FF Completed: Hurdles and Hesitation (Index: Pg 1)

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bhalobasa

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Posted: 13 years ago

#101

HI Sharmishtha...this is the first time I got a chance to read you FF...and believe me after reading the Part1 , I could not stop myself from reading...Just now I completed reading all the parts...And How I wish you to be part of KTLK creative team..and How I wish all these chapters would actually be part of KTLK...The story flow, all the dialogues are just perfect...👏 👏

Please continue to write...waiting for the next part...😊.

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ApoorvaFan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#102

Shrarmistha,

Nidhi is probably overconfident here and it may come back to bite her later. 😃 Stay tuned!

Oh!!! You will be giving some shocker soon... I thougt some thing is coming up...

Coming to the part you updated just now, flow is very good. though you mentioned they are discrete scenes, the flow was there and I could feel the relation progressing. Ashu is opening up to her.

But that is his nature. I mean if you see the Ashu in the show, though he knows the intentions of Mallika, he is not able to be strong with her. He was also letting Nidhi overtake him in the before episodes... The same way the Ashu here is also giving away small mercies...

And Nidhi has continued her over board nature from previous story update, in a very elegant way... Good going Nidhi... Alas.. Our Author is planning some thing for you so be aware...

Till now I was always telling you Zoya-Ahmer are only coming in front of the eyes but because of the blue lehenga, sari and blue tye, which were there in ktlk, now I was able to visualize Nidhi and Ashu...

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RRANAMIKA

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Posted: 13 years ago

#103

loved all the scenes . very wel written yaar.

i'm thinking ashu's somewht confident abt his love. otherwise he would never ask her to go for the wedding together, tht too in public...

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Shari30

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Posted: 13 years ago

#104

She had been elated and excited since the day Ashutosh had come clean to her about his feelings. If their happiness lied in each other, she wasn't going to let him run away from it. Not without trying at least. She would do everything to convince him that she was worthy of him and he of her - if he had any doubts either way.

This is indeed how nids should have been, as zoya in DK was a fighter, she may be young but she is determined. she is confident of her love for him, to her it is not age but the feelings that matters, some may call it immaturity ya infatuation I call it love more so faith in her feelings

Ye ek definite possibility thi ki main nahin aata."
The voice of reason, you have to love the guy, he fights tooth and nail for the logic aspect yet he succumbs

"Problems imaginary nahin hain Nidhi. Ye rishta aaj na kal tumhare gale ki faans ban jayega."

"We can cross the bridge when it comes. Lekin aap to ek mauka dene ko bhi taiyaar nahin hain? Ye to sahi nahin hai Dr. Ashutosh."
to me these lines embody ASH NI, the optimism of youth versus the voice of experience yet with one common link that of feelings, emotions.

Ashutosh opened his eyes after the song got over and saw Nidhi. She looked stunning in her blue lehanga and Ashutosh was indeed quite stunned.

"Tum... Tum kab aayi?" he stammered.

the song had brought ashu in his world, u can feel how the sudden entry has startled him, she was there in his domain, one would almost hear him thinking if she was real or not

"Nidhi," his voice was suddenly heavy and emotional, "Tum itni khushmizaaz ho, sabko hansati rahti ho, intelligent aur capable ho, itni..." he hesitated for a moment, but spoke out making Nidhi blush red, "itni khoobsoorat ho. Tumse to kissi ko bhi pyaar ho jayega. Tum jise chaho use pa sakti ho. Why did you fall for me? You will be happy with someone young, energetic and positive like you and you will find many such men. I don't know..."

you have got to love ashu, you can feel that it is costing him, to him it is still impossible that Nids could have fallen for him, she could have the world yet she chose him. To him she is someone to be adored from afar, yet he cannot understand y the more he sends her away the more she comes back

Defenceless.
one single word yet sooo powerful the complete embodiment of Ashu and ahmer, thats how both are... defenseless towards what happened to them, both nids and zoya have been hope to both men yet one way or the other they fought it because they did not deem themselves worthy of it. In the end they both had and will have in the case of Ashu to accept their feelings

Ashutosh was relaxing on a rocking chair. His eyes were closed and a song was playing in the background.
for this one I will let my MB craze come out haaaila I could so visualise him in that😍

As I told you b4 if Dk was romance this one promises to be a hell of a ride and am loving every min of it.😉 You are the best❤️

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sharmishtha02

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Posted: 13 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: deepiika
wow sharmishtha..I always wanted that tie sequence to turn out to be somewhat like this...loved the way you have presented it...⭐️

Thanks 😊 I had loved it in the promo. Unfortunately, in the show, both the tie sequences were not like that. Second one was outright silly!

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Tinu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#106

ohhh just awesum part mish
asbu wearing the tie in home...nice
nids gifting passes for shw
there convo in restro.is nice...
awww ashu taking nids to the wedding...superb nice

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sharmishtha02

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Posted: 13 years ago

#107

Originally posted by: Ben25
Love this Nidhi and Ashutosh.

It was great, how Nidhi unknowingly persuaded/managed to get Ashutosh to speak out the truth which he was desperately trying to hide. Love the pace at which you are writing. No unnecessary dragging.

Btw, this dialogue by Armaan to Ashutosh was my favourite in the update. "Aakhir koi to wajah hogi ki tum dono ek doosre se pyaar kar baithe. To wahi wajah tumhare rishte ko bhi majboot banaye rakhegi" How true isn't it, when you put it like that.

Thanks Ben 😊 You noticed an interesting point. Ashutosh does not believe Armaan here. But ultimately it will turn out to be true!!

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Mimoha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#108

Ditto as Oaz plus I loved this one.

"Main jawaab doongi. Lekin main chahti hoon ki aap is rishte ko sirf mere liye nahin, apne liye bhi accept karein. To main us din ka intezaar karoongi."

"Aur agar woh din nahin aaya."

"Then you don't deserve the answer," she smiled and left Ashutosh speechless and defenceless again.

Looking forward to next part.

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vasanthi16

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Posted: 13 years ago

#109

Mish...very nice update...the story is taking shape so beautifully.

Ashu is going to take her to a marriage ...wow that shows that in his heart he has accepted that he loves her and Nidz is slowly breaking down his defences.

Am enjoying this so much...weekends r so much fun with all FFs and spoofs.

Thanks Mish...waiting for next update !!

👏👍🏼❤️

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sharmishtha02

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Posted: 13 years ago

#110

Originally posted by: AMBIKA2561979
fantastic writing...😊i want this nidhi n ashutosh bac in KTLK..😉😛.not the foolish,brainless ashu-nidhi ...they r now in ktlk

Thanks Ambika 😊

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