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Sabah

@a little faith

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#21

As organizer I remain the only one unable to vote SO instead I wish to comment on aspects I liked of each of the pieces. Not that I flatter myself, anyone cares, I wish to and NOT out of a sense of duty but in search of beauty. 😳

Entry number one. Aeitbaar

I loved the manner the writer states college to be life but at the same time weaving it in as an embellished part of the whole picture. Then that teasing, tempting line but wht life actually holds at the moment Nicely done. ⭐️

I JUST LOVED, loved how the the writer manages capture our ability by our thoughts alone to change how our present environment affects us, through those memories that burn, smoulder, warm what lies at the hearth of our hearts, which they do with this beautiful descriptive line, memories of our strange togetherness. True, we are alone for such a long time that when we do give ourselves up to be a part of a union it feels strange. Sure we were a part of unions before, but with people who we had known since forever, but to give oneself to a completely new entity, a stranger, as hinted by this line, feels like the weird part of strange. However as the writer moves on, .strange relationship…n strange confessions…..they bring in all connotations of that word, so that we are intrigued at the prospect of discovering something different. Nicely done! ⭐️⭐️⭐️

Ya I speak loads of lies to u …the feeling u always caught them is more bigger then the punishment lords hold for me for lying…..Beautiful moment, wonderfully noting that even our Lord forgives those white lies we say to endear our beloved, and here in the weird manner that only he knows how. 😳

I love the manner the writer gives the reader a little to solve the story BUT then adds more mystery so that in fact we are further from knowing the truth as we read on. Skillfully done. i know I was making u uncomfortable…but so I know tht its mayb the last time im seeing u…@bold nice detailing. ⭐️

I had lots more thn this living inside me of urs…..u promise to take care of urself…haina…Haan, I agree, for the bigger, the significant part of love is wanting the other happy EVEN if they are not a part of our life. ⭐️ Beautifully brought in. ⭐️⭐️⭐️

The favourite part of the piece, U asked to touch me…I felt sumthng broke inside me…the way I was holding myself strong….the way u were holding urself….all was fading away…That public persona we mask ourselves in, here to protect ourselves from pain BUT feelings know no borders, no bounds, they feel weaves our hearts together, so here as the outward finally mirrors that inward that artificial seal breaks. Vivid! ⭐️⭐️⭐️

That heart wrenching hug was so beautifully described but this detail showcases the writer's excellent detailing ability and insightful character, i can feel ur hiccups too near my ears Just beautiful! ⭐️⭐️⭐️

.we live inside each other so wht not with each other….Poetic and beautiful! 👏 Then that layering of pain that layered in this love DIDN'T actually hurt. " ur heart is too much filled with her love mayank…u even don't have place for urself….

but sorry ms nupur..your eyes stile talks with me only 😳 cute moment, allowing us to pause amongst the depth of feeling. Excellently done! ⭐️⭐️⭐️

Heart twisting end. A piece full of intensity that never lets up, and that is no small feat. Wondrous! 👏⭐️⭐️⭐️ With love Sabah

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aashi

@aashizin

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#22

my vote goes to third one very nice hon loved it and all did superb job 😳

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Payal-15

@Payal-15

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#23

i liked all but in particular i enjoyed Entry no 1, 3 and 6

1 becoz it showed me the power of love...how it was healing yet emptying...it was a whole of a life story clubbed in a single piece👏

3 becoz i thoroughly enjoyed reading every single line of it...seriously it was the same MN story yet different...it had all the chars yet just MN...it had pain of separation still the ecstacy of reunion...it had all the emotions of Mayank n all of those of Nupur too without showing complete light to her...i loved the ease with which the writer has potrayed all...Brilliant!!!👏

6 becoz it had deep emotions of Mayank...those emotions which were one doesn't even confess to self ver easily yet that depth was caught by the writer perfectly...n really i loved writer's vocabulary👏

but i guess m gonna vote for Number 3...coz i found it the most enjoyable for me...loved how MN ended up just where they started off or is it how they started off just where they ended😳

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jiya

@--jiya--

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#24

Firstly, thank you so much Sabah-di for organizing this OS contest. It was a very good even to stirr up some activity in the forum, and I was waiting eagerly for the entries to be published. All the participants have done a commendable job, but as per rules, we can recommend only one. So, before declaring my vote, I would like to convey to each writer about what I liked about their piece.

