The Dark Before The Dawn - A Nazar/PiyAnsh FF (Completed) - Page 18

Originally posted by: Nikki_srk

Aur waise bhi, is chapter ke liye I was really very excited... To, detailed review to banta hai na boss? 😛

(And abhi agar detailed review likhne baithe, to my maa will snatch the phone from my hands... 😆)

Thanks... 🤗

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Shukriya behna! 😆

Waise, particular track pe disappointed hoke story likhne baithi thi. Par phir itna zyada hi disappointed ho gayi thi ki likhne ka iccha hi almost khatam ho gaya tha. 🤔

I am actually grateful to Nazar team. They gave us such an amazing finale that I found the inspiration to complete the story. 😊

Okay, now the detailed review... (Zyada detailed nahi hai cos I am already speechless after reading it)

I am glad you made Ved realise that their desperation to save Ansh from Mo's evil eye was taking a toll on Piansh's relationship.

I absolutely loved Ansh's dialogues...

I really loved when you made him realise that he took the wrong decision by letting Pia walk out of the house...

Also, I felt really bad for Pia when Ved accused of creating a situation when Ansh would be raising his voice against her... I really liked what Pia said to her.

Then Shekhar as usual praising Ved for her sacrifices... Won't say much about that.

But I absolutely loved Ansh's reply to that when he recounted what all Pia had done, how she had suffered and all other things...

Also, I really loved Neha... The way she stood up for her Bhai and Bhabhi and tried to drive some sense into the minds of the senior Rathods... Just loved that!!

For a change, I also liked Avinash when he took Ansh's side and actually said the right thing.

Loved the part with the kids...

And last but not the least, I absolutely loveeed the ending!! It actually gave me happy tears... Finally Pia being pregnant with their third kid as you wished and telling Ansh about that at the exact same place where Ansh had saved her...

Not to forget the ending with the "Saajna" song... I absolutely loved it!!!

So, thank you once again for writing this... A big big hug to you!! 🤗 ❤️

First things first that Finale 👏👏👏👏👏👏

I simply loved loved that you ushered Nazar into the modern age 😃. It was refereshing to hear those dialogues especially from Ansh 👍🏼

Ansh dialogues & Ved's reaction 🤣🤣🤣

Thank you Nushy for that 🤗

I prefer this to the actual finale we got especially the picnic and Sajna at the end

First of all, Shukriya Bahen and I am relieved that you enjoyed the final chapter so much! 😊 🤗

I am quite proud of myself for the chapters where Ansh's and Piya's POVs were highlighted but I was really worried about the final outcome; as I had to bash Ved 😈 and not make it look typical.

I know, Ved accusing Piya has never been portrayed in the show but then again Piya has been questioned by Ved and Gs on multiple occasion where I wanted to throttle them. 😡 😡 😡 Worst being when Ved asked - Tu kaisi maa hain when Piya put Adi down in front of Mo. So considering Ansh taking Piya's side so firmly, this doesn't really seem too out of character for Ved, right?

As for the conversation, I have mellowed down a bit after the finale but it's also true, Ansh has been a very calm character. If he had bashed Ved left, right and center in Sarakchap manner, then anyone would understand that it was my bias talking, not Ansh. 🤪 So I decided to make him firm, acknowledge how he too had wronged Piya and used Neha as her back up. 😎

Neha might not be shown so much but she did stand up against Gs during RuAnsh marriage and she was really firm. So thought, why not highlight the sibling bond more which is one of my favorite relations.

As for Avinash, I hated him when he had accused Piya and GM to be greedy but it's also true that among the Gs, he has been the only one who has truly supported Piya throughout the years. He was genuinely concerned about her safety when Ved was going gaga over Daivik's power before Navratri. Even when Ansh threw Piya out, he was the only one who supported Piya and later left the place seeing Ansh's stubbornness. So I do like him a lot for this reason. 😎

Last but not the least, I should thank Madhura because when she was asking for suggestions on her creation and you two were discussing how Saajna is the perfect song to describe their journey, that's the moment I could finally realize how I wanted to end the story and incorporated the song. 😃

About the third baby, I wish they had shown it and we had an additional light episode showing the family to enjoy their happiness. 🤔 So, had to fulfill my own dream too!

