The Hookup | in progress | an AbhiGya FF by mina - Page 23

First of all I like to say this toook me agesss that's why I got late commenting, I didn't even know how to give you feedback that's how good it is. To be frank I've love most of your work, this, Mina if onlies, Proof, Black Anarkali, Yaariyan collab you did with Martinski and the collab you've done with Tia, and more, there's so many I like I can't even choose which one is my favourite. You're writing is simply flawless. So I'm usually scared to give you feedback 😆 and this is my first for your writing...

Part 1: Delhi

A destiny moment for both as they end up being at the same place when Pragya wants to fulfill her needs, very apt for the title of the soap.

Like how Abhi was keeping an eye on her throughout the night even though he was with his friends a bit stalkerish like or showing more interest than he should.

Loved how he thought she needs rescuing, yeh more like you want to get rid of the guy for yourself and keep her 😆 Loved how he got possessive over her and told the guy to back off and compared his feelings towards her with the same way as his feelings towards Aliyah that is sooo abhi and so in character.

The text message between Pragya and Bulbul as Abhi was reading is ahaahaaa he sure must have got scandalized, definitely not the Pragya he knew and maybe little of that is in the new Pragya now ahahaaa, love.

Pragya's anxiety over her decision of taking her virginity with the guy was very in character as you showed her uneasiness and she definitely was taking more time than she should in the washroom for the same reason maybe because she knew that her decision was wrong.

Abhi got a little scared of the fierce Pragya Yes ahahaaa!!!!!

Loved their banter, taunting, teasing and no stereotypes here as your Pragya is definitely more bold compare to the soap one.

His dramebaaz has gone since their been apart awww - without dramebaaz Abhi wouldn't really be Abhi so that means no Abhi without Pragya eeeppp I love.

But he told her he hasn't slept with a woman in a year but he broke up with Tanu almost two years ago, so who did he sleep with in between, some random girl or fangirl like Pragya said?!

Liked how he was already imagining kissing her/wanting to kiss her when she was nibbling on her cracker.

Her decision felt right when she chooses him to be her first - How lucky is Abhi getting to be Pragya's first.

Loved the undercurrent they have even after 2 years and the comfort level between the two with their banter, teasing, her pushing her underneath thingy and mentioning the lingerie lol.

Their little banter in the elevator I loved.

Abhi is feet/shoes fetish and I don't like ewww (I personally have issues with feets 😆 ).

I liked how he teased her throughout especially since she's been waiting and then the glasses, he never let them take her glasses off ahhahaaa that's sooo Abhi. I wonder if they will do this in the soap when they get to that stage. I so can imagine it since he's in love with Fuggy chasmish wali lol.

He's calling her baby?! I don't know if I liked that, didn't he used to call someone else that?! 😕.

Loved the fact that he wants to stay in the bed with her longer and cuddle awww 😛.

Isn't that already a hint of wanting more than a hookup hmmm?!

My Favourite Parts

"...She's wearing this short black dress today, which she knows I hate."

And I wonder why Abhi 😆

Thank God, Aliyah was usually able to scare men off herself. This Chasmish should probably take lessons from her. 🤣

I sooo would love to see this in the show

"...Well, at least you can take comfort in the fact that she left you for the sexiest man alive. I mean, there's no competing with that."

Yes, can we have this Pragya in the soap. Has she ever called any other guy handsome infront of Abhi?! 😆 I don't think so lol

Pragya wrinkled her nose in confusion. Some part of Abhi wanted to smile at how cute that was, but another part of him scolded him for having silly thoughts.

Awww

He fought the old instinct to lose himself in those eyes and struggled to remember his point.

😉

"...Come on, let's do this."

This reminded me of gym phrase, I guess what they are about to do it's no less than gym session 😆

"Yes. I want to be the one. And I want it tonight. I'm here as long as you want me to be. ""Y-yes..." As the words left her mouth, she felt sure that she meant them.

These two lines were

Her world narrowed down to the space between his arms, and no amount of thinking ahead could have prepared her for being so close to another person.

😉

"I swear I'll tear it in half. I mean it. Don't you ever, ever give a man easy access like that again."

Protective and Possessive Abhi ☢️

Your Pragya is really sassy, Love this ☺️

"...Show me if you actually do something with your hands..."

He smirked. " Thanks, but you don't have to call me God."

Sooo Abhi 😆

And she looked so cute and sexy that he couldn't deny her.

Awww, can we have this Abhi in the soap who can not say no to her 😳

"I will never not want to tease you..." - This is such a Abhigya feel right here

"Only because it's you,...". He leaned forward to kiss her forehead, and something deep within her felt reassured at that gesture...Yes, this is what I want. This is right.

Best Best Best right here ❤️

"Don't you know that it's very important to empty your bladder post-coitus to minimize the risk of a UTI?"

He had no idea what she was talking about neither did I 🤣

"...he thought about how in a way, the night was a first time for him, too. He'd certainly never hooked up with anyone like Chashmish before. ☢️

And he wasn't at all ready to walk away from her yet.

Yet?! Is he planning on ditching her even though he wants a round 2?!

In simple words, I liked everything 😃...