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Posted: 17 years ago
hi

I just read your fanfic....OMG OMG OMG.......OMG !!! this was all that i kept saying while reading all your updates..... 👏 👏 👏

Sorry for sounding so blank....but i am simply short of word to tell you how much I have enjoyed it. My mind is racing so fast....this is a amazing fanfic. 👏 👏 HATS OFF!!!!

Please continue and uodate soon.
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: fanatic 21

sorry for late replying.....

it was fabulous............n nice thirll too.......

gr8 goin

thanku so so much

love dolly

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: dazzling_glory

hi

I just read your fanfic....OMG OMG OMG.......OMG !!! this was all that i kept saying while reading all your updates..... 👏 👏 👏

Sorry for sounding so blank....but i am simply short of word to tell you how much I have enjoyed it. My mind is racing so fast....this is a amazing fanfic. 👏 👏 HATS OFF!!!!

Please continue and uodate soon.

thank u so very much 4 liking the fic

i am totally clean bowled

i'll try to updatesoon

lots of lov

dolly

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Posted: 17 years ago

FLASHBACK 3==

IT was past midnight, ashu had just fallen asleep, bt both of them were still in a jeopardy,,nair's mobile had turned out to be useless ,,it had very less charging which didn't allow raj to phone anywhere 4 help,,bt this mobile had told him something b4 flickering of,, that they were somewhere in ambala…

Raj looked around him,, only rustling trees surrounded them ,, he looked at his watch,, it was showing 11:15 pm..

Raj rested his head across the tree trunk ,, ashu was sleeping nearby ,,protected from cold in raj's jacket ,, though it was may night bt it was almost chilling in this jungle,, raj was feeling very anxious,, it had almost been three hours until the time he had left the cell,, raj needed some help,, he switched on nair's mobile,, two small vertical sighns agains indicated very low charging,, and just than the mobile rang,, the screen displayed suri ji's name,,,,

Raj didn't dare to believe his luck ,,, he picked up the phon…

Suri ji== hello sir kahan hain aap, dekho by god ki kasam agar aap agle aadhe ghante mein aap academy nahin aaye to bc aapke dono kano mein sar kar denge,,

Raj was surprised on listening to suri ji's tone bt impressed all the same,,at the way suri ji were talking to his crap senior…

Raj== suri ji,,, mein rajveer

Suriji didn't needed the explanation,, he had known it was raj from hearing 'suri ji' only ….

Suri ji== raj putar,, tu tu zinda hai,, tu tu kaisa hai,, mujhe to laga k to

Here suri ji's viose wavered away..

Raj== suri ji mujhe aapki madad ki zaroorat hai,, mein is vaqt ambala k kisi jungle mein bhatak raha hun,, nair ne mujhe pakad liya tha ,, badi mushkil se bhaga hun mere saath ek chota bacha bhi hai,, suri ji ,, mobile charged nahin hai pls meri help kijiye,,

Suri ji== hmmmm raj I think I knew where u r,, u r in kma training field pt 1230,,, nair ne yahi entry ki thi register meun subha janne se pehle,, raj find a way,, u have to reach pt 1857 that is nearest to you,, don't climb the cliff upto the wishing pillar just come around…………………………

And here the mobile phone flickered off again,,,

Bt raj had got enough help,, thanking heavens he got up,, picked ashu and his jacket and started walking ahead,,

Bt may be god didn't want to give him an easier time,, he heard shouts and shuffling vioses from behind,,,nair's men had caught up, they'll find him and they won't leave him and ashu,,in great anxiety he started running ahead as fast and as silentely as he could, holding ashu close to his heart

Ashu/s head lolled from one side to other over raj's shoulder,,

Why wasn't ashu waking up?? There were enough shouts to wake even a person sleeping for abt hudred years

Raj saw a small ditch covered skeptically with thorns and weeds ,, he carefully waded across them and sat as low as he could in the ditch ,,his hands were splattered with mud so were his and ashu's clothes,,bt he didn't care..he kept ashu on his lap and tried to make him come around,

Raj==(whispering)ashu ashu wake up pls ashu wake up,,,there was cold sweat over ashu's face, he didn't respond,, it looked as if he was……………

Raj checked ashu's pulse it was there,,, a huge relief spread over raj giving him new courage to fight against nairs men,, he laid ashu ,,completely hidden behind the bushes,,,

Then he stood up and checked his surrounding,, 2-3 armed personnels and sam (with a heavilu bandaged face) were shouting and searching around 4 him,,,nair was no where near to b seen…may be raj's blows had been enough to send nair to hell…

Raj looked around and his gaze fell over a deeply rusted large iron grill ,he caught hold of it,,and moved it slowly towards the men,, he had two pistols ,,so it would have been easy to kill them all bt raj wasn't a fello who blasted people of his way like nair and lala ji,,,

Sam was standing vary near to the grill,, with one swing raj sweeped sam of his feet and b4 any one could notice what had happened,, raj made two other commandoes tumble too,, he then swept the grill backwards which made contact with sam's head and sam moved no more,, the commandoes panicked one of them started firing around wildly,, raj ducked and protected ashu by covering ashu himself… then he could hear vioses of personnels

"he's dead he's dead,, what should we do now??"