That's so sweet of you Alisha!!! 🤗 🤗 🤗 I am really glad that you have enjoyed the final chapter so much!!! 😃 😃 😃

As for VedAnsh, the sole purpose of this FF was to fulfill all of our dreams and that's why I kept asking for input from others. 😆 😆 😆 So how could I let go of Ved without giving her a proper Dhulai!!! 😈 😈 😈 You know, how much I love her right? 😈 😈 😈

Nothing could be more satisfying for me than such appreciation that you would prefer my ending to the original one. Thanks a lot for that! 😃 🤗 However, despite some bloopers, I appreciate the makers for the finale they have telecast. They completed the entire journey and gave me good memories. Additionally I got you guys! So yeah! I am in party mode! 🥳

Finally, I read it. Firstly it's a massive chapter and a brilliant finale, fully balanced. Detailed review pe aate hai..

Vedashree's part was highlighted well, like still she can't get over considering how much they endured and you need a few blows. Again her way to show she misses Piya, was a great touch, you may not admit but subconscious does and somewhere she knows, they have messed Piansh.

Coming to Ansh, firstly FINALLY!! He takes the lead, accepts the obvious and wants to do a change, love the way you showed him calmly peeling the layers, like an onion and coming to the point, and taking a stand for Piya. Ved accusing her was also emotional, but Piya explaining and Neha and Ansh shielding Piya was wise.

Avinash, was fantastic cos he saw it practically, didn't just jump to conclusions, analysed and told facts and that's so important, to be done by a senior person, cos often you live in an illusion and till others question you, you don't understand. Plus Avinash doing it has an impact too, cos otherwise just Piansh and Neha couldn't win. He showed them a perspective, that Piansh didn't get their space.

Three cheers for Piya, for saying she will not apologize as she did it for her kids. Brilliant and she pointed the hypocrisy!

Neha was a star, again in highlighting correct points, when Piansh couldn't tell much as they got emotional, already it's not easy for them also to tell such huge things. Ansh supporting Piya and the sibling bond, wow.

Again Ved and Ansh talks, and am glad Ansh too took responsibilityfor his family and got to speak so MUCH!

Whole kids part, was brilliantly executed. From showing the mistake, to Pia correcting it, Ansh explaining the gravity of powers and supervision. Then Piansh encouraging them to use powers, and them doing it and modifying it, wow!! Was this mirror thing executed in the show by Pari? Cos there have been many mirror sequences, where it's used ore to trap..

Neha and Avinash showing them, what they missed and sacrificed..and finally Vedashree getting the perspective, she isn't bad, but needs blows and time. Great, she accepted her mistakes and confessed everything and gave them a chance, her suggestion too was interesting one, they stay together and kids can practice together too. Cos family also needs to practice being normal with them. So finally all 4 accepted, was cool..senior Rathods.

Wow, Ansh wanted to become a Doctor is an interesting touch and it's a good way to show him helping the society and Piya's nursery, finally!! Wow..loved it, we already discussed this once. Loved that she even helped her family and Naman in experiments, that's cool.

Picnic was a nice touch, and Piansh go to Alibag, and Pia ka puppy face, LOL. Epic. Poor Ansh..

Desrcription of Piansh moment was perfect, simple setup and spot had memories..Piya getting emotional and fireflies scene, abdomen touch and Piya giving Ansh the news, and Ansh's excitement!!

Way Ansh said No, was epic too..scaring Piya..and then twirling and baby names. Loved the way, how they both deserved this moment of experiencing pregnancy and everything together..and freezing their moment.

Then them singing Saajna together, was a brilliant. Like nothing is more perfect, and even if we hear it n number of times, we won't be bored.

This was an amazing FF Nushy, and thanks for writing it. Keep writing more.🤗❤️

I know! 😆 In fact, it took me two days to write it and I was considering to break it into two different parts. But then I felt the impact wouldn't be the same and hence decided to include everything in the same chapter. 😊

I would definitely say the series finale has done a number on me. Because they highlighted that even though Ansh's case was different, Ved loved Piya too. Plus, there was another sequence post leap when Pari came to meet Adi, Ved reminisced Piya seeing Pari's similarity with her. So had to highlight it too. Plus, you know how much I love layers. 😊

About Ansh - this has been quite difficult. My inner dayaan wanted to burn Ved to the ground but I had to make it look natural. Even when Ansh confessed in front of Neha, he broke down saying how much he was indebted to Ved and how difficult it was for him to let go off Piya and RiAd. So wanted something solid but gentle.

Avinash has been the only one who has always seen things clearly. Plus, he was there for Piya on several occasions. Shekhar has never shown a spine and Chai too is a blind Ved Bhakt. So it had to be him who would show them the mirror.

