OS - Paayar ka Dard Ushe bi hai

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Hi all,

Iam trying this for the first time. Let me know your feedback

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Part 2 - Page 2
Raman was confronting Ishita for letting the family believe that she might be pregnant. He is in full wrath and scolding her in his style

Raman: Kithe juti ho tum. Us Din school me pyar ka story sunaya. Aaj tum to janthe ho ham done saath sonna kya eyak dusre ka mu be nehi dekna chahathey, Pur when the doctor told you kept quiet

Ishu: Raman mahi kaise bhool sakthi hu, Ruhi be thee vaha pee

Raman: Kya her cheej me Ruhi Ruhi Ruhi laga rakha hai. Mereko batavo tum har samay kya merko parnasha karne ki planning karthi ho. Pahale \kal mane jab bola hai hi may ambulance leke aa raha hu, tum ku chali gaye. Faltu me muje tension hua. Aur aaj yhe bakeda. Bewakuf din bar bus pareshan karne ki ideas athey hai isko.

Here comes the twist, she is going to cry her heart out to him

Ishu: Bus bhoot ho gaya. Muje aapko pareshan karne me koi intrest nehe hai. AAp kabhi kise aur ke feeling somjthey hai hai. From yesterday again and again people have been talking about my barren status. Did you at least think what would I go through

What were you telling me, you were tensed due to the riots, from when did you start to bother about me. Appke liye mai gayab ho javu to hi achha hai na.You just need a reason to shout at me.

Bar bar agar kai tumhe tumhare kami mehasush karaya uska dard tum kahah samjoge. You are a disgusting person. 15 sal ke umar see may subbu se pyar karthe the , patha kai usne muje ku choda- mere isse kumi ke vaje see. Agar muse Bchaa ho sakta tha tao me ushe se shadhi kar lethe na. Mujee first of all kitna shock hua hoga - do you realize. Tumhe kai lagtha hai life me tume he dil ke cote pohunche hai, tume se be badi gaav hai mere. Liken me kabhi usko mere vartaman me ane nehi dethe. Tumhare tara sharab me magn hoo ke boohne ki koshish nhe karthe. Tumhare tharah uss darad ko dusro par nahe nekal the hu.

Tum sabi ke saath yehi karthey ho. Mihir ne kal dange me jakar Mihika ho laya - tumhe tab be samjme nehi atha ki Mihir ka dir Mihika ke liye hi dhadaktha hai. Upar see trisha kobo joot bhola. Mihir tumara Bat nehe tal saktha uskeliya tum tumhe jo pyar me kaduvahat mili hai uss pe toop rahi ho.

Ek aurat kai liya Maa nahe ban pana kitha dukk deta hai usska adaj be tumhe nehe ho sakta , Aur upar see uske vasah see uske childhood boyfriend ka ushe chod dena kitna duk dayak hai patha hai tumhe. Tum nehe samjoge , kunki tumhare dil me abhi pyaar he nehe raha. You are disgusting chee.

She wipes her tears and goes out of the room.

The Pervert Parmeet is hiding and listening to all this. Wah ye to sone pe suhaga. Saale Sahab kitne useless hai - istne sundar Bibi ko chute tak nehi. Fur too mere liye bohot acha hai. Chalo beta Parmeet enjay.

Raman is dumb struck. He has not seen this roop of his janshe ki rani. He never realized that she had so much pain inside her , he felt bad for having ranted at her for no fault of her. He was really ashamed of himself and again recollected all that she has done for him and his family in spite of all her pains. Vake me ye Jansi ke rani he hai. Iam sorry ishita, I hurt you But muu pee nahi bolunga - chad jayage Sar pee. But why did I feel bad yesterday when I thought she was burnt with her car ... he starts thinking. Che Raman beta aysa kuch nehi hai Pyar vo bi us Janshi ki Rani see impossible.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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58 views and only one like? Not fair..brilliantly written do.continue ..
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Hey nice Os..
Do write more...
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wanna see Fight raman n Parmeet good attempt i like it
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nicely written dear...

well done...👍🏼

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do continue writing such os .. nice
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Part 2:

Raman is in office he is thinking of Ishitha's words continuously. Glimpse of their conversations and his misbehaviors towards her was repeatedly running in his mind,

Vase bhi muje ushko kuch gift dena tha- bid ke liya. Ruhi ka idea he accha hai. Thank you sorry muu pe nahi bolunga

Kuch gift de dunga - ek me hi sorry thank you done ho jayega.

