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Posted: 11 years ago
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this is my another modification on RISHBALA. i just modified one episode where ria tries to trap rk when madhu and family were out. the epi was ok on the show. but still, if it had been like this, it would have been better, i feel.

i'm not writing any story or something. my main aim is to remain connected with the characters we know, the rk and madhu. while reading my posts, you should see them / rm / dvd / raja rani in front of your eyes. and should feel like watching an epi with dvd. 😳 i generally dont describe the scene, emotions, background, dress, etc as in stories (i'm too lazy 😆 😉) ... all these are for your imagination as you know rk and madhu very well... how they react, speak, emote, etc

so here it is...

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in the show ria challenges madhu and comes to rk mansion. Next day she wears madhu's dress and madhu chides her. Rk in the hall is reading the script. Ria comes there... The dialogues are the same as in the show. Then madhu and remaining family leave to temple.

After that...

rk in the entertainment room... Ria watches him from outside. Thinks to herself ...'rk akela hai. madhu aur baki log bhi bagar gaye hai. wapas aane me time lagegaa. Yahi mouka hai, rk ko apna banne keliye. ...Remembers rk's word... 'mereliye is duniya me madhu ki kushi se badkar kuch bhi nahi hai'

Ria...'rk, muje patha hai me tumare paas ria banker nahi aa sakthi. lekin... madhu banker toh aa sakthi hoon na!! ... kisi bi halathme me tume apna banaloongi. par kaise??!!''

She looks at rk. Still he is in the same place. She comes near him with a alcohol bottle and sits on the another chair.

Rk...looks at her with a question mark on his face (you all know how he does that )

Ria... ' Muje bore horaha hai. '

Rk...''isiliye mene kaha unke saath mandhir jaavo''

Ria...''nahi, yaha tumare saath baitthi hoon''

Rk smiles at her and continues his reading...

Ria...''rk ...''

Rk... 'mmm...'' doesnt move his sight from the script

Ria...''tum mere saath bahar pina toh chod dhiya, par ghar me toh pe sakthe ho na??!! muje laktha hai, tum sharab pina hi chod diya. Ab...''

Rk...'' kiya chagiye tume??!!''

Ria... ''ye lo... ab mere saath thoda pelo. Dhekthe hai koun zyaadha peethe hai''

Rk... ... grabs the bottle from her, opens, starts drinking... In one stretch he completes whole bottle.

Rk... ''mil gaya jawaab. Me sharab ab bhi petha hoon. Wo bhi tumare saath, tumse zyaadha... enough ??!!! ab me mera script padoon??!!''

Ria... To herself...'.4 , 5 peg mehi insaan ko apna sar gumaatha hai... tum toh puri bottle khatham kardhiya?? Thanks rk. Tumne mera kaam aur simple katdhiya.' ...Smiles at him and leaves the place

she goes up to rk's room and opens the wardrobe. ... ' kiya kaha??!!...muje koyi problem nahi as long as tum madhu ki koyi yello color dress ko haath mat lagavoo'... she removes one of madhu's yellow color dress with a sarcastic smile on her face.

After some time...

Servant (badrinath) comes to the place where rk is reading his script ...

Rk...' madhu aagayi??!!''

Badri...''haan chief... Wo apne kamre me hai''... leave the place.

Rk gets up and goes to his room...

Rk...''madhu...''...and shocked to see the room fully decorated with flowers and madhu (ria) in yellow sadi, standing near the French window, just opposite and quite a distance from him with her back facing him

Rk... 'mmm... yello sari... Gulaab ka phool , ye kushbooo... muje toh laga tum gussa me ho.'' ... saying this he sits on the sofa near the wardrobe. Keeps his legs on the table in front of him.

Rk...''kiya baat hai biwi !! ??... tum toh hamesha kehthi ho 'rk, ghar me pooja raka hai, ye sab abi??!!'... ab tume kiya hogayaa??!! Kahi...Mera movie kuch dheki thi kiya???!! Ithna romantic hogayi !!!''... he tries to say something, the power goes off...

Rk... 'ab ye kiya hai ...?!?!'' He tries to get up to light the candle. Two hands from behind pulled him back and ties a blind fold on his eyes...

Rk... ' ye toh hamesha me hi kartha tha... Ab kiya tum shuru kardhi??!! Not bad biwi '

She comes to the front and moves her hands slowly on his, pushes him on the sofa... She leans forward towards him by holding his shoulder... ... ...

Rk... ' stop it '...

Ria ... Doesn't care

Rk... ' I SAID STOP IT' ... RIA ...''

Ria... is stunned and very much shocked to hear her name

Rk pushes her away from him and removes the blind fold, throws it down 😡...

switches on the light

ria... '' 😲 😲 😲 😲 😲 😕 ''

Rk ... 'expect nahi kiya na???!! ...shock hogayi??!''

