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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: naina927

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This is really sweet...!!! Meher finding comfort with abeer... Her abeer. Her shoulder to cry on... How cute is that...!! 😃
Meher's abeer is back n he will make his meher smile at any cost... 😊
He puts her on his shoulder and takes her down. Just like their first meeting, when he threw her on his shoulder like a towel... Can't help but think of the holi sequence again..!! 😃
Superb it is..!!! Waiting for next kriti...!!


I know the thought of it made me melt too! It's exactly why I decided fluff hai toh fluff, I'm writing this bas 😆. Thanks Naina, I'm glad you liked it! <3

-Kriti ❤️

Originally posted by: naina927

So this is the song...!!!

Main koi aisa feet gaun... Ke arzoo jgaun... Agar tum kaho...!!! 😃


Yup yup yup, hope you like it as much as I do! 🤗

Originally posted by: unishaz

nice. Thanks for pm.


Thanks! And np :)

Originally posted by: -Shiiya-

this was adorable, Abeer trying to console his Meher so cute! Only he would put her on his back and tell her she can scream if she wants his not bothered lol .. Looking forward to next update & thanks for the PM :)


Aw thanks! And no problemo! 😊

Originally posted by: -Ishana-

Kriti, this was too cute <3

I've always wanted to see Abeer serenading Meher and this was the perfect TS for that. I loved how you showed that Meher wasn'tafraid to tell Abeer herr problems and that sense of protection that he always gave her was there as well


Thanks Ishana! I'm glad you liked it! <3 And don't we all dream of being Abeer serenading Meher. *dramatic hopeless romantic sigh* 😆

-Kriti 😃

Originally posted by: MySarun

Nice yaar .. Loved how Abeer trying to console Meher n can't bear her tears
Waiting eagerly for part 2 😃

PS: Thanks for the pm


Thanks! Happy to hear you like it!
PS: No problem 😆

Kriti

Originally posted by: beauty14

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Ko Ko you're such a freaking kuthi!!
Lost my spot thanks to you kamini.
Lol. Now I've got two places to comment.😆


'Tis one of my many talents 😆
I'm sowwy don't worry I've gotchu this time I promise <3

Originally posted by: newmoon18

Nice one yr
Loved it

Excited for next
Update soon

Keel smiling


Thanks!! :) Glad you liked it!! :)

Originally posted by: hilly

How cutee! <333
:) I love this song! would so suit them!
can't wait for p#2


Glad you liked it! It would wouldn't it? And don't worry it'll be up ASAP! :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#12

To Make Her Smile
Part 2

"Shh..." he placed a finger on her lips pulled her close. She closed her eyes to which he moved away, silently smiling. Finally she heard,

"Main koi aisa geet gaaon?"
Her eyes shot open, not at what she'd expected. His music. His voice. That was the oldest cure in the book for his Meher.
"Ki aarzoo jagau," he took her by the hand and twirled her around, "Agaar tum kaho..."
"Abeer what are you doing?" She quasi-laughed still trying to hold on to her stern yet depressed demeanor.
He ignored the query and pulled her back in close, "Tum ko bulaoon," and leaned his head in close, "Yeh palkein bichaoon," only to disappear flat onto the ground following her footsteps with his palms, "Kadam tum jahan jahan rakho..."
By now she couldn't help but smile.
Picking himself back up with a handful of freshly ripped grass from the sidewalk he brought his face next to her from behind, sprinkling the grass on the ground in front of her as if it were sparkles, "Zameen ko aasman banaoo," wrapping one hand around her waist from behind he pointed up at the sky, "Sitaron se sajaoon," he brought his mouth closer to her ear and leaned in a bit, "Agar tum kaho..."
She turned a bit to meet his eyes, while he noticed the growing affection and endearment in hers. He smiled before taking a step back.
Heading in the direction back to the apartment complex he made a butterfly with his hands, letting it flutter about while pretending to catch it at the same time, making that fake-irritated face, "Main titliyon ke peeche bhagoon," he continued in through the gate, "Main jugnuoon ke peech jaoon," he caught a lurking firefly. "Yeh rang hain woh roshni hai."
She followed him back in, laughing at his antics like she was having the time of her life. It was working, he noticed. However, it was more than what he'd planned.
"Tumhare paas dono laaon," he opened his hands. The tender little firefly rested on her hand crawling up to her elbow making her giggle with its tickling sensation before it flew away.
She looked back up to find him in front of her, "Jitni khushbooain" he said walking backwards and pointing to the small little garden in front of the apartment building, "Baag main milein..." he came to a complete stop in front of her again, "Main laaon wahan pe, ki tum ho jahan," he pulled out a rose from behind his back, probably from the garden itself.
And then came the unexpected bit, she took his hand in hers and wrapped the other around for a small waltz. Just like the old times. She smiled waiting for him to continue,
Taking her signal they then proceeded to waltz around the small little garden, "Jahan pe ek pal bhi thairoon,"
She joined with a side chain of notes from her side, "La, la, la, la..."
"Main gulsita banaoon,"
"La, la, la, la..."
"Agar tum kaho..."
They snuck back into the apartments from the back door using the stairs. She was now laughing, and smiling, and giggling here and there. Just the way he liked to see her.
Expecting his little stint to be over by the time they were just about there, he surprised her by resuming. "Agar kaho to main sunaoon..." he continued mischievously.
"Abeer..." she tried to scold him but couldn't bring herself to. Basking in his victory, he picked her up twirling her around, up the final few steps 'till they got to their floor, "Tumhe haseen kahaniyaan..."
Blushing at the thought of someone finding them there, she broke out of his hold an ran to the door trying to open in as fast as she could.
But she wasn't that lucky now was she? He came and turned her around, pinning her against the wall, "Sunogi kya meri zubani?" He leaned in closer only to press his forehead against hers, "Tum ek paari ki dastaan..."
She looked up at him nervously, but then inwardly smirked. If he was Abeer Malhotra she too was Meher Mal--
Meher dismissed the thought, she didn't want to ruin the moment. But the truth was deep down, she still was Mrs. Meher Malhotra.
"Ya main karoon..." he brought her hands up to his face, pressing a kiss on each, "Tumse baiyaan..." brushing a lock of hair behind her ear, leaning in to the side of her face, "Ya main karoon..."
"Abeer..." she tried to tug him away but was stopped by the sudden string of kisses on her neck.
"Tumse baiyaan..." he continued.
She anti-climatically cut him off, "Ki Raja, se Rani, mili thi kahan!" she swiftly pushed him away and ran inside, breaking the moment and laughing only to turn around and give him a giant "baba ji ka thullu."
"Better luck next time sweetheart!" she teased as she ran towards her bedroom.
He ran a hand through his hair, obviously embarrassed. What was he thinking? But the way she teased, oh hell she was so getting it! He ran behind her, throwing whatever pillows he could grab from the couch her way
Making it in just in time before she could close the door, he celebrated his success, "Kahaniyon ke nagar mein, tumhe le ke jaoon..." He brought out his palm, for a dance. "Agar tum kaho..."
This time instead of a proper waltz, she just seeped into his hold, letting herself relax in his arms. He swayed her in his arms for a bit before setting her down on the bed.
"Tum ko bulaoon, yeh palkein bichaoon..." he sang softer now, adjusting the pillows for her as she laid down. Removing her slippers from her feet and setting them aside, he continued, "Kadam tum jahan jahan rakho..."
Her eyes were now glistening with something. A feeling convoluted with so many emotions, all the tears could do was fall, bearing themselves to him.
He met her eyes, wiping those tears away. Taking her hand in his at her bedside, he gave her a silent promise. A vow of comfort, security, concern, and above all love. A husband's love, meant just for his wife.
Pulling the covers up for her, he brought their little eventful night to a close, "Zameen ko aasman banoo, sitaron se sajaoon," he turned the lamp off, "Agar tum kaho..."
He felt her hand still holding onto hers, a bit more firmly than before.
"Please," she whispered. After a slight hesitation he noticed she was asking with a smile.
And boy did it make him feel like a million bucks to be the reason behind that smile. The way it should be.
He simply replied by laying his head on the same small little pillow as hers, "Agar tum kaho..."
~*~