Entry No. 1 Aetibear

It was like, a journey of a lifetime, put together in just few words. The writer portrayed every emotion so beautifully, the wait, the trust, the dilemma, the guilt... every single moment was expressed with an extra-ordinary grace that infused serenity in the reader's mind. In simple words, it was beautiful.

Entry No. 2 U, Me aur Hum

The first stanza, the description of being in college, it was truly commendable...hats off to the writer for that. I just can't help but quote:

College bole toh....a place to learn...a place to get to know new people...a place to spend some great times with friends while still having the rim of focus on the career...a place to start putting a boundary for our life in this good and bad tactical world...in general it means all this..

Yes, college does mean all of it...

The story unfolds in a very sweet manner, giving us a glimpse of the companionship and love of Mayank and Nupur, our very own MayUr. Their cute ruthna-manana that was once a part of our lives... this story was fully identifiable to the Mr. and Mrs. Sharma we would have loved to see in the show.

Entry No. 3 Waiting For You

The best part of this story for me was the way the key phrase "College bole toh" was blended in it. College held a significance in all of their lives, for Diya it was masti, for Uday, it was Canteen, but for Mayank, it was only Nupur. The emotions that he had hidden in the deepest corner of his heart for 10 long years, surfaced today because of this simple phrase... and the wait of a lifetime was blessed with a blissful end.

The writer weaved the story in very simple words, which were enough to strike every chord of my heart. It was a perfect story, not only the-Mayank Sharma-perfect but actually the-Mayank Sharma and Nupur Bhushan-perfect.

Entry No. 4 Milke Bhi Hum Naa Mile

A beautiful story of silent love, love so strong that it gave Nupur the strength to live her life with just one memory of the man she loved, her Mayank.

Entry No. 5 This is True Love

Again a very sweet story, composed very nicely. The idea of Kashish narrating her parents love story was really touching as well as cute. She very nicely described how much her parents loved each other. When she lost her voice, she didn't want to hurt her beloved, perhaps she thought she would be a burden on him, but he silently proved himself, that no matter what happens, he will always love her.

Entry No. 6 Mayank Saint Sharma

This piece grabs attention mostly because of the extremely powerful vocabulary of the writer. The intrusion of Nupur Bhushan in Mayank Saint Sharma's prude and perfect life and turning it into a whirlwind, was described exactly the way Mayank would have put it. Kudos to the writer for doing such an extra-ordinary job.

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So, finally, all said and done, my vote goes to entry no. 3😊… because that was something I would regard as "Simply Beautiful" However, I still think every piece of writing out there deserves to be the winning entry. So, all the best to all the writers who participated.

~jiya~

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2kul4u

@2kul4u

Explorer

Posted: 14 years ago

#25

all the entries were beautiful. congrats to the authors who penned down such lovely os. entry no.3 touched my heart most it was the best of the lot

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459718

Suspended

Posted: 14 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: a little faith
@ Ambreen,

Dil se thanks for your comments, I will surely make sure the participants read it. I am sure they will appreciate the time you took to laud the merits of each piece.

I am truly grateful also since it reciprocates that effort that they took to write it. Friendship, no matter how mild is about give and take.

Ambreen, you are a true friend. God bless you.

Love Sabah

Sabah Appi.

There is no need to thank me, i have only done what i thought was the right thing to do. I also appreciate the writers for taking out time from their lives to write these beautiful OS's for us.

I had a wonderful time reading each of them. And i just want to say that i'm also grateful to you also for coming up with this idea, it surely was a treat for all of us and your efforts to bring this contest to being is all appreciated very much. Thank you.

Keep Smiling.

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Natasha

@Naughtynatty

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#27

Its hard to decide buh yeah my vote is for Number 3 !!!

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sonu

@MagicLantern

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#28

frankly I don't read a lot of mayur ff's & even if I read the start they rarely manage to catch my fancy & end up giving up half way through but the third os managed to keep me engaged all through ….it made me want to know what happened to the protagonists …… so my vote goes to the third os……..