Puru-Bamini OS - unsaid emotions

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Posted: 7 years ago
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This is a short OS on Bamini & Puru acc 2 my imagination . Plz pardon me 4 grammatical mistakes

"Anusuya ne pourav rashtra ke uttaradhikarai ko mamta se maar dala "

"pourav rashtra ke uttaradhikarai ko bachate hue ripudaman bhi maara gaya anusuya ke hatho "

These words were echoing & burning bamini's ears, he could not believe his own brother whom he luved more than himself, 4 whom he betrayed anusuya betrayed him , tried to kill his son , killed his wife anusuya. Bamini was sitting in his room which was full of darkness . As bamini was lost in his thoughts , he heard someone is banging doors of his room, it was shivdutt who want 2 talk to bamini , guards tried to stop shivdutt but he dint paid attention 2 them & continued banging doors of bamini's room, after sometimes bamini open d doors of his room , shivdutt tried to say something but before he could compete, bamini stopped him by showing his hand, hume ab aapse kuch nhi suna, aapko jo karna tha aapne kiya, ab jo hume karna hai vo hum karenge & left d place by staring shivdutt angrily.

Bamini was walking in corridor of his palace when he heard someone is practicing sword, he came in d balcony of his palace & saw it was puru who was practicing with soldiers, later ripudaman 2 joined puru . All these things were being witnessed by bamini with a soft smile playing on his lips , puru was giving tough competition 2 ripudaman, finally puru defeated ripudaman making bamini impressed as he knew defeating ripudaman is not easy, puru was about 2 keep sword back when bamini challenged him, hearing bamini challenging him puru was stunned so were others present there only ripudaman was smiling as he knew bamini wants to test his son , all these things were being witnessed by fuming shivdutt , he angrily left place & reached kanishk's room . Shivdutt's anger had no limit by seeing kanishk sleeping peacefully, he poured whole jug of water on sleeping kanishk 2 wake him up .

kanishk shouted who dared to wake me up like this , by seeing shivdutt infront of him , he rubbed his eyes & said amatya tau, what happened ? what r u doing ? shivdutt literally dragged kanishk from bed shocking him as he witnessed shivdutt so angry 4 d first time, shivdutt dragged kanishk to d balcony of his room 2 make him see d arena in which puru & other were practicing. What r u doing in ur room uptill now ? shivdutt screamed at kanishk, hearing all d noise coming from kanishk's room kadika 2 join them, kanishk while yawning said I was sleeping , u know I don't wake up this early , by saying this he again went to his bed, shivdutt holded him tightly , said sleeping!!! Yes kanishk replied , agar abhi bhi sote rhe to phir zindagi bar rote hi raho ge says shivdutt, why??? A confused kanishq asked , r u blind ? dint u saw see bamini is trying to gel with puru & u never tried to gel with bamini ,relax !! says kanishk they r just practicing , its gud puru understood his position else I had to show him his position & I m d next king I don't need to do these silly things, if things will go this way , u will loose everything by saying this shivdutt angrily left d room.

What happened why u stopped ?? Bamini said, wont u accept my challenge ?? u defeated my right hand , my most trusted general , wont u defeat d king ?or u accepted ur defeat ?? by saying this bamini waved sword infront of puru who stopped bamini's sword with his, ripudaman was witnessing all these things with a soft smile on his lips. Puru & bamini engaged in a tough fight , both of them were not ready to accept defeat, bamini was very happy & impressed by his son , thou kanishk was also his son but kanishk never tried to impressed him or make him happy, bamini was feeling like he started to live again after anusuya's death , after much effort puru finally defeated bamini making him proud, a guard comes 2 inform bamini about something imp which make him leave d arena. " BABA says puru stopping both bamini & ripudaman in their track , both turned towards puru, baba this one word bring so much peace to bamini he cant expressed , he waited 4 nine months to hear this one word but bamini's joy was short lived when puru walked past him to ripudaman, asked him about hasti, ripudaman looked at bamini who has a pained expression on his face, bamini cant deny that he was feeling very jealous of ripudaman but he was helpless, after sometime puru 2 look towards bamini who was about to leave d place, he realized what he did, puru felt said 4 bamini as he dint did intentionally , he knew bamini is not at fault. Bamini was about to leave when puru stops him, he says I m sorry I don't want to hurt u but I need some time , bamini sadly nodes at him & leaves...


## feedback r welcomed...

Edited by deepikagupta9 - 7 years ago

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Beautiful OS Deepika
I liked how bamini was watching Ripudaman and puru dueling with each other with fondness 😳
I loved how puru and Bamni were dueling with each other❤️
Bamni's feelings for his son puru are so beautifully portrayed
I felt bad for Bamini when puru calls Ripudaman Baba because he loved his son so much
I am glad that puru realised he unintentionally hurt Bamni and spoke to him about it⭐️
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Your choice of the scene was very nice! Keep writing! :D
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Wonderful loved reading about bond shared between Ripudaman and Puru also the tinge of jealousy it caused Bamini .
Puru unintentionally hurt His father and didnt realise it Bamini loves his son
Continue writing
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Awesome!
The ending was beautifully done. Infact I will love to see Bamni slightly sad and Puru calling Ripu 'Baba' ❤️!
He's his father in true sense
Kanishk Shivdutt ROFL scene 🤣
I can totally imagine that!

Great, keep writing!😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This was brilliant Deepika👏👏
Shivdutt and Kanishk's part cracked me up🤣
The scene where Bamni gets upset when Puru addresses Ripu as Baba is beautifully written ❤️It's natural for Puru to be more inclined towards Ripu.
I am looking forward to see Bamni bonding with Puru.

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