The End

~*~
Hope you liked it!
#Can'tStopHummingTheSong #ShahrukhFoLyf

-Kriti

Edited by IttiSiKriti - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#13
Muahhaahha!!
Don't need you're notice kuthi. Have this stalking thing down to a fine art😎
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Seriously, forget Meher I think I just got serenaded by Abeer. #IfOnly 😆
But honestly, that was so sweet. Like I was so lost in their moment as they were lost in each other. Literally that's the best way to describe this. They were both lost in the past, just simply living the moment and taking the chance to hold each other. Hayye..This is like the perfect way to really hit the feels, especially a hopeless romantic as me. I swear it's stuff like this which will cause me to stay alone for the rest of my life. No exaggeration need. 🤣
But seriously, it was so soothing and peaceful to read. Yes, that makes sense, just be quiet and take the compliment. It almost makes you want to keep reading and wanting the scene to not end.

Really the characters never do lose what makes them who they are and what defines their relationship.The soft looks, the little touches, the teasing, the memories, the desire to just be together. So beautifully pieced together. Even in the lightheartedness of it all, there was a touch of that nostalgic feel, you know where the reader connects with them. ❤️

Thank you for my notice as usual and the PM. Keep writing Kokes. You have such a beautiful gift to bring life to even the simplest of things. 🤗
Edited by beauty14 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Kriti, you have me so excited!
I just finished watching the episode where Meher told Abeer that she told her certain things in private as he was her husband. And now that relationship is broken, he has lost that right as well.

So to see Meher talking to Abeer in such an intimate manner, it was touching. ❤️

The writing itself is very simple and sweet and the format/layout is beautiful!

I can't wait to read how the song will play out. <3
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awwhieee!
*sooo sweettt**
Loveed itt - the ending et all. Loved how you flowed lyrics with the storyline, being realistic to their characteristics and giving away to a moment of love.. too cutee! for sometime, letting it all go and basking in the glory of their love and laid-back friendship! Abeer knows how to make his baby smile! <33
Edited by hilly - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So I see you posted the second part soon after my reply. I like that very much. 😆
As for the song sequence? I loved it! It was so sweet, cute and just filled with romance!

I can totally imagine Abeer doing something like this to cheer Meher up. The actions suited the lyrics so well. I had the song playing in my head and was actually picturing how the whole thing could have played out. It was all so very cute!

Thank you for this! <3
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Posted: 10 years ago
#17
Now that's cuteness personified...!!!!
Love u for this...!!!!
Gaane ki yaadein taaza ho gayi... now with mehbeer romance like cherry on the top.
Thank you...!!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hoh wow this is my morning treat
Good that I didn't read it last nite , wow wow Kriti , I really loved it .

I loved the way u showed both his care for her and little of romance . Loved to see melting Meher ❤️
Kash show Mei Aisa ho thoroughly enjoyed reading it .

Thank you so much for pm.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This was so sweet, i loved how you used lyrics of the song throughout, bless Abeer trying to make his baby smile with his antics & he succeeds <3
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Ohh my my ...it was just so amazing
You incorporated that song beautifully 😳
Lauuued it 😛 !!!

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