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Posted: 15 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: mehak03

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EDITED..ok guys i have written a scene..😛

this is the first time after re-union when MAYUR enter thier home, gunajn and samar have left and now both of them are alone oi thier home..Nupur is looking at her home with longing eyes...a simple smile on her face..

M..kiasa laga?

N..haan?

M..ghar?

N...*smiles*...bht acha hai...

M.....yaad hai jab main bengalaru ja raha tha aur hum date pe gaye thye, tab us shed main tum ne mujhe bataya tha k tumhe kaisa ghr chaiye...main ne bilkul wiasa hi banaya hai..

he held her hand and took her to the curtains..

M..ye dekho bilkul waise hi bari bari windows aur in pe parde...

he then moved towards the lounge..

M..ye dekho sab se bara tv liya tha main ne...aur ye dekho kitchen..

he then took her to the kitchen.

M...yahan pe sari machines hain...bus coffee - maker nahi hai...

nupur was smilinga nd admiring her dreams which were standing in front of her...

M..ab main tumhe hamara kamra dikhata hon...

He took her hand and they both went in thier room...

M..dekho hamari shaadi ki picture...kaisi hai nupur...

N...bilkul sapno jaisa hai sab kuch...

Mayank realsied that nupur was very quiet, she was just staring at everything..It was him talking all bout the house but nupur was just staring..

M..umm nupur..

N..haan?

M..dinner kia karo gi?

N...kuch nai...

M...aisa kasie kuch nai..kuch tu kha lo..

N..nahi...

She was still staring at thier marriage picture..

M...acha world ki best coffee piyo gi?..

These words made her turn towards mayank, her eyes fuilled with tears......she wanted to speak but couldnt..

M..tum change lkar lo, main coffee lata hn...

Nupur wiped off her tears and siad..

N..wo mera samman tu..

M..arey haan..

he held her hand again, and took her to the cupboard and opened it fro her..

M...ye tumhre kapre.
..
and then he left..

Nupur gently touched her clothes...it was all her things she owoned three years back...thier gentle touch made her cry again, but she took aher night suit and went to change...

Mayank entered with the coffee and nupur was standing in the window...

M..here madam!...

Mayank had a smile o his face and nupur was lost into it, she held the cup..

M..main bhi change kar leta hnon..

Mayank went to change and nupur took a sip...it was the same flavour...the same taste..the same LOVE...she held the cup tightly...and brought it close to her...she was crying and she drank it in one go!..

Mayank came back and saw nupur with the empty cup..

M..nupur itni garam coffee pi bhi li?

Nupur was shocked at his question, she didnt even realise that it was HOT...all she felt was MAYANK's LOVE, she wanted it to feel it to its fullest extent so drank it in one go..

M..nupur?

N..haan?..umm..wo nahi...itni garam nahi thi...

Nupur turned her face, she didnt wanted to revel her tears..mayank wanted her to talk..

M..nupur...tum mujhe se koi baat nahi karo gi...

She turned..

N..ahh..wo main kia kahon?

Some thing broke inside mayank, the girl who wanted no reason to talk now couldnt utter a word from her mouth...the pain she had been giong through had completely changed her..his bubbly talkative nupur had turned into a silent girl...whose eyes just conveyed pain....

He went close to her..

M..mujhe batao gi nahi k tum ne mujhe kitna yaad kiya hai?

These words broke nupur...this was the question she herself couldnt answer...tears were dwelling in her eyes.....but she turned her face, she wasn't able to gain the strength to face mayank.,..

Mayank turned her face towards him...

M...pehle zara sa kuch hota tha tu kitna bolti thi k mujhe ye ho gaya , wo ho gaya..aj nahi batao gi k kitna dard saha hai?..

Nupur was looking into his eyes...she wanted to speak but words weren't cordinating with her thougts...her lips were trembling to speak but the immense pain inside her came out in the form of tears.....

mayank brought her a bit close and she clucthed her shirt and paced her head on his shoulder and started crying...mayank gently brushed her fingers on her head...she tightly held his shirt in her fist...she was continously crying....mayank could realsie that she wanted to speak but was helpless...all he could hear between her sobs was,....

N...main.....wo...mayank.....

he made her sit on the sofa but nupur didnt leave her shirt, niether did she lifted her head from his chest....she went on crying and mayank went on brushing his fingers on her head, her sobs slightly fainted and mayank saw that she fell asleep..he wiped off all the tears from her cheeks, he knew that his nupur was completely shattered...and he had to RE-BUILD HER!

hope u all like it..😊 omg totally rocking mehak!!!

i was actually feeling what you are trying to say!!!


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Posted: 15 years ago
#82
thank u so much mona...🤗
Edited by mehak03 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
#83
mehak..............brilliant ideas girl...............👍🏼
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Posted: 15 years ago
#84
mehak that was an awesome scene!.......i loved it.....i hope we get a nice scene like that.....naina
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Posted: 15 years ago
#85
hey guys!

i have written one more scene..😛.actully it is in continutaion with my previous scene..so those who havent read it so it is on pg 1:😛

Nupur gently opened her eyes and she found herself on mayank's chest and holding his shirt, she gently let her fist loose and maynk also realised that she has woken up..

M..good morning..

Nupur got a bit confused a..she smiled weakly..

