FF~Fettered Affection.chp20.p144 23.8.13 - Page 10

Originally posted by: Warda.

hello 🤗
hi warrie.. you made it and first good.. good I like to note some keeness towards my work.. thanks, waise bart too has lauded your comment,which is what this section of the ff is for to peep through others views..

Hammie Brilliant start of the new ff👏 ... the whole scenerio was superbly expressed each and every description the way dutta was walking in the jail ready to see the world outside specially watching him like this was giving a completley different feel... the way dutta was aloof from everyone specially when he didnt felt anything even when baaji hugged him gave me jitters ...10 years staying inside the walls ..yes it do makes a man aloof .long period it is when he felt any such warm embrace ..its so heart wrenching to imagine a 17 years old boy spent 10 years there ..its like its a age where a person just starts to know what colors of life are ...what dreams are...how his life be in coming yearswell put warrie, impressionable age ...and suddenly one action and every thing turned into worst night mare of his life...jail is considered a place where there are people whom we consider are not humans due to the activities they were involved in but dont know how many there will be likes of dutta where there is this goodness in the characterso its all about forming judgements, mind you even people who are not banged up are sometimes are at a loss of showing goodness and thus are misjudged by society. ...its like bas aik ghalti kar di ..sometimes we just fail to understand the cause behind it hmm yet a crime is a crime... or is it the biased side in me for Dutta Sriram Patil is awake once again 😆😳. ...Shamlaal seems a good person ...if someone who consider a prisoner like his son and tried to fill his father's place its kind of relieving as at age when dutta came here he actually needed someone like him who keeps him away from those who just drag such people into crime . ..although as stated dutta was'nt ready to accept him ermm its like the word father that was the cause of the bitterness.

well seems he has been wronged by this father of his, usually a role model for their children,

Was so excited to see who is there to receive dutta ...yes it could be no one else but his shadow a person who is there for him in every thick and thin..it was a heart warming sight to see the two friends hug each other yes the only difference was for one it was the most unusual strange feeling...Hammie you have penned this dutta's character in a outstanding manner ...i just could not put in words a feeling of a man who was feeling the warmth of sun in open air after ten long years..it is making me restless ... .loved the selection of words here still struggling to find where is the freedom ...same warmth of the sun same color of the sky 👏 ...thanks warrie.. was so, for literally he couldn't find any difference between captivity and release..something festers inside him

Good to recall some old memories between the two friends ...khatara jeep lol ...and the visit to the pond i loved the way baaji was handling him making him recall the past events...he too sensed the aloofness in him... ohh and this is interesting dutta had a past love interest too ummh seema good she is already married.😆

always a safe option to strike bonding again, recollection of old times.. Baji struck the right cord.. haan woh Seema does play a key part in the life of LTL1 Dutta .. so am inspired..

The whole scene between dutta and AS touched me the most in the update..I was dreading this moment when he will face his aaye again or more so the wife of the man he murdered...his cold eyes towards his mother scared me...AS depicting the natural warmth of the mother ...her awaiting eyes with a pooja thali and cooking every thing what dutta likes touched my heart..wanted to know more if she thinks Dutta's act was justified ..im sure it will unfold as story proceed...i felt its his guilt that he is staying so stern with his mother ..the way he dont want to hear what happened in those 10 years its like he feels he is resposible for all the miseries good deduction warrie and very well put...this was the most well depicted human nature .10 on 10 for this hammie..a man wants to shut his ears..wants to change the topic wants to run away as he begged baaji to take him out "mera dum ghut raha hai yahan par" ...gosh i can feel he will take a long time to adjust...but what cheered me up was how he mellowed when he saw roops ...his little sister who has now grown up into a woman..who is big enough now to become a helping hand for the financial needs of the house...Hammie im loving this story to the core ...this is my first ever experience to see a struggling dutta living a ordinary life with limited resources mind it jobless too and a person with a stigmatized character .mostly we have seen him living life like a king...here it seems entirely opposite...his journey to struggle in his new life will be a great experience to read specially if its coming from your pen ...warrie mujhe yaad hai, back in may 2011, tune muhse kaha start another FF where Dutta is not a rich guy but a struggler, us time I had began to penn PR.. but some suggestions do stay with people..teri ye tip I guess took seed somewhere.. waise its early days with FA yet,I myself am trying to get my head around this Dutta.. so watch out for this space.

aa gaye meri heroine hehe 😆oyee hoyee social worker remember all those guess which were made here lol aap tu sach main ustadoon ke ustaad ho lol😆...this job is so true to naku's chracter some people are meant to bring light in other people lives anda who else need or i can say desrve it more than dutta .ohhh she is in dark avtar.. ..and thankyou for not forgetting that horrible incident and making it a part of your write up ..the fire is still burning ...with naku's words that dark color will protect her yet there were guys after him ummhh unfortunately for such teasing you just have to be a woman aur koi condition nahi hai. so true warrie.. the whole issue of about dark avtar will be explained in the coming update.. personally as a writer, I found it difficult to shake off the heinous Delhi incident.. its one that to this moment is being dealt with and very much in the news, as justice is awaited..