Raj knew that they had got panicked,, he quickly regained his previous position ,,took out one of the pistol and aimed,,,he pulled the trigger one of the person got shot over his upper elbow,, this development was enough to freak those people out,, raj saw them running back,,leaving sam's body there only…….

He climbed out of the ditch and moved further,, ashu was still unconscious,, raj was frightened , 10 min and he was still running,, 20 min and he was still running,, raj's panick was sky rocketing… and then finallyhe spotted a worn out board reading pt 1857,, he climbed the short cliff and went around the hill,, he could clearly see kma quarters noe,, he stopped dead .standing in front of him was brigadier chandog!!!!!!!

Raj gasped, he didn't notice people gathering up behind him,,

A bullet fired, brig advanced towards raj,, pulled him to a corner and bullet pierced brig's elbow at the same moment….

Raj was mystified completely,,,,brig with one hand over his elbow handed raj a pistol, and said

" give me cover son!! We'll kill these bas***ds"

FLASHBACK 4===

(ABT 12 YEARS BACK ,,NAINA'S HOUSE)

"yippee yippe yippee"

Aanchal==naina stop it will u,, its only ur brother coming home..

Naina==na na anshu its my brother coming home,with his best and very handsome friend ….

Anchal==then what's the big deal in it??? U won't marry that guy will u??

Naina==hai meri aisi kismet kahan kher,, big deal is that mum dad r not at home that means,,,FULL MASTI!!!!!

Just then the doorbell rang and their domestic helper channu opened the door..

Navven== to raj welcome to my house,, chal tere ko apni bahan se milata hun,,NAINA NAINA

Naina came jumping down the stairs to meet his bhaiya after 3 years ,, she saw rajveer,, her heart missed a beat just as she missed a step , and slipped from the stairs,,she collided with raj who inturn crashed on the floor with naina on top of him….

He wanted too shout"WHAT THE HELL???"

Bt was made sppechless by naina's beauty,,,he looked towards and she styared back ,,a split second too long,, then she grew cautious and tried to get up,, bt againfell back on raj, her hair strand was entangled in raj's watch,

Naina== ouch,,

Raj== wait!! I'll help,

He looked towards navveen who was gazing openmouthedly at the pair of the two

Raj==can't u help idiot??

Naveen ==ya ya

After abt 10 minutes struggle both raj and naina were back on their feet

Naina muttered a "sorry" that was hardly audible,, raj muttered "it's ok" with same sound frequency,, then naina hugged navven ,,and raj played audience to a perfect sis bro milap scene….

Naveen == naina this is raj …I mean cadet rajveer ,,

Naina==wow u r such a good looking creature,,,

Sumtimes I look at you sometimes at r furniture…

Naveen=

Anchal==😕😕😕

Raj==🤢🤢🤢

Naina==oops sory!! Wrong rhyme

Naina looked sideways towards annchal ,who was shaking her her head in complete bewilderment,,,asa far as raj and naveen were concerned both were gazing towards naina open mouthedly ,,naina lost it and ran backfooted to her room,,

Anchal gave a "I – don't –know –why – she – is – behaving – like – this – look" to raj and naveen and followed naina upstairs…….

Raj==yeh teri behen hi hai na!!!!!

Naveen ==nahi ,vo ek alien joker thi jo mere ghar k basement mein 16 saal pehle ,spaceship se gir gayi thi…

Raj laughed out loudly..

Raj,"tera to achacha khasa entertainment hota rehta hoga ghar pe"

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IN NAINA'S ROOM==

Aanchal==naine teri to na satki hui hai achichi khasi ,,kya kar ke aayi hai tu neeche????

Naina==patanahin yaar,, bhayiya ka dost kitna handsome hai nahin????

Aanchal ===haan vo to hai par tu to……

Naina==are mujhe chod !!ab soch k bhayiya k is dost ki band kaise bajani hai???

Aanchal==band?? Naina abhi abhi tu neeche us bechare ka pura ka pura orchestra bajake aayi hai!!!

