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nitarata

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Posted: 10 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: rbb1
Wow Tia amazing story it was beautifully written I like how Abhi was trying to get Pragya to understand why he wanted to go to Goa and poor naive Pragya didn't understand she finally got it she is sweet and innocent, can't wait to read more stories from you

Thank you for reading and commenting Ray!

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nitarata

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#32

Originally posted by: grape777
You wrote the scene beautifully! It was passionate and intense and not many people are good at conveying this in their writing, but you did amazing😉. Also, please do write more!

Thanks dear! I have been nervous about this story.

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nitarata

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Posted: 10 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: lasyap3

You are a fab writer...🤗

Thanks again!

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FhatTheWuck.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#34

Excuse me! HI!!

AS EVER YOU TOO HAVE BLOWN MY MIND AND THE UFF PARTS TIA !!!!! Elegant and amazing !

AND CAN YOU PLEASE WRITE ONE FOR THEIR ROOM 🤣 PLEASE LOL

My fav were also

"I always wanted this, I always dreamed of you in my arms, even when I hated you" professed Abhi running his fingers on her thighs he had just bared. "And I found my solace in your arms even when you hugged me to just show the world" confessed Pragya hugging him tighter. "Who said those hugs were just to show the world?" chided Abhi making Pragya giggle. "There is something about you that fascinated me. Whether it was your glasses, your beautiful eyes, or the sexy frame that hid under those umbrella like dresses, I have been so occupied by you" Abhi said kissing her forehead. "And I have dearly cherished every little moment you were around me, whether fighting with me, or teasing me" Pragya added feeling emotional.pregnant today. It's not the middle of my cycle. But would you mind if we have a baby?"

The thought of a baby suddenly hit Abhi and his heart felt full at that. He had never thought about having children but the idea of her as the mother of his babies sounded perfect. "I want to make 100 Chashmish rockstar babies with Chashmish" smiled Abhi earning a similar smile from her. The next thought that crossed his mind thrilled him as he was going to enter her without a barrier.

Edited by -Martinski- - 10 years ago

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Posted: 10 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: -Tia-

Thanks for saying it represented AbhiGya! That was the biggest purpose.
Show will never have such stuff yeah but something suggestive may be in a year or so.
Thank you for the comments.

Of course the show won't have that, my bad, I meant that they should finally get together and acknowledge their love and marriage. and then make love(not on tv though :P)

I'm frankly getting a little bored with the atyachaar on "chashmish"; everyone must be..

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Mina

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Posted: 10 years ago

#36

TIA TIA TIA TIA TIA TIA!!

ok forgive me for being late to the party!! eesh!

first of all, this is so beyond what i expected!! i wasn't sure to what level you meant to write smut, and now i see that you really did mean smut, and it's absolutely fab! the best part was that throughout, you completely kept alive the initial humourous angle we talked about. to be sure it turned into something else, hot and passionate and tender and perfect, and thank you thank you so much for writing that - but what i was looking forward to in this story was the impossibly delicious humour of pragya being "too loud" at the aroras, and thank you even more so for building your gorgeous story around this!

ok ok so what do i even tell you. it was all awesome!!

i loved the extended argument that we started with!! really set the tension but also brought abhi's aww-sho-sweet adorably-trying-to-make-up-for-stuff side, and gave a great opening to show how pragya was so totally ready to be moving on with things! our sweetoos are so ridiculous naa, don't even talk properly, but luckily the chemistry exploded and now at least they know they're so on the same page about this...!

LOVED beyond words Abhi being so repeatedly conscious of "ahh we shouldn't do this here" and "ack maybe we should stop now," and yet he also can't help getting carried away - it was so fun and exciting the way you wrote that!

and pragya just continuing to urge him on, trying to care that her mom's on the other side but really not caring...and good for you pragya, why care, you're with your husband after all, your mom-approved husband, not some school time boyfriend 😆

maybe neither of them realize how utterly gratified the elders would be to know that the two of them do have a healthy marital relationship...😉

as for the actual sex, just, wow, superb! so many little moments of utter hotness. i really liked how you gave us back and forth of how they both felt, made the whole thing so much more engrossing and satisfying. it was sweet that they worked through the emotional background of their relationship too, with declaring and reassuring their love as they took this step forward.

ok favourite bits:

- "Baby, your mother can hear us, so please seal your mouth". 😆

- foot kissing!! bahahaha! 🤡 😛 😊

- Pragya was trying to grab his arm, shirt or whatever she could, trying to survive her rushing hormones. 👏

-By now, realizing Pragya could make heavy noises he brought his fingers to her mouth and said "suck on to them and let me have fun with you, but don't scream alright?".🤣

-"He is yours for life, just like me" Abhi declared as he started to get her off of her remaining clothes. <---UFFF!! *dead* 😆 👏

-"100 Chashmish rockstar babies with Chashmish" smiled Abhi earning a similar smile from her.

