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svkworld2

@svkworld2

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Posted: 14 years ago

#61

Very well written, yet again Urmi!! You have captured Navya's emotions very well.

Waiting for the next one...

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Juhi

@.Juhi.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#62

beautiful poem di...

& 1 suggestion...u shud remove ur bekaboo of the week siggy...coz the week is ovr & sum1 else is nt the bekaboo of the week so he/she vl use it 😊

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bs8889

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Posted: 14 years ago

#63

I have no words 2 express how much i loved this poem..trust me i cant think of any adjective that'l sufficiently it...👏

Every time i read your poem i'm transported 2 Navya's world..it seems as if i'm navya coz i can feel each n every emotion of her's thru ur words.. literally touches me deep in d heart...

Loved the whole piece especially d last lines...

Par iss baat se mujhpar jo bit rahi hai, kisse kahun..

Maine pyar kiya hai, koi galti nahi..ye kisse kahun..

Mera dil to ek hi hai..uske do tukde main bhi to kaise karu...

so true..poor thing doesnt know wat 2 do now..on one hand she wants win her mom's trust back on d other she cant think of loosing Anant...

PLzz do continue as n ven possible..wil really luk forward 2 it...😊

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628313

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Posted: 14 years ago

#64

Wow! Ossam yaar. Liked it.

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barbie2011

@barbie2011

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Posted: 14 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: trisha17
only one word"BEAUTIFUL"👏

thank you for the reply dear..

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barbie2011

@barbie2011

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Posted: 14 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: chucklebuddy
F-A-B-U-L-O-U-S post 👏

Lines impressed me more:

Maa kehti hai, main uski navya nahi,maa mujhe pehchanti nahi

kaunse mod par khadi hun main, maa wo bhi jaanti nahi..

Maa ki naarazgi samajhti hun main,

Chot pohchayi hai maine manti hun main,

tnxx a lot 4 d PM Dee... 🤗

Hey Sandy🤗..you are welcome sissy.. thank you for the lovely reply..

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triasha banerji

@triasha

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Posted: 14 years ago

#67

wowww dids only one word its awesummm...👏...u r grt...every word is apt...mwahhh...😛...luveddd it ..this lines touched my heart-thank u for this post...🤗

Ek naye jazbaat, nayi umaang se guzar rahi thi main,
Mere hi dil ki hulchul se, kafi arse tak khud pareshan thi main,
Jab dil ko khudpar aur uske pyaar par yakin aaya,
Tabhise to maa ko batane ka khayal dil main aaya tha...

Lekin itna aasan tha kya ye sab Maa se bata dena..
Aur bata ne ke baad maa ki nazroon se nazre milana..

kya mere iss pyar ko Maa samajh payegi?
kya papa, mujh par naaz karpayenge?
kya dadi, mujhe duniya ki sabe pyari poti bula payegi?
In sawaloon se andar hi andar jhoojh rahi thi main..
Anand se bichadne ke khayal se bhi to kaap rahi thi main..

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barbie2011

@barbie2011

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Posted: 14 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: Preet078
One word FABULOUS👏👏👏

Most touchy lines are:

Maine pyar kiya hai, koi galti nahi..ye kisse kahun..

Mera dil to ek hi hai..uske do tukde main bhi to kaise karu...

She is facing this scenario after meeta call..I dont what she is going do..

thank you for liking it dear..i knoe navya is gng thru very difficult time rgt now..i just hope ..everything gets sorted out soon...

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laddoo598

@laddoo598

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Posted: 14 years ago

#69

Di how do you do it? Its like you get under Navya's skin while writing..You are like the window to Navya's mind now..👏👏
Especially loved the following lines:

Par iss baat se mujhpar jo bit rahi hai, kisse kahun..

Maine pyar kiya hai, koi galti nahi..ye kisse kahun..

Mera dil to ek hi hai..uske do tukde main bhi to kaise karu...
No matter how many praises I shower on you it still won't be enough..Brilliant job, and do keep writing :)

Edited by laddoo598 - 14 years ago

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barbie2011

@barbie2011

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Posted: 14 years ago

#70

Originally posted by: triasha
wowww dids only one word its awesummm...👏...u r grt...every word is apt...mwahhh...😛...luveddd it ..this lines touched my heart-thank u for this post...🤗

Ek naye jazbaat, nayi umaang se guzar rahi thi main,

Mere hi dil ki hulchul se, kafi arse tak khud pareshan thi main,

Jab dil ko khudpar aur uske pyaar par yakin aaya,

Tabhise to maa ko batane ka khayal dil main aaya tha...

Lekin itna aasan tha kya ye sab Maa se bata dena..

Aur bata ne ke baad maa ki nazroon se nazre milana..

kya mere iss pyar ko Maa samajh payegi?

kya papa, mujh par naaz karpayenge?

kya dadi, mujhe duniya ki sabe pyari poti bula payegi?

In sawaloon se andar hi andar jhoojh rahi thi main..

Anand se bichadne ke khayal se bhi to kaap rahi thi main..

hey triasha🤗Thank you for your lovely comments Sissy...I am glad, i was able to touch your heart with my words...