*ArMan*OS: fav fall z fall in luv wid u chpt5(b) MHE *updtd* pg7

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Megha Saxena

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Posted: 13 years ago

#21

Superb update. plot, charecter sketch & all z just awsm. Continue & if possible den plz PM me.

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Sushitarocks

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Posted: 13 years ago

#22

👏👏👏Vry nyc update. 👍🏼 I lovd the charecter sketch. Plz plz plz PM me.

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NadaCinta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Awesome update Soumya!

Loved the sketch. I too have a feeling that both Manav n Raj are identical twins s they can feel and sense when something happens to either of them.

So our dear Manav is going to meet his dream girl in the temple...I feel it's Archana😊. Cant wait for that moment. Am so excited😛 its a beautiful bonding between Raj and Sanjana. Like the part where Raj falls in love with Sanjana's sis, London return ah...

Waiting for your next update. Do con't soon.

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Soumya

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Posted: 13 years ago

#24

Sry 4 late. Actually m busy in smwhr. So hr we go.

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Chapter - 4(a)

Manav z walking up the stairs nd goes to pray.
He z asking God that whn will he find her?? It was de 1st time he told some1 abt his dream girl and hope his Aai'll find her.

He tells his siss, he z going to wait for dem dwnstairs nd leaves from there.
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While putting on his shoes a grl who drops her taali z abt to fall but Manav catches her. Her hair z blowing into her face.
Manav who z mesmerized, just glazing at her.
Her dupatta goes onto Manav's face and she remvs it off.
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Aftr a gd 5 minutes he let got of her. Her sis Varsha runs after her asking her if she z ok. Manav's sis also comes and recognizes Varsha nd both tell there sis and bro that they r gd friends on Fb.
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Den both introduce Manav and Archana and both leave diff ways.
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Manav z still standing there looking at Archana who is walking but turns around to see Manav nd,
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Khulti fizayen khulti ghatayen,
sar pe naya hai asmaan...
Teri ore Teri ore
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A grl wearing western short dress z waiting for som1 at airport but no1 has arrived. She gets mad.
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On the other hand Raj and Sanjana r still shopping.
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De grl waits for a little while more and ends up tkng cab nd ask her 2 go Mallhotra mansion nd he takes her.
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Sanjana realizes dat she z late nd tells Raj to hurry up.
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They reach to de airport to find out dat de flight 4m London has arrived nd evry passenger has left. Both Sanjana and Raj think Naina has arrived home. Sanjana is worried as she knows Naina's anger. Raj tells her to relax.
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The girl z in the cab. Bt suddenly the cab stops in mid. She goes to see what is prblm nd see's Manav who z in the mid of the road fixing his bike and Naina gets mad.
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Both Naina and manav get at it. Naina just walks off.
One of Manav's friends ask who she was?? Manav tells him she z a rich spoilt brat and we hv nthng to do wid and dey leaves.
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Naina sits in the cab telling her self what type of people there are in India!!
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Archana drops her sist off and goes to work. While walking in the office she drops some files nd bend down 2 pick it up.
Suddenly a hand cms 2 help her.
It is her boss!!
Then he ask her how she z and Archana rply him dat she is fine nd leaves. Her boss smiles lovingly 4m back.
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One of Archana's colleague who z also a gd frnd of her, ask her abt going to the movies bt Archana denies 1st.
Bt later hwevr they convince her.
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Naina reaches at the Mallhotra Mansion. She z walking in whn all of the servants r staring at her. She goes into the house and see Amitav nd Gayatri. She 1st introduce herself dat she z Naina nd hugs dem. Her parents are also there and she hugs them 2.
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Sanjana reached home and see Naina who seams mad at her. Sanjana explains to her that it wasn't her fault but her devar's.
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Naina tells Sanjana, she zn't mad at her but at some1 else. Some idiots who she met on the streets. Sanjana calm her down by hugging her.
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Raj is walking and ends up stumbling on Naina's luggages nd 1 of the servants who was walking in wid petals of flowers ends up falling to nd all of de flowers fall onto Naina.
Raj looks up and see her who is talking wid Sanjana. He got mesmorized, thinks he has just see an angel, while looking at her,

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Pehli nazar main kaisa jadu kardia,
tera gun behta hai mera jiya... Plays
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Sanjana z asking Naina abt who the guy was??
Naina z telling Sanjana dat de guy was really rude.
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Raj cms to introduce himself. But Naina start to yell at him wht de hell he z doing here and Raj gets confused. Naina tells Sanjana that this is the guy.
Bt Sanjana thinks Naina has gone nuts and takes her to her room nd Naina tells herself that Raj was fooling wid her she wont forgive him.
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Manav is at his garage thinking about Archana. One of the workers z asking him for a tool but he isn't paying attention to him until Manav ends up dropping a tool on his leg.
His colleague ask him wht did he think abt nd Manav tells him noting.
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Precap: Manav is driving his bike on the road nd Archana sits behind him. She hesitates 2 hold him bt due 2 a sudden break c falls on him nd they hv a eye lock. ************************************
So hw ew lyk it plz let me knw through ewr lyk nd feed backs.

Edited by Soumya02 - 13 years ago

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Sushitarocks

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Posted: 13 years ago

#25

Luvd it a lot nd waiting 4 next 1.

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Abhijit

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Posted: 13 years ago

#26

👏 👏 Gd work Soumya. Keep it up

Edited by Attitudeboy - 13 years ago

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Megha Saxena

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Posted: 13 years ago

#27

Well written soumya. Looking 4ward 4 u'r next updt.

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Neha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#28

Beautiful update...😊...pls PM me the next one...

