Julun Yeti...(JYRG) thread no. 6 - Page 105

Originally posted by: rupali.patil80

Aata mazi kahi majaal PM chya against bolayachi 😆, pan swastha mazyane basavnar pan nahi 🤣

sadhya ithe PM chi parayane chalu aahet 😉, I still remember her poker face expression during Babaji-Erandel track 😔

@Nachiket...
tuzhya DP madhali black cat kunala dole vatarun ghabaravate ahe??? Vichitra la ki Prajaktala nav thevanaryana 😛 😆

Hi!

I have penned down a small os I.e. One short story in two parts ... And that too in Marathi ... Tutki-futki ... I would like to post it... But after somebody reviews my Marathi ... Otherwise it would be like a big mess ...

Any volunteers For reviewing it ?

Originally posted by: Smiley_23

@Nachiket...
tuzhya DP madhali black cat kunala dole vatarun gharavate ahe??? Vichitra la ki Prajaktala nav thevanaryana 😛 😆

@Lucky...

you can PM ur OS... me vachen... but vil take a day or 2... as right nw i m in office ani evening hving guests at home...

Originally posted by: Smiley_23

@Lucky...

you can PM ur OS... me vachen... but vil take a day or 2... as right nw i m in office ani evening hving guests at home...

Ok great.. Me too in office and write up in lappie ... Will pm it to you tonite ... Check out if you can send it by tomorrow eve as I will be travelling from Saturday till Wednesday for official purpose ...

Originally posted by: Nachiketj

Dusri goshta LPs acting is definitely good..but marathi shabdochhar phar vaeet ahet...ajibaat shudhhda nahiyet..te khatakta. PM is ahead of LP in that front.

Soon we will be on thread 7.. new year ch kahi celebratio asel ka.. ad md chi ohm trip dhakhavtil ka.. tey nakki kute gelet asa dhakavtil.. md ni anniversary ch kahich surprise ka nahi dila.. ase mala prashna padale aahet..

Finally Lalit ni majya message la reply kela.. man mein laddo fute rahe hain... so happy i am..
Dil dance karna chahta hain..

Hi guys and gals...

As i said.. i have penned down a two part OS... 1st part posted here...

Your appreciation and rotten tomatoes accepted whole heartedly... pardon me for my tutki futki marathi (being a south indian)...

Hope you all enjoy...
@ smilie... sorry had to directly post as i have to travel tomorrow.. for work... on sudden notice...


OS: HISHOBH PART - 1...

Aditya sitting in his room playing game on lappie... Meghana enters with ironed clothes...

Meghana: Aditya.. aik na...

Aditya: hmm... still playing game..

Meghana: tujhya kade paise aahe ka re... majhya kadche paise sample aahet... mhanje thode aahe.. pan garaj padli tar tevdhe naahi purnaar...

Aditya: still playing game...naahi ga.. mala pan ATM madhun paise kadhave lagtil.. udya kaadhto...

Meghana: udya... arre... magchya veli mai kiti ragavle hote... athavtoey naa... mala chance naahi ghyaycha aaahe... tu ek kaam kar.. aaj sutti aahe.. tar jaa aani paise gheun ye na please ...

Aditya: hmmm... udya karto ... aani tasa hi...tu kadhi paasun mai la evdha ghabarte.. ti kaahi hitler naahi aahe... so chill...

Meghana: ho...ka? Magchyavelch visarla vaat ta...

Aditya: meghana... disturb nako karuga game madhe.. ek tar kiti divasanantar khelat aahe me game...

Meghana: Aaditya...kaay he... arre tujhyashi bolat aahe me... bagh jara... nana market la gele aahet... tarkari aani fruits ghyayla... aani amit dada pallav aani mayur la gheun park madhe gele aahet... aani tu sakal paasun game khelat basla aahes... uthna aaditya... kaahitari kar...

Aditya closes his laptop and says arre... he bara aahe... nana na karmat naahi ghari.. mhanun te navin kama karayla shodhat astat... aani.. amit dada vadil honaycha kartavya karat aahe... aani... me kaay gets up from his place and takes meghana in his arms and says... me kaay vaatach baghat aahe...kadhi majhi baayko free hote kamatun aani with a mischievous smile.. says.. vaatach baghat aahe...ke kadhi me... aaplya baayko barobar thoda romance karu...

