The Broken Bond - Moresh SS (Epilogue, Page 49) 9/9

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"Why aren't you saying something? Please stop whatever is going on. We built this family and you are letting it break so easily? Please...go and talk to them. They will definitely listen to you..." pleaded Dadi.

Dadaji was sitting on his bed, looking blank. He felt a strange fear in his heart. He didn't want to believe whatever was going on was for real. "No! This can't happen. My sons can't leave the house!"


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Dadaji walked up and down furiously. His sons were standing in a row with their heads lowered in front of him. They could sense their heart beating fast that they could hear it themselves. No one had the guts to look at their father.

"Who did this?" shouted Dadaji.

The boys nearly shivered hearing their father's voice.

"I need an answer who did this?" repeated Dadaji, this time even more louder.

The boy on the right knew it was time he stepped up and accepted his mistake. After all, he was the one who played cricket inside the house and broke the glass, in spite of his mother asking him to go out and play.

But before he could accept his mistake...

"Bauji! It was me..." said the boy on the left.

The youngest brother looked at his oldest brother with shock and gratitude.

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-Ila- thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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nice teaser dii...
and for a change i loved that the eldest bro stepped into protect the youngest
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Lachu-

nice teaser dii...

and for a change i loved that the eldest bro stepped into protect the youngest


I always felt..that's how it was before...and things changed as time passed.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Great teaser
So you are mirroring the past and present. Hope i got it correct or haven't i.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome
Brothers leaving house ??
Viren protecting Ramesh 😲
Shweta pls write soon 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: gpuneet

Great teaser

So you are mirroring the past and present. Hope i got it correct or haven't i.


Thankfully you got it right...😆 I didn't want to mention the second part as Flashback kind...but wanted readers to understand with the usage of "boys" and playing and all.

Yes...mirroring it is.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Lachu-

nice teaser dii...

and for a change i loved that the eldest bro stepped into protect the youngest


@bold -- same. I actually had to do a double take and re-read the entire thing to make sure I had read it right the first time and was actually reading about Moresh 😆

Great start Shwetha! Really like how you've started with two contrasting scenarios. From a broken adult bond to a connected childhood. Very engaging.

Looking forward to seeing where you go with this! Good luck writing!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: maniwood

Awesome
Brothers leaving house ??
Viren protecting Ramesh 😲
Shweta pls write soon 😊


Viren used to protect Ramesh...😆


Sure...thanks! 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shwets1502


Thankfully you got it right...😆 I didn't want to mention the second part as Flashback kind...but wanted readers to understand with the usage of "boys" and playing and all.

Yes...mirroring it is.

Why thankfully😆.What you wanna say😆?

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