Akdha ss atonement updated ch 1.page 2

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Hey guys.this is another story coming from my side.by no means I am saying that I am not going to write more chapters for the first one.i just had an idea in my mind and so here I am.this one is not going to be very big.a short one is what I intend on writing.i am writing the prologue right now.i will begin it from tomorrow.sorry if you find it too boring and sad but do tell me what you think.
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PROLOGUE
To love someone is more difficult than to hate someone.it overwhelms you,satiates you,transforms you but at the end leaves you vulnerable.the scars it leaves can never be healed by any amount of time.

'I am dying ,ain't I'she said with great effort.

She breathed heavily,beads of sweat forming on her forehead.

He did not look at her.he did not have the strength to see her that way.although she was in pain:he felt it more than her.

A tear wept down his eye.he feigned a laugh and said"it is just some normal problem"

He was trying to convince himself.he knew that there was nothing that could be done but he still could not give up.

"You did everything for me"she said .realising what he was going through.her condition was going worse

She could not let him be that way .she loved him immensely

"I do not want to loose you"he said painfully.

"You wouldn't have to"she assured him

"You are lying "he said unable to control his tears.

"Look at me please".her voice was dwindling .

"I won't"he said in a teary voice.

She pushed herself up with great strength and held his hand.her touch caused a tingle in his body.he could not refrain from looking at her.

He turned around and looked into her swollen red eyes.how miserable she looked.frail and weak.she had lost quite a lot of weight and her lips had turned purple.her collar bones were quite evident and her clothes gathered in loose folds around her body.

He did not wait any longer and kissed her lips,not wanting to let go.she smiled like someone who had attained everything she desired and said"I love you"

"I love you" he replied .

He did not hear her heartbeat,thereafter .



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nice start 👍🏼
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Chapter one-the war
Part 1

The time before a war is the most crucial one.it brings immense pain to even think of loosing everything ,that you possess,to someone else.it not only leaves you devoid of all the material things you acquired over the years,but also snatches away your loved ones from you.


It was a stressful day in Amer.the usual chipper mood had been dissolved in great tension.

Raja Bharmal proceeded towards the court to attend an important session pertaining to the new obstacle that threatened his kingdom.

"Is there nothing else that can be done?"he asked in utter disappointment

"Not that we know of.the paigam was not even looked at.it was torn in front of me and then devoured by the fire"

"Why is he doing so?"he asked,confused

"Raja-sa power is a great poison.it can pollute your mind.when one craves it,everything else becomes insignificant"

"What about the others?what is their opinion on the issue?"he said.

He still believed that there was a tiny bit of hope left.maybe there was something that could prevent them from switching to the last resort.

"They do not want to get involved.they want you to forget about what happened."

Raja Bharmal's anger rose.

"How can they say so in spite of being Rajvanshis.i did not expect this."

"Raja-sa you do not have any other option.there is no sense in waiting any longer."

"If that is what it is,then I guess we will have to do this.make all the necessary arrangements and be prepared.

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Awesome update
Plz plz plz continue soon

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awesome👏
plz update soon😃
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The prologue was poignant. Ch.1. was interesting but too short. Cont plz !
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Chapter 1-part 2



"Shehanshah please forgive me.i did not do it deliberately.hard times have prevailed upon me and I have nothing to give you.please exempt me from paying the tax this time"the poor man kneeled down in front of the heartless emperor and begged him for mercy.

"I am no god or saint to forgive you.i am a king and my responsibility is to run my kingdom.how do you expect a king to behave in such a scenario?exempting you from paying the tax would mar my image.after all ,I am not permitted to be biased.excusing you today would encourage others to come forth with such pleas and I cannot afford that.i do not care from where you get the money and what you have to do in order to get it.all I care for is that you owe me my tax."he barked at the poor lad

"Shehanshah please understand me.i can barely make the ends meet.my family is starving.i do not have money to buy food or any other commodity for them.i have reached an abyss in my life.please help me"he joined his hands in front of the ruthless brute.

"I have heard enough from you.if you think that your sad picture will melt me down,then,let me tell you that it won't happen.all I can do for you is to give you a weeks time.if by the end of next week you pay your rent,good enough otherwise be prepared to empty your land."he said in a firm tone

"But shehanshah"

Jalal was no longer interested in listening to the man's miserable life.his decision was constant.he stood up from his seat and made a move saying" diwaan-e-aam barkhast"

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Jodha was sitting under the perennial shadow of a palm tree,with a piece of parchment in one hand,and a piece of charcoal in another.

Completely engrossed in sketching out a pigeon sitting on the far-end of a branch of the tree,she did not notice the effect of the breeze on her hair.

Her hair,which had been initially ,tied into a braid and slicked to one side of her head,had come undone,giving her a dishevelled appearance.

But she could not careless.this was what she loved.this was her life.carving out emotions on paper was her love.a desire to draw,a desire to live in her drawings was what she wanted.it was so close to her heart.her eyes were as sharp as that of an eagle when it came to her drawing.she never missed the slightest of details when she ran her charcoal over the paper.it was her passion.her drug and the only source of meaning to her life.