Of course I wanted Piya to be firm in her decision. 😃 I was horribly annoyed at her in the Barkha Track and had to write something good to redeem her. After all, she is my most favorite. 😛

Neha - has always been the strongest among the siblings and how could I let go off such a brilliant chance to highlight sibling's bond? 😎

About kids, I wanted them to include because they are an integral part of PiyAnsh and I can't just disregard them. I have had huge issue with both of Piya and Ansh about handling them so thought to include it. 😈

I didn't watch Kalashree Track but as far as I can recall, Pari being a dayaan created a dayaan-sheesha out of water and helped everyone come out. So that gave me the idea. 😊

Well, in the chapter where Neha showed Ansh how he had been subsiding his desires, there I had written it that he wanted to become a doctor but chose to do MBA for Ved and Shekhar because they wanted him to look after their family business. So it's a continuation of that.

And all of us at some point have wanted Piya to embrace her Reevavanshi side. Plus, how could I exclude my darling Gurumaa! So it's a joint effort from all of us.

Yeah! Poor Ansh! You know, this is why I got so shocked today when I saw the sequence of Piya manaofying Ansh in their bedroom. She did exactly this and I was like - Yeh Kaise Ho Gaya!!! 😲 😲 😲

Thank you for appreciating the last portion. I was really worried about this portion as the ending is the most crucial part. I took inspiration from OUAT. There Charming was actually shocked because he was petrified thinking he had failed Emma but said he was thrilled to calm Snow down and of course, he was happy too.

So I thought, why not include this one in my story?

About pregnancy, I may have told you earlier that there was this FB page where we used to discuss on YHM. There I made a friend - Bhavani ma'am. She explained the beauty of pregnancy and the support a husband lends to her wife and the bonding, amazingly there. Besides, no matter how funny and illogical the birth giving scene was, I actually found Niyati to be amazing in bringing out the excruciating pain a woman goes through and Harsh's expression when Ansh realized his kid was born - was on point. So, I have always felt that PiyAnsh missed out a lot. Not to mention Piya missed out a huge portion of Adi's childhood and Ansh missed out Pari's. So I have always wanted them to show a normal pregnancy for Piya where she would be pampered by the whole family and Ansh would enjoy fatherhood from the beginning.

Thanks to you! I got this idea from you only when you were discussing with Nikki about how Saajna song describes PiyAnsh perfectly. That's the moment I realized how I would end the story. 😊

Thanks for appreciating the story dear! 😊 😊 😊 Finally, I feel done! 😊 😊 😊 Be it my own story or the original show, now I'll always cherish the moments PiyAnsh have given to us. 🤗 🤗 🤗

Originally posted by: nushy1995

I know! 😆 In fact, it took me two days to write it and I was considering to break it into two different parts. But then I felt the impact wouldn't be the same and hence decided to include everything in the same chapter. 😊

I would definitely say the series finale has done a number on me. Because they highlighted that even though Ansh's case was different, Ved loved Piya too. Plus, there was another sequence post leap when Pari came to meet Adi, Ved reminisced Piya seeing Pari's similarity with her. So had to highlight it too. Plus, you know how much I love layers. 😊

About Ansh - this has been quite difficult. My inner dayaan wanted to burn Ved to the ground but I had to make it look natural. Even when Ansh confessed in front of Neha, he broke down saying how much he was indebted to Ved and how difficult it was for him to let go off Piya and RiAd. So wanted something solid but gentle.

Avinash has been the only one who has always seen things clearly. Plus, he was there for Piya on several occasions. Shekhar has never shown a spine and Chai too is a blind Ved Bhakt. So it had to be him who would show them the mirror.

Of course I wanted Piya to be firm in her decision. 😃 I was horribly annoyed at her in the Barkha Track and had to write something good to redeem her. After all, she is my most favorite. 😛

Neha - has always been the strongest among the siblings and how could I let go off such a brilliant chance to highlight sibling's bond? 😎

About kids, I wanted them to include because they are an integral part of PiyAnsh and I can't just disregard them. I have had huge issue with both of Piya and Ansh about handling them so thought to include it. 😈

I didn't watch Kalashree Track but as far as I can recall, Pari being a dayaan created a dayaan-sheesha out of water and helped everyone come out. So that gave me the idea. 😊

Well, in the chapter where Neha showed Ansh how he had been subsiding his desires, there I had written it that he wanted to become a doctor but chose to do MBA for Ved and Shekhar because they wanted him to look after their family business. So it's a continuation of that.

And all of us at some point have wanted Piya to embrace her Reevavanshi side. Plus, how could I exclude my darling Gurumaa! So it's a joint effort from all of us.

