Short Story - The Turkey Raaz - Page 4

Originally posted by: shahni4

Shobha
Your scenario will be infinitely better than the crap that will be shoved down our throat by next week!!!
Shobha, Ever considered applying for a job as Kreative head for Balaji Telefilms!!! You would be definitely worth twice the salary the pay you as the current head is not even worth a quarter of it!!!

Nina

Nina,

Thanks sweetheart - that's a huge compliment, but I think I have a lovely job where people respect me and I have creative freedom, and I don't know how much I can stomach the telly world from the inside. And trust me, I don't think they will pay me enough to take up the job!😆

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Originally posted by: j&b84

Hi shobakka

really liked ur raaz and i am 100% sure ur raaz will be far far far much better then wht mayi's is going to show us tt for sure....

akka when will u update ur CITW...it been very lg time

Hima,

Thanks sweety, i have updated CITW last night!

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Majumdar:

Good start, Shoba. Hope u don't make murga out of my poor Munna. 😭 😭 😭 Basi Roti is doing a good enuff job. 😆

Rgds,

Pri

Pri,

😆 I was not really trying to make murga out of Munna, I think he has been shredded enough to make chinese chicken salad (Shredded)! This is a one off SS of one page, that I don't have any intention of continuing - have my hands full right now.

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Je_aime:

Shoba'kka,

It is a great story and it flows very well. It is with perfect logic which creatives lack big time…

thanks dear!

This story pleases everyone…but I just don't want Pushkar to be evil…I love him as a sweet person…don't we already have enough baddies in the show…why my Pooch now…but I know that is what is gonna happen in the show….Pushkar seems to have come for revenge…

My guess is that he is long lost son of AD, he may be negative for a short while and will turn positive once he knows JW is innocent.

Back to the story, I simply loved it…do continue soon if you have other parts…or is it the end?

This is just a one-off, one page story that I wrote hoping that the lurkers would use as one of the plausible scenarios.

Cheers,
Meena

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Hey Sheena

very interesting and very logcally story.Much better what will get from the creatives.great job,simply superb. 😊

PS:Happy Jani Day 😳

preet 😳

Preet,

Happy jani day to you too, Hon! Thanks for thinking it's logical.😳

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Jigna:

di that was awesome!!!!
hmm now lets see if thats what ekta comes up
if it is u need to start writing shows

Thanks Jigna, I don't think it will be anything like this, it will be some stupid stuff, if you remember the Bandh Darwaza one...

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Anchal-13

That was amazing but now we have to wait and see if this is the raaz 😛

Anchal: thanks, lets see what they come up with.

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pkbains:

Great story Sheena! You've done a great job in pulling the pieces together!

Pushpinder: Thanks, I was just responding to some one's post and came up with this...

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Somali110:

I wish the creatives had your logic Sheen. Unfortunately all the loose ends will be gathered into a clumsy knot and presented to us in true KS Illogical style. Fikar not, they will not let us down this time either.
Somali

Somali: I am hoping they will do better this time around, may be there are no lurkers here like we assume or they don't give a damn of what we think anymore! 😕

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anita&eijaz
its great thanxs 😆

Thanks A&E

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Swatinarang:

great story billi, just loved the story so tarun is the real culprit and i want this to happen in ks too.

swati

Swati, meri pyari sherni,

I always thought that you had a soft corner for Tarun Bhai...LOL😉

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ofcourse:

Sheena I really think ur FF Turjey Raaz adds up to the real KS..Iam sure that OCD fellow is behind these things n khamokham JW ka naam aagaya..as usual our mighty JW is there to save everybodys name from badnaam just like his belived wife..
Oh God, agar destructives ne phir se koi crap dikhaya tho, I tell u Iam even ready to take my next flight to mumbai to bash them up..Hope there is some proper reason this time for the raaz n this AD Bhooth track..

OC, I hope so! I don't want them to think about some other crap JW did - getting sick of all the raazes this guy has under his belt.

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abhavarma:

Shoba,

Loved the fact that the dignity of all the characters is intact in your story. These characters are like real people with all shades of grey. Keep going.

Abha

Abha, thanks - I am hoping that the destructives don't make any more characters unlovable, they have done enough of that aleady. THis is the last and only part. I don't have time to write a lengthy story about what happened because my hands are full at the moment.

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ammukutty:

sheena,

Intersting story n logically written....let Ekta should adopt this...we don't know what bloopers mayi has in store for us...
Ammu.

Ammu,

thanks, It's free, she can adopt it if she likes...see I even put it in writing!! 😆

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Khushboo2006

Hi Shoba!
The storyline is very interesting and logic behind the "Raaz" portrayed wonderfully. I can only say "Kash KS me aisa kuch hota" 😕 as Kreatives already killed their Kreation 😡 😡 . Thanks a lot for unfolding the so called "Raaz" 😆 😆

Edited by khushboo2006 on 20 June 2007 at 2:29pm

Khushboo:

Sweety, I am pretty sure that they are going to come up with something lame, so let's wait and see! 😉😉

Shoba darling,

Fantasic dear 👏👏👏and one can only hope that the Raaz is something like you have written, but after Jai kicking off Tarun from his good books , why protect him now over the Turkey Raaz, but with so much nonsense that the creatives have shown us in the name of Raazes the biggest one being Park Road Raaz, having Tarun as the culprit or even Ranivijay as the cuplprit would do for me.😃

Love

Krishna

p.s. Though AD as fifty....older then JW,....😆😆😆 ..nah not for me...but then hes one stylish guy.😉

Originally posted by: sonataca

Wow, that is a good reasonable raaz but I will tell you something. I haven't been an active user on this forum so I may say something stupid.
I had a question, did Bani marry AD?

She half married him!! 😆 Kuch rasam baki hai..😕

If so, then it would make Bani Pushkar's Mommy, right? 💔
(Scary thought )

Yew...it is a scary thought!! That's would be so funny if it wasn't scary.

If Pushkar was 8 when his real mommy was murdered then he should know who murdered his mom, right? If he knows that JW didn't do it then why would he join hands with his papa?
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there are couple of ways we could make this interesting.

Pushy thinks that his father committed the murder, and AD was thrown in jail even though he didn't commit the murder! Pushy was all alone so JW takes him. AD thinks that JW is the murderer and he framed him and took Pushkar away!!

Where is Tarun now?
God knows where he is, I think he is getting treatment somewhere and now he thinks he is in love with Dadi and he is obsessed about marrying her.😆

Originally posted by: kubare

Shoba darling,

Fantasic dear 👏👏👏and one can only hope that the Raaz is something like you have written, but after Jai kicking off Tarun from his good books , why protect him now over the Turkey Raaz, but with so much nonsense that the creatives have shown us in the name of Raazes the biggest one being Park Road Raaz, having Tarun as the culprit or even Ranivijay as the cuplprit would do for me.😃

Knowing JW, he may have kicked Tarun out from his wife's life, but he is still a friend and will remain so until death!

Love

Krishna

p.s. Though AD as fifty....older then JW,....😆😆😆 ..nah not for me...but then hes one stylish guy.😉

LOL, yeah - I was just laughing about that, then I thought of Sean Connery, he is 70 something and still sexy and stylish to boot, or Pierce Brosnan who is also 50.😉