..Great to read about the first encounter between tasha ...dutta's concern towards the safety of an unknown girl shows the goodness of his chracter...loved the way he says main himmat walon ki izzat karta hoon...the little convo between two was really enjoyable ...this was an original dialogue of Dutta's from LTL1, where he asks her in the beginning of the serial , why was morey chasing her?

ooopsss it seems a long comment so stepping on brake now 😳...i loved this update so much that i can go on and on with it ...precap yea waiting for the moment naku will help dutta out errmm if he will accept 😆 yess warrie you are under a purple cloud, a delightful comment , with many thought provoking ideas.. thanks very much for your effort, as I know how busy you are.. thanks again, with much love , as ever yours hammie.

waiting for tommrows annots and update eagerly 😊 haven't finished yet, so will let you know when its done.

lots of love🤗

Originally posted by: emilymine32

hi ham
heyyy imli, well can't hide my delight at seeing you.. 😃
thanks for friday dose yes if I don't give it then mujhe withdrawals symptoms ho jate hein
dutta is a free manyes how free he is has to be relative... love dujis dostanayes a strong point of any LTL1inspired fan fiction.
good to know seema is married with 3 kidshaan he's safe from the past.. shocking in your ff roops works well, ab AS tu kam nehi kersakte she manages the home.. so Roops is the good son..

enjoyed tashas encounter..brief..

thanks for pm

waiting for next thanks for a great comment , mate, with much love, as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: sasisri

hi hamlet
hi sasisri , so great to hear from you mate
nice start😊...loved it..didnt expect naku to b a social worker...and the first meetng..nice one
waiting for the next part😊
so pleased that you warmed to the first chapter of the new FF, yes me working on the next UD, will pm you.. meanwhile , much thanks , with much love, as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: uwith

hi hamlet
hi uvi great to see you mate..

its a awesome UD...the story is different ...dutta a criminal released from jail ...baji & his bonding reminded of LTL 😊...naku is a social reformer ...guessing is over gals...looking fwd to a beautiful FF & ud ...regards uvi

😛 thanks for liking the new FF, yes there was so much speculation about naku's vocation that i had to introduce her in the first chapter, liked your phrase social reformer kuch aise he kerti hai woh.. keep reading will update tomm.. if i can get it finished..😉 😉thanks with much love ,as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: Nakusha

😆hi my amazinggg hammiee
hi my hammazing naku, oyee your comment has been praise by bart too.. so 😃 smileee..

jis ka hame thaa intezar woh ghadi aa gai , 😊hammiee u supressed all our expectation & intution 😆i hope you got the pun

my chest is swelled with pride.. thank you naku.. love it when you spoil me .. jaise bart does..😆😆

loved the inaugral ud ,😃would be back with comments

the starting scene our duttas entry & his attitude established it as a character with attitude

was tough for me to do the first scene , i was reminded of PR.. how i enjoyed doing it, the main thing now was to shake off Major Dutta out of my system..

hammiee like always you gave detail description 😊& made it picture clear ,he is known as bhao in prison too ,yes the scar of spending best yrs of his life in confine of jail has made him bitter

well had to bank to some degree on LTL1 ..

while passing through the jail you described it wonderfully made it viual ,the preaching by the jailor to do good & not return back .hopefully our dutta never gets in back

YES that is the general idea to challenge the belief that once a criminal always a crminal

the changing scene to his old clothe ,he realised much has changed when he looked at his reflection

it was a way of touching n his appearance

baji is ever faithful friend ,dutta is one lucky son of gun 😆PR effect hammiee, FA dutta ka takya kalaam is actually quite dabangg goes with his rustic personality

haaan bola tha na.. PR ko expell kerna hoga mujhe.. waise dutta kitne der tak is name se baache ga.. dabaang! well need i say any thing... pandey je ka assar buri theran se chaiya hoya hai..!

