FF:Roadies ka naya Hungama uptd! Prt 10 Pg 5 - Page 2

I now that nobudy has commented but still I'm updating..well that's my duty...comments or no comments!! But yeah I obviously wan comments 😊

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Conversation getting cntd:-

D: Chori kahan madame?? yeh lijiye aapke paise (hands over 3 bucks)

Anm:Shukriya

She takes her huge amount of luggage and somebody just goes past her n everything falls off!!

Before he could escape..she grabs him by his arms..turns him towards her
He's wearing sunglasses..a white shirt @ blue jeans.

Anm:(Giving him a time 4 revenge look) Dekhke nahi chal sakte hai??
Guy: Sorry I just dint notice you're der...wz jus a mistake..erm sorry
Anm:angrezi main baat kar legi to maafi mil jayegi tujhe??
Guy:Dekhiye aaisi baat nahi hai... mujhe hindi acchi tarah se nahi aati aur main aapke saat accha pesh aa raha hoon lekhin iska matlab yeh nahin hai ki aap kuch bhi kahe
Anm: Chal chal..jaane do...waisw bhi..main tumhare jaise longon kii muh to lagti nahi
Well guess hu that guy wz?? No prizes 4 guessing tho..watevah ure answers are PM it to mee
Clue: He wz a part of Roadies 5.0
N Yeah each person can answer only once and can give only 1 ans.

Cont wid d story......

Anmol heads towards the other Roadies.
Shambavi,Ankita,Ayaz and Varun are givnig her a "what a weirdo" look!!

Anm:Voh kyaa hai naa ..mujhe sachai ke raaste par chalna zyaada accha lagta hai..agar Rs.3 extra huye the to main de deti...lekhin nahi huye the..isliye main kyon du??

Aguy 4m bhnd: Haan Anmol mujhe pata hai tu de deti

Everybody is staring at that guy.

Anmol notices that the voice sounds somewhat familiar.
Anmol turns her around n she has her mouth wide open.

She runs to him n hugs him

He in turn also gives her a 'jadoo kii jhappi'.
Anm:Vikku tum??
Vik:Haan bubli..tu kaise hai??
Anm:Yaar main badi changi hoon..

Vik:main bhi bada changa hoon 😉
Anm:lekhin tm aur yahaan??
Vik:kyon main Roadie nahi ban sakta kyaa??
Ankita:(interrupting in the middle):tum dono ek dusre ko jaante ho??
She was shocked because how could a cool guy like Vikrant like a weirdo like her??
Vikrant and Anmol were too busy in their conversation to reply to Ankita
Ay:(reply to Ankita) ek dusre se itne acche se baat kar rahe hai to jaante honge hii...awl u hafta do is just use some brains!!
An: (putting her hands on her hips)Did i ask u?? Or u hv a problem of poking you're nose everywhere?
Ay: U just got jacked...swallow that!!
An: I n getting jacked? u mst be dreaming..aint u??
Shambavi n Varun bugged of em fighting
Varun finally stops em.
Var:Chill out guys!! Abhi hii ladoge to game main kyaa karoge
Ankita and Ayaz stop fighting look at each other,then look somewhere else again.
Meanwhile Vikrant and Anmol come towards em.
Vik:Guys..this is Anmol..shes my childhood frnd.Actually what happened is I shifted 5 yrs ago to Delhi.So lost touch with her.. n nw..
Just then Anmol stops him
Anm:Ruk yaar...kyaa angrezi main bakhte jaa rahe ho?? yeh long apne hii hai yaar..Hindi samaj lenge..aur waise bhi tujhe bhi Hindi nahi aate kyaa uss ladke kii tarah( D guy who made her luggage fall)
Vik:Voh main... 😳
Nw Ankita interrupts him.
Ank: aaur 5 saal main itne badal gaye Vik??
Anm:chup kar! (looking to Vik) isne tumhe itna ghatiya shabd se bhulaaya aur tum chup ho??
Vik:voh maine hai isse..
Anm:(interrupting him):tu rehne hii de..main sambhalti hoon(looking at Ankita and the rest of them)Isse to Vikku bhulaane chahiye...Apna Vikku yaar!!
All:Haan Vikku hii bhulayenge(giving a fake smile)
Vikrant is a bit embarassed by being called 'Vikku' but doesnt say anything.
All are moving towards their room.
The girls are going to the gals room and the guys are goin to the guys room.
Evrybudy reaches their room except Shambavi.
Varun comes out and sees Shambavi distressed .
He goes to see what's wrong.
Var: kyaa hua??
S:I'm not able to lift this bag!!Its too heavy.
Va:Let me try
S:Noo,its okay!
Va: Do u consider me a frnd??
S:Hmm yeah but..
V:No but..just let me try
He takes the bag but notices that there are wheels at the bottom..soo he just pulls em out and takes the bag smoothly
Shambavi is standing there embarassed. 😳
Va: bas itni sii baat!!
S:(embarassed)Haan...voh maine dekha nahi
Va:haan pata hai(smiling)
S:Btw thnx!!
Va:No thnx in frndshp!! (smiles again)
Shambavi loves his helping nature.She smiles at him and leaves.
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Well guys that's it for now.
I'm looking fwd 4 a few comments @least!!
I feel really bad when I do'nt see them...even if u do'nt like it please tell me that!
I noe it's quite booring but it will become intresting later and yeah obviously with ure comments!!

