OS: Naku - 'I do!' Pt 3 - Pg 15 - Page 16

Originally posted by: princessmithai

Originally posted by: pbtghosh

Kya dutta bhao ek shath itne sare bate bolshak te hay? 😲 agar naku ke asar itne mehi aisy hai to zindegi bhar bolti to bandh hi nehi hoga.😆😆

[DD] 😆😆😆😆.....Gal....proposal mein kaafi bolaa tha...isliye abhi bhi bulwaadiyaa.....😉...itnaa sataaya naku ko, mend toh karnaa padega na! 😉

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"Bol, Meri hoke rahegi na?"

He extends his hand...Naku holds his hand and whispers, "aap dayedc ns pe"...The words come out unintelligible, Dutta comes closer and asks her, "Kya boli tu?"...Naku again whispers, "hb nfiew hfewi ds"...

Dutta gets a little impatient, "Ae Ladki, Ek toh sabar ho nahi raha hai, aur tu mantra jaap kar rahi hai. Pyaar mein zubaan bhi jaati hai kya?...Zor se bol".

Naku gets a little annoyed and literally shouts in his ears, "Us kamre mein mein rahegi yaa daaroo. Toh Kya soche aap?". 😆😆😆😆😆

Dutta intially looks at her zapped then he starts laughing and pulls her towards him, "Tu hi meri Daroo hai Naku, Teraa Nasha utaarnaa mushkil hai, aur daroo mein kya loonga?". He gives her a tight jhappi. Naku gets embarrased and disengages herself.
"Saab, Aap bade wooh ho!!"

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bich sarad pe indono aise bat kar rahe hay🤣🤣🤣

ye dono to bilkul badal gai hay year. dutta ke liye new profession dhund na hoga😆😆😆

[DD] 😆😆😆😆 Haan yaar.....tune blooper pakad liyaa! 😆😆😆

well done DD👏👏

[DD] Thanku! 😛

Originally posted by: SAraW

PART1

AWWWW!!! naku talking to herself.. was so cutE!!! i could imagine her mouth those words in my head.. good dialogues DD.

Marnaa tha kya 🤣!!!! kaun hai bay tu ?🤣 goongi behri .. pati say lad ker aai hai 🤣 so like SK!!!

Saab meray kissi Aurat ko chhoo bhi nahi saktay.. 😍 (Excluding naku offcourse 😆) or did a hand on their script by any chance?? 😕 I have some srs doubts brewing in my mind.. *puts her thinking cap on* Ermm *nothings coming*.. * puts it back and goes back to reading* 😆

Wow!! loved him giving her lecture abt love and Trust.. pyaar hai tu saath bhi hai aur bharosa bhi ...

Great piece of writing DD!! u should write more of these One shots..


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Originally posted by: prettywoman

This is the best OS I have ever laid my eyes on..Absolutely spot on with Nakku's dialogues, esp the way she talks and her sort of language/grammar has been captured so beautifully DD. I could just imagine Dutta's small smile on the corner of his lips.. just what we all love here '..

[DD] OMG!! Thanks Vaish...Thats a huge compli!! 😳🤗...My first OS and this reaction....Make me walk in pride! 😛

Aur bappa ke mandir mein leke jaane.. it is amazing.. see many of us here always wanted the revelation to be personal between these two.. but know that is unlikely to happen as it is an Indian show after all.. But hats off to you, even though there is Baaji and others around who have come after hearing Dutta break all the bottles, you have woven such a magical scene that in spite of all being there, for Tasha, it is just them.. they don't feel anyone around them which I believe is a master stroke, seriously I will be more than pleased if cv's actually follow your path as they can still do their 100W flashes on their grey faces, but still continue showing Tasha in their own world, nahin?!

[DD] Totally...the way I see these two characters is, that when they are in love, nothin else matters to them...Their intensity in love is so strong that when they get woven in it, they are there for keeps...they are so possessive about this feeling of theirs that they dnt let anyone nterfere....and they have no inhibitions in accepting the truth.....so, when its about love for dutta, its just naku in front of him, and when its about love for naku, its just Dutta in front of her!!....Just the two!!....everything else fades!! 😳

Wow, using bappa's cloth to wipe off the colour.. u r a genius and a very sensitive writer to use that! Also Dutta not being smitten by her when he first sees her fair avatar is something I would really want and prefer this silent treatment he metes out to Nakku rather than all thod phod he does..