seema 😡thankfully is married to old chap ,mooti & with 3 kids .hamara dutta ke way se out

haan mujhe pata tha people expected seema tu threw that in..

the fly reunion brought ut the gluf btwn AS & dutta ,as you like to keep suspense😊 we like to get the reason for the rift & why he murder his father when mem decides

all in good time.. abhi story move tu hoye.

the adda scene with baji brought memory of LTL

ohhh yess boozing together is yet another opportunity for them two to bond!

saab ko pata chal gaya hammiee naku social worker hai😆u have to think different

ab come on use maid bune se tu rehe main.. no way..

she applies soot & here is the twist ,rowday guys actually need somebody like dutta😡
haan i tell you when i saw dabaang 2 i was filled with josh that certain people needed that street immediate ful and final there and then justice...but alas.. rules have to be followed.. Naku ka soot will be touched on in the next UD..so look out.

dutta & nakus meeting was in strange circumstances ,he did notice her & cared for safety ,wish more of him around

well true, but like she said one has to be vigilant , uneasy times now.. still at least awareness is raised.

the precap with AS & naku discussing duttas job can't wait

yes please do read..

great start hammieee PR has set a mark & u lived upto it

ummhh PR naku ek hero ke story the , the trouble is ye dutta kya hai ? hero ye anti hero ? ya tragic hero is yet to be seen..

it was again & visual treat felt like watching rather than reading ,u can only do so hammiee

loved the compliment naku, this is the inspiration that goads a writer to deliver the utmost

haato mein mere mehndi lage hai hammiee magar comment bina nahin rahsake 😆

ummhh ab in mehdi wala haatoon pe thujhe kafi comments mile hain..😆.. haan i read.. aur niece has done us all proud.. with her commendation.. god bless her.. she's smart like her aunty jee

as always you are amazinggg hammiee ,big hug lots of luv😃
dekh naku thanks for your lovely comment, made me very happy, with much love , as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: tahera57

nice ud hammie thanks for pm.
hi tha' great to see you mate
really happy you liked the UD.. haan tahera with regards to his sentence, I think bart knowing more about such matters has clarified.. may be i should have been more explicit in prologue.. waise i have touched on this briefly in the next UD , its standard practice here, in India the issue of how old should one be to be considered a minor is still a little unclear , as we speak..once that is formalized than other factors of circumstance are considered when sentencing , at least in the case of the fictional character that I have coined.

bit confused how did dutta's 27yrs old when he was only in jail for 6and 1/2 yrs 😕. i must've missed something. so he's not a don nor a criminal IMO he's innocent, his father's death seems more likley to be an accident. seema married to GO means he might not get the job with baji as a mechanic. nakku a social worker is probably going to help him find his feet outside of prison, don't see him doing that somehow. n.o softenning towards AS even Baji trying his best to make him understand how she missed her son daily. nice start hammie thanks for ud. TC.

thanks for your great comment, always is informing.. keep reading , with much love ,as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: FASSBEN

HI Hamlet
hi fassben ,great to see you mate..

👏 Awesome first chp. Dutta released from jail yet he's and Bajis friendship still as strong. Thank you for making seema married and with kids in you FF. Naku and dutta met and she is a social work I hope naku will help him in some way or another.😉

Thanks as always look forward to next part. Take care
glad to note that you liked the first chapter, yes baji and naku complete Dutta so thought it best to introduce them fast.. Naku is expected to sort his life , so lets see what happens, many thanks for a lovely comment, much love, as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: jedy25

hi hamlet
hi jedy great to see you girlie!

superb start 😊to a wonderful journey ahead...enjoyed reading it

dutta & his unhappy past..baji is superb ...naku is social worker quite change ..liked her attitude

very good FA 👏

well i tell you the truth that Iam relieved to learn that you liked all the UD,keeping reading further on, the story has just begun... thanks for your lovely comment ,with much love, as ever yours hammie.

Originally posted by: -bharti-

oyeee you have been pretty busy tooo bart..thanks for educating us all on matters of mutual interest, you are a good teacher😉.. no seriously this is what I like about our readers family that we clarify issues for each other , where ever needs be..and willingly we respond to the information supplied by each other..⭐️

Finally the new Ff sets rolling.. and for sometime It was a difficult task to veer my mind off painful rapture. The first half i was only looking for something which reminded me of PR.. umm missing it, not easy to let go 😉

you telling me bart, was tough for me.. still is but like you said have made a start with you all around me..