-The next thought that crossed his mind thrilled him as he was going to enter her without a barrier. ☺️ 😃

-Abhi didn't realize when he had entered her completely but when he had he felt home as she had held him there securely. ❤️

-Pragya had never felt complete like this. ❤️

-Pragya was complementing Abhi's slow thrusts with the movement of her hips. The kissing had continued and the crescendo of passion was quickly building up for both of them. Soon, Abhi had started to move erratic inside her for it was out of his will now. He could feel that she was building up to it as well, but he wanted to make sure she had her relief before him. <---yayyy; love how Pragya in enthusiastic and acting instinctively! love the way you describe the buildup in a few well chosen but so expressive words. and aww very good gentlemanly Abhi, making sure she gets hers first 😉

-Lovemaking to his wife had turned out to be a million times more exciting and fulfilling than he had imagined. 👍🏼

-He felt proud of his woman as he tasted his own blood on his lip as a proof her passion for him. <--ufff what a visceral detail...messy and perfect 😃

-It thrilled him that his wife was an uncontrollable moaner. He hadn't expected this from his demure Chashmish but was very delighted with the pleasant surprise. ⭐️

-He couldn't wait to make love to his wife again in his room where he could get her to scream as loudly as she could. 😲 🥳🤣

-Finally, he too joined her in sleep as his thoughts kept on playing out the ways he was gonna make love to her and an impish smile plastered on his face... <--SO ABHI OMG

so anyway yes Tia...I know you told us this one gave you much trouble to write...but for us, it was oh so worth it!! This was such a fun and hot read, and soo what we wish AbhiGya could have, and basically I love it beyond words. I know it can be annoying when readers say this when you feel like you're done with the story but - oh I do hope you write more!! The idea of his room, you know...your fault, you left us with that idea!! Although come to think of it that should be their room, naa? 😉 BTW I also loved the small moment where he became enflamed by the idea of "her" room...and I'm kind of glad that they ended up not doing it on the bed she shared with BB, even though at first I was like, "floor mat! no!" hahaha. anyway yeah while reading the beginning I was really thinking of pagphere episodes and the quality time they spent in her room...so awesome to imagine them going back like this!!

ok what else can i say. thank you thank you thank you for writing and posting this!! thank you for challenging yourself to complete this story and pushing ahead until it was done!! yeah, just, thank you!!!! now let's do a victory dance!! ehehehe 😃 👏

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dee

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Posted: 10 years ago

#37

Tia, what a delightful story...I loved how the characters were just like how we know them but with their romantic sides explored.

Please write one of them at Abhi's and one in Goa... 😆

You've taken us on quite a passionate dream, don't wake us up yet.

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sam

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Posted: 10 years ago

#38

Beautiful os. I loved it. Please give us second os with abhi's bedroom. Thank you.

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Mina

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Posted: 10 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: deefan
Tia, what a delightful story...I loved how the characters were just like how we know them but with their romantic sides explored.

Please write one of them at Abhi's and one in Goa... 😆

You've taken us on quite a passionate dream, don't wake us up yet.

@bold - seconded!!

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nitarata

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Posted: 10 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: renukha871
RES!!!
Very busy today. I will come back and read it aaram se and comment!

Unres!!

"Well, I hope it would have been a happy surprise for you, it definitely would have been for me" Abhi said looking here and there. 🤣
"listen to her reading Baabaji ka paath and ardaas? Bewkoof 🤣 🤣
"Baby, your mother can hear us, so please seal your mouth".😆 😆

Abhi ignored her protests and bent to kiss her feet taking her big toe in his mouth. 😆 ( I know this is meant to be hot, but it reminds me of Lk's punishment😆)

"You and your bed, both have a loud mouth"🤣

Oh, Tia this was amazeballs!!! 👏
One minute I was like into the stroy heated up at their hotness and the next minute burst out laughing!!😆😛
Loved this very much Tia! It was hot, tender, funny, and sweet all at once.
P.S. I think you're very good at writing Abhi. The dialogues are so apt to the Abhi in the show.