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Posted: 16 years ago
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no but you 3 hav really got talent!! keep it up..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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thanks guys i just thing we're soppy romaintics and maybe in my case ive just read too many love stories and this is my chance to write my own to rakun-hopefully the ultimate love story (well at least for ekta)
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Posted: 16 years ago
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yh i think u'll manage to cum up wid a better then how ektas totally ruined rakun;s luv story hopefullly shes regrettin...keep on writin tho...we will wait 4 ur stories!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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you will be better then Yash Chopra or anyone who writes love stories
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Posted: 16 years ago
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guys im getting big headed now-but as im on strike ive got more time to devote to it i'll see wht i can come up with. but if u guys come up with something POST IT got it!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Shasha I am sure you will come up with something great
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wohooooooo!!!! you are tooooo goooood................................
This was Awesome!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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yeah totally you are amazing
mwah xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 2 Guys-but dont know how good. Anyway continuation after last scene:
Rahul comes to garden doors of Punj house, people are still mingling-he looks weary, run hands through hair and is about to step inside house but turns around and has 1 last look at outhouse. straightens shoulders and walks in
NainaO-with smile: Hello stranger where did you disappear to?
Rahul: sorry got sent on a wild goose chase-someones idea of a practical joke. Anyway how are you finding the party?
NainaO: its lovely! your family are so welcoming. You must of had so much fun growing up!
Rahul: Yeah if you count all the fights and Tanu getting us all into trouble!
NainaO: I bet you wouldnt change a thing
Rahul looks at Tanu with Rohit
Rahul: Your right-even those fights were a sign of our love. We thought nothing could break our bonds- looks at Aman.
NainaO: Why has something broken your bonds?
Rahul-looks down at NainaO: No of course not! But things change and Tanu 1st haq belongs to Rohit now. Anyway why arent you eating?
NainaO: Im stuffed!
Rahul: Oh no you dont. FatimaB made me eat and eat and eat and you didnt even try to rescue me-so tough luck, come on food madam lawyer.
Drags NainaO to buffet table
Aman to Sid: Bhai have you seen Kakun?
Sid: How many times have you asked me? No i havent she'll be around somewhere-Aman ive got to teach 1.how not to lose your biwi and 2.be cool- if our biwis see us worried theyll take advantage of it and let me tell you they dont need anymore advantages!
Both laugh. Sid walks away, Aman calls out
Aman: Sid Bhai have you seen Rahul?
Sid: No....yeah there he is- and points to Rahul with NainaO at buffet table- think we've got another wedding!-
smiles at Aman and walks away
Aman to himself: at least thats something-Rahul and Kakun are not together. Damn it i have to find her,anything can happen. Let me ask Bebe and Mum.
DP to Sid: Someone mentioned seeing lights on in the outhouse check it out.
Sid: Sure Dad
Sid goes out and while walking to outhouse bumbs into KK-she is still unsteady
Sid: Bhabhi? Are you ok?
KK: Sid Bhai-no i felt dizzy so i came out for some fresh air but still...
Sid holds up KK and helps her to walk to house
Sid: Bhabhi have you eaten or drank something?
KK: No just that special jucie you gave Tanu and me
Sid goans
Sid: Oh hell, im going to kill Aman..
KK: What has Aman to do with anything?
Sid: Oops sorry Bhabhi you werent suppose to know....
KK: Know what?
Sid: Aman gave me the drink to give to you-he said it was a husband and wife thing and it was going to make this a night you would never forget.
KK silent
Sid: Bhabhi you ok?
KK: Fine dont worry i wont tell Aman-i'll pretend i didnt know
Sid: thanks Bhabhi
They reach the party inside.
Rahul and NainaO are by buffet table.
Aman is with his Dad and Tanu in-laws
Bebe,Gayo,Preeti and Tanu are together
Sid and KK walk in
KK eyes go straight to Rahul who is laughing at something NainaO is saying
KK eyes fill with hurt
Bebe-sees Sid with KK-with concern: Kya hoga Kakun puta?
Bebe, Gayo and Tanu rush to KK
Rahul takes a step but stops.
Aman takes over from Sid
Gayo-to Sid: Kya hoga?
KK to Bebe and Gayo: Kuch bhi nay, bus assi chakha aye.
Bebe: have you eaten anything?
KK shakes head
Bebe to Gayo: No wonder it ni sara kaam Kakun nay kiya party kilay abhi tak kuch kalinay. Quickly bring a thali. Aman puta take her upstairs.
Aman: Ji Bebe
Aman takes KK upstairs-Rahul watches on
NainaO: I hope Kakun will be ok?
Rahul: Im sure she'll be fine
NainaO: How lucky she is that everyone cares for her and that Aman takes such good care of her too.
Rahul-still looking at Aman+KK as they go up: yes Aman Bhai loves Kakun a lot, she's his life.
