Originally posted by: prettywoman
Hi Vandu,
You summarise my updates so beautifully that i am always tempted to answer back.
It was well worth the wait😳.. i had tyo read it a couple of times in peace after the family hit the bed so i can comment in peace.
life is nothing but collection of such innumerable sweet-sour moments collaged together in the unending quilt called time.
this is such an amazing line.. this sort of summarises your ff to a great extent as it is indeed a collection of memories, sweet memories, painful memories, present incidents, past incidents, so i absolutely love this line👏 Actually, I think everyones life is like a collection of moments..i mean...at the end of the day, you define it by what you have collected from ppl around you. Their support,love,pain, anger,hate. My FF is collection of memories of these two ppl but isn't our lives too just like that..we forget to relive those moments in our busy day-to-day life...think about those days every night before turning in..it will give you a tangible pleasure like looking over your favorite coin collection or some other materialistic collection.
She thought Dutta was being a real meanie. He was rolling his colorful cycle beside him but refused to carry her on it. Since she could not walk as fast as he cycled he was walking too,rolling it beside him.
i diasgree here lil nakku.. yes, in ur lil head, u think he is a meanie.. but he is not, in fact he is a caring saathi.. see, he could have ridden that bike very slowly, but he chose to walk the way with you.. yes, he is stubborn and wants you to be independent and learn to bike and is trying everything possible to make u learn it.. sometimes, u have to be harsh when u have the best interests of the otehr person at heart.. so no baby, he is just the most amazing and caring friend ever.. i know at ur age u wont agree na😳😆 Actually, my brother taught me to cycle after a huge fight..so this part was almost inspired..😆....he hated carring me on his cycle and thought if i learned riding he'll be scot free.😆
"I won't give you my chocolates this time, like I did last time. Because you are so mean to me."she warned him. Dutta- huh, I get plenty myself. She would definitely give me twice the amount she gives you. I am Dutta Patil, alright?
OMG, he is so full of himself, cheeky boy.. and she will give him all the chocolates from her share without him even asking for it🤗 Again inspired by true events😆
"Kya hua? Your feet hurting?" "No!" Dutta shrugged.It was a goods train and as always it will take ages to pass.
i love these references about the railways.. reminds me of your childhood shilpi and how wonderfully u have incorporated your own memories into this story.. and see he does care for lil nakku, though chocolates ka laalach mein kar raha hain.. i tell ya boys😡😆 but not to worry, he will soon be on his knees begging you to never leave him😳
;aHer eyes misting a little.
from day one we can see lil nakku always wears her heart on her sleev na.. she is like an open book.. whereas Dutta is pretty good as locking away his feelings/emotions unless it is his gussa😆
BTW, you have taken us back a few more years na with this incident.. i was thinking after reading the prev incident at the cinema, we wont have many more years left as Dutta will leave in 2004 na.. but i do like this idea of picking out random incidents in no particular order but gels in well with a similar incident in the present life👏
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Dutta- Notifications. As in which girl was booked by whom. Many decades worth of notifications. Nakkusha was agast as the meaning sank in. she was horrified- you people write girls' name with some guys on the wall. Dutta- not us. It was like a territory marking warning. Male code of honor, not to be breached. Dutta-Third was rev.Brother Jonas. Nakkusha gasped at the name of strict, proper custodian of the school."NO?" dutta- yes.
this was an eye opener for me .. yeh boys bhi na.. i studied in a convent, and so had no idea of such things!aww, bless him, after coming back and being with nakku, he is becoming almost human now remembering all the past incidents.. better stop now as my comments will take up a page at this rate
I was in a co-ed and these walls were so famous..they actually did things this way...years of such notes on the wall as the authorities never bothered to paint the washrooms with classes....it was the most hated aspect of school for us girls but even a little matter of pride to be featured there..now when i think back abt it..it makes me smile...A collection of first crushes...so many childhood love stories lived on that wall...again collections...see!
A small picture of his family was pushed in the back, and a picture of them together on her 15th birthday was folded and kept in a inner pocket.
that says it all, doesnt it?
i loved the shower scene.. esp when she was sure she must have heard mine.. and when asked, he actually says, right, then says u r wrong.. oh boy, he is a goner😳 but knowing the state she is in and how desperate she is for him to acknowldeg his love, the poor thing wants to reconfirm what she heard.. and with that single thought/mission in her mind, she even pulls the shower curtain😆👏👏 and boy, does he get mad or what, but she is only searching for the truth in his eyes and nothing else! and boy, she eyes him up😆.. i can just imagine that esp about how she must have looked.. but why do you say that Dutta has seen such women and nakku looked different. he had lived long and in lot of hellholes to have known the best of that breed- where did he get that opportunity😕 or was it just meant as a comment? but god, just reading how his heart his aching and how desperate he wants her in his arms is in itself torture😭 pls usse wapis math bhejna.. esp after tonight's epi, feeling sad.. pls this time, let him even go to the airport, but come back for her just like SRK does in so many movies😆 About dutta's life in past few years since he left home....there are many things he is holding inside...but thats for other updates..
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Nakkusha said softly- kya karu, dutta? tumahare liye duwayein ikhataa karte-karte mera daman hi nahi bharta.
Nakkusha smiled with her happiness shining in her eyes and cheeks flushed- well, she promised that everyday she'll pray that you get whatever you want in life. Always!
oh, it is truly wonderful how u have merged the past and presnt here so poignantly.👏 can never say enough to say how i loved this.. esp how she says it softly and he cant look away..ab jaldi se pls pls update kar😃😛😃 and lastly a big thank u for updating as i know how hard it is when u r working and have other commitments too!
I am so glad that this FF is being recieved well..it actually is very difficult to keep track of timelines of these two ppl...some mistakes in the year counting is the biggest threat... and there is the fact of confusing the readers...that will ruin the charm..i hope i have been able to keep things clear till now..every update in itself is a technical challenge..because i have abundant such real like memories so i can go on and on for 50chapters(which i will not as that will not be interesting) but the presentation of it on paper or say post poses a very difficult challenge...i am so happy that you guys are supporting me..its humbling and exhilarating!
Thanks and love for kids,
Yours faithfully,
Shilpi
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