Secretly Smitten#15 (Note @ Pg 67)

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Secretly Smitten... Thread 15



Story of small Maan and little Geet. They were innocent, they were kids, they did not know what they were doing, but their naive act became the most unexpected incident of their life in which they had to suffer for entire life..


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She is my Geet..


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Part 136 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67?pn=2

Part 137 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67?pn=11

Part 138 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67?pn=21

Part 139 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67?pn=27

Part 140 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67?pn=38

Part 141 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67

Part 142 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/4001593/secretly-smitten-15-note-pg-67







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Originally posted by: MonaSWrites

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I am really so much overwhelmed with all precious comments you all are giving me .. Thank you so much 😊




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Part 136


In midnight, Geet woken up hearing a strange noise. She looked around in dimmed darkness, everything was okay. She closed down eyes thinking it was her illusion. But again something sounded. A sound of hurt and pain. As if someone was groaning, or was it sound of anguish?" She sat up throwing blanket from body. She stood up. Suddenly she had become worried for Maan, like, he was in pain! She went to see him in attached room next door.

He was not in room. Now her tension frozen. She was sure, something was not right. "Where is he?" She questioned herself. Thin worry lines decorated her forehead. Barefooted she started going up to the terrace guessing the direction through increased sound. She walks in corridor. She pushed the door of a room where Maan used to do exercise and the sight, frightened her. Her eyes widen. "Maan!!" she hurried.

"Maan what's you doing? Leave it" She shouted. Geet tried to stop Maan hitting non-stop on the dangled punching-bag. He had become violent. His hand was bleeding and he was looking extremely exhausting. Every nerves inside his body had embossed up. Stress was burning his face and it had turned red. His body was covered in sweat-beads but it had no effect over his action. He even ignored her shout.

"Maan stop it please. You'll get hurt!"

"Go away!" Maan shouted.

"NO! I'll not. Stop it Maan please for God sake!"

"Geet go away. You'll get hurt" He increased the speed.

"Stop it Maan!!" Suddenly Geet grabbed the punching-bag and brought it near her face when Maan was about to hit it, she squeezed her eyes at once. His punch stopped an inch away from her face. For few seconds time felt paused. When Maan seemed like came back in sense, he moved his hand back. He turned pushing hairs back in strain. He felt like to scream. The pain was getting unbearable. He then turned around and pulled Geet in his arms and breathed hard, as if was trying to grab the air in lungs because, he was struggling to be alive.

Geet was utterly shocked. She was unknown with the reason of his this state but she had single aim to calm him down right now. She stroked his back. She felt was being crushing down between his arms. Her bones were as if paining due to pressure but she remained calmed. She waited till could feel him breathing normally. And when she felt so, she asked slowly, "What happened Maan?"

"Let me stay the same Geet. Please don't ask. I want to feel you only, nothing else. Please" he demanded. Geet was getting more anxious but she had to wait. She felt his lips were caressing over her neck-side and shoulder. She felt her Dupatta had been dropped on floor a long time before, and yet, his pressure hadn't been lessened down a bit. Geet now couldn't wait. She had to know why he was behaving weirdly.

"Maan please tell me what happened? My heart is beating ver fast, please"

"I said you to stay silent Geet, why don't you listen me?!!" Maan shouted pushing her back that made Geet jumped off. She clutched her heart. It was losing control over beats.

"I'm sorry" He realised. He cupped her face like helpless. His eyes were heavy. He wanted to cry and pour every burden through tears. When he found a shoulder to rest upon, he hugged her tighter and cried out. Geet was speechless. She had forgotten words to utter out. She cuddled him closer. When she felt Maan was getting little better, she sat down on floor still bounding him in hug.

Maan moved back. He was feeling better. He studied her eyes, which was still waiting for his reply. "I'd went to talk to Grandpa" he started. "Geet I'm sorry. I couldn't keep you safe. He wants to snatch you also, as he did with my Papa. He will take you away from me Angel. Please don't go away. I'll rather die Geet if something happens you. Please, promise me. Please do promise you'll not leave me. Do promise Angel" He brought her hand over his head. He was getting impatient. She nodded. She said she will be there with him, forever. She wanted to know entire matter. She cupped his face asking again, to what happened in yash room. Slowly Maan told her entire matter.

Geet was surprised. She wondered for word to console him.

"Maan, everything is fine" She smiled. She wiped his eyes dearly. "And you know what, your angel will never leave you. I promise"

"Really?" his eyes shone.

