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JulieD thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: Joyel

OOO JULIE ur direct link is working.👏

Let's enjoy with a party time.🥳


BTW

ur FF is awesome.👏

Yes it is and I am super happy!!!🥳 Glad you found my FF to be awesome😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: payal7

Julie
Amazing chapter 2
- Bhusan hanging out with Jwala and recovering alcholic
- a modern day Suman who has self-respect
- Vikram who does not believe in love
- Sugni back to her original roots of doing something she is against for the sake of survival (like her first Rai)
- MS a old fashioned Matriarch
This is going to be one hell of a story !!!!!!
Cannot wait.

Payal even I cannot wait to see how it turns out!!😆 Thanks for reading and enjoying it. I appreciate the reviews
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Posted: 12 years ago
#23


Chapter Three


"I know you are hurt by what bhaiya did but if you don't come back then you may very well lose him," Uma was trying hard to convince Suman to come back home. If she didn't, then in a couple hours, Bhushan and MaSaheb would be bringing home a bedni. As far as she knew, MaSaheb had already selected one.
At first Bhushan was reluctant to accept a bedni in his life and was willing to apologise to Suman but MaSaheb had used her
tears and a few choice words to convince him not to. And Uma was unable to get through to Vikram's phone.
"No Uma, I have made my decision. He has to apologise. If he prefers to have another woman in his life then so be it. I would know that his love was never true. Uma please accept my decision. It's all up to destiny now. Take care," Suman dropped the receiver down without giving Uma a chance to reply.
She refused to accept that Bhushan would betray her like that. "No, Bhushan would come for me," she told herself firmly.

"Hurry up Sugni!! It's almost time for the ceremony to start," Bumsukhiya was getting impatient. He just wanted this sardakai to be over and done with as soon as possible. He wanted to get his commission badly from this deal as he had already made plans for the money. Just this morning he had overheard Uma trying to convince Bhushan to not go through with the sardakai. He could have bet all his money that had it not been for MaSaheb
walking in that moment, Bhushan would have agreed with Uma. But thank god MaSaheb reached in time.
"Just five more minutes Bums!!" Sugni called out.
"Okay, I am counting!" Bumsukhiya replied. He was happy that Sugni decided to get her sardakai done at the perfect time. He always knew she would rake in the money.

"Sugni, you are looking so beautiful. Just like a real bride," Gulabiya was feeling so emotional right now. She felt torn between the hurt of knowing what was about to happen to her daughter and her family's current situation . Sugni looked like a real bride. It's too bad that she was not marrying her dream prince instead of having a sardakai ceremony with some thakur. But Gulabiya accepted that there was nothing she could do because of
her illness and she respected Sugni's decision of wanting to take care of the family's needs. Gulabiya's worthless brothers, Hukum and Katari, had run off with the money for house hold expenses. They wanted to use the money for a bid in a ring fight in the next village. Neither had been heard of in the five weeks since they left. She cursed herself for spoiling them and now her precious daughter was going to sell her dreams and body to
provide for them. Had it been just her, she would have preferred to die than have Sugni give up her dreams but there were her two sisters-in-law and niece to think about. Plus the new baby that would be born soon... Still all this was too much to put on Sugni's shoulders. No, she couldn't allow Sugni to give up her dreams and become a bedni instead. Somehow or the other she would do rai again and provide for them but Sugni will not become a bedni...

Sugni looked at her mother's face and knew instantly what she was thinking. She didn't want her mother to feel that she was letting her down. "Ma, have you ever seen another bedni dressed so richly? No, right? This beautiful sari and these jewelry have made me feel like I am about to marry a prince...I know that is not what is going to happen..but I could pretend right? I have decided to not cry about it and just accept what fate has in store for me. So Ma, promise me that you will not cry and let's enjoy this for as long as it lasts right.. Promise?"
"Oh Sugni, I don't know if I can..."
"You have to ma!! Promise or else I would start crying here too.."
"Sugni,...I... I promise, ok. Are you happy now?"
"Great. Can you just go ahead and let Bamsukhiya see that you are ready? I will be just a minute, I want to just make sure my make-up is fine ok?"
Sugni looked at herself in the mirror and tried not to cry. She took a few deep breaths and told herself to do exactly what she told her mother.
Smile and just accept things as they were, for as long as it lasted. It would not last long she knew. These thakurs changed bednis very often. Sugni tried out a smile in front of the mirror and then turned to meet Bamsukhiya, who was waiting to take her to her sardakai.

"Oh come on..come on.come on...,"Vikram was drumming his fingers impatiently on the stering wheel, waiting for the lights to change. Why was it that whenever one was in a hurry, all the traffic lights had to turn red just as you approached!!!
"Finally!!!" he yelled as he pulled off in a rush.
His mobile phone battery was discharged and he was late to get home. The last voice message he received was from a frantic Uma telling him that the sardakai ceremony would start at 11:00am. A quick glance at his watch told him it was way past the appointed time. He increased his speed some more hoping that it was not too late ...

