Hey JZee😊...glad u made chapter 4 longer..the more, the merrier...and before i launch myself into commenting, i must tell u, this is great stuff...to me, its more like reading a book.. OK, now i really haven't commented anything on your first three chapters...so my reply could be quite long...hope u wont mind...
the first thing that struck me about your FF was the architectural description in chapter 1...an image of Hogwarts flashed across my mind( cant help it...Harry Potter fan)...it always helps when the reader is fed with something to perceive the surroundings in which the story takes place...it takes the imagination process to a whole new level...so, i'm glad u did that...good start there...
The 'Macbeth' hangover...ahhh well..i, for one cannot relate with it...being an engineering student, its always been equations and maths 4 me...but losing yourself in a fictional character is an entirely different experience i suppose...and this is where i shall bring in Navya's character...i dunno if its just me or u felt the same way as well...to me, Navya has this habit of reading too much into a situation...the 'everything has to be about macbeth' thing, accusing Anant of spiteful intentions ( she quite planted the seed in his mind), rushing to the library as soon as she received the msg...these were some of the examples i could think of...and i like the dash of ego/ arrogance ( dunno how 2 name that quality) u have added to Navya's character...the quintessential modern girl i guess...and whats with Navya and vodkas?? blimey...btw, do i smell an after-party hangover there?? and something tells me that Sonia's not-to-be beau is our boy...and if i am right their third encounter for the day is in the making...Anant bumping into navya who is in a very messy state...another showdown perhaps, with Navya emerging victorious??
shifting gears to focus on AB (that was cool)...i'd like 2 see him from Navya's point of few..silly, annoying, rude...yeah agreed...but he's quite a charmer...the unkempt Asian locks, the infectious grin, pulling off the 'cocky rock', the sexy hushed tone...good enough to throw any girl off her guard...he doesn't have a stable job, but ummm, i dont think he's from a humble background... courtesy this line," he doesnt mind doing things which are direly mundane or below his stature ( if his family was asked)"...what i could gather from this line is that he is from a well-off family, but likes to stand on his own leg...and there was another line that had me speculating, when Anant tells Navya, "I've faced enough reproach from the civilised society" or something like that...could it be possible that Anant went against his family in pursuing his passion??...that apart, the boy is quite a character...he wants to learn a little of this and a little of that..and he's not bad, is he...not intentionally at least... i mean he wouldn't have played that prank on Navya if she hadn't sparked off his male ego ( i'm still unsure about the ego part though)...i guess i'm done with Anant as of now...but i shall continue analyzing him as your story progresses..
i'm not sure, but Anant and Navya ( in your ff) remind me of Ron and Hermione...to them, it is their opinion or their point of view that matters...but differences apart, they can hit it off quite well i guess..the smile exchanged between them after that showdown was an indication...i mean, here is a guy who likes to be pitted against a girl, but at the same time was vulnerable to her tracing her tresses...same goes for the girl as well...to her, his actions were nothing less than harassment, yet she was flustered by the way he winked...i shall not leave behind the showdown either...believe me, i thought Navya was gonna scare the hell out of him...but the guy seems 2 be pretty smart huh...jack of all trades, as you described him...she lost her steam towards the end
...i dunno, i sort of felt Navya was giving up..or rather giving in to Anant...any possibility of such instances in the future??
moving away from the leads, what really kept me hooked on to ur ff, were the finer details u concentrated on...top of the list, the Louis Vuitton bag...i just went mmm on reading that bit...such fashion fundas really add to the youthful flavor of the ff...i would give u extra brownie points just for that...second spot to Mr.Rhett Butler...the man definitely had some of the best lines in 'Gone with the Wind' and hearing it from Anant's mouth was quite intriguing...i'd say your overall usage of literature in this ff is admirable...u dont try to thrust it upon us just for the love of it...instead u try to bring out some of the aspects of your characters through these literary references ...that is just great if u ask me...third spot goes to your description of library procedures...i never hit the library much..i never know how it works..so reading all that locking and unlocking thing was quite new for me...fourth spot goes to the 'end of examination euphoria' in chapter 1...been there, done that...that part was a instant hit with me...
finally, the Mark Knopfler tee...is Navya a fan? if so , she must be a music enthusiast...and our guy here is a musician..my guess precisely, music will bring them close..something that they will bond over, big time...
just one last thing...your vocabulary is wow...as Kankshita mentioned, i too kept my Google window open to get the essence of some of the words right...this is professional stuff...and i'm enjoying every bit of it...hope u will keep us entertained in the coming weeks...
p.s. Shakespeare and Margaret Mitchell would have quite happy reading this ff...i never thought their words meant much in the contemporary sense..but u are changing my opinion...
Edited by madhu_sridhar - 14 years ago
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