Aishwarya

hey there i read through your fan fic and its great i think you should keep working on it and see what works for you. so far from what i have read its hard to follow what is going on, try putting in more details like where the ppl are what they are doing. try to imagin every thing in your head and try discribing every thing like the clothing they are wearing and dislikes and likes.

i really like the base of the story just add more details for it to be more easyer for the reader to picture every thing in their head as they are reading. i really dont want you to give up on this keep going! 😊

Originally posted by: Rejected

hey there i read through your fan fic and its great i think you should keep working on it and see what works for you. so far from what i have read its hard to follow what is going on, try putting in more details like where the ppl are what they are doing. try to imagin every thing in your head and try discribing every thing like the clothing they are wearing and dislikes and likes.

i really like the base of the story just add more details for it to be more easyer for the reader to picture every thing in their head as they are reading. i really dont want you to give up on this keep going! 😊

Thnk u so mch 4 commenting..thnx 4 d suggestions too...as I'm writing a ff 4 d 1st tym I don rilli noe ow itz done.n yeah ill try 2 follow ure suggestions. I love ure FF:Suicidal..itz rilli nyc...n m happy u read my FF..thnx a lot again!!

hey this is very very gud

Originally posted by: mehrosh

hey this is very very gud

Thnx😊

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Precap-

Va:No thanks in friendship

Shambavi loved his helping nature ,she smiled and walked away into her room

*****Next Part****
Next Day Shambavi is the 1st 1 to wake up.. she is yawning .She is wearing a blue n white night dress.

There's a knock on the door and she goes to recieve it

She finds a man holding a cell and is dressed like a waiter..well that's what it seems to her!
He hands her the cell and she takes it from him.

Theres a message 4m Rannvijay:-

Rannvijay: http://www.thehindu.com/fr/2006/09/08/images/200609080129040 1.jpg">

RANNVIJAY:Roadies come and meet me @ the lawn in front.

Shambavi 1st thinks of waking up the girls and then getting ready.
1st she tries to wake Anmol up... who is sleeping with her patiala and top on!
S:Anmol..utho..jaana hai hume
Anmol gets up a bit irrated and angry
An:Kyaa yaar?? itni subah-subah kaun uthta hai??
S:uthna padega kyonkii Rannvijay ne bhulaaya hai
Anm:kyaa??!! teek hai..chalo chalo
She gets up quickly grabs her towel and clothes and rushes into the shower.
S:(thinking) Great! She just rushed in without even asking me! Awesome! Just awesome people out here!
Meanwhile,Shambavi wakes up Ankita.
S:Hmm Ankita we've got a call from Rannvijay !
Ankita gets up annoyed @ Shambavi.
Ankita grabs her towel and just then Shambavi stops her.
S: Hmm Ankita.. If u do'nt mind can I go after Anmol?
An:Huz stopping you anyway?

Shambavi again has that "what kinna people out here" thought!
****In the Boy's Dorm*****

Everybody got the message and are ready.
They were a bit faster compared to the girls

Varun was dressed in a simple black shirt with blue jeans.

