AvNeil SS : The Perfect Stranger , Epilogue 2 updated (10/5) pg 78

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docritu99

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Posted: 7 years ago

#321

I am sorry for being MIA, after asking for updates.!
Thats horrible.! 😔

All i can say is, i will soon catch up and be back.!😊

Also, u have a story banner.! Wowww!!!
Thats awesome.!
Loved it.!

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WhtinAname

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Posted: 7 years ago

#322

Originally posted by: srain10
Kaha hai update???
Ab toh night bhi ho gayi...de do...

Sorry had some problms wid it.So got delayed.

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WhtinAname

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Posted: 7 years ago

#323

Originally posted by: docritu99
I am sorry for being MIA, after asking for updates.!
Thats horrible.! 😔

All i can say is, i will soon catch up and be back.!😊

Also, u have a story banner.! Wowww!!!
Thats awesome.!
Loved it.!

No prob Ri.

I know sometimes it just gets out of hand...work, life... so many things to deal with.So chill.

Banner😃...dts a gift from Nivedita ( Aphrodite_NV).So all credit goes to her.

I will wait patiently fr ur reply.😊

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Shaiksafia

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Posted: 7 years ago

#324

Beautiful chapters 👏 sorry little busy today will write the detailed response soon

Much love

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WhtinAname

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Posted: 7 years ago

#325

Originally posted by: Shaiksafia
Beautiful chapters 👏 sorry little busy today will write the detailed response soon

Much love

Hey Safia

Thank you dear.

No problm.I understand.

I'll eagerly wait for.your reply😊

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HighOnSarcasm

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Posted: 7 years ago

#326

Ok I agree...the flow of the chapter is now much smoother than before...the adding of tiny details here & there have made a huge diff in the overall outcome...

Even before, I did get what you were trying to depict what was happening/ changing between these two couples but there was a sense of urgency to it...

The revised version brings in a lot of depth & intensity to the already swirling emotions...

The Khannas are truly a class apart. They are so genuine & open with their blessings & care towards Avni even though shez just Richaz friend & a doc who helped Bebe.

Richa & Ali in a bathroom...all I can think is...'hum tum ek kamre mein band ho...aur chaabi kho jaaye...'😉

Neil & Avni + Rain = Nuclear Reaction...kaboom!!

Wow!! I mean...phew...that was sizzling...the laughter, the playing in the rain & those unintentional fall & catch is just foreplay to the emotional storm that's about to hit the two! & it's going to affect everyone...not just them...

Since I almost know what's coming next (coz I did read the ch that you'd posted before)... I can't wait for the aftereffects & the chain reaction that'll follow!!

Amazing!👏

Edited by paayaal - 7 years ago

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Nidhii

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Posted: 7 years ago

#327

Awesome update tapasi 👏

Truely loved it. By the way both the to be couples are lost in others then their so called partners . He he he that was quite funny instead of Richa Neil was searching for avni and for Richa her ways always collided with Ali wantedly unwantedly . I mean wantedly from Ali's side and unwantedly from Richa's side. Blue Munda and sunny baby they are like sky and sun . Both are incomplete without each other.

The scene where both were busy playing with rain water reminded me of my playing in the rain . I also use to drench in the rain water as much as possible as I love rain.

Thanks for updating.

Edited by sweetunidhi.445 - 7 years ago

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Wingsoflove_2

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Posted: 7 years ago

#328

Awesome update tapsi.

I didnt knew u deleted ur update.😕

Beautiful update.

Its so smooth and beautiful.

Both couple are lost in their own world.

Yeh ladka sudherega nahi(sudharna bhi nahi chaiye😉)

Avni ko dhoondre jese avni uski honevaale fiance ho.

Hmm interesting ali aur richa ke beech bhi fire work start hogai.

Balcony scene was so cute. They are falling for each other.😳

Avneil in rain. Omg I badly want to see that.

Their innocence,their laughter, their joy,those unintentional falls.😉

That was beautiful scene.

Cant wait for next chapter.

Continue soon.

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Zara_Imam

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Posted: 7 years ago

#329

Hey Tapasi.. um.. I know that I'm very late but these three- four days have been my worst nightmare. Dad was in a critical condition and I didn't want to lose him like my mom. I was just so depressed but all's well that ends well. I hope you ain't angry

Finally I caught up with the story and I must say that your story is just so soothing to read just like smooth flowing water...They gave me peace

Btw I always forget to mention that Neil n Avni r getting cuter everyday.

Yes! Like I thought Richa n Ali r getting attracted to each other much like Neil n Avni.

Neil went on his knees to force Avni to come with him😆 oh god! Neil n Avni's chocolate story was bliss... but that was a compensation for making her the show stopper😆 if ever given a chance I would love to adopt these two

So announcement of the engagement was a surprise to Neil... I just hope he doesn't give them any shocker in return

Neil sent Avni all the photos he had taken sneakily 😲 ladka bach gaya mein hoti toh wo abhi hospital bed mein hota😆

That whole hospital part was just so cute! Neil knows exactly how Avni will accept his gifts that's why he used her patient. Can anyone be cuter than him!

You know before u could post the rewritten chapter, I had read it and I personally loved it so much that I took the SS. Lucky me😉 no doubt, it was a little rushed but the Avneil moments were hot, so I decided to read it many times. I'm shameless, I know! 😆

But the rewritten chapter was just so beautiful in itself. U wrote the rain sequence even more beautifully that I can't stop myself falling for it yet again. Fatal attractions, the name itself suggests a dangerous twist and I know you'll write it better than the deleted one

I love the way the sub plot is developing... my second ship is also sailing, yay! 😆

Another thing I promise that I'll try to be regular this time onwards hopefully😊

Continue soon😃

PS: hey what did you decide about us? I'm eager to know😆 I even decided a ship name for us- TaRa, isn't that cute? 😳