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Posted: 10 years ago
I'm sorry for being so late LOL. But without further ado, here's the review for chap 13:

In terms of technical mistakes, there were a few, such as tenses being off. In terms of content, the way this chapter unfolded was just 👏 Seriously, just wonderful.

The innocent playing of the cousins. The pilani flashbacks returning. The family's shock and surprise. RL's sadness and attempts to console her. Dada Ji's regretful realization. And the cousin's worries.

Wonderfully done Remz. Nothing more to say 👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
chap 14.

short but impactful. I enjoyed reading this and I especially enjoyed the way you had everything play out.

Although, I don't really think it was Dada Ji's place to decide to reveal everything about pilani. I am kinda miffed at that and I can't imagine how Nisha would feel about that.

I hope it serves as a wakeup call to Rupan who made that insensitive acting comment in the previous chapter and Viren who always pointed fingers at her. My gut feeling says that the two might actually use pilani against her, but I hope that doesn't happen. No redemption for them then.

Anyways, wonderfully done. I esp loved the last bit about Sukku calming down and walking away to give Nisha some privacy. Wonderfully done 👏
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: lovely_lady

chap 14.

short but impactful. I enjoyed reading this and I especially enjoyed the way you had everything play out.

Although, I don't really think it was Dada Ji's place to decide to reveal everything about pilani. I am kinda miffed at that and I can't imagine how Nisha would feel about that.

I hope it serves as a wakeup call to Rupan who made that insensitive acting comment in the previous chapter and Viren who always pointed fingers at her. My gut feeling says that the two might actually use pilani against her, but I hope that doesn't happen. No redemption for them then.

Anyways, wonderfully done. I esp loved the last bit about Sukku calming down and walking away to give Nisha some privacy. Wonderfully done 👏


Thanks Isha!

Definitely it's not Dadaji's right to decide to let the family know about the Pilani incident...But you know it's Dadaji. He decides everything. He decided whether Ramesh should be told or not...So I am not surprised...😆

I seriously don't know what can change Rupan and Viren...


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Posted: 10 years ago
Finallly!!!
So sorry for keeping you readers waiting this long. I should have posted this earlier...I'm really really sorry. I finished this today morning and have been trying to post it all evening and finally it's here. Do leave likes and/or comments😳

Ramesh was humming as he caressed his daughter's head. Nisha had finally fallen asleep. She was exhausted, both mentally and physically by her breakdown. Lakshmi sat on the other side of her daughter holding her hand and patting it softly.

It wasn't easy to calm her down this time. The couple realized that Nisha's ability to stay strong had broken down a little since her heartbreak. It was hours before Nisha had agreed to sleep and that too with both her parents assuring their presence.

Ramesh noticed Nisha breathing softly and slowly got off her bed and headed to the balcony. Lakshmi decided to get some more water just in case Nisha wakes up from another nightmare. Ramesh could hear a soothing song from a house nearby. He was trying to calm himself down but every time Nisha shuffled in her bed Ramesh snapped his head to see if she was fine. He couldn't imagine the kind of pain she was going through. He couldn't stand to see his happy wala gana traumatized like this.

Lakshmi returned with water and noticed her husband standing at the balcony trying to remain calm and composed for the two important women in his life. She walked towards him and laid a hand on his shoulder. Lakshmi expected to see a worried man but she saw more than that when Ramesh looked at her. She saw the pain and guilt through his eyes which was like a window to his heart.

"Am I a bad father?", he asked.
" Never ", his wife says instantly," Why would you think that? "
"Being a father I couldn't protect my daughter from the evils of the world. I call her my happy wala gana when I couldn't see how broken and sad she is."
"That's not your fault", Lakshmi said," She made sure that none of us found out about her troubled past. She was just too good at hiding her pain and discomfort. "

Ramesh nodded trying to believe Lakshmi.
"The proposal has been withdrawn", he stated," but that only assuages the pain Nisha is going through. It's not a permanent solution. "
"I know", Lakshmi said," Which is why I called up the counselor who helped me when I was trying to find out about Nishu's past. She can help us. "
"Do you think she's ready to open up to someone like that?"
"She should be... at some point of time. She needs some closure. Someone who can help her move on, and as her parents we should be there to help her get through this. We should help her fight away the awful nightmares she has."
Ramesh nodded again.
"I'll call her and get an appointment", Lakshmi said.
" What if Nisha doesn't open up? "
"She will, sooner or later", Lakshmi said with an assuring look.

Ramesh smiled at her. He was so lucky to have such and understanding and supportive wife.
" Let's get our Nishu back ", he said and looked up at the sky.
The night sky which was cloudy was clearing up to reveal the twinkling stars.
" The clouds will clear up for us too", Ramesh said and looked at his daughter who was now in a dreamless slumber.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Great part Lekhs...😊 Loved the way RL have decided to take Nisha for the counselling.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome update twin sis
Loved RL conversation
Great decision to take to her counselor
And the last line... Clouds will clear for us too superb 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: maniwood

Awesome update twin sis

Loved RL conversation
Great decision to take to her counselor
And the last line... Clouds will clear for us too superb 😊



thank you twin sis😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
aweee lekhu Amazing yaar 👏
it was really impactful
this was perfect 👏
that cloud wala part was the best
loved it ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
LOL I just clicked on this FF for fun and was pleasantly surprised to see an update! Nice Lekhs! Onto the chapter:

I like the content in this chapter. You've displayed Ramy's worries perfectly. Very in character. And I really enjoyed the way you had Laxmi come and console him. It really is wonderful the way RL switch roles for each other. Sometimes Laxmi is strong for Ramy, as was in this chapter, while other times Ramy is strong for Laxmi. Wonderful couple.

And it's really good you mentioned how Nisha needed closure for pilani. I always felt like she needed to see a therapist or whatever to fully get over it. So good job there.

On the not to so good side, there were a few grammer mistakes. For example, in the third paragraph, it needed to be "Nisha woke up" not "wake" because the earlier decided in the sentence turns the sentence into past tense, not presence. Also, the word "assuages" came across as really weird. Perhaps its just me but idk.

Other than that, good chapter! 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: crazyvaishu

aweee lekhu Amazing yaar 👏
it was really impactful
this was perfect 👏
that cloud wala part was the best
loved it ❤️


thank you😊

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