Yeah! Poor Ansh! You know, this is why I got so shocked today when I saw the sequence of Piya manaofying Ansh in their bedroom. She did exactly this and I was like - Yeh Kaise Ho Gaya!!! 😲 😲 😲

Thank you for appreciating the last portion. I was really worried about this portion as the ending is the most crucial part. I took inspiration from OUAT. There Charming was actually shocked because he was petrified thinking he had failed Emma but said he was thrilled to calm Snow down and of course, he was happy too.

So I thought, why not include this one in my story.

About pregnancy, I may have told you earlier that there was this FB page where we used to discuss on YHM. There I made a friend - Bhavani ma'am. She explained the beauty of pregnancy and the support a husband lends to her wife and the bonding, amazingly there. Besides, no matter how funny and illogical the birth giving scene was, I actually found Niyati to be amazing in bringing out the excruciating pain a woman goes through and Harsh's expression when Ansh realized his kid was born - was on point. So, I have always felt that PiyAnsh missed out a lot. Not to mention Piya missed out a huge portion of Adi's childhood and Ansh missed out Pari's. So I have always wanted them to show a normal pregnancy for Piya where she would be pampered by the whole family and Ansh would enjoy fatherhood from the beginning.

Thanks to you! I got this idea from you only when you were discussing with Nikki about how Saajna song describes PiyAnsh perfectly. That's the moment I realized how I would end the story. 😊

Thanks for appreciating the story dear! 😊 😊 😊 Finally, I feel done! 😊 😊 😊 Be it my own story or the original show, now I'll always cherish the moments PiyAnsh have given to us. 🤗 🤗 🤗

It shows your efforts, and yes impact would have diluted.

Agree, series Finale ne toh muzpe kya kya kiya hai, pucho mat.

But it got us all together, and reactivated our discussions, jo socha na tha. Yes. There was a sequence. Layers toh yes, I know and we love..plus as I say, all have them actually..

Yes, and I want to pat you for that, cos that would have been a challenge for you. ROFL that would have looked crazy, and yeah you executed it well. Of course he is a sensitive guy, with a lot of depth and can go to any extent and I don't want to write an essay..now ofc I can't totally stop, so you should excuse me, lol..cos my fav!

Well said.

Yes, Piya is yours...and that's why those breaks helped me, I would say..but great you could do it.

True!

Don't remind of what we didn't get, list is big.

Kids track, siblings track, I even wanted a Saavi-Piya track...par mile sirf MoVed..

Thanks for the reference.

Yes, missed out.

YES, thanks so much GM was fab.

Rofl acha but for what? Cos she has used it many times..

Great you did.

Yes, the group. Are you still active there? Glad she explained, and you executed it amazingly!!

Couldn't agree more..and they would have nailed if we got this track.

Atleast am glad, ki however glorified baby Adi was, we got some great scenes of parenting him and taking care..

You are welcome and am really glad!

🤗🤗Same here, even me and they had a brilliant journey and moments, considering it was a hindi show, they messed bits, but Piansh did evolve and were always equal..they top my fav couples list now!!😃

😊

Agreed. I never imagined that one single episode could reunite us all like this and I am glad it did. 😃

I get you! 😆 Baat jab humare favorites ke aate hain, tab hum ruke nahi rukte. ☺️

Well, Piya has always have an upper hand over Ansh. 😈 But today's scene was almost identical to my story. 😆 It was when Piya was telling Ansh that Saavi and Naman should be together.

Unfortunately, many of us started leaving the group as you know, degrading quality of YHM. But I am still in touch with her. Really respect her for her views. 😊

Me too! I absolutely loved NiyaRsh and Kiara in one frame.

To be honest, I would say messing up happens everywhere. It's just the ultimate result that matters. Like, I was watching a particular scene of GA in YouTube and started reading comments. People were sad for Callie's character degradation and it hit me. Every couple goes through challenges. Some become stronger, some fall apart.

Parenthood is of supreme importance to me so I reacted a lot. But as a couple, they have always been together. It's not that I feel disgusted to look at their faces which I felt whenever I looked at IshRa, specially Raman post leap. KP and DT have the most amazing chemistry and yet, I felt nauseated whenever I looked at them. So you see, connect got lost to which extent. But PiyAnsh are amazing. Till the last moment, they were a team and I would always love them for that. I am done washing particular memories with PK. 😆 So hopefully I'll be able to cherish their memory forever.

Hello guys!!! 😊

Just like I wanted a different type of ending for the REVIVING PARI Track, I expected some confrontation between PiyAnsh and their kids post the battle between Bhasmika and them.

So this is another idea of mine keeping that track in my mind.

A Chance At A New Beginning -

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/nazar/5157340/a-chance-at-a-new-beginning-one-shot-on-nazar