Aman brings KK into room. KK enters and stops, shocked at the scene.
KK: What the hell is this?
Aman: Our bedroom- he enters and lies on bed which is covered in petals
KK: You know what im talking about-dont play dumb!
Aman: I thought you wanted to forget? So how better then a romantic scene between husband and wife?
KK: You disgust me!
KK opens all lights and walks over to dressing table and starts to blow out the candles
Aman gets up and grabs KK arms and turns her around
Aman: I disgust you?! Why cause i wanted to please you? Wanted to be romantic with MY WIFE? And thats disgusting? Oh wait a minute could it that whats disgusting is the fact im the wrong husband?!
KK slaps Aman
KK-shouts: Rahul has nothing to do with this! Can your pea brain not understand that I HATE YOU! YOU ARE A MURDERER! YOU KILLED MY SISTER! YOU KILLED MY MOTHER HAPPINESS AND MINE AND YOU THINK I'LL FORGET BECAUSE TO DID THIS?
KK swings arm around the room-knocking a vase full of roses. She goes to bed and throws the cover on the floor.
Aman: It was a mistake...heat of the moment....
KK: Murder is never a mistake! And what came afterwards the setting up of Rahul, that was a mistake too?!
Aman: I didnt want to lose you.
KK: I was never yours to lose. I have and will always belong to Rahul
Aman furious grabs hold of KK and throws her on bed, him on top of her.
Aman-furiously: NEVER! You are mine now and forever and this night was going to be the beginning, so app khosh mein ho so what? Im going to take whats mine.
Aman starts to kiss KK on face. KK struggling
KK: Nahi Aman! Get off me-this isnt right. Aman please dont do this
Aman: Thats right beg KK but beg me to continue not stop. If it helps think that Im Rahul!
KK-crying: Aman no, please no-this is RAPE!
Knock on door-Aman stops
Tanu: Aman Bhai? Kakun Bhabhi? Its me, Tanu, Mama sent a thali for Kakun Bhabhi and told me to sit with her. Bhai? Bhabhi?
Aman gets off KK
Aman to KK: sort yourself out. Tanu im just coming.
Aman walks to door, KK runs to bathroom, Aman opens door Tanu has tray in hand
Aman: Tanu dont worry, you go down i'll stay with kakun.
Tanu smiles: No problem Bhai, id like to spend some time with her especially as this is no longer my home.
Aman: This will always be your home, Brat!
Tanu-laughs: Thanks Bhai anyway dad wants you too something about some case you guys are working on?
Aman: Dad and business, never 1 to relax. Fine i'll go down
Opens door and Tanu walks in and sees mess, looks at Aman
Aman: Kakun was still giddy and this is the result
Tanu smiles: Dont worry i'll take care of it, i owe her.
Aman: Thanks- and walks out of room.
Tanu closes door and tidies up room. shower can be heard in background. KK comes out, wearing white and looking very pale and plain.
Tanu-tentalively: Bhabhi...?
KK is startled, jumps and takes a couple of steps back. she looks around nervously.
Tanu-gently: Ive brought you something to eat Bhabhi, Aman Bhai has gone downstairs.
KK looking lost, notices the room has been tidyed up
KK-bewildered: it was a mess.....my fault .....
Tanu-strongly: NO Bhabhi it wasnt your fault!
Tanu takes KK gently by the arm and seats her, she slowly feeds KK
Tanu: How are you feeling now Bhabhi?
KK-smiles but eyes full of pain: Better and all the more so for seeing you and seeing you in this role
Tanu: role?
KK: the carer, the giver
Tanu smiles shyly
Tanu: i'll be back in a minute Bhabhi
KK looks frightened
Tanu: Not even a minute, 30 secs promise
Tanu leaves room but is is back quickly
Tanu: Bhabhi take this-holds out white pill- it'll help you sleep and that is what you need right now
Tanu and KK just stare at each for a few minutes. KK takes pills and swallows. Tanu takes KK to bed and tucks her in.
Tanu: I'll stay till you fall asleep.
KK nods and closes eyes a few minutes later is asleep
Tanu to herself: can ive of heard right?-
Flashback Tanu bringing up thali at bedroom door hears KK pleading 'No,no it'll be RAPE'. Then remembers the state of the bedroom
Tanu thoughts: Aman Bhai wouldnt, couldnt, but Kakun Bhabhi...- looks down at her sleeping- ..what do i do? I owe my life, my baby life, my happiness to Kakun Bhabhi, Lord help me?!
Tanu looks down on KK
Hope you guys enjoyed- i wanted kakun to be on the receiving end of some tenderness for once, and i wanted another character to be a more rounded role.
Tell me wht u think HONESTLY otherwise i wont be able to improve!
Edited by shasha74 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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really good'
i wanted rahul and naina oberoi to find out first and then they wd make a plan for aman

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