N..good morning...

She tried to lift her head but her hair were stuck in mayank's shirt buttons..

M..ik minute..dehan se..

Mayank tried to remove them and nupur was staring him, they were so close that nupur herself titled her head away in shyness...Mayank removed the hair and nupur stood up..she realsied that she has been sleeping all night n mayank's chest...she was feeling embarssed..

N..sorry...

Maynk wasnt expecting this, he was busy removing some broken hair of nupur from his shirt when nupur said this..he stood up..

M..kia?..

N..wo meri waja se sari raat sofa pe..mujhe pata hi nai chala ..sorry..

Mayank looked straight into her eyes and took a step towards her..

M..kis baat pe sorry bol rahi ho?..sari raat merey itney kareeb hone k liye?

Nupur lowered her eyes , she was out of words...

N..nahi...wo...

he moved a bit more close and nupur was now looking on the ground when mayank gently said.

M..please nupur, tumhara haq hai..merey kareeb hone ka, mujh se dard batne ka...

This made her look staright into his eyes...again a tear dwelled,

M..acha bus bus..ab emotinal batien khatam karte hian...tum batao kia break fast karo gi...main banata hon..

N..kuch bhi...

he wasnt expecting this, he remebered how much long list nupur used to give him whenever he voluntereed for making the breakfast, he felt very weak ..

M..ok...

he went to the kitchen and nupur went for a bath..

When nupur reached the dining table, mayank had made aloo parathas and nupur sat down and started eating it, myank was standing in the kitchen observing her ...and he was shocked that nupur was eating it!...

actually mayank had placed a burned paratha just in order to make nupur fight with him, and taunt him the way she used to do, but this time she was quiety eating,it was the third bite she was about to eat when mayank held her hand,..

M..nupur ye kia kar rahi ho?..ye jala hua hai!..

N.. koi baat nahi...

She again began to eat, this time a tear dwellled in mayank's eye...he had never seen nupur so compromising, she had forgot to retailiate , to question, to argue..

M..pagal ho gai ho..jala hua khana khao gi...

he removed the plate and brought another one...

M..kia ho gaya hai nupur, mujh se pocha ku nahi k jala hua khana ku diya main ne?..

N..koi baat nahi...mujhe addat hai..wo dhruv..

She suddenly stooped...as if somedbody sealed her lips...

M..dhruv kia?

Nupurs hands started shivering..

N..kuch nahi...

She started eating again..

Mayank wanted to ask but he wasnt able to, nupur was so sacred...so he himself left the question.

After the breakfast she went into the room, mayank followed her, she took out her diary and was begging to write when mayank held her hand...

M..ye kia kar rahi ho?

N..wo dairy likhne lagi thi...

M..ku?

N..wo teen saal se main ne is main hi sab kuch lika hai..jo bi main feel karti hon..

M..ku?

Nupur wasnt able to understand mayank's question,

N..ku k main aklei thi..

M..exactly!..tum akeli thi is liye diary likhti thi..

He moved forwards an held her hand..

M..ab bhi akeli ho?

this made her close her eyes...tears again started flowing from her eyes..she tightly held the arm of the chair she was sitting..

Mayank sat down on his kness and held put his hands on nupur's..

M..dekho nupur main tumhe kisi chez k liye force nai kar raha...main bus tumhe itna yakeen karwana chata hon k ab tum akeli nahi ho..

Se looked at him with all teary eyes...

M..tum jab b mujhe batana chaho bata sakti ho...bus ik baat samajh lo ab tumhe apni feelings share karne k liye be-jaan chezon ka sahara lene ki zarorat nai hai...

He smiled gently and closed her diary..he wiped off all her tears..

M..Ok ab main college ja raha hon, sham ko milte hain..ok...

Nupur smiled weakly..

he left and nupur was sitting there thiking that mayank was really making her feel his love and support but it is not easy to forget those three years...

She was sitting alone and again crying...

N..main kia karon...mujh se nahi buhlaya jata wo sab!

hope u all like it...😃

part 3 on pg 14..
part 4 on pg 15
Edited by mehak03 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
#86
mehak.........u are on a roll...........😆
will comment after reading the scene..........😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
#87
Mehak...You are such a beautiful writer...I really want to see the very first scene where Mayank shows her their House and describes how it is designed as per her wishes...

Awesome OS in Pg1 n Pg12
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Posted: 15 years ago
#88
mehak...........just awesum.......specially that sleeping on the chest part.......☺️.
and that diary part is too touching.........hope cvs show such scenes yaar........😔
u know........i also imagined the same morning scene..........
😲😛
😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
#89
Mehek, woww gal u are writing so brilliant shots........

I really wish, we get to watch 'em in show, just so touching yaar. And i loved the 2nd one. I really want this in MJHT, Nupur all changed and Mayank would bring life back in her. That same Bubbly Nupur, the other name of life.

Awww it left me just too emotional yaar. Brilliant writing!!!!

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Posted: 15 years ago
#90
mehek,really a fantastic,👏heart touching scene u gave us...wow u made me feel nupur's pain with ur words....,it reminded me the lovely "mere haath mein seq".....i hope to see this beautiful scene in mjht..wonderful..
just luv it 😳
Edited by anuluvsgeny - 15 years ago

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