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Posted: 11 years ago
#21
Just how much I missed RaHi, I realise right now Mais.
You know I wouldn't have much to say. You know how good you are. Continue with this.
Regards and Love
Nidha
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Posted: 11 years ago
#22

3. This New Place

Imperial College of Communications.

It was a dream she had been harboring for months. It only took her a few days to start wishing she had never come here. Despite all her personal pep talks, she was still a base coward inside.

'Meri Fattu Moti!'

That's what he used to call her a lot in Royal. Nowadays he hardly called her 'Moti'. Just a few days in this new place and they had gotten so distant. They hardly met and whenever they did, all she saw was him surrounded in darkness. The one he had gotten rid of after years of struggle. It was back much more stronger than before.

She saw him surrounded by his new friends, Kiya by his side mostly if not all the time. Just a few days in and they had gotten so popular in this new place. Hanging out with the rich and influential with such ease as if they belonged there. She knew that he did belong there. But still, it felt a little strange. He had just gotten so distant from her.

New friends. Old enemies. New strategies. Old agendas. He was so caught up in this blend of new and old that she felt like she no longer belonged there with him. She did tell herself in the middle of the night before drifting off to sleep that it was all for the good. This was a new life for her and a great chance to carve a path of herself which was detached from him.

And if she was completely honest with herself, from them. The family which was formed in Royal and broken so royally on the last day of that life. She had gone to every one of them, individually and begged them all to understand. But all it did was drain her off and exhaust her emotionally. Everyone welcomed her, no one listened to her. All of them had made their own version of the story, their minds so occupied of how they thought the others to be that they had completely turned a blind eye to what they actually were. And after a while, she had turned a blind eye to them as well.

'To each their own.' Yeah, that was right. It wasn't her obligatory duty to make them all stick together. And if Jaitley thought that she would do that all the time, all her life; well then, even Junglee could be wrong.

As for him, well he did try to maintain his equation with her like it was in Royal. With him always finding time and ways to make sure she was a part of the everything that he did. But it had proved to be a very hard task for him. The change in their schedule owing to them being pursuing different majors was just a small part of the reason.

The vacant look in her eyes that he had seen in the car hadn't completely left him. he thought that giving her a little space would make things alright between them but that little space had stretched into a void. They hardly had any conversations now, only saw each other once or twice a day for some fleeting moments and whenever they did see each other, he saw her chatting away with her new friends about God knew what. At times he got a little pissed off at her for not coming over like she always did and asking him what was up with him. He could really use her help. Didn't she know how much he needed her? He was finally growing up, finally becoming a man which she always pushed him to be and yet, she wasn't there to witness it.

This new place, Imperial College of Communication, was giving him a chance to be the man he could never be in Royal. All the times he could've come out victorious but he never did, this place and the people here were giving him a chance to redo them. He could be the winner she always said he had the potential to be. She should be with him. Everyone who supported him, his new friends, all of them were great but none of them were her. He had gotten close to Kiya since the dreaded Alpha Plus but again, she wasn't his Moti.

Sometimes though, the times when it was really late at night and he was just seconds away from falling asleep, he wondered if Panchi was even his Moti anymore. Was this new place, which was turning out to be great for him on so many levels in such a short amount of time, turning him into someone who easily live and survive without his best friend?

And lastly, why didn't this thing bother him much?
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Posted: 11 years ago
#23


Note about the story.

I figured that I should do this. As you have seen in these three chapters, the style isn't very clear. I am taking out some canon moments from S2 and adding my own spin to them. Basically, I will try and do balance to the POV of both Ranveer and Panchi equally. I know the style of the FF isn't very conventionally FF-ish but I am sticking with my own style of story telling. Chapter 3 wasn't very high on RaHi moments because I am only setting up the story here. The characters have to be established before I can take them and make them grow up.

As much as I loved the canonical growth of Ranveer and Panchi in S2, there were some things which I didn't approve of. Them being all happy and normal after anything major happening to them being the top of the list. In my head, Panchi's accident in S1 had much bigger impact of their relationship than what was shown in the show. And that accident plays a major part in their relationship in this story. It was hinted in Chapter 2 but I am still saying it here for clearance sake - Panchi and Ranveer didn't get over the accident. It put a big strain on their relationship, one which hasn't healed yet. They tried covering it up by new smiles and making new memories. They tried to conveniently forget that the accident ever happened but it crops up every now and then. And it will come up again.

Second, the lousy way RaHi got together. Oh yes, it was beautiful but it was lousy. It was such a last moment thing that the build up didn't satisfy them coming together. Here, everything leads to them being together. So yeah, Rukmini, Avi and Omi will happen. Not in detail but they will. Only they will be just a small part of a much bigger story.