Meghana: ho... he bara aahe... aadhi sutti hoti tevha mala madat karaycha.. pan aata... tujhyavar prem aahe mhantlya var... madat jau de... tar... game kheltana disturb karte mhane... fakt romance chya veli aathavte me...

Aditya: uff... itna gussa? Aani te pan ituklya naakavar... te raag kasa shaant karaych mala maahit aahe... aani..

Meghana: aaditya... mala kalat aahe tula kaay mhanyach aahe .. pan gets out of aditya's arms and says...strictly tujh he goad goad bolna naahi chalnaar... jaa aani baherchi kama karun ye aditya... and turns back and smiles...

Aditya:arre... udya aanto naa meghana... aaj sutti aahe ... aani mala baaher jaayala bor hot aahe... aani aatach jevan jhala aahe ... toh meetha toh banta hai na boss... with mischief in eyes...

Meghana goes near aditya... and says.. adu...sagla kalata aahe mala... pan naahi.. aata jaa... please

Aditya thinks... adu...hi meghana majha kahi aiknaar naahi aani asa premane bolun mala baaher pathavnaarach aahe... aata mala pan... he pyar wala shastra vaaprava laagel... puts his hand on her shoulders and says... bara madam,... jaato...

Meghana smiles and says so sweet...

Aditya: smiles and says.. ho sweet tar me aahech.. pan... majhi ek condition aahe.. pahile tu mala kharachacha hishobh de.. mag me jaato...

Meghana: Aditya... aata he kaay navin..

Aditya; he kaahi navin naahi aahe... aata jasa office madhe hishobh thevto aani vicharto... tasach ghari pan vicharayla paahije...

Meghana: hmmm... bahane...

Aditya holds her close to him and asks... Her romantically hishobh thevte naa tu meghana...jar nasel hishobh tarihi chalel...kaahi harkat naahi... fakt jurmana bharna padega... and shows his cheek with his tongue...

Meghana puts her hand over Aditya's shoulder and says... acha... by the way me Regional Head Mr. Aditya Desai chi baayko aahe... CA nasel tarihi gharchi accountant mech aahe... removes her hand and gives a sheepish smile and says... accounts pan maintained aahe... tu ek kaam kar... accounts check kar... mag... jaa ATM la... and moves towards cupboard...smiles and thinks...

Gharchya saglyana lahan baal hava aahe mhane... haach ek lahan baal aahe... kiti natak aani bahane karat aahe... na jaanyache... aani.. and gives a shy smile... and removes the book and in a serious tone gives it to Aditya... and says.. ho visarle hote... jo paryant tu.. accounts check karshil me ghari lagnaarya saamanachi list banvun dete.. gheun yeshil... haa please...

Aditya: arre... pan nana gele aahet naa..

Meghana controls smile and says.. ho pan tarkari aani fruits aanayla...he ghe book aani check kar...

Aditya smiles and thinks.. kiti nakhre karshil meghana ... shevti tula majhya kade yaavach laagel..and says thik aahe mag me aata audit kartoch...

Meghana smiles and says..kahi paahije ka tumhala Auditor sir..

Aditya: naahi nako..

Meghana smiles and is about to leave...

When Aditya stops her.. arre tu kuthe chali aata parat...?

Meghana; gharach kaam karayla... vijaya tai naahi aahe naa... aani mai ekti aahe..

Aditya sheepishly.. arre pan mag mala company kon denaar.. doubts aale ki?

Meghana thinks.. ho... archu tai la paathavte...

Aditya remembers his school days archu as hitler teacher... naahi.. nako... company nako...

Meghana smiles and says... bara... and is about to leave..

Aditya : ho pan majhi ajun ek condition aahe.. chukka astil tar punishment milel... aani pratyek chukka barobar... jurmana sakt hoil...winks his eye and raises his eyebrow naughtily...

Meghana smiles and says... Chawat...kuthcha.. pan don't worry... mala khatri aahe chukka nastily tyat...

Aditya: ho te kalelach mala... jaa tu.. and speaks to himself... me kaahihi gadbad karnaar naahi...

Meghana: huh.. kahi mhantla ka tu?

Aditya: me naahi... and thinks aiku gela ka tila.. and sits on bed..

Meghana: confused... comes and sits besides aditya...

