My Angel BeHir FF IF_NC_ENTRY Ch 13 on Pg 44

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Maria

@Maria.Jewel

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+ 4

Posted: 6 years ago

#91

aww how beautifully you wrote that scene where Bela still longed and hoped for her mother's care and affection.

So Bela has challenged her mother? Lol i cannot wait to read further :D

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fortitudeoth

@fortitudeoth

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Posted: 6 years ago

#92

Beautifully written!

This explains a lot about the characters.

I'm sure Behir will bring out the best in each other very soon. I think we will get see a different side to them when they are with each other

Update SOON! 😆

@Maria, it's always good to see you reading Ash's stories.

@all, thank you for your kind words about my comments 😭

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sonie singh shrivastava

@sonie32

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Posted: 6 years ago

#93

ash there were some scenes where i was🤣

first when maahir thought abt his first special wali kissi ruined by some stranger girl woh bhi around 50 strangers ke samne 🤣

and other one was this🤣🤣

Andy... OMG!! He is Andy Sehgal's son? Shit! What did I do? God!! This is a disaster! You are dating Andy Sehgal right? Oh no! I accidently ended up kissing my step brother. That's so ewww.

🤣🤣

and yess i just loved behir's sleepless night wala part👏👏

i'm seriously loving this version of behir😳

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Maria

@Maria.Jewel

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Posted: 6 years ago

#94

Originally posted by: sonie32
ash there were some scenes where i was🤣
first when maahir thought abt his first special wali kissi ruined by some stranger girl woh bhi around 50 strangers ke samne 🤣

and other one was this🤣🤣
Andy... OMG!! He is Andy Sehgal's son? Shit! What did I do? God!! This is a disaster! You are dating Andy Sehgal right? Oh no! I accidently ended up kissing my step brother. That's so ewww.

🤣🤣

and yess i just loved behir's sleepless night wala part👏👏

i'm seriously loving this version of behir😳

Yes i forgot to mention that Mahir thinking of his first kiss was so CUTE!!!

And just loved Bela's humour🤣

Thankyou Sonie for reminding me of these scenes❤️

Ash you are doing a fab job with the character building👏

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behirlover

@behirlover

Dazzler

Posted: 6 years ago

#95

HEY ASH

so another chapter

Behir caught in emotional turmoil they are sleepless craving for the love of their loved ones. Waiting to be appreciated and accepted by them for whom and what they are rather than being pretending all the time.

mahir dont like discussing about girls and their hotness level and ya knowledge and intelligence( well he is not the only one even i think knowledge and intelligence is way more sexy than looks) what will he think after they get together😆😆 he loves his own world he made friendship because they dont judge unlike people and they never fails to amaze. Even though he was in such an environment and with andy being around he chose not to become like him he knew what is right and what is wrong great maturity on his part though. Bella robbed his first kiss itne armano pe pura ka pura cold water dal diya. nerdy and not interested in girls wala boy had dreams about first kiss really???????????? waise it was with special someone only but it will take time to realise.😳😳 he admiring guts but awkward about it 😆 bold bella will give him tough time ahead and not only shirt he will loose many things to her.

bella this girl she does all the nonsense and be rude to janvi so that someday even for scolding her janvi will acknowledge her as daughter show authority on her and not plan and do everything for a meaning. will janvi ever mend her relationship with bella. she kept bella only to mint cash from omkar i really want her to realise this how much she hurted her daughter and at some point she should atleast give some attention to her selflessly. and this omkar uncle is he not going to play any role here other than being sperm donor. lack of love has turned her into such a bitter person. you know what i wanted to tell this in previous replies that your bella reminds me of veronica of cocktail even she had so many friends but she was all alone in that sea of people. she has coolest group so many boyfriends but no one is close to her.

I feel both behir will help each other and secure their vulnerability with love and care and may also help each other in getting the love they crave for. they both can be weak and strong for each other at the same time. this relation is definitely going to be awesome in many sense connecting with each other at whole new level. i am really eager to read how the ice of no relation changes into something for them.

bella reads and knows her mother so well. And she thought mahir as step bro 😆 this girl is something else reading also that thing made me 😲😲😲 and here she is 😆😆😆 and asking janvi to keep her in loops of changing boyfriends i am telling you reading bella will be so much fun. so now mahir is screwed for good although he will be literally later but for now poor guy he got caught because of his father. and janvi is real mean here.

ash i really love how you toy with the characters change them completely from one FF to another and every transformation is so detached from the other they are just connected by names otherwise totally different. this is some really good work and great thinking on your part to come up with a story so fast and make it look so convincing and changing a whole perception about it that is really great girl you deserve all the appreciation for it.

amazing work girl and i cannot wait to read ahead this is so exciting 😆😆

thank you so much

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#96

Originally posted by: nuomi.riceball
Any update?