Kya gift doo is Janshi ki Rani koo. Talwar diya to agli bar Talwar ke saat ladaye karege pagal aurath

Che Raman understand es bar tumne bhoot galath kiya. You were wrong. Wo pahale se dukhe the aur tumne aur duke kar diya.

Kya gift doo. ...

Mihir comes in , Raman yeh Mr Sharma ke file me tumhare signatures chahiye the.

Raman - Chup be edar aana byto

Mihir - Kya hua Raman

Raman - Kaal us curfew ke time tushe Mihika ke office janne ki Jaruurat kai thee. Kyuo gaya tha. Jab tu jar aha tha there shak see he patha chaal gaya tha ke tu muje joot bol raha hai. Kyee gaya tha

Mihir - Raman Bhai wooo mai wooo

Raman - Kya woo mai wooo kya gunga ho gaya ha kya?

Mihir - Jab mane Trisha ke bareme puchne ke liye call kiya tab muje pata chala ki Mihika Ghar me nehe hai. Woo be to hamare Ghar ki member hai, Bhabi ki Bhan hai isliya muje bura laga and I went

Raman - Trisha ko call us ke safety puchne kiya ya Mihika ke bare me puchne ke liya kiya sach bol.

Mihir - Raman , mai mai

Raman - Kya mai mai Bakri kaya kya Nasthe me ?

Mihir - Hain Mihika ke bare me puchne ke liya he call kiya. Kal thera dil Bhibhi ki liye kaise dhadak raha tha vasi hi mera bhi dhil dhadak raha tha

Raman - Oh Shut up kya Dil Kya Dhadkan. Kithne bar kahun there ko ye pyar wali shadi kise kam ke nahi

Mihir - Raman mere Bhai tuee be Dil see ye bat manthan hai ki pyar sab kuch hotha hai. Tu apnea upar Eak Partha dalke jeetha hai. Tuue Ishitha bhabi see bhot pyar kartha hai, I have seen the concern you have for her in your eyes. I have seen the love when both of you are together. Laken tu apna ego nehi chodega. There pehali shadhi ke vajah see tu Bhabhi ko vo dard de raha hai jo Shagun ne tumhe diya.

Mere sare decisions ab tak tumhne liya haio, age be tumhe logo. Agar tum chathe ho ki meri shadhi Trisha see ho, fur ushe se hoga, Pur yeh sach koiye nehi badal satha ki Mai Mihika se pyar kartha huan. File tu deekle, mai jar aha hun bad me aake le lunga

Raman - oh Mihir sun na

He was shell shocked once again he was shown a mirror to himself by two people on the same day. That to Mihir who never ever speaks anything back usne bhi bola, aur who eha kai bol raha tha concern , love in my eyes for Ishitha . Eha sab kya hai yar.

His phone rings and he gets into a business discussion and forgets it.

Its evening

Are yeh Jansi ki Rani ka gift too decide he nehe kiya? Kya karu. He thinks tell eh hi sahi rahega - he calls someone.

Hello Mr Tandon

Are Raman Bolo yar kaisa hai

Mr Tandon aap see ek bohot important baat bolna tha.

Bhol na yar

Wow Mihir he ek girl frind hai , Mihika . Mereko laga ki baat kuch jayada nehi. Liken mujhe abhi pata chala ke wow use boohut pyar kartha hai. Mai Trishsa aur mihir done ki jindagi karab nehi karna chahatha hau. That's why I told you the truth.

Kya .. but its ok, tumne deer rahthe hum ko bol diya. Mai trisha ko samja dunga. Trisha to Mihika ke saath he rahathe hai na,. Bol rahi the ki both ache friend hai. Fir man jayege. Don't worry.

Mr Tandon iam very sorry for all the confusion.

No problem, liken kai Mihir jaisa achha lakdka tujhe he dunda hoga

They have a laugh and hang up.

Raman feels this will be sufficient for making the Jansi ki Rani happy. Par gift kya looo. Right then Ruhi calls him.

Papa

Bolo beta

Ishi ma ne fur see apna kapada suitcase me rak liya. Aapne bola than a shelf me rakne kai liye. Patha nehe subha see bar bar Ishi ma ro rahi hai. Muje dek kar ters wipe hark e husne ka natak kar rahi hai. Apka au rishi ma ka hai jagada hua kiya. He remembers having taken out all her cloths thrown them down feels ashamed, he feels his 6 year old daughter can understand her feeling and not him.

Papa sun rahe hai naaa

Hain beta. Voo Ishi ma ko jaga kam padraha hoga isliye. Tears roll down his eyes as he was speaking to Ruhi. Mai kuch etajam kartha hai. Ishi ma se ake bat karunga , he said that and hung his call up.