Aditya: arre jaanar hotis na tu...

Meghana: ho.. pan mhantla jar shiksha mhanje jurmana sakt asnaar aahe.. tar me pan baste mhanje gadbad nako... naa...

Aditya speaks to himself.. nakki aikla hine...

Meghana: parat kaahi bollas tu?

Aditya : nahi... mhantla.. kaam suru karu...

Aditya checks one months account and says arre.. wah apekshe peksha.. jaast hoshiyaar aahe aahes tu... ek pan chukka nahi...

Meghana: hits him.. and says.. CA chi baayko aahe... me.. and smiles back..

Aditya thinks.. arre... asach sagla barobar asel tar jurmana kasa ghyaycha... and bites his teeth..

Meghana thinks.. tula asa satavtana aani chidavtana khup majja yet aahe aditya... adu... and smiles... tula baghun.. tujhe donhi gaal odhave se vaatat aahe.. so sweet...

Aditya : looks suspiciously.. kaahi mhantlis ka aata...

Megghana: haan.. naahi...

Mai: meghana .. aey meghana...

Meghana: ho mai.. aale...

Meghana: kaahi pahije ka sir?

Aditya: smiles and says.. naahi...

Meghana thi aahe.. aale me...

Aditya: yes... hyachich vaat baghat hoto... gets up gets eraser and starts erasing a couple of expenses...

Mai: meghana, kaahi mahatvacha kaam karat naahi aahes na?

Meghana: nahi oh mai.. aaj sirana hishobh paahije ... Audit karat aahe...

Mai: aga bai.. aata he kaay navin... thamb tyala sangte tujhi CA giri office madhe karaych aani gharatlya hishobaaat naak naahi khupsaych...

Meghana; naahhi.. nako mai... sakaal paasun game khelat hota... toh... aata tyala kaam sangitla tar.. natak karat hota.. aani.. mala ... bites her tongue..

Mai: teasingly ani kaay...?

Meghana: smiles and says kaahi nahi mai..karu dya... hishobh.. tyala...

Mai: smiles and says bara...

Nana: sanjivani.. ae sanjivani... sees megAna and asks.. chaha zhala ka meghana?

Meghana: chaha... naahi.. mala mahit navta tumhala chaha paahije mhanun..

Mai: aga ho mhanun bolavla tula... nanana tyanchya dhakti sunechya hatacha chaha pyaycha aahe...aata kay bai... amchya haatacha chaha avdhat naahi...

Meghana; Mai...

Nana: arre baapre.. morambyachi bharani chidli vaatata.. aga sanjivani.. tu chaha changla banavte... pan.. meghanachya hatch chaha thoda jaasta chaan asto... aala taakte na ti...

Mai: aiyya...

Meghana laughs and says.. chaha taakte nana.

Meghana prepares tea for all and carries one cup for aditya...

Meghana: sir.. chaha..

Aditya: hmm.. and looks at meghana and says.. kiti chukka he... meghana... bagh..

Aditya takes tea and says...ab aayega mazza...

Meghana: arre... he kasa kaay chukla.. not possible..

Aditya: he ghe calci... check kar.. aani hyacha jurmana... points his finder to his left cheek...

Meghana: nervous.. checks next...

Aditya enjoys meghana's nervousness

Aditya... hi dusri chuk.. ani hyacha jurmana points his finger to right cheek... abhi do mistakes.. do punishment... aani hi teesri.. and points his finger to his lips... and his eyes speaks naughtily...

Meghana: avoids eye contact with aditya and says...gadbad aahe...

Aditya: ho .. gadbad aahe .. mhanje kela aahe tu... gadbad

Meghana: naahi me naahi kela gadbad... check kela hota... tuch kahitari gadbad kela aahes...

Aditya: me kaa karu gadbad...?

Meghana: kaaran... tula.. stops.. and is about to leave...

When Aditya pulls her close and asks... hey.. auditor chi fees mhanje... ATM and market cancelled... pan jurmana baaki aahe...

Meghana: naahi.. tu cheating kela aahes... mala maahit aahe.. me aikla hota...

Aditya: naahi haa meghana...aata jurmana dilya shivay tula sodnaar naahi me...

Meghana: smiles and says pan me naahi denaar...

Aditya: acha.. toh hum khud le lenge... jaaneman...

