Two can play at that game- Avneel ff PART 5 on page 6! COMPLETED

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How dare she? How dare he? Jab main Ali se hug karti hoon, he stops me, because bebe aur uski maa mujh par shak karenge. But when he does it with that no good for girl, Dolly, it doesn't matter. "They know she's my best friend. They won't mind." My foot. Police wala hain nah, sexist toh hona hi tha. I should have known. Aur what sort of name is Dolly, kisne doll dekh kai kahe hai, our daughter should be named after that.

Avni gave one last look at the two "best friends", before stomping to her room, not noticing she had stomped past Bebe. Bebe followed her, and saw her sit down on her bed with frustration. When Avni noticed bebe, bebe was at the door with a smile on her face. Avni stood up straightening herself to look presentable to bebe.

Ab bebe kyun itni khush hai, iss bar kya musibat main phisangi.

"Ananya bahu, mujhe paata tha ki tum meri half-angrezi half-hindi medium bahu ki choice ho nahi sakti. Mere Neel ki pasand hon," Bebe smiled at Avni as she herself sat on the bed, gesturing Avni to follow pursuit.

Avni smiled awkwardly back at bebe, wondering what was it this time that pushed bebe's sphere into this side of her daily Newton's cradle of "Yeh kiski pasand hai?" drama.

"Ananya bahu, mujhe pata hain ke tum aur Neel naya zamaana se hon. Modern zamaana se hon. Lekin shaadi sirf ik normal se rishta nahi hain. Uske saath tumhe hak milta hain. Ab mujhe pata hain ki main kuch zaada hi shak karne lag gi thi tumhaara aur tumhari bhai jaise dost Ali kon. Aur yeh Neel aur Dolly bhi uss tarah hi dost hain. Lekin tumhe uski nazdeekiyan pasand nahi hain, toh tumhare hak hain ki tum Neel se yeh zahir karon apna gusse, apni jalan. Tumhare hak hain, tum uski patni hon. Jaise woh kehta rehta hain na, wifey hon uski. Tum samajh rahi hon nah meri baat."

Avni looked blankly at bebe, although she wanted to express to bebe that she wasn't jealous of Dolly, bebe did make a good point.

"Ji bebe. Main samajh rahi hoon."

Neel ka phaisle tha ki who mujhko yeh shaadi mein kedh kare. Woh ghar ghar khed na chahta hain, toh meh woh hi karoongi. Wifey kehta hain nah mujhe. Dear hubby, ab yeh wifey se hi tum chootkara chahonge.

Avni got bebe to talk through some ideas. This way, she wouldn't get bebe mad and have to deal with the reprecussions, but still get her way out. By the end of this, Neel Khanna would lose at his own game.

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"What should I call him, hubby or baby?" Avni mused to herself, preparing for her sugary veiled attack.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice concept..I would love to see it onscreen...plz update soon
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Lovely.
I m waiting for jealous Avni's attack on hus hubby.
Write soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Part 2

"Neel, kya main tumse baat kar sakti hoon, she interrupted Neel mid conversation with Dolly. Avni bit her inner cheek to keep herself from smirking. Wifey banke dikathi hoon Mr Neil Khanna ko.

"Abhi, Ananya? Neel asked, wanting to carry on hearing Dolly's escapades with her boyfriend.

"Hain abhi, Avni replied. Neel looked back at Dolly, apologizing for the sudden interruption.

"Neel!

"Haan,baba, aata hoon. , Neel responded exasperatedly. When they were out of earshot, Neel stopped and asked Avni to tell him whatever she wanted to talk about so urgently to him.

"I was thinking about our marriage, what you said and what maa said. So tum jeet ge. Tumhare phaisle hain ki hum ye shaadi kon continue on kare. So hum karenge.

Seeing Neel's facial expressions of confusion at her words brought amusement to Avni, but she reminded herself that she had to hide it. She had to make its seem real. She could see the clogs turning in his mind as he was trying to register her words. Bechare, Neel.

"Kya main jaan sakte hoon about your change of heart all of the sudden? Neel responded, looking around if anyone was able to hear them.

"Abhi toh kahe maine. Maa bhi kari ha to carry on with the relationship. Tum bhi khoobh koshish kar rahe hon. Toh main kyun nahi.

"Okaayyy, wifeyy. Yeh toh khushi ki baat hain, na. We're both on the same page, Neel dragged out. He looked at Avni skeptically. Avni knew the police wala brain her husband had, he knew she was upto something. But he wouldn't be able to guess what it was.

Avni smiled back at him and Neel looked back at her with confusion. Walking Neel back to Dolly, Avni decided to sit inbetween Dolly and Neel. Neel bit his lip and kept quiet, busy making sense of the situation. Avni put a fake smile and got ready for the act.

"Sorry Dolly. Main who karoos biwi ko jaisi nahi hoon. I just needed to talk with my hubby about something important. Tum samajh sakti hon na, Avni apologized with an overly sweet tone, emphasizing on the my hubby' part enough to highlight it without making it too obvious. She held onto Neel's hand momentarily to further drive the point.

Keeping her face facing towards Dolly, she used her peripheral vision to gauge Neel's reaction. Neel silently repeated the word hubby in bewilderment. Turning her attention back to Dolly, Dolly had started yapping about how she didn't mind and how she wanted to get to know about her.

Avni smirked. This would be perfect. As she talked to Dolly with fake enthusiasm, she took every opportunity to touch Neel mid conversation. His skin felt hot on hers. Or maybe it was her own hands that were warm. Whenever she did it, Neel will momentarily stop, and inhale a sharp breath. He'd gently maneuver it off without making it obvious, but she knew it was affecting him. He was slightly sweating. Dolly also noticed the hand holding and the touches. She mentioned how sweet both the couple were together. Avni smiled. Atleast Dolly understood her place. Avni shook her head. No, she did not just think that. She just had gotten into the jealous wife character.

Before long, Neel stood up abruptly from the conversation and excused himself 'for work'.

Bhaago Neel. Yahin toh main chahti hoon.

Little did she realise until Neel was gone that Avni's own hands had began clamming up too. His skin felt foreign to him. Although she had touched him, held him countless times, it felt different. But Avni reasoned it was because these touches were orchestrated, they weren't natural. So her heart beat was beating irregularly too.


Edited by Affinity - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: pri12

Nice concept..I would love to see it onscreen...plz update soon

already updated part 2. Hope you enjoy it.
It would be so interesting if they show this onscreen, it would be full of the same expressions of Neel was making on the "suhaag raat" episode.😆
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Originally posted by: vu1998

Lovely.

I m waiting for jealous Avni's attack on hus hubby.
Write soon...

written😆
her jealousy will grow later as the story develops😉
Edited by Affinity - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Affinity

already updated part 2. Hope you enjoy it.
It would be so interesting if they show this onscreen, it would be full of the same expressions of Neel was making on the "suhaag raat" episode.😆

Part 2 is also amazing...Specially the touches😆😉Loving this one
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Beautiful part .
I really love jealousy scenes.
I could imagine Neil's expression.😆
Thanks dear. Do write more.
I actually enjoy you way of writing👏
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey nice to see a jealous Avni... Ur amazing at writing. Do continue this...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vu1998

Beautiful part .

I really love jealousy scenes.
I could imagine Neil's expression.😆
Thanks dear. Do write more.
I actually enjoy you way of writing👏

thanks lovely. I get nervous whenever i write an update to a story because I don't know if its good or not. Or progressively gets worse or not. So your kind words mean everything to me.😊

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