Yes. In some time. First I will answer all the comments. 😃

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: humtumsalman
awesome

Thank you so much!! 😃

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#98

Originally posted by: nuomi.riceball
A very angry and bitter Bella. It's a pity that she has to led a life without her parents. They are there alive and living close in front of her, yet, due to circumstances they are but so far away. Life is hard as it is; it is even harder without the tender caring love and support from parents. Deep down in every child there is a dream to please and get approval from their parents. Being denied parents' love and approval just hurts very much. Not being able to call your family as family, and being forced to call them a stranger in life. That deep pain must have hurt to another level.

Hopefully things will get better for Bella. Really looking forward to your next update. Please update soon.

Yes Nuomi it is difficult to survive without your parents. But if they are dead, you at least comfort yourself that had they been alive, they would certainly have looked out for you. But knowing that they are alive and not bothered about you is like dying a slow painful death everyday. It is tragic how some parents place career above all. I know some people who have done that. Of course this is a story and hence i have dramatized things but this is not too far from reality.

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The.Wanderer

@The.Wanderer

Rocker

Posted: 6 years ago

#99

Originally posted by: behirlover
ASSSHHH

HISSS

ANOTHER FF🥳

Yes I am back!! 😳

Finally hum aa gaye

sorry for being late though but i promise to make it up with my reviews
new ff angel why i feel the vibes of devil from it😉😉

It's fine. Your unconditional support more than makes up for your late arrival. 😃
Devil Bella and angelic Mahir. My dream combo. 😈

Bela the ever so sober shy and angelic bella is perfect bad girl drinking smoking and boyfriends now this will be game changer atleast she wont hesitate to take initiative 😆😆😆

Taking an initiative is never going to be a problem with her. You will see.

bella background story so much negligence she can buy everything she wants except for the one thing she craves. mother daughter duo hate each other one for bringing her in this world and other for coming in this world. and how much painful it is to see your own parents thinking of you as a mistake regretting you and not even acknowledging you. total role reversal of everything you wrote till now all have switched sides mother daughter the most loving to most great start girl. devil's attitude and ho so hot shot babe

Most of the times parents are responsible for how their kids turn out. I work with kids day in and day out. I work in a theatre company that trains kids and produces their plays. I have seen kids being exactly what their parents are. My job is to train the and also manage them. Parents play a very imp role in a kid's life but sadly the quality of parenting is declining these days. I remember one look from my mother would shut me up. That was the discipline level. But these days parents just don't bother disciplining their kids.

One incident. One woman was busy chatting with our director and her daughter was bawling right besides her and then when the woman did not pay any attention the girl started running around and screaming and the woman did not say a single word to her daughter.

So parents play a huge role in the way the kids behave.

mahir is the mahir of show but is completely new. Although some characteristics are same but highly scared vulnerable. complete nerd loves books and mom. inpe gana banega ek kitabe bahot si padhi hongi tumne kabhi koi chehra bhi tumne padha hai. i can already visualize mahir's sweating face and bella singing for him. does he plays also violin? i would love that.

I might just end up including this scene. 😆

andy and sumi are same

Yes. But Andy is not so bad here. He is simply a dry guy who can't express emotions and is disappointed in his son, He is not a manipulative bas***d when it comes to his son.

jahnvi totally opposite will omkar ever have a role in bella's life.

Nope, Omkar has no role to play. He will Bella's ATM crad and nothing more.

so finally a role reversal story and you have no idea how much happy i am for the fact that you are writing a new FF

Even I am happy that I am participating.

behir are vulnerable both are seeking recognition from their loved ones in their own way. both trying to prove that they were not mistake but they are what they are.
now what is the meaning of messing up their life for good i know it will be there for sometime but they will be together i hope.

Yes they will be together. Eventually. 😈

all the best dear for this competition in which you are participating and we are all going to support you unconditionally no matter what and wherever you participate oyr good wishes are with you.

Yeah i do know that. This fandom will have my back. ALWAYS. Like Snape like ALWAYS. ❤️

winning or loosing is part of game but remember one thing for this fandom you will always be the winner undoubtedly.

Awww. That's sweet. 😳