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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Globetrotter_me

That sounds really gripping. I am guessing some PTSD kind of thing. Both the mothers seem to be pivotal. Please update soo. :)

Thank you so much for those encouraging words. Yes, she is suffering from PTSD, why, how and all details will be revealed in the forthcoming chapters. Both the mothers have a role to play, an important one.
I'm excited and nervous at the same time, because this is the first time I'm writing out of my comfort zone. Just be a constant source of support, if I falter somewhere.
Love,
Nivi
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thank you so much, Chavi.
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AvNeil SS ~ Entwined Destinies


Instalment ~ 1


"Avvu, I'm getting married yaar. A romantic number for us please. Rhea requested Avni, singer of the day. Clad in an elegant white chikankari kurti with baby pink palazzo pants, Avni smiled and passed her a flying kiss from the stage.


"Consider this to be your wedding gift, Rhea. Wish you a happy married life.


"Dil kahe kahaniyan pehli dafa

armano mein rawaniyan pehli dafa

Pyaar ko pehchana ehsaas hai yeh naya With closed eyes, Avni began strumming the guitar strings. Traquility spread in the entire cafe as everyone sat hypnotised with her melodious voice.


Suna hai, suna hai...

yeh rasm-e-wafa hai

Jo dil pe nasha hai

who pehli dafa hai. (X2)


Kabhi dard si, kabhi zaed si

zindagi benaam thi

Kahin chahatein hui meherbaan

haath badh ke thaamti.


She looked across the audience. Most of them were regular customers to the 'Chamko' but an intense pair of eyes intrigued her like none else did. He stood near the counter, with a soft drink in his hands, a smile on his lips. His eyes were enigmatic, dark brown chocolate eyes with specks of amber, she could see from afar. Her gaze was fixed on him as she sung the next few lines,


"Ik who nazar, ik who nigaah

rooh mein shaamil iss tarah

Ban gaya afsana ik baat se pehli dafa

paa liya hai thikaana

Baahon ki hai panaah...


Growing conscious of her surroundings, she withdrew her gaze from him and quickly ended the song singing last few words of it,

"Suna hai, suna hai...

yeh rasm-e-wafa hai,

Jo dil pe nasha hai,

wo pehli dasha hai.


A round of applause rang in the cafe as the song came to an end. Gracefully, she walked down the podium accepting the appreciations coming to her from all sides. She looked at the counter but the man was gone long time back. Sighing, she walked to Rhea's table with her guitar back in its bag.


"Thank you so much, Avni. Rhea gave her a tight hug which Avni reciprocated with equivalent emotions. Greeting Abhay, Rhea's fiancee, she dragged a chair and sat on it.


"You were wonderful on stage, Avni ji. He praised her singing skills.

"Feel free to call me Avni or...like Rhea calls Avvu. Apnapan jhalakta hai. And thanks for the complement. Avni finished off with her signature smile.


"So, Rhea how does it feel to get hitched to someone? Avni asked, biting her cheek to stop her smile. Among the two, Rhea was the hard-core romantic who loved watching mushy movies and believed there are fairy-tale lovestories. When she was having a sort of one, Avni could not help but pose the question.


"The feeling is incredible. Getting married to the person you love, it is unexplainable, Avni. Woh jazbaat bataya ya sunaya nahi ja sakta, sirfmehsoos kiya ja sakta hai.


Avni smiled seeing the couple lost in their own paradise. Seeing the way Abhay gazed at her bestie, she was sure he would keep her happy, safe and contented with him. If not, what are besties for..She chuckled at her thoughts.


"Avni, what are your future plans ? Abhay's questions brought her back to the reality.


"Not much. I'm already a successful senior reporter in Mumbai Today. Want to get a blockbuster story. She replied sipping onto her hot chocolate topped with whipped cream. She loved it, especially the taste of chocolate that lingers in her mouth. Old habits die hard, she sighed taking another sip. It's not her fault that she has a sweet tooth since childhood.


"Great. Avni smiled at Abhay's exclaimation.


Her vibrating phone in the pockets of her pants changed her gaze. She pulled the device out and attended the caller.


"Coming home, maa. Fikr mat karo. She ended the call. Waving at everyone, she picked her guitar bag and walked out of the cafe. The road buzzed with people and transports, but when had it not. So rightly is Mumbai known as the city that never sleeps. Her home from the Chamko cafe was a walkable distance of five hundred metres.


