Revival : Conquering The Past - A Joint Venture updt scene 15 pg 41 - Page 19

Originally posted by: Shwets1502

Finally..😆 Loved it yar. Beautifully written especially the glacier and river part. Viren was typical Viren. Dadaji had been insensitive during this track, and you have porytrayed that really well. Great work again.

Originally posted by: Teogapi

lekhs superb yaar... loved the way cousins supported nishu and loved the mooh thod jawaab dolly gave to mrs sharma... loved it..

Originally posted by: crazyvaishu

awesome part lekha...that was really amazing

Originally posted by: lovely_lady

Chp 6 review:

Really great intro scene -- setting up the parallels between Nisha and the rain outside. It appears as if the rain also washed away some of her pain. Or rather perhaps that can be attributed to the cousins. Speaking of, I really enjoyed the initial dialogue, wish Kirti, Jwala, Saurav, Umesh speaking. I pictured each of them saying that exactly. Although I did find the Nisha ice cream suggestion a little odd, it ended up working (in my mind, Nisha would be too broken to thing about mundane things like ice cream/ worry about cousins happiness -- I could see a cousin suggesting ice cream actually -- but it's just semantics and not really important). I also liked the touch of Bunty being excited to eat. Great job in capturing their voices Lekha!

And the phone call was really nice. Great way to show the hypocrisy of society. Also, like you idea that cousins would be ones to bring smile upon Nisha face.

Anyways, some grammer issues. Actually, to be honest, I noticed quite a few issues in this one which is kinda weird because you're one of the few writers who I've noticed generally doesn't have mistakes LOL. But whatever, it doesn't take away from the chapter 😊