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Soumya

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Posted: 13 years ago

#29

Chapter-4(b)
Archana goes 2 de movies wid her colleagues. Dere car gets stuck half way nd Archana starts 2 cry thnkng hw will she get home on tym.
Her friends tell her 2 relax dey will get home on time.
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Manav who 2 driving spots de car goes 2 dem askng dem if dey need any help nt seeing Archana until he turns around nd see's her. Dey ask for help nd Manav helps dem out bt tells dem dat dey need 2 leave de car here. Dey should cm nd pick it up tom nd drop it at his garage, he gives his card.
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He z abt 2 leave whn he hears Archana cryng tellng her frnds hw'll c get home until Manav offers her a ride. Archana knew c couldn't say no so c went wid him.
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Archana z hesitating 2 hold Manav nd just sits behind him bt ends up holding him as c was abt 2 fall. Manav tells her nt 2 be scared as he'll mk sure c doesn't fall.
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Manav drops Archana near de galley so no1 cn see her wid a guy. C starts 2 walk bt her dupatta gets stuck. C turns around 2 see, her dupatta z stuck; on Manav's watch. C stares at him bt also stares at herself as her dupatta has fallen off her. C stands dere kind of scared nd z crying.
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Manav takes her dupatta out of his watch goes 2 her nd wraps de dupatta around her. Archana stares at him nd so his Manav. Manav tells her not be sad nd to leave nd c does.
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Manav stares at her telling himself wht z it dat makes him more closer to her.
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Raj comes in2 Naina's room 2 talk 2 her bt see's c z not around. Naina cms out of de bathroom nd Raj hides behind de blinds. Naina cms out in a purple silky longdress, drying her hair. Raj stands behind blinds staring at her.
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Naina seeing no1 z around puts sm music on nd starts 2 dance on Zara Zara Touch Me 4m Race. Raj z kind of mesmerized bt also feeling really uneasy as he thinks he should leave bt cant as he can't take his eyes off her.
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Naina z still dancing until c see's some feets and thinks it's a theft. C z abt 2 scream whn Raj covers her mouth telling it is him.
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C gets mad nd tells him 2 get out. Raj tells Naina he cm in2 talk 2 her. Naina tells him if he is crazy nd how long he has been in here 4. Raj tells her long enough 2 see her dance.
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Naina gets embarrassed bt gets mad nd kicks him out bt ends up kicking him in the bum nd Raj runs out.
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Raj tells himself dat 2day c hates him bt he'll make sure he'll win her.
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Naina is walking dwn de stairs nd c ends up tripping whn some1 catches her.
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Guy: r ew ok while smiling at her, bt face is nt shown.
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Naina: yeah m f9 nd 10q ew, as if ew didn't catch me den i would of broken smthng.
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Guy: It's alright. While talking Raj see's dem nd kind of gets jealous.
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Jaswant calls Naina nd he see's the guy.
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Jaswant: Tum!!
Guy: yes me, I was called by Amitav uncle.
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Jaswant tells de guy dat Amitav z at de breakfast table nd they all go. Naina is still mesmerized by the guy, bt Raj 4m de corner z nt happy.
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All at de breakfast table. Amitav see's de guy,
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Amitav: Rahul, Beta ew hv cm.
Rahul: ( Face is shown) i hv 2 uncle, as ew called me.
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Amitav makes dem all sit nd Naina tells dem all she has 2 leave 4 college. Sanjana thinks disz a grt opportunity 4 Naina 2 solve her prblms wid Raj.
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Sanjana: Raj, ew tk Naina 2 college. Raj is smiling.
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Naina: Di, it's okay i'll go on my own. Bt Sanjana doesn't agree nd Naina z forced 2 go wid Raj.
Raj winks nd thanks Sanjana nd Sanjana just smiles.
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Manav z in his room thinking abt Archana while layed on his bed. His sister cms in talking abt sm prblms dat happened at college bt Manav z 2 busy thinking abt Archana.
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Jyoti: Dada, Dada , DAAADDDAAA
Manav: Huh, Jyoti, Tum, whn did ew cm.
Jyoti: Dada r ew ok. I hv been sitting hr nd talking 2 ew 4 lyk 20 mins non stop nd ew didn't knw dat i was in de room!!
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Manav: Oh Sry, I didn't knw dat ew were talking 2 me.
Jyoti: Dada, I wanted sm money as in de evenining me, Varsha nd Vrasha's sister Archana r going 2 see Ajab Prem Ki Gajab Kahani in de evening.
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Hearing Arcahana's name Manav gets excited.
Manav: Archana z coming!!
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Jyoti: Hah, seeing her brother's excitement Jyoti could feel dat smthng z up nd she suggest dat Manav should cm wid dem 2.
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Manav who wanted 2 go bt didn't want 2 mk it look so obvious.
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Manav: No its ok.
Jyoti: Nahi Dada, ew hv 2 cm wid me.
Manav smiles nd agree bt thnkng in his head dat he'll be able 2 meet Archana.
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Naina nd Raj at college.
Naina leaves widout saying anythng 2 Raj.
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Raj: hello I gv u a ride nd u didn't evn 10q me.
Naina: i o9ly 10qs pple who do favours 4 me nd gvng her a lift wasn't a favour as c refused, nd c leaves from dere.
Raj: koi baat nahi.
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(Later dat night)
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Archana z walking in de dark looking 4 a taxi or a auto as she is getting late 4 de movies. Suddenly a car stops in front of her nd she gets scared.
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Precap: Naina nd Archana shown hving fun at a cafe.
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Plz Lyk nd leave ewr feedbacks.

Edited by Soumya02 - 13 years ago