Vrishabh; a multistorey apartment with fifteen floors height accomodating about twenty families. Avni saw the packers and movers truck outside the gate, as she walked to her house. Unlocking the door, she shouted,


"Home maa. until her eyes fell on the guests who were seated on the sofa. She quickly greeted the lady with a smile and sat there on the opposite couch keeping her guitar bag beside her, making sure the lady felt comfortable. Her mother, Neela, came outside from the kitchen with two plates filled with snacks. She placed it on the coffe table and sat beside the lady. She initiated the conversation, introducing each other,


"Avni, ye hai Shwetha

"Shwetha, ye hai Avni, meri beti.


Avni smiled at Shwetha, greeted with folded hands. Shwetha smiled and nodded at her.


"You shifted here just now? Avni asked.

"Haan. came a reply from Shwetha.


"Shwetha, have the snacks. Neela forwarded the plate to her friend who declined it politely, saying,

"No, no Neela, it's absolutely fine. I met you here, so just thought to visit. Mera beta aa jayega abhi thodi der mein.

"Jab tak wo aa jaye, tab tak kuch khaa lo. Aur mere paas kya formality kar rahi hai, haan. Neela faked anger forcing Shwetha to pick up the khatta meetha mixture plate and have some from it.


"What's your son's name? Neela suddenly popped the question.

"Neil


Neil...Avni repeated it almost unconsciously, as the name seeped inside her system.


The bell rung for one more time before the residents opned the door. Shock, would be an understatement, when Avni found herself drowned in the same mysterious eyes.


"Neela, this is my son, Neil. ACP. Neil Khanna. Shwetha prodly exclaimed. Neela smiled, before waving back at her.

This person with engimatic pair of eyes is Neil. Nice to meet you. Avni thought, smiling. Closing the door, she walked back to her room.


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Good, bad, worst, horrible. Let me what you felt by dropping a reply in the comment section.

Signing off,

Nivedita


Edited by Aphrodite_NV - 7 years ago


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Posted: 7 years ago
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So, Neil and avni are neighbours. And already "ankhon hi ankhon me baatein" shuru?? Can't wait for their interactions.
A really well written first installment. You have me hooked to the story!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Globetrotter_me

So, Neil and avni are neighbours. And already "ankhon hi ankhon me baatein" shuru?? Can't wait for their interactions.

A really well written first installment. You have me hooked to the story!

Thank you so much for the quick comment. @bold- 😆 Something of that sort. Took up a track from the serial and penning it down in my way, this is just the beginning.
Love,
Nivi
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Loved it. Love at first sight. Waiting for next update.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Veenapain

Loved it. Love at first sight. Waiting for next update.

Thank you so much, Veena. Not love at first sight, not at all. It's just that Avni is mesmerised by Neil's eyes. Avni, in my story, does not have belief in love and all that stuff. The next would be in few days, can't promise though, new year parties you know.
Love,
Nivi
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Posted: 7 years ago
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I'm Sri 😉
Avni is a singer ? I love Atif Aslam😃
I thought Rhea is getting married to Ali .
So Avni and Neil are neighbours .
Any girl would fall for Neil's eyes 😳 Avni isnt an exception. I loved the fact that attraction is from Avni .
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Forgot to attach the pics for the chapter. Below are the pictures for better understanding,
Avni's guitar,


Apartment,


Living room,


Avni's bedroom,


In case someone was confused, these pics will be of help to you.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: AgnesFan

I'm Sri 😉

Avni is a singer ? I love Atif Aslam😃
I thought Rhea is getting married to Ali .
So Avni and Neil are neighbours .
Any girl would fall for Neil's eyes 😳 Avni isnt an exception. I loved the fact that attraction is from Avni .

Hello Sri 😊. Atif Aslam, gosh I will die for his voice.che is awesome, ain't he? Well, I haven't thought much of Ali for now, but yes I will surely introduce someone, kawar thodi naa dekh sakte hain 😉 .Well I love Neil's eyes ( technically Zain's eyes 😆). Aag dono taraf se lagi hai, fark sirf itna hai ki ek ne bola aur doosra chup hai.
Love,
Nivi

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