed with AD's wife...Hmmmmm...raaz khul raha hai!! 😆

Though i do wonder what bakwas track destructives have in store for us...i'm expecting it to be stupid!! 😕 😆

Tazzo dear, been a long while since we talked, so how is my fave girl doing?

I did tell you not to go out with that OCD fella, and you didn't listen, you even gave him your cell phone, so if you are getting those phone calls now, you have only yourself to blame. And last I heard, he was in UK.😆

Hope the creatives come up with a better story than meri bakwas!!

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