"Hm" Geet took him in arms. She caressed his hairs to warm him up. "I love you Maan" she whispered. Her three words brought smile on his lips. He cuddled nearer. He felt her warm body against his sweated one. The feel comforted his soul through heart. "Let's come with me. Take some sleep, you need it" She stood up. Maan followed her like an obedient child. She brought him in his room and made him lay on bed. He closed eyes when she tried to stand up but Maan didn't leave her hand. "I need to keep you near my heart"

Smiling she came and laid next to him. Maan took her in arms and slept in next minute due to exhaustion.

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After two hours, Geet was awaken. She moved eyes up to Maan, he was in deep sleep. She prayed for his peace of heart. Slowly, she removed his hand and stood up. Now her mind turned worried for Yash. She wanted to check on him if he was okay? If Maan was in this state after knowing one truth, what would be his condition finding the biggest truth of his life?

Taking silent steps she walked toward his room. Door was closed. "Perhaps, he is sleeping" she thought and decided to leave but don't know why, her heart was stopping her to leave. She wanted to be sure of his wellbeing. Taking another chance she decided to have only a single glimpse of him and then will leave. She moved door little back. It was unlocked. She peeped inside. It was pretty dark there. She could see nothing. She thought to go back.

"You don't need to peep like a thief. You can come inside"

She heard his voice before leaving. It was a surprise for her and she walked in. "Actually Dadaji, um.. I just wanted to see."

"That if I'm as week as Maan? If I'm mourning over my son's death or not? Or you wanted to show your console upon my grief, that's why you came Geet?"

"No it's not.." Then suddenly she noticed, he called her by her name! For the first time! Even though it was again a taunt wrapped in his coughed voice, yet he called her by her "name", that gladden her.

"I'm sorry to say, I couldn't please you" Yash had mock in taunt.

"Why you always take me wrong Dadaji. I just wanted to check if you're fine?"

"I'm not Maan, who will seek for a shoulder, to show up my weakness" he said with proud.

His words targeted Geet harshly. She couldn't hear a word against Maan. "Opening up before your own one is not a sign of weakness Dadaji. I'm sorry, but you could never understand value of a relation. Neither with your son, nor could understand Maan. If you would, your son could've been alive, today!"

"Geet.." Yash throbbed. Geet clutched her mouth realizing what she said! But words couldn't be taken back. "I'm sorry, I didn't mean .."

"Go away from here!"

She was in guilt. She knew, should've been cared before taking words out of mouth but whatever happened, she couldn't change it. She thought to leave.

"I lost my son, it was not my fault. It was my destiny. But what you did Geet, I'll never forgive you for this"

Her step paused on way hearing his murmur. She was heartbroken. She knew, what he targeting about, that she snatched Maan from him? Tears wanted to roll down from her already wet eyes, but she controlled. "I'm sorry dadaji, I know I shouldn't have answered you back. I'm very small before you. But being a part of this family, I think I have right to do correction what is not fine" She turned and faced him with extreme confidence. As if she'd gotten a chance to fulfil her goal. Surprised yash with her confidence was about to open his mouth when Geet didn't give him chance. "It's not me who taken your Maan away from you Dadaji, but it's you yourself you never tried to bring him closer"

Yash eyes was becoming griever but Geet didn't feared. "He came to me when he was young, you'd his entire childhood, still you could not win his heart and you know why Dadaji? Because you never knocked the door of his heart. You always anticipated to hug him but you never spread your arms for him. You always wished the first step should be taken from his side, to walk toward you, but you never showed him path of your existence. You presented your one side which was a matchless business man but you forgotten to show him that before a businessman, you're his grandfather. You dealt with him even in his life decision but you never ordered him by authority. Dadaji, you said him weak that he needs a shoulder always to show his sorrow? Then why, I can see crave in your eyes, why I'm feeling a wish resounding in your heart that that shoulder should've been only yours?"

Geet walked nearer. She noticed his hard gesture turning melted. Her hope increased. "Dadaji please, I know you love him and he needs you. Maan needs you. He had been yearned for father love. You're only one who can take this place. Please give him father back in form of you Dadaji. Please listen the wish of your heart. I beg you, please" She was looking him for response. Her heart was thumping in extreme. She read his eyes. They were not much harsher as they were before, still they were unpredictable. "Please say something Dadaji. Will you forgive me?".

Even after many minuets when she didn't hear anything from him, she left the room down heartened.

Precap : Didnt think yet 😛😆


I have started a new FF. Please give a look on this one also 😊


https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/geet-hui-sabse-parayee/3998839/new-ff-silken-shadow-1-new-thread-link-pg-141




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Edited by MonaSWrites - 11 years ago
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awesome...
man is so hurt...
geet taking care of him...
she went to talk with dadaji...
hope now dadaji will listen to his heart now...
Edited by goldenmoon - 11 years ago
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congrats for new thread mona..

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