Originally posted by: a little faith
Aashi,
I was on a much needed break from IF, but I am sad that I missed this, so in an effort to capture the past, I am posting my reply now. 😳
Just beautifully written, as deep as the ocean and flowing wondrously the like. Like water from above, heaven sent and scented with rejuvenating life!
Just as the wave cannot exist for itself, but is ever a part of the heaving surface of the ocean, so must I never live my life for itself, but always in the experience which is going on around me. Beautifully expressed, true we can not live independently of our surroundings, and just as much as they affect us, we affect them too.
For some people, things are easy to reach. Almost effortless, almost look like its written in their destiny, and they are just born to a thing so easily.and for some life is not easy at all and i can say roller coaster ride or so much unexpected I loved how you pinpointed a universal complaint. The why of the wait. In this way you make broad strokes and yet carve niches. Skillfully done.
The lonely wanderer, who watches by the seashore the waves that roll between him and his home, talks of cruel facts, material barriers that, just because they are material, and not ideal, shall be the irresistible foes of his longing heart. This was most impressive, I just loved this insightful part. The view before us is but a reflection from our own hearts. My pain stems from my own self, my own aspirations. My heart's lens sees only the wasted potential refracted through its own glass dreams.
evening covered with darkness of clouds ,and sun setting behind the edge without brightness, winds blew fast and on beach standing one person his heart and mind fighting with emotions and it can hear clash of both but couldn't understand the battle inside him Just beautifully written. Without brightness almost as if they had given up, no fight which excellently contrasts with that turmoil within him which is wondrously penned by you. I loved that last line.
there were thoughts in Dr. subhash's mind who was seeing sun setting and disappearing from edge , thinking life always tested him with each and every experience ,he saw his life to stand to get happiness to sadness , moving on as always ,he saw seashore ,and sea , its destiny of sea , on seeing it ,it looks so beautiful and peaceful but in inner side of sea filled with mystery , we don't know what 's in its inner side and can't predict as well , sea has a heat inner side but we can't see as well but we can feel only when we touch its inside we can feel it and his life became same way with in his life best moments to worst and with rising his life again I loved how you accentuate that to and fro of the sea, with that back and forth of this thoughts. Expertly done.
he was blessed with everything best in his life , wonderful and successful career , one best wife he got in his life , best daughter he got but they were like one soothing air in his life which blossomed his life and then spreading their fragrance they went too far where he never reached to them Wonderful. True, as parents we give them strength to stand upon their two feet AND walk away. It is happiness but sadness too.
he always wanted one princess in his life as daughter and his wife gifted him their symbol of love Ria , Dr . shubhash's life his dream Ria , True, we are only princesses, or royalty whilst our parents are alive, and after they leave we are reduced to common folk, as we really always were, it is just they never let us feel otherwise. Excellently noted by you, adding a detail that makes this piece altogether deep and wholesome.
where he first time felt helpless he was Dr but he himself couldn't do anything to save her , but he gathered courage to be father Subtle twist, very exceptionally added by you. It really brought the whole piece together.
darkness of clouds was fading away and sun sets in edge but with one ray of hope of tomorrow's rise In that stillness of the blackest part of the night, the sun begins to emerge.
Beautifully written, Aashi, very poetic and very insightful. With much love, Sabah
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