Ria...''r...k...😕''

Rk...''how dare you come to my room 😡??!! Aur is thara gatiya harkathe ??!!... isiliye toh tum muje sharab penekeliye kaha??!! Tum soch rahi hogi, lo rk nashe me hogaa, tume apni madhu samjega... aur bas... yahi idea tha na tumara??!! Par tume kaise patha hoga ki rk kabi kosh nahi kojaatha hai''

Ria...'' nahi rk... me tume sach me bahut chaathi hoon. Tume...'' She tries to touch him

Rk... 'just stop it'' he just shouted at his maximum. 'dare you touch me. Agar mere paas aane ki koshish karoogi toh, akir tume khuth choone keliye bhi haath nahi rahe ha. Me pehle bi tume keh chukka hoon mereliye meri madhu kiya hai aur hamara rishtha kaisa hai... phir bhi tum...??!! ye sirf tumara galathi nahi hai. mera bi. Mene tume is room me pehli bar leke aaya tha na??!! tume mera dhoshth samaj tha tha na??!! isiliye toh me tumse thamees se baat kar raha hoon. Varna muje bi nahi patha me kiya karonga... just get lost... OOOUUUTTT 😡''

Rk...'' patelll... Ye gandhagi nikalne ke baad, Is room ko saaf karo, madhu ki aane se pehle. Koyi bhi muh utakar chale aathe hai mere kamre me...'' kicks the table with his leg in angry... Ria also turns and tries to go from there

Saying that he turns and now only notices madhu standing there... 'biwi tum kab aayi ??!!'' asks her casually as usual

Madhu glares at ria... 'mene kaha than na, rk aag hai, jungle ki aag... Dheka jal kar raak hogayi tum'' smirks at her...

Ria looks at her back angrily and goes out...

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Madhu walks inside the room without caring rk...

Rk... 'biwi, dialogue maarna toh mera kaam hai. tum kab se maarne lagi??!!!" holds her hand

Madhu pushes his hand ... ' ok... sorry ... mujse galathi hogayi. Jo bi tumne uske bareme kaha me wishvas nahi kiya... uskeliye sorry..''

Madhu... 'sirf sorry' rk...!!! ... muje toh samaj me nahi aaraha hai. muje chod kar kisi ajnabi se wishvas karthe ho... aur ab kehthe ho sorry'.''

Rk...'' madhu, mene kaha na sorry . wo me dhoda gussa me tha. Muje laga ki koyi tume mujse cheen raga hai. ... aur movie problem... ye sab ke chakkar me, aisa galathi hogaya... Aur pura frustration me muje bhi nahi patha me kiya kar raha hoon. ...''

Madhu...''aakir tum chaathe kiya ho??!!''

Rk...''mmm sach boloon??!!!...''

Madhu...looks at him confused.

Rk... ''ek tight waala hug''

Madhu could not control her smile and maintain her anger... . Rk smiles back

Madhu hits him playfully and hugs him and so rk.

Madhu... ''rk, ... Me tume kuch poochoon??!!''

Rk... '' poocho...'' madhu tries to move

Rk...''par ek sharath par...''

Madhu...''kiya??"

Rk... ''aisa hi raho aur pooch...''

Madhu... blushes and hugs him back... '' rk, tume kaise patha woh me nahi thi... Mera matlab jab ria tumare paas aayithi tab??!!''

Rk... 'biwi, dho baathe... Ek, rk apni biwi ko peichanekeliye, yellow sari, ye light , ye anke (pointing at his eyes) iski zaroorath nahi hai. ye dil hi kafi hai. dho, madhu rk ko pasaane ki koshish nahi karthi hai. balki rk khuth madhu ki haatho me pas jaatha hai... kuch samaj huwaa??!!''

madhu... '' 😳 ''

rk...''jab woh muje touch ki, tabi muje laga ...''

madhu...''woh ria hai??!!''

rk...''chhh... woh meri biwi ki haath nahi hai. kiyuki jab meri madhu muje choothi hai, woh aisaas hi kuch aur hai... 😳''

Madhu...''wo sab teek hai... patel ne kaha ki tum ek full bottle sharab peli. 😡 Uske bareme me baath me baat karthi hoon. Pehle ye bathavo, tum nashe me kaise paichanliya usko??!!''

Rk...''biwi... rk ko kabi nasha nahi hotha . rk ka naam sunkar nasha ko hi nasha hojaatha hai''

Madhu ... '' ye dialogue maarna bad karo aur bathavo''

Rk... ''seriousely biwi...''

Madhu...''achcha??!! ... Us raat studio me, jab hum dhono nashe me baat ki thi na, tab rk ko kiya huwaa??!!''

Rk... ' biwi... tab toh rk sharab ki nashe me nahi tha... Apni biwi ki piyaa ka nashe me tha...''... tightens his grip

Madhu... '' 😳 😳 ''

Rk... '' biwi... me soch raha hoon... sajawat toh hogaya... usse waste karna hai kiya??!! Muje toh kisi bi chees ko waste karna bilkul bi pasand nahi hai... so, kiyu na hum isthamaal kare ??!!'' winks at her

Madhu... ''stop it rk ☺️'' ... . ... 'r ...k...'' he lifts her up and goes towards bed ☺️ ☺️.


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do comment if you really like it... 😊

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PRATHA1 thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Kajal, excellent writeup!
Aur wo RK ka dialogue..its very nice!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#3
Awesome episode Kajal di
Loved RK and Madhu's dialogues here 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Brilliant, Excellent Imagination Kajal 👏👏👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Loved this New Episode of yours Based on Rishbala 🤗🤗🤗

Why couldn't u got selected for MB script writing 😊😳😊

I mean your writing is really very appreciable dear 👏👏👍🏼

Kaash MB cv's ne aisa kuch dikhaya hota
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Posted: 11 years ago
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tfs this Fabulous episode of Rishbala with us my dear friend 😳😊😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I really loved That Last Romantic part of RK Lifting Madhu a lot 😛
Reminded me of Golden Days of MB 😳😳😳
Edited by bhavnajaiswal - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Eagerly waiting for your next episode
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: bhavnajaiswal

Brilliant, Excellent Imagination Kajal 👏👏👏



this epi is especially for you dear... you asked me na yesterday ??!! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: PRATHA1

Kajal, excellent writeup!
Aur wo RK ka dialogue..its very nice!



thanks dear 😳

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