OS: Rishhton Ka Ilzaam..:Last ch. on p-78 - All rev./com. responded - Page 71

Originally posted by: vidyasabde

Awesome...you have ended the os marvelously...this could have been the obvious end of KTLK ...but for the theme of age gap romance.

Thank you Dr. Vidya.. I am glad you liked the end. Yes actually this concept n the plot came to my mind some time ago, and I narrated to Deeps. She absolutely loved it, but we were highly skeptical about putting it on the forum. This was a v. diff. concept and we just dint know how readers would react.

Finally, in the last week of my vacation, I said, what the heck? zyada se zyada kya hoga - brickbats hi milenge na? So, we just plunged into it.

you showed very beautifully best friend can become true love if feelings are genuine at least from one side and secondly you can fall in love twice .

Oh my! You understood my concept so so well...👏

this different or hatke ending is a bit difficult to digest for Ashni lover but the os as such was outstanding...

Thank you so much. I knew it would be difficult to digest for an AshNi lover, but I HAD TO write this.

Now one os/ff with usual ending toh banta hai Shirley...

Originally posted by: ttrocks

Dear Shirley, read the concluding part; have one word for this entire OS: Brilliant!!

Aww😳 Thank you so much Tupu..

Ur stories are always hard-hitting reality. Many things that we cant have in real, we wish to see them happening at least in fiction to soothe our souls stressed with hard facts of life. And this is what your stories dont offer... This OS was initially a big jolt for me with pairing of the leads and all the chapters were very thought-provoking; especially the 4th chapter. But with U as writer, I had to patiently wait for the story to unfold and the way realisation of true love dawned upon Nidhi at last is just commendable on the writer's part!! 👏

Yes I know what u mean.. believe even I like rajshri kinda movies for that very reason. It helps me to get respite from the harsh realities of life. But frankly writing that kinda stories is too boring for me.

I am really happy that you found the chapters thot-provoking. As a writer, nothing can be more fulfilling. I really thank you Tupu, for the trust u have in me as a writer.

@bold - oh really? Thanks a lot again. I am glad this aspect came out well.

Scenes & convo.s/dialogues were really powerful, well thought of and beautifully etched out. One thing that I like in your writing is U always are sure of what U wish to convey - no confusion and no budging... And u are fully aware of what potential ur characters hold - actually you define ur characters with a certain boundary - as I feel & dont let them go OTT crossing that limit. Here I find Nidhi's character the most difficult to portray but you took the plunge and gave us totally "hatke" story.

I am glad you think the scenes, convos and dialogues came out well. I am always like... ye pakau toh nahi ho gaya. Yes frankly I like clarity in everything.. so I guess that's reflects in my writing too.

Yes I try to think of my characters in some details - the words they use, the mannerisms etc. So, I guess the boundaries as you call them fall into place automatically due to that.. I am really glad of it.

Tupu, let me confess one thing - I often get tempted to go OTT esp. with my dialogues.. but then I delete them (albeit reluctantly) but I tell myself - my own indulgence should not be the downfall of the quality of my writing.

Not to forget that whole story took place in just 2 days... something like "iss raat ki subah nahi" plot... One after the another life-shaking truths got revealed in such a constrained time... that too first 3 chapters' scenes played in span of just a few hours... Poor Nidhi... Unreciprocated, 5 yrs back brutally rejected love, she found all of a sudden...highly unexpectedly and got answers to many of her questions in those few hours - from afternoon session till late evening only. Koi sayana se sayana insaan bhi boukhla jaaye... then here we had a lady who had that piece of time 5 yr.s before, still clenched in her fists, who was very shattered with unrequited love, somewhat childish, somewhat obseessed... so much so that despite being so much in love with Rohan she wasnt able to acknowledge her feelings!! Recalled the song "Tumhe ho na ho mujh ko toh itna yakeen hai mujhe pyar tumse nahi hai nahi hai" And w/o speaking any word Ashutosh realized her the incompatibility b/w them!! Could so imagine the "Man of few words" Dr. Ashutosh portrayed par excellence by MBji throughout the story!!