Third, the lack of angst. I always wanted RaHi to have an angsty track, never got one which satisfied me. So, I am making this whole story angsty. I don't think it will have the adorable RaHi cuteness we all have gotten used to seeing. That was the RA ka RaHi. ICC ka RaHi is growing up from a boy and girl to a man and woman. So their relationship is going to have loads of drama and angst. Rest assured, the pure soul mates kind of moments will be there. Just not now. The story is still new and the premise is just being set. We will get there when we get there.

Lastly, I don't know how long this will be. Just that I know it will be finished. I am not very good at draggy chapters so mostly I will keep the chapters short, usually just covering one incident at a time. I will try to update this FF regularly without giving in much break in between. Short but regular chapters which are non-fillery, I doubt anyone would complain.

And I know I haven't replied to any comment on this thread yet. I will get to that them as well. Kindly do like and comment here, it will boost me up.

Before I go, if you have any questions regarding the backdrop or the possible future of this story, please do ask. If there is anything that you don't understand or are anxious to find out, say it all here on this thread. Any suggestion you have for RaHi, anything you wished happened but didn't, you can all say it here and I will try my best to fit it all in this story. No promises though. Buf if the idea is good and different, I would love to envision my RaHi on them via this fic.

Love,
Mais.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#24
wonderful updates Maisy...!! hw much i missed ur writing...so glad tht u r back..!!

nywz as u asked for suggestions,may i req NOT to put 3rd angle?y is it necessary tht there must be a 3rd angle for hero-heroine to realize their love?show mein v had enough panchi-avi n rv-rukmini..so can it be fully avoided here? i HATED how the confession ws shown happenin to Rukmini's mahanta in the show..!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#25
The update was super awesome!
I loved it!
Uh write extremely well!
Uh are a fab writer!
Keep writing
Update soon!
Tina

P.S. - I don't have any problem with ur writing style nor do I have any suggestions! Uh urself write beautifully!
I am able to understand everything!
It's pretty easy !
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Maisy, don't you dare leave this unfinished!

And I have nothing much to request from you right now, I know you will do more than enough justice to everything that is to rahi's equation. So far, I'm loving it!

Thank you for giving me this rahi that never came to be in the show! I will be waiting for more updates!
Edited by coolpixie - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#27
Yet another brilliant update by u Maisy
just loved it
you portrayed Panchi's and RV's feelings so beautifully
I am so eager to read more
so plz do continue soon
Take care

Geet
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Posted: 11 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: sweetdesire

Hey Maisy
Thanks a lot dear for writing this
its like a water drop in desert for RaHians
can't wait to read more
plz continue soon
Take care

Geet



I hope I can do justice to it. Wanting to rewrite RaHi's story has been on my mind for so long, I finally gathered the courage to get it all done. Hopefully it will turn out to be good enough for us all.

Originally posted by: Nikki_Titli

omfggg is tht u Maisy???????😲😲😲😲...MIRACLE..!!

i'm SUPER HAPPYYY to see u REWRITE for RaHi after long long time..🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳...

first update ws awesome...!!! waitin to read next chap..!!

thnx yaar for this..🤗🤗🤗🤗




Yups Nikks! It's me 😆 I figured if this is gonna be my last work of TBP as we know it, why not go out with a bang? 😛 Thank you for the support! <3

Originally posted by: Sarah_Angel9

Thanks 4 rewriting our RaHi story<3 Loved it, really very excited for this ff..pls do continue till the end..:)



In Sha Allah, I will finish this story as fast as I can manage! Thanks for the support! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: priya1101

First of all,Thankyou so much for writing this dear.
I loved the first part.
Will be eagerly waiting for next part.

Priya.



No, thank YOU for the support and being excited for this! That does boost me up! 😳

Originally posted by: shammukh

thank god .

seems like light at the end of the tunnel.
plz do continue.
we rahians are in pathetic state of mind.

lopa



Aaahhh..so many expectations from this! Hope I can deliver! Thanks for the support! <3 And RaHians have been in a pathetic state more often than not..ab tou aadat hogayi hai 😆


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sneha02

Mais... thanks so much for this...


Loved your thought behind writing this ff. Rahi are indeed way too special to deserve this raw a deal that they have got... n such s the state of affairs at the moment that for me the show is already over but can never get over this magic couple called RAHI..

Make a wish looks like a very good start to the season...n loved the way Ranveer thinks of not repeating his past mistakes... the nonu moti duo looks rock solid n so there for each other n me loves them like that...

Hoping to read more soon.. thanks once more for this...

Neha



Thanks for liking the idea and thought behind it. I always wanted to write my take on RaHi with all the touches of the things I wanted them to explore. Sadly the show didn't always deliver their potential. Hopefully this will. I am not saying this will be better than the show or the best thing that happened to RaHi fandom..just my humble little attempt to tell a story RaHi always had the potential to tell.

As for rock solidness..eehh..well, hope you won't hate me for the angst that's in store 😆

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