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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi my lovely MRD forum friends,
We had a power failure for an hour just now, and I was free thinking about raj and kranti, suddenly slowly slowly this poem formed in my head, I do write poems sometimes, so thought it is just made for my MRD forum friends, so here you go:
Sunye Rajveer ki prem kahani, usiki zubani:😊
Logo k bheed mein jab dekha tumhe pehli baar
Ankhon ki junoon bata raha tha desh keliye tera pyar
Achanak dil, dil se poochne laga
Kya yahi hain wo jiskeliye aya hain tu saat samundar paar😉
Kuch dil pe zor kar ke, kuch zimedari ka boj sehke
Nahin samaj paya tera dard, teri zakhmon se anjaan hoke
Socha yahi tak tha shayad mera tumhara saath
Door kardiya tumhe khud se, zalmon k haath chhod k
Par Qismat mein tha shayad humara phir se milna
Ek pavitr bandhan mein humara achanak se jurna
Kiya tu tha saath saath rehne ka vaada
Par do alag soch hone nahin diya use poora😕
Achanak jaise qudrat ko manzoor huwa humara rishta
Barsaat ka har boond le kar aya pyar ka anmol tohfa😃
Socha shayad is baar hojaye humari kahani poori
Par mera nasib phir se chhod diya use adhoori😭
Par ab baat pehle jaisa nahin raha
Dil pe ab mera koi zor nahin chala
Ab tu bas ek hi tamanna hain zindagi mein
Bhar do apna pyar tumhare dil ki har gali mein..........😳
Hope you guys like it, I'm sorry I'm not indian, my hindi might not be that good,and might have mistakes , still thought this to be only for you guys......ur valueable comments are badly awaited!😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: saba_saiel

Hi my lovely MRD forum friends,

We had a power failure for an hour just now, and I was free thinking about raj and kranti, suddenly slowly slowly this poem formed in my head, I do write poems sometimes, so thought it is just made for my MRD forum friends, so here you go:
Sunye Rajveer ki prem kahani, usiki zubani:😊
Logo k bheed mein jab dekha tumhe pehli baar
Ankhon ki junoon bata raha tha desh keliye tera pyar
Achanak dil, dil se poochne laga
Kya yahi hain wo jiskeliye aya hain tu saat samundar paar😉
Kuch dil pe zor kar ke, kuch zimedari ka boj sehke
Nahin samaj paya tera dard, teri zakhmon se anjaan hoke
Socha yahi tak tha shayad mera tumhara saath
Door kardiya tumhe khud se, zalmon k haath chhod k
Par Qismat mein tha shayad humara phir se milna
Ek pavitr bandhan mein humara achanak se jurna
Kiya tu tha saath saath rehne ka vaada
Par do alag soch hone nahin diya use poora😕
Achanak jaise qudrat ko manzoor huwa humara rishta
Barsaat ka har boond le kar aya pyar ka anmol tohfa😃
Socha shayad is baar hojaye humari kahani poori
Par mera nasib phir se chhod diya use adhoori😭
Par ab baat pehle jaisa nahin raha
Dil pe ab mera koi zor nahin chala
Ab tu bas ek hi tamanna hain zindagi mein
Bhar do apna pyar tumhare dil ki har gali mein..........😳
Hope you guys like it, I'm sorry I'm not indian, my hindi might not be that good,and might have mistakes , still thought this to be only for you guys......ur valueable comments are badly awaited!😊

it was very well said amazing poem really touched ................me
Ab tu bas ek hi tamanna hain zindagi mein
Bhar do apna pyar tumhare dil ki har gali mein.
it will take a while but am waiting and m liking creatives listen to us amazing work...👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
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WELL DONE YAAR! vry sweet poem...........u sprd MAGIC wid ur words

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Posted: 16 years ago
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wowwwwww thanks friends I didn't know u will like it this much, t hanks a million.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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saba its great yaar.
the words are appropriate believe me yaar.
its awesome.
you know what its full of emotions yaar.
plz keep sending this kind of poetry.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: bhawna_dhunna

saba its great yaar.

the words are appropriate believe me yaar.
its awesome.
you know what its full of emotions yaar.
plz keep sending this kind of poetry.

Thank u sooooo much my dear, of course I will keep writing for this forum, I'm glad I can participate with something in this forum........😳😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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buddy what a brilliant poem and what an emotion aisa lagta hai ki tumne dil ke kamal se yeh poem likha hai kaun kahega ki tumhe hindi aati bhai mein totally fida ho gaye.

Originally posted by: saba_saiel

Hi my lovely MRD forum friends,

We had a power failure for an hour just now, and I was free thinking about raj and kranti, suddenly slowly slowly this poem formed in my head, I do write poems sometimes, so thought it is just made for my MRD forum friends, so here you go:
Sunye Rajveer ki prem kahani, usiki zubani:😊
Logo k bheed mein jab dekha tumhe pehli baar
Ankhon ki junoon bata raha tha desh keliye tera pyar
Achanak dil, dil se poochne laga
Kya yahi hain wo jiskeliye aya hain tu saat samundar paar😉
Kuch dil pe zor kar ke, kuch zimedari ka boj sehke
Nahin samaj paya tera dard, teri zakhmon se anjaan hoke
Socha yahi tak tha shayad mera tumhara saath
Door kardiya tumhe khud se, zalmon k haath chhod k
Par Qismat mein tha shayad humara phir se milna
Ek pavitr bandhan mein humara achanak se jurna
Kiya tu tha saath saath rehne ka vaada
Par do alag soch hone nahin diya use poora😕
Achanak jaise qudrat ko manzoor huwa humara rishta
Barsaat ka har boond le kar aya pyar ka anmol tohfa😃
Socha shayad is baar hojaye humari kahani poori
Par mera nasib phir se chhod diya use adhoori😭
Par ab baat pehle jaisa nahin raha
Dil pe ab mera koi zor nahin chala
Ab tu bas ek hi tamanna hain zindagi mein
Bhar do apna pyar tumhare dil ki har gali mein..........😳
Hope you guys like it, I'm sorry I'm not indian, my hindi might not be that good,and might have mistakes , still thought this to be only for you guys......ur valueable comments are badly awaited!😊

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Saba Dear, it's awesome 👍🏼 and who said your Hindi is not good? You have written R's feelings very appropriately.

We hope to see such stuff from you every now and then.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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👏👏👏
👏i agree with everyone.. its beautiful😊..do post poems more often.. its really great to have creative people like u in the forum😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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thank u sooooooooooo much my lovely friends, I'm so happy u all liked it......

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