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Posted: 14 years ago
Part 4:
Again Fabolous Part. just a small comment below:
He sees SP😕 I think u meant DP here!😉 standing behind Naku, Naku unaware of him, Dutta hides behind the pole immediately. His anger surges again. He sneaks on them and eavesdrops their convo!...
Nakku's faith is really strong, but Dutta on the other hand is sooo trapped in A.S. He thinks A.S. is the world to him! so i don't think he is gona appreaciate Nakku's thoughts and words.. Bas wo Nakku ko jane ke lie majboor na kare to acha hoga..*crossing fingers* but m bit worried coz Kala's plan might work..🤢 and it could possibly harm Nakku's faith in her relationship! Kala is soooooo Evil.😡 she can do anything to harm Dutta and Nakku! I wonder what Dutta thought after hearing DP and Nakku's convo. in rain.. i hope he didn't misunderstand Nakku again coz of DP!
Overall Very Good part! Looking FWD to next one!😛
This is for u DD!
And The below gift is for such a lovely VM poo!😊






Edited by Krrish87_sweet - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
@shallyman: Thanks Shally...watch out...
@sunshine21: This jhumri is getting on my nerves too...maar dein usse? 😆😆
@mussy: Mussy, I will not let Dutta loose his character!! u will see Dutta AS he is!!!...I promise.....He will always remain sharif and love Naku!!! ....This I can promise!!
@Aisha: Thanks gal! I too love the VM...Pooji did amazing job!
@BB (blackberry): Thanks BB....Now, did u get why I had to use the cliche' line??? ....As Kala says that a person like Naku, who just doesnt deter from her stand of leaving Dutta at any cost, the only thing tht can move her is another woman....As per Kala, thats the ONLY thing that can make her leave Dutta!!
@Naina: Thanks Naina....u read all the 4 parts in one go??? wow!! ...watch out for next parts!! 😛
@triasha: Thanks gal!! I am glad u loved it.....😛...The VM was indeed great!
@swati: i wuld defn hate me in the next part...thats the climax!! 😆😆...watch out swati...next part wuld be up soon! 😉
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Dancingdoll

@shallyman: Thanks Shally...watch out...

@sunshine21: This jhumri is getting on my nerves too...maar dein usse? 😆😆
@mussy: Mussy, I will not let Dutta loose his character!! u will see Dutta AS he is!!!...I promise.....He will always remain sharif and love Naku!!! ....This I can promise!!
@Aisha: Thanks gal! I too love the VM...Pooji did amazing job!
@BB (blackberry): Thanks BB....Now, did u get why I had to use the cliche' line??? ....As Kala says that a person like Naku, who just doesnt deter from her stand of leaving Dutta at any cost, the only thing tht can move her is another woman....As per Kala, thats the ONLY thing that can make her leave Dutta!!
@Naina: Thanks Naina....u read all the 4 parts in one go??? wow!! ...watch out for next parts!! 😛
@triasha: Thanks gal!! I am glad u loved it.....😛...The VM was indeed great!
@swati: i wuld defn hate me in the next part...thats the climax!! 😆😆...watch out swati...next part wuld be up soon! 😉





Love you DD...........yeah yeah dichak dihak............Continue with the next part.....waiting for it impatiently😉
Edited by mussy.jamshed - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: chandanafan

Wow DD loved your OS a lot. 👏 u really write fabulously. Well done. 👍🏼
OMG dutta was so close to bringing back Nakku and DP had to come as a kabab mein haddi. nehiiiiiiiiiiiii
I'm really eager to know what is Kala's new plan. update soon asap. 😳 Jhumri is so annoying.I hope all problems are solved in the next update since u said it will be 5 parts and so does that mean next update will be the last update. nehiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii, if next update is the last update, then update it slowly. I don't want this OS to end.😆 big hug to u DD for a fabulous OS.

@ Pooji - Fabulous VM. u really matched the scenes very well with the lyrics and DD's update. I totally forgot about this song. Use it hear a lot when I was a kid. 😳 Thank u so much for making a tasha VM on this song. loved it. 👍🏼

Welcome to the LTL forum Pooji.






Ritu,
I had to add few scenes to make a logical flow....hence, I think there wuld be 1 extra part...Max 7 parts....I dnt wanna exceed one shots too much! 😉😆
and dnt worry....we will do something about this Jhumri....uski toh!!! 😡😆
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Krrish87_sweet

Part 3: Aww.... preety sad..😭 💔 and Dutta in Tears is really heart wrenching!💔 but i love the way Nakku is determined to save Dutta from himself and his Evil Triots and Evil Mom!⭐️ Nakku's faith in her love is really a charm of part 3. Dutta's thoughts are still unclear (as always😆) and that is the reason behind his pain! Lets see what is in that chitshit that Kala gave to Jhomari!🤢

Overall Very Good Part DD!👏⭐️👏⭐️👏

Yeah....Poor Dutta is always struggling na.....He always has to oscillate between two things.....he never has a clear path na....Krish, this never striked me but u r very right....since the commencement of LTL, Dutta has always been oscillating....Haye...bechaara!!