Sugni kept looking at the floor. She wasn't ready to see who her buyer was yet. A few more rituals and then it would be all over. She will be officially a bedni and then she can look at the face of the thakur who was her owner...As the final ritual where her thakur would place the chunari over her head neared, she started to cold sweat. "Am I really going to do this?..Oh god..no.. I don't think I can..oh sita maiya..I should just stop them
before it's too late...I will say that I made a mistake and then I will go back home with Ma quickly...O gosh! ma..she needs her medicine..how could I even think about backing out now?..how will I get medicines for ma and food for Tinkle?.." She took a deep breath, "No, I will have to do this..there is no other option..
Sita maiya please just give me courage..I...I will just count backwards until it's over...100, 99, 98, 97, 96..."

As Vikram pulled his jeep into the town's square, he saw his mother handing the chunari to Bhushan. He knew that once that ritual was completed, Bhushan would be the owner of a bedni. Damn it!!! Why couldn't he have driven a bit faster, he wondered to himself. Now it was too late. As he pulled the scarf from around his neck to wipe the perspiration off his face, an idea came to his mind. He looked at Bhushan hesitating to drape the chunari on the bedni's head and sprang into action. He climbed onto the nearest table and after uttering a quick and silent prayer, he flung his scarf across the distance...


Edited by JulieD - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Julie Julie Julie,
I am at the edge of my seat..what a nail biting ending... Again you expressed very well Sugni's emotions...her fright as she realise that this is about to happen Now and after this moment she would belong to someone else.
Vickram throwing that scarf...Hmmm... I am hoping it lands on her head befor Bhushan..what a meeting between the two.
Suman's self respect is refreshing to see. I love it. Hurry with the next Chapter please.!!!!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome Julie, i absolutely enjoyed this chapter.It truly breaks my heart to see the sacrifice Sugni is making for the sake of her family and also seeing how helpless her mother is. She wants soo badly to make her daughter's dreams come true but is helpless due to the circumstances. I can't believe Ma Saheb is so adamant on getting a bedni for Bhushan, i mean my god she is something else, so different from the Ma Saheb we know but i do appreciate how you spiced up her character. Oh Julie, i just can't wait for the next chapter to see how Vikram prevents this sardakai moreover, i can't wait to see how Sugni and him will face each other😳😉

You are doing an amazing job so far Julie.Hats off to you.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#26
OMG Julie Talk about bolt of lightening. I did not see that coming.
But now I am visualising the scarf flying through the air and falling on her head like it did in one of the earlier episodes when he throw it from the Jeep.
You cannot make us wait for days for the next installment !!!!! So pelase can we have it the soonest.
Thank you😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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i wanted to start reading it after vinnie finsh her FF but felt ok ...I should start reading Yours too.. its different one so ... it wont make a problem for me 😉

chapter 1 was good it took me back 2 beginning of psh when sugni did rai for the 1st time just because her mom was ill .. u kept sugni the way she was stronger who did not want to do rai so I liked that too... suman as a normal wife was good better then that suman that was in psh ... but Maa saheb .. Oho .. she can not stop bushan but will force suman to accept him the way he is else she will throw her to guest house oho .. now feeling sorry for suman and happy for her to do some thing to change this thing.. let see what she does in next chapter
very gud well written
i liked it
ill continue with chapter 2 and leave my comments !!
Edited by ronshaan - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: rose.lavender

I really do love the concept as PSH.
Now,I think we'll get the real story exactly how it should have been told in PSH,right?😉

well yeah I agree with u I 2 felt the same way
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Posted: 12 years ago
#29

Chapter 2...

Vikram's entry was good I just hope he comes soon and stop this drama of sardakaii and save his family and even sugni
oho maa saheb wanted a behdni to live at the guest house .. oh ..
well maa saheb does not care about suman's feelings she just want to do what others do ..
I was surprise to see that the best behdni to b sold is sugni .. Oh so sad she did not want this but has to do this (Unlike Psh WHERE she sold her self with no reason .. if they wrote it this way we might have felt sorry for sugni we might have felt oh no .. some one please save her)
gulabiya to not like the idea was good part
but we know sugni
Oh this girl is stubborn she wont listen !!
Ill continue chapter 3 !!
keep it up
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Now I can't wait for the next chapter

I guess he will be the one who did sugni's sardakaii 😆😉 i wonder what all will say in next .. Oh bhushan was going to do the sardakaii and his lil bro did it.. 😉😆
well yeah
i could see sugni's face - sad face like the time she had to do rai 1st time and the 2nd time at vikram's home .. so hats of julie well written
simple english 😉😆😛 i liked it
can't wait for chapter 4
keep it up

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