Born as the only daughter of raja Bharmal and rani mainavati,jodha grew up in the quintessential environment.to say that she was pampered would be an understatement.her life was devoid of nothing.whatever she wanted would be right in front of her even before she could ask for it.she was the life of everyone in the kingdom.she had never been treated like a girl,apart from the girly gifts she was showered with every now and then.never refused for anything,jodha,had no idea of the ugly lives people led.her eyes shimmered with a sense of pride,a sense of royalty and a sense of elitism.but all this was often mistaken as her arrogance.she was not at all arrogant.absolutely pure at heart and extremely affectionate towards all fellow beings,jodha was simply unaware of the reality.she was as soft as a flower,as fragile as a butterfly.

Jodha smiled looking at finished piece in front of her eyes.a sense of satisfaction glinted through her almond shaped eyes,making them look almost unreal.

She stood up from under the tree and made way towards her room.
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"Why do you look so worried?what happened in the court?"rani mainavati asked her husband with a worried expression.

"Mainavati I am afraid to say that we must brace ourselves for a war"he said disappointedly

"But you said that the war can be avoided"she said frantically

"I thought so but they are unwilling to mend their ways.the abductions have been on an increase.it cannot be ignored now"he said in a disheartened to be

"How can he do so in spite of being a rajvanshi?'she said ,absolutely disgusted

"Power and pleasure have driven him crazy.he has no morals it seems."he replied

"Will our army be able to fight him?"she asked him with uncertainty

"We have to try.we can't give up.i have to protect my kingdom"he's suddenly firmly
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Jodha walked to her room with the sketch in her hand.she moved towards a box kept in one corner of the room and opened it up.


She dextrously put the paper inside the box without spoiling the rest of them and shut it close .she kept the box back in its place and walked towards kanha jis murti.
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The entire amer was informed about the war against raja harindr,the indocile rajvanshi,who had been abducting women for his sinful pleasures.



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Lovely start. Prologue was so emotional . Continue soon dear
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nice one👍🏼
really liked it😊
so some another raja is abductiong woman... i guess bharmal might fight him nd somehow mughals get involved in d process🤔
hope jalal nd jo meet soon😳...
thanks 4 d pm nd do update d next part soonish😳😉


PS- when will u update ur other story (ff hatred vs love)😕... i m eagerly waiting 4 it😭😊plzzz update dat story asap too😉
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Chapter 2-the daunting past

The moon glowed in its full glory lighting the entire palace up.its marble walls shined through the night like diamonds embedded on a princes crown .a sight to behold!it was so queer the way the palace looked,he thought.the epicentre of bloodshed,conspiracy,murders and war had melted away into this ethereal beauty,pailed into insignificance by this holy light.

He walked towards the courtyard away from the usual hustle and bustle of the harem.as he walked past the harem,several women gave him inviting looks,desperate to spend time with him,competing against each other to be the special one.they all knew how much he loved it.it was a regular for him.everynight he would spend time with a new girl,satiating his desires and then forgetting about it the very next morning.it did not matter to him how he treated women.

He reached the end of the gallery and entered the vacant courtyard,making way towards the farthest corner.by the time he reached there,it grew pitch dark as the moon hid behind the clouds.he laughed a shallow laugh thinking the heavens to be mocking him ,for, the dark sky resembled his empty life,a life which was no longer directed by any feeling but a thirst to rule the world,to control every mortal being,to be invincible.it was strange,the delight he received to see one in pain,to be at the giving end and to have everyone at his beck and call.he wondered if he was always like this.
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Jodha walked towards the armour room ,completely tensed.it was the prospect of fighting that stiffened her.although she was aware of the unavoidable wars and their inevitable role in a kings life,she always wished for them to be at bay.it was horrifying for her to think of the thousands, who would be swept away like sand from the face of the earth.it was unimaginable.she increased her pace and rushed towards the room.

"Are all the troops ready?asked raja Bharmal in a commanding voice.

"Ji raja-sa.everything has been done as per your orders.sixty soldiers will be lined up in the front,followed by three hundred horsemen.the canons will be at the end with a hundred people handling them.the finest of weapons and swords will be used and we will start the march from the foot of the palace after your orders.he explained to raja Bharmal.

A chill ran down jodha's spine,who stood at the entrance of the room.seeing everything happen before her eyes was new to her.she had never experienced it before.

Raja Bharmal saw Jodha and sent the man,he was talking to,away.he did not want to discuss such things in front of her.he eased his expression and plastered a smile across his face,as he walked towards Jodha.

"Jodha,what are you doing here?"he asked perplexed

"Baapu-sa I just wanted to see you once, before you leave for the war"she said worriedly.

Raja Bharmal sensed her fear and asked"are you afraid?"

"Are you? "Jodha asked back almost instantly

"No."he said reassuringly

"Now i am not.I know you will be victorious.just take care of yourself"she said with a half smile.

"I will jodha.your brothers and I will take care of everything.now,you do not worry and head back to your room.its quite late"he tapped on her head lovingly.
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flashback

"Take jalal away from here"the voice was commanding.

Blood surrounded them and there was nothing else to see.it flowed out of the frail young child staining the floor around her.

Jalal bent down on his knees as the woman tried to to take him away.his hands and clothes were smeared in blood and he was crying hysterically.

He could not believe what was before his eyes.

He resisted ,as the woman tried to grasp him.he was unwilling to move.

"Jalal you must go.what you see is not true.everything will be alright.but right now you must go"his ammijaan soothed him

He looked into his ammijaan's eyes and agrees believed her.he did not resist any longer and went away with the woman .

End of flashback

"No"Jalal shouted as he broke out of his reverie.it was still dark around..a tear rolled down his eyes and he did not bother to wipe it off.


Edited by gvsmu - 10 years ago

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