Originally posted by: Krrish87_sweet

Part 4:
Again Fabolous Part. just a small comment below:
He sees SP😕 I think u meant DP here!😉 standing behind Naku, Naku unaware of him, Dutta hides behind the pole immediately. His anger surges again. He sneaks on them and eavesdrops their convo!...
Nakku's faith is really strong, but Dutta on the other hand is sooo trapped in A.S. He thinks A.S. is the world to him! so i don't think he is gona appreaciate Nakku's thoughts and words.. Bas wo Nakku ko jane ke lie majboor na kare to acha hoga..*crossing fingers* but m bit worried coz Kala's plan might work..🤢 and it could possibly harm Nakku's faith in her relationship! Kala is soooooo Evil.😡 she can do anything to harm Dutta and Nakku! I wonder what Dutta thought after hearing DP and Nakku's convo. in rain.. i hope he didn't misunderstand Nakku again coz of DP!
Overall Very Good part! Looking FWD to next one!😛
This is for u DD!
And The below gift is for such a lovely VM poo!😊

Thanks Krish!! I just corrected tht mistake...actually....I wrote these parts when we didnt know that Tinu Anand is DP and not SP....Hence, the blooper....I wuld have to check other parts too....😛
Krish sweets, Lets see what happens to Naku's faith....but I promise, Dutta will not force her to get out...Naku has made it clear tht she is here to stay so, Dutta cannot do anything about it now...and kuch bhi kaho, andar se toh he also wants Naku to be in front of him always!! 😆😆
Edited by Dancingdoll - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: darkchoco

Hey DD, I knw i m a bit late in my reply, but trust me gal, i was held up.. 😊
btw, just loved your OS, you are a great writer and the emotions of dutta n Naku were just... U knw i cant express it it! ...and my fav is AS is BH.. 😃
i want AS to be BH.. The pallu chewing cow is surely gonna be the BH.. ROFL.. Keep writing and PM me whenever u do that!

Bella

😆😆😆...My fav is too AS is BH.....Atleast I can incorporate that in my OS!! 😆😆
BTW, Babi is a better pallu eating cow than AS.....AS really needs to buck up to become a pro!!! 😆😆
I will PM you on next part...Pakka! 😉
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: khushi0318

hiiiiiiii DD..........................

must say awesome VM........................
Yaar ye jhoomri ki to supari de do bajji ko..........................
poor TaSha .......... I wish Dutta soon knws the truth about his AS and evil trio............................
U knw according to my thought AS is not BH in the serial.........
But after reading ur OS I am tooooooooooo much convinced that AS must be BH......... now u can imagine, how much impact ur OS leave on my mind..................
very good update dear...........................

Chal theek hai....Jhumri ki supaari bhi de denge!!...Promise!!!....😆😆......Baaji ko hi supari denge! 😆😆
😆😆😆OMG!! I have been picketing on AS is BH, but if I knew my OS can make that happen, I would have written it long time back!! 😆😆😆😆
Thanks Khushi...watch out for next part!! 😛
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Dancingdoll

Ritu,

I had to add few scenes to make a logical flow....hence, I think there wuld be 1 extra part...Max 7 parts....I dnt wanna exceed one shots too much! 😉😆
and dnt worry....we will do something about this Jhumri....uski toh!!! 😡😆



so there'll be 7 parts. yippeeeeeeeeeeee. that's fabulous DD. 😳 that's perfectly fine and then u can rest for sometime and then come back with a new OS. oh I know u'll take care of Jhumri really well. 😆 so me not worrying about it. bas tasha should be all happy wappy.



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Posted: 14 years ago
wicked update DD.... SP kyun aya, dutta was abt 2 approach naku...oh well i hpe the truth is out soon...dnt drag it like CVs do in the shw..lol...
awesome writing as always DD..keep it up!
love Yuvi
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Dancingdoll

Part IV: Pyaar bahut Dard detaa hai!

