AvNeil 4S: Past Connections; Last Part, Pg 12, Updated 9/3

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

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Posted: 7 years ago

#91

Hey.

Let me be honest...yesterday after someone asked u if it was Ali, my bulb got lit too😆 and then I figured out the only curly haired person I knew in NK land.U know what u r really clever.The kid Ali in NK didn't hv curly hairs so when u described him like dt I didn't get the connection immediately.

I love how u hv given a third person's perspective...someone who hs observed them from afar.

Ali's backstory is so heartbreaking.I can't believe he wanted to take his own life and that Avni changed his mind unknowingly.

Avni was his big brother😆 and then he became Neil's big bro...I love how u hv written dis line.

So Ali is what connects them both.You hv really connected the dots in a smooth line.

I love how u ended it...its unique.But I want more...I want their coffession.

Its was a lovely piece.Had a nice time reading it.

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Shaiksafia

@Shaiksafia

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#92

its was beautiful and very interesting story payaal 👏👏 all 3 shared a unbreakable past connection .

thank you for the update

much love

safia

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Wingsoflove_2

@Wingsoflove_2

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#93

It's so beautiful Payal.

It's very touchy story. Their past connection was so pure and beautiful. Ali's pov was beautifully portrayed. I can clearly feel Ali's pain. Poor soul he want to take his life. But our angel changed his mind. I like this chapter very much. Awesome update👏 good story always end in short time.

Iam eagerly waiting for Ur another beautiful concept.

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HighOnSarcasm

@HighOnSarcasm

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#94

Originally posted by: drbeth
Hey. Hi! First of all a Huge Congratulations on turning 'Gold'!!!🥳 I noticed it yesterday but couldn't decide which thread to wish you on😆 so as a total Diva I'm doing it on my own!!😆
Let me be honest...yesterday after someone asked u if it was Ali, my bulb got lit too😆 and then I figured out the only curly haired person I knew in NK land.U know what u r really clever.The kid Ali in NK didn't hv curly hairs so when u described him like dt I didn't get the connection immediately.😆😆 Thank you! Though honestly...I don't know what the kid Ali looks like. I just based the kid in this Shot on the adult Ali that I know...I wasn't trying to be secretive in that regard!! But I like that I got many people confused regarding the identity of the kid!😆 Narcissism speaking😆

I love how u hv given a third person's perspective...someone who hs observed them from afar. Thank you!😃 While establishing his Past Connection with the two it also gives his stance regarding the other two!

Ali's backstory is so heartbreaking.I can't believe he wanted to take his own life and that Avni changed his mind unknowingly. Ya..that's why both Ananya & Neil are so special to him! They unknowingly share a commont past of saving little Ali!

Avni was his big brother😆 and then he became Neil's big bro...I love how u hv written dis line. Thank you!😳

So Ali is what connects them both.You hv really connected the dots in a smooth line. Yep...that was the end thought that started this series of Shots!

I love how u ended it...its unique.But I want more...I want their coffession.

Its was a lovely piece.Had a nice time reading it.

Hi Tapasi,

Thank you so much! Your words mean so much to me!🤗

The last part was the actual OS that went rogue & got itself an extension!😆

It was always about establishing a past connection that these 2 unknowingly share with Ali. Ananya & Neilz love story is actually a happy coincidence & a story for another time & thought!

Glad you enjoyed this so much!

Waiting to read more from you!

Love,

Payal.😃

Edited by paayaal - 7 years ago

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HighOnSarcasm

@HighOnSarcasm

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#95

Originally posted by: Shaiksafia
its was beautiful and very interesting story payaal 👏👏 all 3 shared a unbreakable past connection .
thank you for the update
much love
safia

Hey Safia,

Thank you so much!😃

Yes, all 3 are connected because of their past! Though Ananya & Neil are unaware of how they had each been responsible for saving Ali all those years ago!

Love,

Payal.😃

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WhtinAname

@WhtsinAname

Sparkler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#96

Originally posted by: paayaal

Hi Tapasi,

Thank you so much! Your words mean so much to me!🤗

The last part was the actual OS that went rogue & got itself an extension!😆

It was always about establishing a past connection that these 2 unknowingly share with Ali. Ananya & Neilz love story is actually a happy coincidence & a story for another time & thought!

Glad you enjoyed this so much!

Waiting to read more from you!

Love,
Payal.😃

First of all...I really don't want to elongate ur thread which is already long partly cz of me😆.Must be annoying to the readers.

Turning Gold😆 ( reminds me of a evil fictional character😆)...thank You😊 for ur wishes.Me turning gold just shows my capacity to talk incessantly😆

So u unknowningly confused me abt Ali😆

V r not playing relay race😛...dt v two will write alternatively😛

Looking forward to more stories from u.

Love Tapasi😊

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HighOnSarcasm

@HighOnSarcasm

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: drbeth

First of all...I really don't want to elongate ur thread which is already long partly cz of me😆.Must be annoying to the readers. 😆😆 No Comments on this!

Turning Gold😆 ( reminds me of a evil fictional character😆)...thank You😊 for ur wishes.Me turning gold just shows my capacity to talk incessantly😆 You know I first thought yellow but that sounded so horrid that I looked closely & discovered it's actually Gold TG!😆 & yes Gold does sould like an evil overlord thing from the 70s Bollywood Movies.😆

So u unknowningly confused me abt Ali😆 😳 I unknowingly confused almost everyone!😆

V r not playing relay race😛...dt v two will write alternatively😛 Nope...not a relay but this was a 'forceful' reminder for you to post your next work asap!😉

Looking forward to more stories from u. Just as soon as an idea strikes!😃
Love Tapasi😊

Edited by paayaal - 7 years ago

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HighOnSarcasm

@HighOnSarcasm

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#98

Originally posted by: rilsaf
It's so beautiful Payal.
It's very touchy story. Their past connection was so pure and beautiful. Ali's pov was beautifully portrayed. I can clearly feel Ali's pain. Poor soul he want to take his life. But our angel changed his mind. I like this chapter very much. Awesome update👏 good story always end in short time.
Iam eagerly waiting for Ur another beautiful concept.

Hey Safana,

Thank you so much!😃

M so glad that my words were able to convey Ali's pain clearly!

😆😆 I like writing short stories...I have a very short attention span!😉

I'll be back as soon as a good idea hits me!😃

Love,

Payal.😃

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srinithi

@AgnesFan

Sparkler

Posted: 7 years ago

#99

Unfair to end on a cliffhanger 😒

My guess was correct about Ali. Fate was already cruel to him and he was just adding his misery to feeling guilty and responsible for his parent's death . My heart goes for him !

Avni is someone who can give love unconditionally to everyone though she has a rocky life . Even in show she was the strength of Ayesha and played a mother to her at times . The girl always gives in spite of her own miseries and was a bundle of joy . She could make others smile

Ali knows everything about both and has talked to their parent's too . Wow ! Ananya and Neil's work is gonna be so easy . A typical big brother 😃 His hands must have inched to smack brains into Neil 😆 Wonder how did he control his urge and played with them for three long years. There is always a fun in making your sibling jealous only when it doesn't go the other way