Suddenly he realized that tears were rolling down his eyes. He felt so disgusted about himself for all his past behaviors with her. More than that he remembers the morning incident and how did he hurt her. Her sobbing face. After all that Mihir's words about he giving Ishitha the pain that Shagun gave him. He was slowly becoming the old human form of Raman he realized. Thanks to ishitha he thought. Ishitha mai tum se pyar kartha hun ya nehi eha ne jantha liken absee tumhara best friend banunga. He wipes his eyes.

Checks something in the internet and calls up a store and enquires about something. Looks like he has ordered something and they said they will deliver it in 1 hr.

He is back home. Ruhi comes and hugs him. He asks her how her day was and asks where sher ishi ma is. She tells him the same thing she told him over phone and he assures her that he will make her ishi ma smile.

He comes into the room calling Ishitha

Ishitha: She is mum, not answering standing next to the window of the bedroom

Raman - in his usual style bhere ho gai hio ya, bula raha hu na

Ishitha: Bolo kya kam hai, ab bhi kuch bolna baki hai hai

someone comes and delivers something. Ruhi calls her father and Raman asks the guy to place it in his bed room. He asks the guy to leave

Raman - Woow - mai isshe ke liye tumhe bulaya. Yeh tumhara gift hai.

Ishitha: Gift , aap mere liya . Kyu

Raman - Wow girls ko gift pasand hai Ruhi ne kaha

Ishitha : She laughed at once , Thank you ya Sorry kya bolna hai apko

Raman - Dono. Gift check nehi karogi

Ishitha : Iss bar kya hai surgical equipment hai kya

Raman - Kolo to sahi

Ishitha: She opens it - it's a new wardrobe. She is surprised

Raman - Wow mane tumhare Kapade fur see cupboard se nikala na ,u have them in this. Then both will have enough space.

Ishitha : Smiles and thanks him

Raman - Aur ek bath. Tum yak perfect Ma ho ruhi ke liye. Baccha pida karne se kai ma nehe ban jatha. tumme koi kami nehe hai. Ruhi tumhare Beti hai. You are the best mom in this world.

Ishita - she is astonished by his words. Raman told these words she could not realize.
Raman - tumhare liye aur ek surprise be hai.

Ishitha : bolo

Raman - Der se hi sai liken muje patha cha gaya ki Mihir Mihika ke sath he kush raha saktha hai

Ishitha : She is pleasantly surprised. eha bat App bol rahe hai

Raman- Hai ishe liye main ek decision liya hai. Mihir ka engagement Mihika se he hoga. This Sunday . He briefs her about his conversation with tandon.

Ishitha is in cloud nine. She could feel that Raman is person filled with lot of love at that point in time. She was so amazed. She forgot her Pregnecy isse etc and was very delighted. In the excitement she simply hugged him and said thanking for respecting Mihika and Mihir's feeling

Raman was shaken - this was not a first hug but the feeling he was experiencing was much different from what it was before. Same was with Ishitha when she realized that she is hugging him and suddenly descended. She said woow maine Jan bujke nehi kiya sorry.

Raman - Vase tumhe distance chatiti na ab kyya hua but internally feels she would have hugged me for few more seconds. I would have hugged her back.

Ishitha Sorry bola na baba

Rama - Tik hai, likebn this engagement Mihir aur mihika ke liya surprise hai. Don't tell them. I need ur complete help in all this. get ready lets go and speak to your appa and amma. I will ask Mummy and ppa also to get ready.

Raman walks out of the room -janski ki Rani kitne pretty lag rahe the jab hasthe hai. Liken Hasthe kaha hai. Hamesha ladti hai. he feel why did I feel that when she hugged me - kiya mai uss se pyar karne laga hun yeh kya ajjeb natak hai yar.

Ishita is full happy for Mihika - she suddenly realized the love in Raman. Yeh Ravan Kumar ke adhar such me ek raman kumar be hai. Wow. Pur why did I feel something different when I hugged him. Iam I in love with her. Silly Ishitha tum aur us ravan Kumar see pyar??? Liken ye too raman Kumar ban gaya hai. Ethan sweet to mane ise kabi nehi deka shyad mai is Raman kumar see pyar karne lagui hum.

The spark was on. Both started to get that ehsas..

Remaining coming soon

Edited by NithyaLaks - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Really really good! Show mein nahi toh SS mein his sahi, sparks toh ude! :P
Continue soon :)
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wow...awesome...os...i have not even read before...just realising it is real...😛


but there were sooo...many confusions in reading the speling and understanding them...!!


plz improve it in next os...!!👏
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jst read two parts...they were lovely..plz continue soon

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