Guys, This Part has a song sequence and the cheoreography credit goes to -Pooji-...My Pooh bear!!!...Thanks Pooh Bear!! Amazing VM!!!...👏👏👏🤗
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Pooji.. amazingly well done and beatifully woven together VM.. superb song..hard to block out Suresh Wadkar's soulful voice, but all credit to Pooji for the wonderful editing.. esp as it fits your oS so well.. esp Dutta coming up near the pillar and watching naku.👏👏👏
One look at Naku and he drops Jhumri's leg.
aaww.. loved this.. yeh padke dil mein tandak pahunch gayi.. dutta can never even in his dreams think of anyne else otehr than nakku.. his world starts and ends with nakku.. bas😳
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"Itnaa door mat bhej denaa mujhe, ki mein aana chahoon bhi toh nahi aa paaoon! Mar jaayegi mein!". She goes near Bappa's idol and lights the diyaa! She folds her hands in front of Bappa. "Mein jaanti hai ki aap mujhse bahut pyaar karte! Bus mere Saab banke, dil se kaam lenaa! Raastaa dik jaayegaa!". She folds her hand in front of Bappa and and finally turns to look at Dutta. Naku's eyes had pain in it. She looks at him for few seconds, "Agle saaligraa par mere paas hoge na!...(pauses)... Dil se?"

such beautiful and senstive words DD.. loved how she speaks to her hubby through her best friend. she is reinforcing his own knowldeg that he loves her a lot and just think like HER saab.. truly marvelous.. of course agle har saalgirah par dutta will be with nakku, warna dutta toh dutta hi nahi rahega tere bina..i can feel nakku's pain and a tinge of fear on seing jhumri close to him.. she knows that her saab loves her, but she is worried as well as any wife would be..then she cannot resist but turn back to see whether he is acknowledging/listening to her and finds his with moist eyes too.. feel so bad for them
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Dutta hesitates but then finally looks up to see Naku....He sees Naku standing in the open lawn, drenched in rain, but lost in her own world...He makes out the fine lines of the tears flowing from Naku's red eyes, merging with the rain droplets.....Dutta's eyes become wet! He stands behind the pole and closes his eyes and just listens to his Koel.

exactly.. he is scared to look up and see her tear drenched face.. he knows she is in tears just listening to her , but even though he has handed out the order that she is to leave the house, his heart still worries/cares/loves nakku.. and consciously or not, he will be forced to come to her, when she is in pain.. uski himmath nahi ho rahi hain nakku ko aise dekhne ke liye esp as he himself is the cause of her sad state..
Dutta is so moved with his memories, "Tu mujhse abhi bhi pyaar karti hai na? Aaj mein sab theek kar doonga"...He pauses, looks at her with intensity, that only a true love could produce...."Haan, sab theek kar doonga....Tujhe mein apne se door nahi jaane degaa, Jab se tere ko jaane ke liye bolaa hai, lagtaa hai, jaise zindagi hi rooth gayi ho Naku"....
oh, this duffooo.. feels she might have fallen out of love with him.. feel for dutta here, yaar, aur kya karna padeganakku ko that this guy can at least have strong belief that his iwfe loves him, not for one day or two days, but for eternity.. feel sad as he has only experienced such pains in his love life, that his poor heart still does not want to believe that someone can love him.. he is too scared to fully accpt it lest he be broken again if that happens.. but i really hope with time, he realises the strength of nakku's love for him and that its forever... YES, u have done the unthinkable, but this is nakku jiski aankhon mein, saanson mein , baaton mein, man mein..sirf aur sirf dutta hain...
i remember his promise from your first OS DD.. tere na hone se marne ka bhi jee nahi karta😭
see, he had not promised her for nothing that jab bhi tu nazreain uthayegi, toh tum mujhe tumhare paas paoge tumhein manane ke liye, and also had promised her that teri har aansson ponchne ke liye mein honga..
DP comes and places his hand on Naku's head!...He says, "I am sorry"...Naku torn, wipes her tears, and tells him, she is fine..."Toofan hai, tham jaayegaa! Aur hum jeet jaayenge." . She smiles and then realizes they were getting wet in the rain. She pulls SP in the room! Dutta clenches his fist and hits the pillar hard!
no, this was right,., i hate to admit, but acha hua DP came in between.. cos when dutta accepts nakku, i want him to do it with all his love and faith and not just in a moment.. because ab aage kuch bhi ho, he should never mistrust nakku or her intentions..
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DD

awesome as always DD>. let Kala do whatever she wants.. but one thing is sure that whoever thinks good will always find good only in return, so very sure that D_N will only get good things in life.. yes, thoda intezaar karna padega.. pata hain in the confession OS also, nakku asks him ki aap ne bhi nahi roka na nakku ko.. and he says Tu jaanti hai ki mein kasia hoon.. tu mujhse zyaada mujhe pehchaanti hain.. and yes, she knows him more than himself.. hence she has trust that he will come back, hence she doesnt leave the house, hence she doesnt fear jhumri, except for a tiny second as she is also human.. she knows even though he asked her to leave, he will be completely broken if she was not in front of his eyes..
sorry DD, i am not going to write much now.. your OS always tend to leave me choked.. u bring out the best in Dutta for me❤️
Edited by prettywoman - 14 years ago

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