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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#91

Originally posted by: naucfan
Very nice really wonderful...👏

thank you anuska!😳

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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#92

Originally posted by: nibir143
Very interesting can't imagine nibir like that I could easily imagine all the things

thankyou @nibir123 , may i know ur name?😳

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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#93

Originally posted by: Sinha_m
So intresting...
Loved it massi ..

another bhanji of mine! mansi ne phir bhanji maardi!🤣🤣

thankyou so much manisha!😆

Edited by sam_premc - 9 years ago

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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#94

ty all once again n sorry for scaring you!😆

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.vishrutha.

@.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#95

THAT WAS BEYOND AWESOME Annie!!

Totally loved it!

It was so engrossing till the very end!

Aah the start was wonderful!

You described the after effects of the sleeping pills and his dizzy state so well 👏

His tries in getting out of the bed, and his search for Nisha was very well written!

Now coming to the horror part, damn that was some creepy stuff you wrote there!

Kabir cursing that owner, him opening the door out of curiosity though he was warned not to was so realistic! I mean that's human nature. We often do what we are told not to 😆

They say curiosity killed the cat, here Kabir's curiosity lead to Nisha's possession!

And the fact that Nisha was possessed from the start and it was her hurting Kabir was an absolute shocker! Didn't expect that! You did a very good job there! 👍🏼

That whisper! Eesh i could actually imagine it!

The flashlight light going on and off added to the eerieness!

The point where Kabir falls back and sees a pale Nisha right in front of his face, a few inches apart, when he shines the flashlight was shuddersome! I actually got goosebumps reading that!

And the scenes that followed were par excellence!

Nisha's on and off possessed mode, she struggling within herself so as to not hurt Kabir anymore, Kabir being absolutely helpless and clueless about what to do and what not to, reyhaan and riya's history unfolding amidst this were amazing!! 👏

That scene where a possessed Nisha hangs upside down above Kabir and slowly comes down till she is face to face with him was horrifying! And the way you have portrayed Kabir's fear all along is too good!

The next part, where the ghost whispers that all men are selfish and it wouldn't spare anyone, while Nisha begged a reluctant Kabir to go away, but Kabir pulling Nisha with him out of that room, the door shutting right before reyhaan could get out and the silence after that bloodcurdling scream were Excellently penned!

The last scene! It was BANG ON!

The way you left it in the confusion of reality and nightmare showing the door to be non-existant but the scars to be very much real was brilliant!

Believe me, that was a genius stroke! ⭐️

Horror stories with a uncertain end are my favourite and also it adds to the uniqueness of the story!

One of my fav stories by you! ( the other is the OS you wrote in the same genre 😆)

Please do write more (if possible do write more horror stories! I'm a sucker for this genre you see 😆) and thanks for pm 😊

Edited by .vishrutha. - 9 years ago

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poornima_15

@poornima_15

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Posted: 9 years ago

#96

it was syperb ... i could imagine all the scenes and it was so scary ... you described it so well all the minute details combined with the major one was just mind blowing .😃

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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: poornima_15
it was syperb ... i could imagine all the scenes and it was so scary ... you described it so well all the minute details combined with the major one was just mind blowing .😃

thankyou so much poornima!😳

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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#98

Originally posted by: .vishrutha.
THAT WAS BEYOND AWESOME Annie!!
Totally loved it!
It was so engrossing till the very end!
Aah the start was wonderful!
You described the after effects of the sleeping pills and his dizzy state so well 👏
His tries in getting out of the bed, and his search for Nisha was very well written!
Now coming to the horror part, damn that was some creepy stuff you wrote there!
Kabir cursing that owner, him opening the door out of curiosity though he was warned not to was so realistic! I mean that's human nature. We often do what we are told not to 😆
They say curiosity killed the cat, here Kabir's curiosity lead to Nisha's possession!
And the fact that Nisha was possessed from the start and it was her hurting Kabir was an absolute shocker! Didn't expect that! You did a very good job there! 👍🏼
That whisper! Eesh i could actually imagine it!
The flashlight light going on and off added to the eerieness!
The point where Kabir falls back and sees a pale Nisha right in front of his face, a few inches apart, when he shines the flashlight was shuddersome! I actually got goosebumps reading that!
And the scenes that followed were par excellence!
Nisha's on and off possessed mode, she struggling within herself so as to not hurt Kabir anymore, Kabir being absolutely helpless and clueless about what to do and what not to, reyhaan and riya's history unfolding amidst this were amazing!! 👏
That scene where a possessed Nisha hangs upside down above Kabir and slowly comes down till she is face to face with him was horrifying! And the way you have portrayed Kabir's fear all along is too good!
The next part, where the ghost whispers that all men are selfish and it wouldn't spare anyone, while Nisha begged a reluctant Kabir to go away, but Kabir pulling Nisha with him out of that room, the door shutting right before reyhaan could get out and the silence after that bloodcurdling scream were Excellently penned!
The last scene! It was BANG ON!
The way you left it in the confusion of reality and nightmare showing the door to be non-existant but the scars to be very much real was brilliant!
Believe me, that was a genius stroke! ⭐️
Horror stories with a uncertain end are my favourite and also it adds to the uniqueness of the story!
One of my fav stories by you! ( the other is the OS you wrote in the same genre 😆)
Please do write more (if possible do write more horror stories! I'm a sucker for this genre you see 😆) and thanks for pm 😊

to be fair, i need to res' here to reply to your comment.🤣🤣

was very eager to read your comment, as they are always amazing!😃

i love the way you explain the pros and cons of the story, really, thank you so much for this comment! it really meant a lot to me!😳

and i love writing horror genre, it's my favorite too as said earlier, i will surely start an FF soon in the same genre, once i end two of my ongoing stories, as i have many horror concepts with me!😊

thankyou so much once again!😃

Edited by sam_premc - 9 years ago