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Posted: 11 years ago
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First time wrote an OS
Hope u like it 😊

The Wish
Ohh God!! Why did I say that! cried Rey
Flashback starts
Kriya-Rey aap mere liya kuch bhi kar sakte hain na?
Rey-Haan ..kyun koi shakh??
Kriya-To mein agar ek wish karoon to aap puri karoge?
Rey-Ofcourse meri jaan
Kriya-Tooo plz kya aap Simran ka ek din ke liye dhyan rakh sakte hain?
Rey-What..Noways??
Kriya-Dekh liya aapka pyar abhi bolte hoo kuch bhi kar sakte hoon aur abh itna chota kaam nahi kar sakte?
Rey-Achha baba rakhoonga Simran ka khayal..
Flashback Over
Simran was their 10 months old daughter..And Kriya had some urgent work soo she had to go out for 1 Day
It had been Afternoon and Kriya had left the house early in the morning..
Simran was continuosly crying..
Rey made weird faces,gave her favorite toys,swang her in his arms but still she did not stop crying..
Finally after loads of efforts Simran fell aslep..
Rey-Finally so gayi..ab jake kuch khata hoon..
Rey went to the kitchen and was finding something to eat.. All he could find was baby food
Rey-Ufff yeh Kriya Bhi naa kuch bhi nahi rakha ghar pe khane koo..
While finding food he by mistake dropped an utensil and it made a loud noisee
Cause of this Simran woke up and again started crying..
Rey-Not again...
He went to the room and picked Simran in his arms
Rey-So jaao babu plzz so jaaooo.. Dekho papa apse request kar rahe hain plzz so jao..
But Simran cried even loudly
Rey now laid Simran on the bed and began making weird faces..
Sometimes he would twist his mouth.. Put his tongue out or even change his hairstyle in such a way that he looked funny..
Now Rey sang for her with Simran in his arms but insted she hit him with her tiny legs
Rey tried many other things but she did not stop crying even for a secend.
Now Rey got a pic of Kriya and showed it to Simran
Rey-Simran dekho maa ... Doesent she look beutiful..ek dam aapki tarha hain na??
Seeing Kriyas face Simran immediately stoped crying..
Now insted she was playing with the pic and staring at Kriya..
Rey(mind talk)-Achha too yeh mere kehne see chup nahi hogi..Jaise mom ko dekhaya to dekho kaise chup ho gayi..Maa ke chamce
He said the last line a little loud..
Now Simran again began crying as if she felt bad when Rey said that..
Rey again tried everything he could and finally after all his hard work Simran went of too sleep ..Rey was soo tirrd that he to slept beside Simran..
Late night Kriya came back home and she saw both her sweethearts sleeping..She went and kissed both of them and she too went of to sleep..
The End
I know it was bakwaas but it was the first time I wrote an OS
Waiting for ur reviews


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sumimita thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#2
really nyc one...
awww bechara rey...

liked it...
Rajeshwari_KR thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#3
A very cute one...
Bechara Rey...
Loved it!
Keep writing more
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Posted: 11 years ago
#4
it was amazing...
maa ki chamchi... đŸ€Ł
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Posted: 11 years ago
#5
Wow it was so cute.
Hilarious as well.
Loved it.
Amazing OS
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Posted: 11 years ago
#6
soo cute...awww so sweet yr â€ïžđŸ˜‰ maa ko chamchi đŸ˜†đŸ‘đŸŒ
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Posted: 11 years ago
#7
love the story
specially that part where he tried different ways to made their daughter quiet
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Posted: 11 years ago
#8
Dat was one cyre OS.. My KR & deir Simran.. Luvd Papa Rey.. & how he tout of showin Kriya's foto to calm her down.. Dey r way too cute.. Vry cute OS.. Beautifully written 😊 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#9
Awesome os...

nd its wasn't bakwass...

loved it..
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Posted: 11 years ago
#10
Sweet os..
Aww my rey n his simran is si cute..
Loved it

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