[DD] I was searching for a water source also in the temple then I didnt make it explicit but I wanted all tools to be given by Bappa.....but I am actually impressed with u, that u actually caught that point in my writing...I mean, I did give a thought to tht aspect but didnt know someone wuld catch it....u shld totally be a critic!! must say! 👏👏👏

Finally, babi speaks up at laest in your OS.. it is a nice touch to have the mum explain this than Nakku.. more reasonable..

[DD] I strongly feel she shld have a say here...she was the onw who showed this direction to Naku, then when Naku is in a mess bcoz of this, she has to take complete responsibility and face the music with her daughter!! not just run to their room to console Naku....

These lines are soooo beautiful.. seriously.. sniff sniff

Mein Jaanti hai aap Naku se bahut pyaar karte hai, aur mere jeene ke liye yeh kaafi hai...Mera dil to woh hi hai jo aapse pyaar karta hai, chahe kaali Naku ke andar rahe ya iss Naku ke andar! Bahut badnaseeb hai mein, sundar hai na, isliye. Yeh khoobsoorti hi meraa shraap ban jaayegi, meine socha nahi tha...Mere bus mein hota naa Sahib, Mein Bappa se bolti, Yeh roop le le, bus mere saab phir se mujhe dekhnaa shuru kar de! Naku ke sahib agar usse dekhte toh Naku Khoobsurat hai, nahi toh Naku kuch nahi!".

And this too is bringing a lump in my throat.. u have nailed Dutta and Nakku so perfectly dear..

Aise mein yahaan rahegi to aap mujhe apni patni toh bana loge, aap achche ho na isliye, lekin mere ko dekh nahi paaoge, apne se har pal ladoge, aur mein mar jaayegi yeh dekh kar."

[DD] awwwwwwwwww.....Thanku so much.....

Too emotional to write anymore.. how can you write like this for Dutta.it is sooo real, that I don't think I am reading an OS, this is like watching the episode..

[DD] U r seriously making me emotional here Vaish...thanks a ton for ur comments!! 😊😊😳🤗

CV's will have to try their hardest to supass this, esp these lines

[DD] OMG! This is one of the best complis I got in this OS!! 😳😳

"Apnaa sab kuch lootaane aaya hoon. Math jaa Naku!".

Tears rolls down from Naku's eyes. She tells him, "Aap bhi toh nahi roke mujhe"

Dutta moves his head in frustration, "Arre, aisa hee hoon mein, par Mujh se achcha, mujhe tu jaanti hai...Toh tu hi bata -

And this'. Lekin tere naa hone se toh, marne ka bhi man nahi karta, Naku!"

[DD] This was my fav too...I was really proud of myself to come uo with this....I know...I sound proud et al, but I actually loved it....😛😉

Apne Kali-gori life ke saare din, mere naam kar de Naku!". he pauses for a second, searching her eyes -

"Mein tere ko yeh waada toh nahi karta ki tere har pal khushi se bhar doonga, par yeh waada karta hoon, ki tere har pal mei mein hoongaa...

Mein tere se yeh waada toh nahi karta ki tere aankhon mein kabhie aansoon nahi aane doonga, par yeh waada karta hoon ki tere har aansoon ko pochne ke liye mein hoongaa...

Mein tere se yeh waada toh nahi karta ki mein tere se jhagdoongaa nahi, par yeh waada karta hoon ki jab tu apni nazar uthaayegi to tere ko manaane ke liye mein hoonga..."

This is so trae as he can never promise to not cause her pain or to always keep her happy as that never happens, so what you made Dutta promise is superb!!!

[DD] Exactly....U r liking reading my mind Vaish....exactly what went in my mind...LTL is a realistic show....it wuldnt weave false promises...there wuld be hurdles....both of them wuld cry for each other, seeing the other in pain....so, how can he promise tht there wuld be no tests in life...no hurdles...there wuld always be!! what is imp is to stick to each other in these tests and move forward by supporting each other....

it was beautiful how you portrayed the 2 nakku's merging into one for Dutta.. the best way to do it.. very beautifully done..

