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This is one of the best OS I've read in IF........ amazing the harmony and herarichy of events, the words you used to discribe the characters........ the idea in whole is original and different........
But I noted that like you start to feel tired as we approach towards the end......... there is one part where I felt that you could describe it better, where Gunji got hint fro that girl........ I think it should be more emotional....Honestly, you showed a superior talent that what I've seen from MJHT cvs in their most tracks.......Keep it up girl, you made my day by your touching OS
thnks a lot dear, ur review truly made my day😊
i will try to get better n better with every OS of mine, just need my dear friends to support me d same😳
Am glad that u noticed this part of the OS n pointed it out, actually i wanted to elaborate n write with more depth, but as i was limited to gunjan's pov...i had to write it this way.
There's a contrast in the diary entries before n after the relapse.
After the relapse she would just write abt the Big things tht made quite a difference to her, like the young girl's death, it affected her, so she mentioned only a part of it..she didnt elaborate her emotions or feelings, when she got married she just mentioned it, she didnt go into details coz the thought of not living the next day...the fear of death n seperation kept her away from feeling too deep, she was exhausted n tired...n thts why u felt so...i even tried to give a glimpse of how she's behaving towards samrat n all....she mentioned she doesnt speak much, just smiles....well as a writer there were so many things i wanted to elaborate..but i was afraid i was making it too long
m glad i cud manage that😊
n MJHT CV's honestly no comparison m not tht gud....just a beginner.
thnks for reading n ur honest review, truly treasure it🤗
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