Naina==yeh bhayiya ka dost achacha bandbaja banana k gun rakhta hai nahin………..

(viose from below)

Naveen== NAINA NAINAAAAAAAAAA!!!COME DOWN WE HAVE TO LEAVE!!!!!

Naina==what???????????????

Naina and aanchal rush down,,,,,,

Naveen==naina kma ki building ka aadha hisa tut gaya .we have to go ok bye!!

Naina==bt bt bhayiya,…

Naveen==nanu listen to me bachche hum vapas aayenge agar zyaada nuksaan na hua ho ok bt right now we have to go ok!!!!!!!!

Naina looked down ther were rears in her eyes it had been almost three years since she had seen her bro and now

Raj==hey don't cry!! Naveen teri behen emotional bhi hai kya,???

Naveen==shutup raj!! Listen nanu I have to go sory sis bt I can't help it I'll meet u sooner ok paka promise,, chal nanu ab smile to dede….

Naina smiles………

Naveen and raj pick up ther bags and move towards the gates again,,raj abruptly turns and collided with naina again,, the fall was saved this time,,bt the bags fell down and one of them split up,,,all sorts of things ranging from books to T.T. sets to scales to a teddy bear……

Raj looked highly embarrassed .mumbled out sumthing abt being sory ,, and bent down to pick up his things

Alas naina bent down at the same moment,, both ther heads collided

Naina and raj in unison==OUCHH

Naina and raj in unison== SORYY

Naveen ==can't u people stop banging into each other until we reach the gates pls!

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>>>>>>

Sory guys this is not a big part and I am updating so late,, bt pls I am very very busy now,, sim has got her semester and me my major so pls bear it with me

I hope u enjoyed this part

Lots of lov

dolly

Edited by dolly18 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
fabulous.............. 👏 👏

loved d flashback......

par yaar woh jo naina ne kaha dos lines wer reallly funny...matlab sahi mein uski satak gayi thi 😆

good lines n nice thrill even dis time
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Posted: 17 years ago
thanks for the update....

the flashback are very interesting....

but right now the story feels to be incomplete and confusing. i think that we will understand it better once to finish all the flashbacks.

waiting for the next update.....please don't stop writing this ff.
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: fanatic 21

fabulous.............. 👏 👏

loved d flashback......

par yaar woh jo naina ne kaha dos lines wer reallly funny...matlab sahi mein uski satak gayi thi 😆

good lines n nice thrill even dis time

thanx 4 liking them i am too happy that u enjoyed them

lov dolly

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: dazzling_glory

thanks for the update....

the flashback are very interesting....

but right now the story feels to be incomplete and confusing. i think that we will understand it better once to finish all the flashbacks.

waiting for the next update.....please don't stop writing this ff.

thank god at least koi to hai

u know even i feel the story is dead slow and becoming confusing and stupid,, can u believe mere vo do din hi nahin khatam ho rahe,, i want to speed things up really t right now i am completely streessed out i have got my major on 20 july ,, i'll update now only after that bt this time i'll seriously bring the story back on a faster track

thanks 4 this awsome feedback😳

lots of lov(and yes don't fear i am not going to stop writing this fic,, i am actually thinking of boring u people to death with it😆)

dolly😳

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: dolly18

thank god at least koi to hai

u know even i feel the story is dead slow and becoming confusing and stupid,, can u believe mere vo do din hi nahin khatam ho rahe,, i want to speed things up really t right now i am completely streessed out i have got my major on 20 july ,, i'll update now only after that bt this time i'll seriously bring the story back on a faster track

thanks 4 this awsome feedback😳

lots of lov(and yes don't fear i am not going to stop writing this fic,, i am actually thinking of boring u people to death with it😆)

dolly😳

Behna marte to hum bhi nahi fir chahe tu bore kar ya full excitement de !!!!!!!! Third flashback to dollu tune pakka Aamir dekh ke likha hai I am dead sure abt that tabhi to saare flashback main bhaga bhaga ke aadha kar diya hai bechare raj ko !!!!!!! 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 Fourth flashback was the best the best the best the best !!!!!! ok ok ok absolutely hillarious !!!! Ab to tune proove kar diya doll ke Raj bina waje ya thuke koi kam nahi kar sakda !!!!!!!! Naina di rhyming scheme superb si , is tarah lag reha si ke English di Phd hune hune khatam kiti hai !!!!!!!!! Jaldi jaldi agla part post kar and all the very best for your Majors !!!!!!!

Edited by simar456 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
hi dear ........

please update soon......... 😭 😭 😭

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