Meghana; aditya... sod.. cheater...

Aditya: acha... cheater toh cheater... and bends forward...

Meghana: shouts.. mai.. mai...

Aditya afraid leaves her.. and says.. he cheating aahe... mai la ka bolavte aaplya madhe..

Meghana: kaaran tu cheating kela...

Aditya: arre.. par pyar aur jung me sab chalta hai...

Meghana: ho ka.. mag he pan chalta hai...

Mai: meghana kaay zhala... kaay re aditya.. ka oradli meghana ashi...

Meghana: bagha na mai.. khota bolat aahe aditya

Aditya: khota me... naahi mai.. he bagha.. me fakt sangitla.. ke hishobh madhe gadbad aahe...ahe ... he bagh.. book...

Mai checks all accounts and says.. ho gadbad aahe...

Mai gets up.. and holds aditya's ears.. and says... eraser ne tuch rub kelas na... kharach...? Kaa re...

Aditya: naahi mai... ouch.. mai sod naa.. dukhta aahe...

Meghana: shocked.. mai.. tumhala kasa kalala...

Mai: aga he tyacha nehmichch aahe.. lahanpani.. archu la asach tras dyaycha... aani ti maar khaychi..

Meghana: ho.. ?

Mai: ho... chehyavar nako jau.. shaitani dimaag aahe hyach..

Aditya: kaay mai... evdhi chaan sandhi milali hoti.. shiksha dyaychi...

Mai: ho.. kaay bara shiksha saang tar..

Aditya: dumbstruck... naahi.. mai.. evdha pan important naahi.. me jaato ATM la...

Meghana controls smile.. and says... asach vhyayla pahije...

Meghana: thanks mai... jurmana naahi dyava lagla tyala...

Mai: te thik aahe ga.. pan mala saang... kaay shiksha/ jurmana hota...ga...

Meghana: hmm.. mai... kaahi nahi... smiles shyly and leaves...

Mai: sagla kalata mala... asech sukhane sansar kara...

@ 4 pm:

Aditya comes back and says.. neghana he ghe paise...

Meghana takes money and gives water to him...

Aditya: nako mala..

Meghana thinks chidla vatata...

Meghana: damlas kaa re?

Aditya: naahi.. and is about to leave...

When meghana holds his hand and asks.. ragavla aahes ka?

Aditya: ho... kaaran ke tujhya hishobh madhe gadbad aahe...

Meghana: kaahihi aditya... parat masti?

Aditya: aani jar prove kela tar?

Meghana: je mhanshil te Karen me...

Aditya: sure? Promise?

Meghana: promise...

Aditya: bagh haan.. haarli tar saglyan samor... jurmana dyava laagel.. and shows his cheeks with tongue.. naughtily...

Meghana: thinks and says... Hmm ok..

Aditya: tu majha 5000 rs ch hishobh naahi thevla...

Meghana: aditya.. kiti bhapare.. aata...

Aditya: saang mala.. tujhya dance class ch fees aahe ka tyat?

Meghana: naahi.. karan,... te gift aahe naa..

Aditya: gift aahe.. pan hishobh pahije... madam.. and pulls her close to him and says.. vaise bhi.. hume kya pata aapne kuch sikha ya nahi...

Meghana: mhanje?

Aditya: he bagh.. admission nantar... roz jaate.. pan practice.. naahi.. kaahi naahi.. ek step sudha daakhavla naahi... mag majhe 5000 loss zhale naa...

Meghana: arre.. pan aata daakhavte.. na... me...

Aditya: te baghen ach.. pan.. aata pahile.. saglyan samor.. smiles and shows his cheeks.. and says.. get ready... honey.. I am waiting for it...

Meghana: tensed.. arre pan aaditya... saglyan samor naahi...

Aditya: unh unh... no ways.. mala saglyansamor jurmana paahije... te pan aajach... nahi.. toh...

Meghana: naahi me naahi denar jurmana...

Aditya: promise kela aahe.. tu.. and leaves the room..

Meghana playing with her mangalsutra... nervously.. saglyansamor... kaay he hatt...

Aditya comes back knocks on door.. and says.. darling... vaat baghat aahe me.. jurmana chi...

To be continued...

P.S. jar part - 1 avadhla tar.. part -2 post karen...

Lucky