Vikrant was in skinny blue jeans with a half -buttoned white shirt

Ayaz was wearing a vest kind of grey top,with a black jacket sort of thing and black pants.

****In the gals Dorm****

Anmol had aldready come out who was trying to put her belt properly because of her jeans which were kind of loose 4 her.
She was wearing a typical pink top which said "Keep bubbling",it had bubbles all over and she had ksin-tight jeans on.
Shambavi also came out in no time with a long kurti and black jeans.

Ankita was dressed in light blue plain but stylish top and blue jeans.
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That's all for now. I'm expecting comments from you people. I know its quite boring but your comments are the only thing which can improve it.As it's my 1st FF I'm not that good.I have tried to improve by Rejected's comments.ope I have.
Plzz comment
Aishwarya

hey i have to say alot more improved you should keep this up. this time when i read it i was actaully able to picture what was happening around, you have a good story going on. every time you wright a new part try putting more and more deatails in more and you will see the improvment. i have to say this part was amazing keep up the good work 😊

Originally posted by: Rejected

hey i have to say alot more improved you should keep this up. this time when i read it i was actaully able to picture what was happening around, you have a good story going on. every time you wright a new part try putting more and more deatails in more and you will see the improvment. i have to say this part was amazing keep up the good work 😊

Thnx 4 commenting..n yeah I'm happy I've improved 4m ure advice.. n yeah Ill try better nxt tym..

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RECAP:
Shambavi also came out in no time with a long kurti and black jeans.

Ankita was dressed in light blue plain but stylish top and blue jeans

NEXT PART:

All were ready to meet Rannvijay...being their 1st Roadie-type-of meeting

R:Welcome Roadies..Ow's it feeling being here??
RO:Kool!!(shouting)
R:We're not gonna strt right way.. even you need a break..so tomorrow we're going to start ..bt bt bt..Today you will be having a dinner party sort of thing.
RO:Wow!!
R:bt I wo'nt be joining you in this party as it's 4 you guys to know each other better .You know why we need to know each other right?

All of them give a sweet smile

They were very excited.It'll be so cool to know each other.Well everybody was looking fwd to know somebody or the other well.
R:Roadies.. know you can get back to your room

They all are going back to the room

ON THE WAY:

Anm: Itna bolne ke liye mera accha khaasa neend bhigad diya uss Rannvijay ne (pronouncing his way in a stupid manner)

Nobody reply's to her comment wich Anmol is quite upset with as she is'nt used to this kind of behaviour.
She also thinks of behaving the same way.

Anm:accha chalo main Vikku ke paas jaati hoon

Ankita is taken back about why she's so close to Vikrant.
Shambavi is quite cool about it.
S:Kool...byee.

Anmol just runs away going to the boys room.

BOYS DORM:

We can see there's full silence evrywhere and all te boys are gathered together and are concentrating on one pen rotating.
Then it stops.Its pointing to Varun and Vik.
All the boys look at them two.
Ayaz finally breaks the silence.

A:Okay...Varun you got to answer and Vikrant you got to ask.
Vi:So wat do you choose,bro?
Va:DARE!!!
Vi:Cool guy,huh? Hmm I'll give you a dashing dare.
You have to propose to one girl in the dinner party..stay close to her throughout and keep flirting with her n yeah everybody should realize that you're in love!!
A:bt huz d girl?
Vi:That's exactly what I have to think about.
Then we suddenly see somebody screaming "Ankita" from the doorstep.
Anmol was making her presence felt as she entered itself.
All guys:What??
Anm:Arre Ankita hogi voh khudi (with her typical Punjabi accent)
Vi:Mast idea Babli!!
All the guys noticed how Vikrant changes in front of Anmol.
Ay:So bring it on??What say bro??(looking @ Varun)
Va:Yo!!
Anmol was a bit dissatisfied seeing their language,staying in India! But just the feeling of having Vikku here did'nt want her move away.
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PRECAP:
Shambavi was shocked.
How could such a nice person like him like a arrogant girl like her?
Shambavi was really shocked and a bit sad

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That's all for today.Hope you liked the part.N if u did'nt also do'nt hesitate to tell me.That's how I can improve.Your comments are the only things that can improve the FF.
Plzz comment
Aishwarya

great idea nd this part is tooooooo gud