Avneil ff: Jealousy. Part 2 updated Pg 3 (19/5) - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
#11
Oh wow👏
This was absolutely amazing😃
Wonderfully written⭐️
Jealous Neil is such a treat👍🏼
Eager for the next part😃
Continue soon please
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Posted: 8 years ago
#12
This was a delight to read!
I re-read it twice!
Please update soonish?
I cannot get this out of my head!
*winks*

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Posted: 8 years ago
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in the back of m mind, i hope this is exactly how the scene tomorrow takes place or sometime soon 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome..well written..loved it..😛
would love to watch this scene in the show too..please continue soon..😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
#15
Excellent description of Neil's feelings. Do continue...
Posted: 8 years ago
#16
This is really excellent👏 very well described that I can actually feel Neil's jealousy. I'm sure (hoping to be right 😆) Ali & Avni was talking about Avni's identity & Neil misunderstood them😛. I'm looking forward to reading next chapter. Please continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I like jealous neil...
Very interesting part...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dude you need to continue this. Ali was asking ananya about her being avni and not proposing her as the Dumbo super cop thought! Lol poor guy, he wants to punch or arrest someone in frustration 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This was great!! I could actually imagine all of this happening. Please continue.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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# Neil pov

I walked furiously, my mind replaying the conversation between ananya and her fake mother.

He's a very sincere cop.
I respect him
I trust him.
He has saved me so many times, I owe him.
I trust him with my life.

So much for tall tales.
When someone speaks about you so sincerely, don't you naturally expect some loyalty.
I shudder. Do I want ananya to be loyal... Or love me?
What does this have to do with the case? Do I... Love her?
No! That can't be possible. My heart belongs to her... No one else
Never again! I think gritting my teeth.

I come to a halt as Ali grabs my hand by the elbow. He turns me towards him just as ananya joins us as well. She's holding Ali's arm. I flinch.
Why do much PDA?
I turn away my head in disgust already trying to rein in my irrational anger.
The worst part is I know I'm being irrational.
" Neil, please don't tell anyone about us... I can explain." Ali starts and I am irritated. If he can't be honest about his love for her than he doesn't deserve her.
Hadn't I thought ananya did not deserve Ali. How did the tables change?

I glare at him. " If you can't be honest about your relationship. If you can't tell your family you love ananya... How the hell can you hope to deserve her?"
"What?!" Ali starts and I start to hope in that split second as well. Maybe I misheard. I cross my fingers instinctively.
"Wait Neil its not what your thinking..."
"Actually" ananya cuts him, tugging on his sleeve and slipping her hands into his. She continues looking at him even as she says " Neil, I don't doubt his love, but he's Muslim and I'm Hindu. Our parents don't have a problem with that but." She looks at me, " your mother in law might. And we d like to keep it under covers at least till I'm staying here. We love each other a lot. And it's going to be hard but, I really want to reform Amol before I leave from here."
Each of her words seems like a septate bullet wound. I sigh.
Why do I care? Maybe it's because I'm hurt they didn't tell me. " Fine. I won't tell anyone anything."
I turn on my heel and start walking away, knowing that no matter how much I want to avoid seeing ananya with Ali, I must still keep a close tab on her movements. I briefly wonder if the task would be as torturous as the thought of seeing them together is. Surely it can't hurt more than this. I feel an acute sense of betrayal and feel shocked at the depth of the emotion.

Why do I care?

I stop in my tracks. The best medicine to get rid of something, is to become immune to it. And to become immune, one must over indulge. What better way to get rid of this queasy feeling than to embrace it gave first?
I turn towards the 'lovers'. They were facing me as though they were watching me, waiting for me to leave.
"Congratulations." I murmur, before stalking away, thinking baby steps Neil. It's always a start.

As I walk towards the house I hear Ananya squeal in delight and walk faster. I have heard enough for today.

Avni's Pov:
When I saw Neil, my heart stopped. Was this the end? Had I failed my mission already?
I look at Ali running after Neil and feel curiously numb. Neil was a good guy. Surely he would understand. He might even help me I think.
I run behind Ali catching up with him just as he grabs into Neil.
Neil won't even look at me. And when he turns away I can't but help notice the coldness in his eyes. I immediately give up on the idea of taking his help. Sure that no matter how much I trust him, he would never return the favour.
So when he misunderstands the situation I grab onto the lifeline like a drowning woman. Stop ping Ali before he reveals to much. I throw in a bit of extra words knowing how suspicious Neil is and try to make our excuse as authentic as possible.
Telling him I love Ali is easy. Because it is true. Only not in the way he thinks.
I watch as he bites out an affirmation, instinctively knowing he doesn't approve. When he wishes us congratulations he sounds even more colder. But I put it down to his distrust of me. He probably thinks I would hurt Ali. I almost snort at the thought. Ali is the one person I would die before hurting.

" So you love me?" Ali asks grinning and I smile back.
" You know I do." I wink at him and he lifts me up swirling me around and I laugh in pleasure and surprise.
" I missed you Avni" he says a little seriously before putting me down.
" I know" I say hugging him, " I missed you just as much. We have a lot to talk about Ali." I say looking up at him.
" and talk we will, for a long time" he says. We make our way to his cage and talk the whole night. Planning our next move and discussing the past.
Today I don't feel as alone as I do, I think as he dozes on my lap, safe in the knowledge that we love each other the same way. Safe in the knowledge that we can fight together. I smile at him before sleeping off as well.
Edited by asitbegan - 8 years ago

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