New OS 'PAPA O MERE PAPA' - Page 3

I appreciate ur effort...

aww...this is sooo good...loved the kya aap mujhe hug karenge??

sonaa..and soha are his girls...

Originally posted by: Aazeen02

It's review time...
Ehhh... Aazeen rubbing her palms in pure devilish glee...
Ye review nahi tumhari taang khichaayi hai... *And the devil in me twirls it's tail in a vicious grin*
Lolz...
Bohot mazaak hua...
Now seriously being here...

First of all, the dedication... I have been dedicated chapters and stories before because I had demanded them, or it was my wish that was fulfilled...
But this is kind of first dedication I ever got, because I inspire to write...
*Aazeen correcting her glasses... "Aah! Beta... Buddhe ho gaye hum..."*
Lolz!
Jokes apart again... *Dunno, why my funny bone is tickling again and again..*
Anjali, I am hugely humbled, baby... Honestly speaking, it's a very clogged throat feeling for me to get a dedication from you... Thank you soo much dear... I shall remember this forever... 🤗
I hope you remain inspired and continue writing, even when I am not...

Now coming to your OS... The missing that a child feels for her parents... Ek raaz ki baat bataau? Mera Pehla OS bhi aise hi ek topic par tha -"Meri toh maa hi nahi hain"

Golu is a deprived kid despite having both her parents living together and Suhana is another deprived kid despite having her father alive, she never had his presence in her life... And for some reason, it has scarred both Golu and Soha for missing their parents...

Golu just had a single parent in Dev, so did Soha in Sonakshi... Yet they wish for their parents to turn back to them...

Speech about their father was a very sweet way of having children talk... What Golu said was his pure innocence... He certainly doesn't differentiate between Dev and Vicky... For him Dev is the father for him though he doesn't call him a papa...

Though I will talk about Soha here Anjali... I have a little gripe about Soha's part here... Soha, first of all is a very introvert kid... She cannot speak her heart out directly in her name... She even in the show talked about her desire of her father in a form of story of Baby Girl and Papa...
Plush, the dialogues that she speaks, beta, you need to choose them wisely... A 6 years old is not expected of such mature dialogues right before the mike on her first go... She needs persuasion from her own mother to speak her heart out, will she talk so freely when the entire audience in all ears?
Though your entire OS gave me the feels of the Elocution competition in Kuch Kuch Hota Hai, where Anjali was supposed to speak about her mother, that she did not have...
So yeah, in short, I could imagine it, and it was a feel Good OS...

It is an awesome attempt, being your first... First itna achha hai toh aur likha karogi toh kahan jaaogi bachhe? You'd rock...

Wish you all the best for your future writings...

And I hope I was not hurtful with my opinions...
I want to encourage you, as well tell you where you need to improvise to be even better than you thought you could be...

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Originally posted by: Jeeya123

Di! Beautiful os. I loved it! Btw di, you should write more often. Father-daughter duo made me so emotional. Please write more.

Originally posted by: sona43

So cute os Di golu and soha so adorable soha is right daughters are papa's princess

Originally posted by: .FlyingClouds.

Great...

Itna accha koi likhta hai kya??

Sunah subah Rula diya mujhe...

Waise it was very emotional and heart touching...

Thanks for the pm

Originally posted by: Soumya21ag

bahut achcha tha dii

isko padhkar mujhe kuch kuch hota hai ki yaad aa gayi

i wished sona bhi jaake un dono ko hug kar deti

thanks for the pm

awww its beautiful @anjali.. & the last part [:^(] too good