[DD] Thank you...*sighs with relief*..I was very skeptical as to how would you all take this....but I didnt wanna make it very melodramatic with action and fair naku giving yet one more tests....I love feelings (dialogues) and expressions and hence, thsi was the best way I culd relate....while Naku is talking and he is not looking, he can feel puraani Naku...and then with that feeling intact, he sees the mirror and he feels both of them merge...thats what I thought...

And on a personal note, I hope n' pray that you get a partner who will always understand and love you for your sensitive nature J and BTW, SRK will be very proud of the fact that he is your inspiration to writing all this!!

[DD] OMG!!...U Sseriously got lump in my throat this time....thanks Vaish a ton...🤗

and on the SRK thing, u made my day!! 😳😳

Vaish

Originally posted by: mariescott14

OMG DD well written..it was so romantic had tear in my eyes....dont worry tears of happiness

really loved it

Originally posted by: swati2008

DD.......its awesome.......loved TaSha's dialogue.......they were so touching.......n Naku's mantra jaap n Baaji's bit was hilarious.....hope this happens in the show.....

Originally posted by: Tina-Saigal2002

Salman Khan aka Chulbul Pandey's Dialogues "I Say" and his half hindi and half stylish english llines reminds me of Quick Gun Murugan.. "Remove your Guns I say"

[DD] OMG....That movie has this - "I say?" 🤣🤣🤣....u r spot on..I wanted to give him, half english, and half hindi dialogues....😆😆

You should be writing the dialogues of all SK's movies.. At least he would have some nice lines to say on screen and I will make sure you write the dialogues of the movie "Quick Gun Murugan" in case its sequel is made...

[DD] 😆😆😆.....yeah...I shd totally take up SK's dialogues...ther will be less of those, aooieen, and tooein!! 😆😆😆

I loved the interaction of Nakku with CP.. Cp's dialogues were funny in the beginning but then his lines like "Koi pyarr kare toh tum se kare, tum jaise ho waise kare..." Bloody Brilliant yaar 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏... I really liked the "Love Gyaan" Cp imparted to Nakku.. He was serious but at the same time intellectual too.. He was funny and entertaining but gave some gr8 piece of advice on love.. and made Nakku remember her old self.. Hats off to your lines.

[DD] Thanku.....Well, He is SK and then he is an indian cop n I heard a little notorious cop too....plus he is supposed to help Naku....so, he had to be sunki, akdoo, intelligent, funny.....😉😉😉😉😉....lets see how he turns out to be actually....😉

At the second part DD I honestly got bowled over your confession lines which you wrote for Nakku.. Yaar it was Fantastic, Fantabulous, Brilliant, Awesome and Mind Blowind.. Now what else can I say other than that... "LOVED" Absolutely Loved each and every line of Nakku's confession.. Its hard to pick one line and say yes this lines is very well written.. No., each and every line was written so beautifully that I got lost into the confession.. Yaar now even I want to fall in love and make my confession by saying these same lines.. Haiiiiiii...

[DD] awwwwwwwwww................Well, these two really make me fall in love with the concept of love....and I wanted to capture that intensity here in this OS.....I am so glad u loved them Tina!!....😳😳😳

If the second part belonged to Nakku then the third part belonged to Dutta and his Awesome dialogues.. DD you must seriously think about taking Dialogues writing as your profession.. You have written dialogues matching the writing skills of Anil Deshmukh girl.. and this is the highest compliment I can ever pay you.. really you rocked it when you wrote lines for Dutta and Nakku.. and the last bit where you included Baaji's funny lines "Gori Chalk and Kali Slate" I had this sweet smile on my face after reading that lines... It was really very very sweet.... I liked the OS very very much.. I don't know what else to say.. Complimenting you would be like insulting you.. I can't even find appropriate Emoticons to express my feelings that I'm feeling right now after reading your OS.. You made me go in deep thoughts after reading your OS.. Very Beautifully written..

[DD] And I really dnt know what to say here Tina.....I am speechless.....I didnt know u all wuld like it so much....for me Dutta and Naku define love in their thoughts and expressions...and for tht dialogues are so important.....Hence, I didnt wanna spoil it with action or anything...I wanted just love to flow....thats all....and I am glad my first attempt was successful to a large extent in potraying tht! 😛...Loved ur postmortem! 🤗