Tupu, I m so thankful that u understand how everything from ch-1 till mid of ch-4 occurred in just a few hours.. A lot of readers felt, how could Nidhi think of all that... but I m glad you could understand that the kind of emotional bombardment she faced as the facts came tumbling out.

@Red - Precisely! That's the whole point, ryt? Secondly, thinking n doing r two diff things.. haina?

@Bold - I am just glad I (Not I actually, we- me n Deeps) could portray it the way we envisaged.

Wow!! What a creativity!! 👏 So much less time for to all the events (like a tale of two days) and female protagonist leading a life of stagnancy w.r.to her first love!! She has got a man of every woman's dream as her husband but it's like:
"Jo chaha tha woh mila nahi
Jo mila hai uski chaah nahi thi"
for her. Probably that's the reason, she fails to recognize how much she values and loves him...

Exactly! You understood it perfectly. I mean, these words of urs make me feel that my reader has understood, exactly what I wanted to convey.

@Bold - aww thank you dear

And with all such complexities, you excelled in the narration!! Hats off!! 👏

Originally posted by: Crazy.rock

Unbelievable, really the last update was magnificent . This story inspires us to choose love and compassion over anger and resentment. We may not be open to tapping, or meditation, or other methods of manifesting our joy and grief, but this message of love can be universal . Unlikely Story of Love, Healing, and Redemption . I can honestly say it's been a lot of years since I read an entire story in almost one sitting. After reading the last chapter there was a beautiful feeling of calm in my groin, a sense of peace so remarkable it was almost ecstasy.

Hi Again Meera - meri toh double lottery lag gayi - got 2 such b'ful reviews from you. Extremely sorry for the delay in the response yet again.

Thank you so much.. I'm so glad that the last chapter came out this well. Precisely. You understood exactly what I wanted to convey.

@Bold - Really? I m totally speechless at these compliments dear.

Two things that I found significant in the update were :

1. Nidhi reminding Ashu about the toy he promised his son

2. Nidhi subconsciously blabbering about Rohan's qualities

Well actually the toy idea was totally Deeps'. And as far as I remember, the 2nd idea was also given mostly by Deeps (Now Deeps don't come after me with dandaas, but jo sach hai vo sach hai)

What she did not know, and would never have believed, was that though her soul seemed to have been grown over with an impenetrable layer of love,some delicate blades of grass, young and tender, were already pushing their way upwards, destined to take root and send out living shoots so effectively that her all-consuming grief would soon be lost and forgotten. The wound was healing from inside.

Yes its like she had been telling herself that she cant love any other man than Ashu, but the heart has a way of its own - she never realized that rohan had captured her heart completely and that Ashu was now just an illusion, or rather her past..

What a beautiful ending to a beautiful story...something very real n acceptable. I bow down to ur artistic writing Shirley. Admist so many oppositions u have managed to write such an extraordinary story 👏

Oh I am on cloud 9.. thank you so much!

And sorry, I dint get you? what oppositions u r talking of? As far as I think, this OS got better acceptance than I had expected.

Originally posted by: ssktlk

Hi Shirley,

I was on vacation so this late review. Very well written ff. The conclusion of your story is just apt, especially for MB :) Though its sad to see Ashni not together, but the way you have put it, its perfect. Could not have been better any other way. With time, dreams, feelings mould into something else, take different paths, and thats how they are meant to be, you have shown that beautifully. Will wait for your next break and next ff. 😊

Originally posted by: sshirley

Thank you Tupu. I take a deep bow

Originally posted by: sshirley

pu, how r u dear? dnt ask abt me... I m badly down with viral.. mostly cured... but still troubling a lot//

sorry dear dear friends- will reply when I can.. really reallysorry but just not well plus study pressures