But you have surpassed all my expectations. Its a great start. The prologue has set the story backdrop in motion and there is no looking back..

ummmh thanks, very much mate.. phew talk about nerves.. no really

The opening line amused me but doesnt surprise me one bit, your obsession with his chest hair continues, arey kuch aur baat karsakte ki nahi, chati ke balon mein hi ulajti rahegi hahahaa, Now Rose,s doubts are confirmed N she will be having a hearty laugh 😆

now bart you shold know me well phele line maine rose ke liye he lekhe thein. i knew rose tickle hoi ge..😆 ummh hope she did titter?😛

So Dutta, served a sentence set to be released, yet he displays a stoic resolve, no trace of emotiion. He is like the post FR dutta of LTL. As always we get a perfect pic of his surroundings, his facial expressions, the concern in the warden,s face n talk all beautifully written, the highlight of your writing. The meeting with prison warden shows that dutta has been a well behaved inmate and has it in him to lead a life free from crime, hopefully. But im sure its a tall order in real world for an exconvict. His mental condition seems suspect as there is suppressed anger a resignation a hatred towards his biological parents, hmm..well pointed out bart.. there has to be some scarring.. its only expected .so watch this space..

Baji is a ray of hope. His smile and light banter to cheer up his friend lifts us from the gloom and the dull dreary dutta. The journey back home throws light onto his pre sentence life, his brush with romance. Seema too has scarred his adoloscent years, double blow. Hahahaa baji has been his shadow but even spying on his pvt moments? ediut. Gosh! Dutta's indifference at the mention of AS is worrying.yes dutta in any form or shape has to be in complete without the comely intervention of Baji.. Seema was fleetingly in his life.. but with AS.. well read in next UD..

I expected some joy on his face reaching home but everything soon evaporated. His humble home, their not so comfortable life is a grim reminder to him that freedom means nothing much. Even Roops helping financially, thats a welcome change. But its painful to see a strained mother son relation.

Dutta kya kerta hai ,kyon kerta hai? who's to know except him..

Wow the suspense of naku is revealed and she is neither the daughter of a don nor a psychologist nor a maid nor anything that was being speculated.. Tai tai phissh forum nakushaaa! lol Actually hammie stumped all. Brilliant! she,s a social worker a reformer and specally deals with exconvicts. But why is she in the dark avatar? have to wait to know, atleast she,s not a timid chit of a girl to be dominated. But khadoos dutta ko tikhane lagayegi naku madam apni bhashan se... no man not again, meri ayi kehti hai n all lol hooo haa this has to be one famous comic, cliched line of LTL1.. but for us wait and watch..

Haaiinn ?? The meeting of DN didnt take too long. Dutta rescuing naku from an unpleasant the so common everyday street hazards women endure Sic! sic! But you did wel to incorporate the stark realities Hammie. The memories of the delhi incident comes to haunt me and i cannot express with words the revulsion i feel. Im reminded of it every time i step out of my house, the tv, the newspapers is full of it, a grim reminder.well its hard to shake off.. so if the guy is saving her.. which was quite a key scene in LTL1.."SAAB MUJHE BAACHA LO".. the thought did worry me.. life has become so in secure following the incident that if nothing else women perhaps think twice before trusting some stranger .. man, wholly.. he may be genuine.. but its a gamble that the woman takes or ignores.

Naku is lucky that duji were at the spot. Shes a smart lass as wel, refuses his help further. And its a welcome reminder n im sure there are men like dutta who will see she reaches home safe.

hummh that every man is not a wolf in sheep's clothing.

Hammie, must commend your start keeping in mind how difficult it must have been weaning away from PR, when i as a reader found it tuff.. and you didnt have much of a breather lol.. A big thumbs up ! Thanx for all that you do..

listen bart thank you for understanding that.. but then tu mujhe jante hai.. too well.. but mushal laga..mujhe bhi major ko choorna.. its like that prticular chap left us again , but I grabbed him by the neck again and started on him anew.. Mishal for us stills rocks! .. thanks for your lovely comment, love you too loads, bart as ever yours hammie

Originally posted by: mirage123

hi hamlet
hi mirage great to see you mate
fab ud😊in every sense...like PR i'm enjoying Fa too..poor dutta had a very sad life...with naku in his life ..he might get a good gal & job too...very grateful to you ..precap is too good
ooohh😃 so happy you enjoyed the UD..loved your good pal and gal addition 😆.. hey listen writing this second FF for my new readers is my pleasure.. love all my readers , need their support to function.., with much love, yours as ever hammie